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AlliePastel


To be continued...

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Celestia agrees to help Twilight with a problem shes' been dealing with for many years. However as Twilight soon discovers, her fascination with her fetish is linked deeper than she could've guessed. Thankfully Celestia is there for her support.

(Warning: Contains mild age play and mild sexually suggestive scenes)

Cover Art: http://britishstarr.deviantart.com/

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Comments ( 46 )

I'll read this after school gets out. Not the best time to read clopfics :twilightblush:
also, As I clicked the thumbs up, it went up by two. Either someone hit it the same time I did, or my thumbs up was worth two :moustache:.

I really liked this. There were a couple of parts that felt slightly clunky or forced (the bit about Twilight being attracted to Shining felt a tiny bit strange), but it all worked together and made for a really nice and sweet read. Thanks for the story!

Also, I'm not exactly good with suggesting ways to fix things, but I wouldn't mind giving the story a quick read-over to fix grammar and spelling errors, if you want.

Not bad, very in character for both Celestia and Twilight. Some parts did feel a tad bit disturbing, such as Twilight admitting she had feelings for her brother. But overall I enjoyed it. :twilightsheepish:

this was so wierd but i loved it because of that :rainbowlaugh:

I am strangely aroused right about now...

How this passed with a teen rating I'm not so sure, but what the hell. Nice story, if not somewhat raunchy :raritywink:

What the? I don't really have much to say. It was something though!

I'm not usually one for age play and diapers, but this was cute. Thumbed, faved.

This is probably your first story that I actually liked. Good job!

4174215 What are you doing here? Go to update " The child in me", i want to see the fight between luna and cadence.

not quite what I expected, but in all it was a good story

4174071 Sure thing, just PM me a GDoc's link or something when you're finished! Thanks! :twilightsmile:

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Yeah, with this story I defintley broke my habit of "one liner's" and aimed hard to give the characters more emotional input rather than just 'watching' them live their lives! :twilightsmile:

That being said, the story I'm planning on doing with Rarity in a few weeks will read like this one!

4174352 I'm glad you enjoyed. I plan on doing more short stories in the future! :twilightsmile:

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Okay, okay...

Pushy :rainbowlaugh:

Why is this in the Twilight and Spike group?

Sequel Must have or new chap :yay:

This is interesting. :twilightsmile:

This has been my first (and probably only) age play fic that I've read. And I still just don't get it. Still nice story, have a thumb.

Comment posted by Crystal Moose deleted Apr 3rd, 2014

And here for a second or two I thought it was a story of Celestia raising Twilight because she was an orphan.

man , can't help but always feel this attempting to be really heavy on the physiological and emotional analysis of itself in fics of this subject matter to be odd since i only have kind of a plain fetish for this subject matter......

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Plot twist: Celestia is Spike.

This is just wrong

4179280 It all makes sense now... oh wait, never mind, it doesn't.

actually by alicorn standards twilight is a child in terms of age, look at how old luna and celestia are if luna still looks so young that mean alicorns must age slower then normal.

The age play thing was fine. I was down with that. Twilight wanting to be celestia's baby, I totally understand.

But that bit with celestia, from what i could tell, giving twi a horn blowjob?

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEW! I do not like clop and that just makes the rest of this story make no sense.

I will refavourite this, but that part of the story does not exist for me. Don't like it At. All.

Everything else.... Acceptable.

4179655 if you're talking about celestia giving twi a horn blowjob, I fully agree with you
If you're talking about twi in love with shining, again, I agree with you.

Only once, and I mean once, did I find a Fic where the idea of twi and shining was done in a way that it actually somehow made sense and it sure as celestia's coat is White was NOT this one

4185863 I still think this is wrong

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Celestia did it to comfort Twilight. The anatomy of unicorn's horn albeit is unknown, there's a good chance that horns actually build up static tension; which would in turn explain the electric sparks that fly out of the horn. Although it could be considered a 'horn job', I'd consider it something more stress reliving like a massage. :twilightsmile:

I am so so confused. I like the message you are pushing here, and the emotions are genuine, but the entire time, all that was running through my mind was "WTF? WTF? WTF? daaaaaw.... WTF!?" i cant decide if I like it or not.

I must comend you. only a great writer can make someone feel so conflicted. you get the stache :moustache:

Hey Oliver,
Great story, though I think I've read it before.

You mentioned you're looking for a new editor... Have you tried Microsoft Word, or OpenOffice? They both have Spell Check, and (at least on MS Word, 2010 or higher), that does include some grammatical corrections. It's not perfect, but it's better than nothing.
I actually spent about 3 days using Spell Check on "Pattycakes: the Remake" (Glitchy's and Yours), merging them into one seamless story, and let me just say for the record: Glitchy's side of the story had more errors per chapter than yours.

Cheers mate,
Alaester Nikolai Modern.

I loved the story but it was a bit rushed. You don't have to add more actions but expand the explanations, just make it larger.

Comment posted by MaikaChan48 deleted Aug 1st, 2014

Once there was a way to get back homeward...

I think that this was well done indeed. It reads more as an outsiders view of a variety of counseling. Her attraction to Shining could be that he is the only stallion that she felt save enough with to have those feelings. The only thing I have a problem with is this sentence.
She felt her mouth wrap itself around one of Celestia’s (many mounds.)
Horses, and by extension ponies only have two breasts, located between the hind legs. Unless Celestias
anatomy is radically different from her little ponies that is what she should have. Unless you are saying that Alicorn anatomy is that different.

This has to be my favorite story that deals with this subject matter. It's an amazing story, so cute and warming to the heart. If you ever decide to make a sequal or use two different characters, I'd love to read it :)

“Umm… I uh…” Twilight gawked in amazement at the room around her; everything was differen’t,

Wha't?

Everything was barely acceptable.. until Twilight having desires for shinnig, in a tagged twilestia fic .-.

This is the first story which i use de dislike buttom and just for that reason .-., damn!!

Princess Celestria turned backwards and crotched down in front of her protégé, “Listen Twilight, you’ve been a loyal student of mine for many years and now that you’re done with your studies I think you can relax a bit more with me.”

Excuse me, but I don't believe that one "crotches down." I would fix that if I were you.

5704848 crouched thats what the word should be

Maybe I'm just stupid but I understood nothing.
Spike gone?
Luna died?
Diapers?..
Just what is going on?!

/and then I left. Sorry. maybe I should reread this when I don't want to sleep that much/

Any Idea why this is in Momlestia. I clicked on it from there had to stop reading part way through.

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You have to read it to the end

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