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Twilight Sparkle is not a risk-taker. She prefers the same old books in the same old library drinking the same old tea with the same old ponies. And that's okay!
On one fateful night, however, Rainbow Dash drags Twilight out on an adventure! Her very first rave.
It turns out Twilight isn't the only one hiding in a corner at these things.


This fiction was written as part of a challenge to write a fic in 30 days-- one chapter per day, 2k words per chapter (you can learn more about it here!). However, this fiction will still be gaining new chapters and undergoing edits now that the challenge has ended. It currently has many many typos and errors, as it is literally unedited-- no need to point this out to me, I am very aware! New chapters will be marked with an asterisk (*).

The original version is being preserved in Google Docs. I'll likely be posting the links to the original docs in a blog post sometime soon!

Chapters (30)
Comments ( 298 )

This is some good stuff. I'm interested to see where you take this.

continue ?
hunnn vinyl will cheat octavia?
or will it make twilight join your flock?
and what will octavia's reaction be?

You don't see Twilight x Vinyl very often, so am interested in that. Octavia will just have to get out of the way!

This is a nice change in tone from your other ongoing work. I wonder if you'll be able to resist dropping a drama bomb onto this cute little romcom. Replace Twilight's anxiety with annoyance and you have my reaction to raves exactly, LOL.

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Haha, you know me too well!

This one is, really and truly, a cute and simple romcom for a rarepair of mine. Nothing sneaky hiding here! Pinke swear!

Great start loving so far

Cadence is gonna ship this to the moon and back.

This is so adorable. Even the worldbuilding is neat.

Hmm interesting. I'll keep track of this one. Curious to see where it goes from here.

This is a great start! Will be following this one with interest. :)

Wow, that was really nice.

Well, that solves the whole awkwardness of knowing her name and address. Though, didn't she mention she was in a relationship? Don't go putting the cart before the Applejack there Twiggles...

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Twilight is definitely awkward enough to not distinguish feelings of friendship and romance. Ahhhhh, the shenanigans we can expect from this!

Adorkable Twilight is adorkable.

An interesting start, looking forward to seeing where this goes. Seems like it's still getting into it's stride, but I'm loving the little details so far.

Caught this,

She gave me another pay on the chest

Pat on the chest

Now that's an interesting system of communication. I like how Shining is coming across, nice to see a little more to him than you usually get the chance to see. It also does make sense there'd be things that run in the family.

I feel your pain Twilight, talking through text is hard. I'll be damned if that finished piece wasn't mighty fine though.

Not smart in my big-words, heavy-books way.

You know, that's a really nice way to encapsulate it.

Pinkie walked away, still shaking her head. “A tragedy, really. Waste of a perfectly good bakery.”

For shame Twilight, really now?

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Ooh, thanks for the catch! Due to the "challenge" nature of this piece, my proofreading is lacking :twilightblush:

Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments!! I'm glad to see you're enjoying this fanfic :twilightsmile: hope you continue to enjoy!

Awwh. I sense shipping! Twily is in denial.

This Spike is awesome. And that speakeasy, that sounds like a swell place.

What if she doesn’t recognize me with my mane up?

:trixieshiftright:

This whole story came about from seeing Twilight sleeping in a well-worn Vinyl Scratch shirt, didn't it?

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File this under "irrational thoughts straight from my own brain during a panic attack" lol

She’d never remember little old me, Twilight Sparkle, Princess of Friendship.

Twilight... :facehoof:

CAFFEINE! Yeah baby!

Twilight dancing? Did she learn that by now? :trollestia:

The accent thing reminds me of an old fic where somepony thinks Twilight has a canterlot noble as a guest because she's using her actual accent.

This is shaping up to be a really interesting and well-written story. I really like how you've captured Twilight's personality in these chapters. :twilightblush:

"With Octavia, my marefriend." Vinyl made a face that could have been a smile. It occurred to me that, when talking about life partners, perhaps a smile should be easily recognized.

Hmm. Foreshadowing that not all is well in the Scratch household?

I'm still trying to figure out the potential logistics of this romance should it develop further. Is this a world where herds or polygamy are common or is Twilight setting herself up to be "the other mare" in Vinyl's life? If it's the latter, she doesn't seem to either realize or care.

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Thank you so much!! I can tell you that you've absolutely picked up on some important details... And that I may or may not be picking up on this thread in chapters "f" and "g" as I type this 👀

I love seeing readers catch my foreshadowing!! This comment made totally made my day :yay:

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And I just realized your chapter titles are going in an A - B - C format based on your comment. A very interesting story you're weaving here. I'm thinking, based on Rarity's reactions in this most recent chapter, that Twilight's naivete is going to bite her hard at some point. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Blatant symbolism is blatant, haha.

So, this is the part of the story where we prove the tabloids wrong, yes?

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Got a link? That sounds like an interesting bit.

This is starting to get kind of heavy - I love it! I like how you aren't telling us what's going on, you're showing it with the character's emotions and words and stuff. Masterfully done!

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Sorry. I can't even remember who visited her, much less title or author of the story. Isn't in my favorites either -_-

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Ah well, thanks for looking.

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Pretty sure that was Accentric, by Ashi. It's a great little bit of headcanon. :twilightsmile:

Rarity rolled her eyes. "Oh, no… whatever shall I do… another drink…" She trotted quickly over to her stash and found a case of wine coolers.

I never knew I needed booze hound Rarity in my life so much.

EDIT: Oh, no, poor Twilight.

Calvinball! They're playing Calvinball! With booze in!

Atch, poor Twilight. Never underestimate her ability to scrag up her own mind.

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Omg, Calvinball!! I had totally forgotten about Calvinball, what a blast from the past :yay:

Game-mageddon actually draws most of its inspiration from True American, a wild and lawless drinking game based upon American historical trivia.

1, 2, 3, 4-- JFK, FDR!

First of all, another great chapter!

I really feel bad for Vinyl. I get the feeling that she doesn't get much in the way of affection, attention, or support from Octavia.

Also, I continue to really like how you approach the Mane 6 in a way that feels real and natural. The part about Vinyl having her illusions of the "heroes" being paragons of virtue dispelled in favor of them being real people with problems and weirdnesses was really smoothly done and felt good to read.

This is great. Looking forward to more. Please have them go on a date to a jazz club so Vinyl can eat her words.

Not to talk smack about DJs or more technophile-prone genres but great, improving jazz musicians are nothing to scoff at.

"Lick your elbow!" Dash instructed.

"That's not possible and you know it!" Rarity complained.

Now I'm trying to figure out if this is actually possible for ponies... I mean, longer necks and no clavicle bone might give them the dexterity required, although the elbow joint is also a lot closer to the body.

Comment posted by Krack-Fic Kai deleted Apr 17th, 2020

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Then you may want to reread the tail end of this last chapter, because there was no kiss! They may have gotten close, but Twilight's morals will always win out in the end, much as she might like to abandon them right about now.

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A group game that involes a drunk Pinkie might have specific instructions about what is considered impossible.

Was interested and then got hit with a

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Whoops! Thanks-- should be fixed now!

Sir, you have my attention. I just read everything you have here.

The very first conversation with pinkie pie was beautiful. It wasn't over the top like a lot of people write her and it seemed to strike a perfect chord between serious and lighthearted, understanding and airheaded, that just fits her in a way that pleases me greatly.
I think your characterizations are great.

The story felt a little disjointed with things surrounding that 4 week time jump. But after reading carefully it all made sense and there wasn't any information referenced to that I'd missed or hadn't been written in for me. So that was probably just on me and/or I missed something you were trying to convey, oops!

Finally, the game-ageddon night was deliciously vague on details. Things happened and it clearly brought up issues that not everyone, or the reader, were privy to and left us to draw enough of our own conclusions that we can't judge if the characters were over, or under, reacting.
You, as the author, didn't try to push a certain situation to make a point or add details that would have opinionated undertones. I find it to be refreshing and enjoyable.

These things have gotten a like from me, keep it up! I'm excited to see what you've got coming next!

you keep for getting to metion to cadence that shes taken..... thats kinda a big deal there twili :facehoof:

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