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GaryOak


Writing graduate who loves cartoon horses and all manner of silly things. Occasionally writes serious stories. A divine Swedish woman drew this avatar.

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Nice story fag. :heart:

Aw snap.

Here we go at last!

~Skeeter The Lurker

Glorious premise. :rainbowwild:

5456850 I can't help but think that image would be funnier if you replaced 'attention' with 'boner'.

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thx dawg
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Yay! At last. Thanks again for looking this over, guys. :heart:

Im starting to notice a reoccurring theme here:twilightsmile::rainbowlaugh:

Ok, I was gonna do a compare and contrast to another fic involving a very similar theme... and there is just no comparison. While the other fic may have been a good clopfic, this one is outstanding, and it has an actual story behind it!

Bravo on an excellent first chapter to this, and I am very much looking forward to reading more!

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Yay! I'm glad you liked it!

>incest is not wincest law
FUCKING ROFL.....


5456850 yay ^^ .....

I'm pretty positive this story will satisfy at least ten of my fetishes...please go on! :ajsmug:

I want more. Please make more. :twilightsmile:

5457835 Wow... For a story to attract YOUR attention and get THAT response, it must be good.

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You know full well it's done, missy!
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See my previous reply, specifically the Youtube video. :derpytongue2:
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I just need to revise the following chapters. They're written already. :heart:
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I'm very lucky, indeed!

horsegasm

And that's what killed my boner and got me in the throes of laughter XD

The sex parts are geometrically impossible, unless it's anthro.

Fortunately, the rest is comedy gold (the puns are either awesome, or so bad they go full circle... except maregina. It just... isn't smooth on the tongue)

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maregina

horsegasm

Are you retarded?

There's sentence in this story that seems to be missing a word.

I can cast it so it'll only a day or so.

5458494 I almost cracked up on it, but horsegasm is what killed me XD

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I'm proud at having come up with most of these myself.
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I'm glad you got something out of it! I find the most common reactions to my brand of clop are either to just beat off anyway or laugh a whole bunch. Either is acceptable.
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Yeah, I am, actually. :fluttershysad:
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Thanks. I like it when errors like that survive who knows how many proofreads. Bleh.

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I heard that it's hard for retarded people to count to two, is this true?

So Twilight is tricking Shining Armor into thinking she's somepony else, in order to get him to cheat on his wife, and ultimate make hot incestuous love to her.
That there is the triple threat. Incest and magic fraud is one thing, but cheating, too? For shame, Twilight! :twilightoops:

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Don't forget Applejack using Twilight's body to get down and dirty with Big Mac.

Good start to the story, though as others have mentioned some new unique choice words are well.....um....different. Probably reading between the lines far to much but picturing the ending scene(s) to well. Where as Twi and Aj bet ends in a tie and both do their end of the bet for each other.

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Sure, but that's only TWO crimes: the violation of a crucial societal and legal taboo, and the betrayal of her brother's trust.
Twilight's aiming to have her way with a married stallion, in addition to that! That definitely crosses a completely arbitrary moral line that I've decided to establish just now.

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This is both very true and important.
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I do enjoy indulging myself with my wordplay in these stories, as I already do with the concepts (which are the silliest I can think of).

Question what will Twilight thinks when Big Mac NOW thinks they are an item, or AJ with Shining Armor and god help her, Cadence finds out, she is ogling her husband, or are they planing to do the switcheru each time they had the chance?

Um wow... this is actually a good start. I'll be following this.

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that awkward moment when i laughed harder at this then the newest chapter of WITLTYSO?

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Gary Oak likes to put more goddamn puns in his fic than anyone else around.

Any attempt to dissuade him from his puns fails.

Every. Fucking. Time.

~Skeeter The Lurker

I'm anticipating this twice as hard as anyone else because I already proof-read the next chapter.

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I think I managed to answer those in the following chapters.
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:scootangel:
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:heart:

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The next chapter will come up soon?

“A full ponytration's what I'm thinking of, but...”
“I don't want it from any other guy.”

dat rick roll doe

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I was wondering how long it'd be before somebody caught that.
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My plan is one every week or two, probably on Fridays.

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I don't post multi-part stories unless the whole thing is more or less finished, which ensures consistent updates (and that I'll finish the story).

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Every writer has their own creative liberties they like to hold and as long as it doesn't take away from the story, I could care less.:twilightsmile:

I myself have a special type of slang the characters use in my fics when they curse.

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not bad for a first chapter though I hope the second doesn't feel as rushed as the first. :twilightsheepish:

My reaction to this part of the story:

Twilight's face went red as a magical disembodied forehoof teased her maregina

me: :unsuresweetie:
ma-re-gina
me: :rainbowhuh:
mar-e-gina
me: :rainbowderp:
mare-gina
me: :facehoof: :ajbemused:

The sheer naked force of so many puns has killed my boner. And "fresh filly fertility fluids"? Interesting use of alliteration and original as well, but not nearly as erotic as may be hoped. Although, my absolute favorite was the description of a dildo as a "Plot Device". That was positively brilliant and more than makes up for the preponderance of poorly-planned puns. Well done, sir, and please post a new chapter soon. MOAR!!

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Rushed? Which way do you feel this is rushed, exactly? I'm curious to see if it's a big problem or if it's just the lead up to the sex part, as I try to get to those fairly quickly while still taking enough time to set up whatever whacky premise drives the story (I guess kind of like the Brazzers approach).
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You're welcome. I was giggling when I first came up with that pun over three years ago (and still am).
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This is one of the reactions I was hoping for when I wrote this. Thanks for reading!

Cover artwork created by Spittfire.

Just thought she deserved to be credited here... Particularly since her signature appears to have been cropped from this particular version of the image.

Incidentally, I was the one who originally commissioned this picture from her. It was supposed to serve as the cover art for a story I was writing at the time, which, by some bizarre coincidence, had pretty much the exact same wincest-y premise as this one (give or take a few details -- and about a million puns).

But, uh, that was a long time ago, so I've really got nobody but myself to blame for getting beaten to the proverbial punch. It had to happen eventually, I guess.

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Ah, thanks! I'd cropped the image I found somewhere (not her DA) many months ago, so I'd forgotten. It was cropped to look better as a Fimfic title image. Added the link to the source.

That's also an interesting story behind the image, heh. Actually, the reason Shakespearicles ended up prereading this was because I'd written, but not published, this story, and he published something of kind of a similar premise, and I contacted him.

The secret of life is: Incest is wincest. Pretty good first chapter, think I'm gonna keep my eye on this story.

The puns, Winston, the puns! They're everywhere. And funny, by and large. I particularly enjoyed your use of "plot device" and Rick Roll. I had to reread a couple lines to make sure it wasn't just my imagination.

Looking forward to the next chapters.

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