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Minds Eye

Are you not entertained?



This story is a sequel to I Chose You

Trust is a funny thing.

Why hadn't she trusted her parents? Her brother? Her sister-in-law?

Why was she so afraid to tell them the truth?

Why couldn't she just tell them that she loved mares? Loved Rainbow Dash?

Fear is a funny thing.

Edited by the incomparable Noble Thought.

Cover art: Entwined by NyuuChanDianePie.

One hundred percent approved by Twilight's Library.

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I'm happy to see this up! I had a lot of fun working on this with you, Mind, and I love the story. It feels like a very fitting and very well characterized sequel to I Chose You.

I won't spoil it anywhere, because I think this story relies on the tension, and it does get very tense. It also made me tear up while editing. How often does that happen? Happy tears, yes, but tears nonetheless. I had to force myself to slow down to actually do editing in several places.

Now this is another romantic story that I love. Huge props to you and your editor. :twilightsmile:

I knew you loved it, but this is the first I've heard of tears. Liquid pride is best pride, huh?

Thank you!

Bravo. Just... Bravo.

My only complaint is that it's over. Fantastic read, just like the fic before it.

And Sparkles, eh? :P

She could turn this could turn to her advantage.


Other than that great story!


Whoops. Thanks.

Glad you enjoyed it.

The best part about this is that I just read to previous fic just the other day, so I didn't even need to wait.

This was, like the fic before it, fantastic work. I liked the way you wrote Twilight's family, and I liked that the drama was believable and resolved in an equally believable way. I don't have much more to say, besides that this was great.

"You can thank me by meeting my parents. How long have I been pushin' to have you come to San Franciscolt to meet them?"

Now, I'm not normally one to call for a sequel, but I do I hear a sequel for this sequel? :ajsmug:

now for rainbows parents!

It is rare that shipfics make it to my reading list, but I am glad I added both this one and I Choose You to that list. I immensely enjoyed both. Kudos to you, Minds Eye!

I swear, I do write some nonships fics. :rainbowlaugh:

Good to know there's an interest. Thank you both.

Now, I want to see the other side. I totally figure Dash's parents for the uptight business types. Or possibly hippies. Could go either way.


My only complaint is that it's over.

I don't really have anything else to add here.

Oh I seriously hope that there's a sequel with Rainbow Dash's parents.

Awwwh. Extremely well written and touching. It was cute, and I think was pretty real in terms of what people go through when coming out to their family. It wasn't like that for me, so I can't relate, but I do still think it's pretty spot on! :twilightblush: :rainbowlaugh: :heart:

I touched on Dash's parents in I Chose You if you're curious about them.

Then I'll reiterate what I said to that comment. Glad you enjoyed it.

Another request on the pile... with 2 upvotes on it no less. Always good to see interest in my writing.

That was good to hear. Thanks.

4782351 Ah. I see what you mean. Still, I'd like to see the characters. Flashbacks are one thing, Actual characters are something else. Plus it makes for more to read. :pinkiehappy:

Kumquat. :rainbowlaugh: Good story going to browse your other stories and follow.

This was a beautiful story. I usually don't like these kinds of stories, but for some reason, this one caught my attention, and I am glad for it. :twilightsmile:

I have found that sometimes the best stories end happy (or on their ways to being happy) but don't really have the conclusion we want. I agree with you, to an extent. I am curious about how the exchange between Rainbow Dash and her parents would unfold, but it doesn't seem like a necessary thing to be written down. I imagine Twilight's exchange was more dramatic and powerful, and it was (most likely) much better one-shot material.

>San Franciscolt

Why do I get the feeling Dash's confession isn't gonna be that hard?

Because her parents already know. Yeah, she's not the type to hide. :rainbowlaugh:


I usually don't like these kinds of stories, but for some reason, this one caught my attention, and I am glad for it

I always love hearing that. That's high praise to me, when someone enjoys something they usually don't.

Thanks for that!

D'awwwww. Happy feelings and conflict resolution are the best

You really are a great writer, keep up this wonderful work.

TwiDash is so cute:trollestia: wonderful job author

Why is there no impressed whistle emoticon? Why?
Seriously, though. That was good. Well played.

"Mom, Dad, Shining, Cadance... I have something I have to tell you all. I'm... I'm a lesbian."
"Tell us something we don't know."
"No, I really--wait, what?"
"We've known you were gay since about forever. So, who's the lucky mare? Celestia? Luna? [insert background pony #67]? The clone we made of you so we could pretend you never left?"

4785570 lil clone that would be a funny story

Shh! Don't spoil the third one! :rainbowlaugh:

Thank you

Big Mac is hereby the impressed emoticon. :eeyup:

That was beautiful :pinkiesad2:

Something about the twelve hundred followers and nearly 80k story views makes those three words really impressive. Thanks for that.

Always loved a good twi x dash romance <3 those two synergize so well together

You there! Writer!
That had to be the best TwiDash fic I have ever read but... There needs to be a third and then a side story of their daily lives!!!

(By the way I will hunt you if you dont at least bring the third one, for buck sake i'll even proofread it for you, just get it done!)

... So Um... Have a nice day :twilightblush:

-Die Smiling

Beautiful! Take a :moustache: for your troubles! Hope you continue with their visit to Dash's parents, or whatever other plans you have for them! Looking forward to the next one!

Wonderful story. Almost as good as 'Rainbows in the Night Sky'.:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::twilightsmile::heart::yay:

4785570 sweet jesus have mercy on my sides :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

This was beautiful.:twilightsmile::rainbowkiss:

Now for Rainbow's parents.

Thank you for the wonderful, heart-warming story. Reading this brought tears of happiness to my eyes. Such a beautiful story. :pinkiesad2:

You are most welcomed.:twilightsmile:

Huzzah! I have read your sequel! It was hard to believe I was going to read it first, but I didn't. Neat though. I like it. :heart::heart::heart:

Glad you enjoyed them.

Amazing story.
I loved the first, I love this one.
All I can say is, "encore!"
I'm Shaking and A bit Light headed.
My Heart is pounding like a freight train.
Congratulations, Have this:
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I consider a story on another level of my own favoritism when it does what you did here.

As I was reading this, I could feel the tension simmering and simmering as Twilight continually tried to come out to her family. The deeper the story got, and the closer Twilight came to admitting her attraction to mares, the more I was actually becoming stressed. Its one thing to make me like how a story's written, the plot, characterization, etc. Its another thing to make me truly feel the emotions in the story itself as I read along. That connection really makes reading incredibly enjoyable, to where I can't help but smile in the end.

Every family member's reaction was fitting as well. Shining being surprised and disappointed that Twilight wouldn't trust him as her brother, her mother being initially shocked yet supportive after a bit of time, and her father being initially upset and needing the most encouraging all made perfect sense. Speaking of which, I think that the conversation between Twilight and her father was my favorite part of the story. Also enjoyed the supportive Rainbow Dash too. :twilightsmile:

Overall, this was excellent! You have a nack for writing good drama scenes, I should go and look more into your other stories for that sort of thing. And this makes 3 stories I really liked of yours, so a follow is in order :pinkiehappy:


Thank you. I learned a lot writing my earlier stories, but I think these TwiDash stories of mine are the best. More story ideas are incoming, so I'll be trying to keep this level of quality.

So this story was about Twilight and her family...and Spike was where? If he doesn't know she's a fillyfooler, why wasn't she coming out to him at the same time as everyone else? and if she already told him, why wasn't he there to support her?

Twilight only wanted Rainbow Dash there to support her.

Some things had to be done personally, but the knowledge that Rainbow's strength was there for her filled her with resolve.

While there was no doubt in Twilight's mind that her friends would have come to support her, they were never included in the plan.

She knew her family before she knew Spike, so she wanted them to hear it directly from her. And since Rainbow was the one she chose to be with, her presence served the double purpose of introducing her to the family.

Ever since their conversation on the hill, Twilight regretted not introducing Rainbow to her parents when she had the chance.

"Oh Twilight, what are you so nervous about?" Velvet gave her hoof a quick squeeze. "She's a pleasure to have!"

Beautifully written! :pinkiesmile:
The way you described Twilight's family was amazing and very creative! I really liked how you handled their characterization, especially with them accepting Twilight's relationship with Rainbow. Worth every minute reading!

This is definitely getting a favourite and upvote from me! :twilightsmile:

Keep up the great work!

I appreciate it. Especially how much you liked her parents.

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