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Sometimes Twilight Sparkle says the wrong thing at the wrong time. When she loves a surprisingly thin-skinned pegasus, this can only lead to disaster.
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If it wasn't for the 'adult' stuff, this would have been absolutely perfect. Don't get me wrong, though. I'm not implying this is bad by any means, it's probably my favorite bit by you.
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Heh, yeah, it did get a little heated there for a moment, huh? But that's why I rate it teen.
And yeah, I had tons of fun writing this!
Ya dunz goofed, purplesmart!
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Don't antagonize the colorful one!
Quite interesting.
I don't get it...
Freakin hilarious!
I love it!
what... the fuck was that?
Very Yes
Bleh. That about sums up what I think on the topic.
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Heh, to say the least.
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I guess that was a bit too much?
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Glad some people are liking it!
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Bleh?
I figured this would be a love it or hate it type of story.
*shrug*
I have no idea what just happened...
and I loved it.
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Bleh because this does nothing for me at all. I don`t hate the overly emotional as much as flatly don`t comprehend it. Anyone behaving in such over the top way might as well be a starfish to me - I`d never attempt to rely on anyone so alien in thought.
Ugh. I hate feeling like this.
I feel like I should be laughing, but it just... it didn't have the right tool to break through and actually make me laugh. Instead the comedy's just... sitting there, building up beneath the surface and still unable to do anything. Just sitting, waiting for something to come along and blow up the dam. One last punch line to break through the earth and create a geyser. It's... missing something.
What that something is, I have no idea; I don't write comedy and can't for the life of me imagine how to do so. All I know is that it's just not quite there.
Still, it was enjoyable, if a tad predictable. Well written, but I expected that upon seeing your follower count. I don't have any real criticisms for it, but neither do I have praise.
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Excellent!
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Ah, I see.
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Hm... an interesting way to look at it.
4933545 I have no idea what I just read.
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Only to be expected.
I think I see what you were going for. It's kinda like that Twilight Sparkle one from earlier in the week. I don't understand why the F-bombs were necessary though.
This was interesting, like it.
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Yeah... a little over the top maybe... but it seemed to work for me.
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Thanks!
lol
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Good reaction ^.^
4934968 your mom was a good reaction :3
Uh I meant to say nacho pony Dash... Do you want some nachos Dash? *Looks left looks right*
No nachos... great...
Well Rainbow that was a little much, and I'm sure Big Mac is pretty terrified.
4933547 Does perpetual confusion be a worthy defense from the war of love and hate?
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No, really. WHAT THE FUCK?
It was an explosion of prose. Prosplosion! Or maybe exprosion...
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Ooh! Exprosion, definitely! I like that!
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Aw, it's not the most WTF thing I ever wrote.
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Aye, aye it is.
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Skittle Pony does overreact sometimes.
Interesting.
This was..... GLORIOUS!
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Can't ask for more than that, I guess.
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But then there was more!
I was just letting myself stray into full-on purple prose territory and seeing where it took me.
I s'ploded
Oooh, me likey.
You like Discord funnies, by any chance? I wrote one.
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Perfect!
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I wrote one, too. ^.^
It has Jesus.
Hehe i dont get it
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That image goes very well with this story!
This is so good that it makes me want to quit writing.
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Don't do that!
I want to inspire people to write more not less!
Find your own style -- by experimenting, like I'm doing here.
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Really? Who needs the competition?
But don't worry, I'm not entirely serious. I just loved this story and wish I could do something as brilliant.
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You can!
It only takes practice.
I'm a little confused as to what happened here.
Rainbow Dash gets pissed at being called masculine (although masculinity isn't a negative trait for a girl any more than femininity is for a boy) and explodes on Twilight, eventually coming to the conclusion that Twilight beds her as she would a stallion.
Then she hits on Big Mac to make Twilight jealous, then suddenly doesn't have a problem with "macho" at all after Twilight tackle-hugged her.
There is no transition to make the last part make sense.
4938177 (says in a Deep voice) Space is unlimited two pownys dont making sence is even more unlimited
this, this story. just this story was amazing. everything went so fluid and felt natural, even though where it would could possibly go was hard to pinpoint until the end, just like in real life. amazing, amazing work.
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That's one hell of a word.
It was simply amazing how you took all those gratuitous descriptions and made it work. Bravo.
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Well, how else was I going to end it?
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Wow, thanks!
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It was. It really was.
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Thanks!