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mushroompone


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This story is a sequel to Hearts Beat


Octavia and Flash Sentry have a lot in common.

One of those things is failed relationships.

Another is the hotel hallway they're currently trapped in.


This fic is a midquel to Hearts Beat, taking place entirely within the chapter "Vulnerable". It is highly recommended that you read Hearts Beat up through "Vulnerable" before starting this fiction - it will contain spoilers for Hearts Beat. That said, this is technically a stand-alone story, so feel free to check it out if spoilers don't scare you away

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 11 )

My attention has been entirely captured. I wish to read more.

I NEED MOOOOOOORRRREEEE!!!!!! :flutterrage:


Um...that is....please, if you don't mind :fluttershysad:

Honestly though, excellent story, well written, very attention grabbing with its description a and wording, highly mysterious, and all around very much entertaining. I can't wait to see more! Have a five mustache review!
:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

This is amazing. I'm so here for this.

Lots of great simile here. Was not expecting the whole 'trapped in some sort of twisted nightmare hotel' angle, but I guess without it there'd be no story. Octavia would've just left to stew in numbness.

This is a fantastic story cover

*Clap hands and rubs them together rapidly*
Alright, a story related to Hearts Beat. Cannot wait to get into it!

This was really neat. Not sure how it happened, still, but the character interactions, tone, and message which resulted are all quite interesting.

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Thank you! I hope the rest of the fic delivers for you - it's definitely a bit of a weird one!

This is growing into a great character study of Octavia. And I thought I was bad at parties.

I did notice something off, though. I'm fairly sure this is supposed to be in Close Third from Octavia's perspective, but for a few sentences here and there, you jump into Flash's head. And you can certainly do that, it's just very lopsided, and thus reads weird.

That's a heck of a cutie mark story. It hurts to think of ponies being this, well, uncomfortably human. Also, I can't tell if this is a typo or not, 'cause it's so fitting:

Flash slurped up a spoonful of soul, and made a frankly carnal sound of delight.

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