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(dis)Like what you read? Tell me why! ~Super


A look at the domestic life of one of Canterlot's most celebrated power couples in the early morning hours of their fourth anniversary.


Not-quite-a-day after the events of this story, Vinyl Scratch and Octavia Melody Don't Get to Eat Their Flan


A hearty thank you to my Patreon patrons Singularity Dream, ocalhoun, and Littlecolt!

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 63 )

That was the best final line I have ever read from anything in my entire life.

Quite good. Pretty nice story, good pacing, no grammatical errors that I could see. Normally, I'd say the short chapter lengths on 1 and 3 would be a problem, but for the sake of the pacing it works here. Good job, Tramp. Good job.

So, they have a modern DJ's set up, yet have a telegraph in their apartment. Schizo Tech for the win! :pinkiehappy:

I lost it with that last line. Well done :twilightsmile:

I was listening to Elena Singmen while reading this, it kinda killed the mood. Good job though :)

Two things:
1) if you want to describe her sighing, you don't do it within the qoutes. You would have to say,

Octavia sighed. "Yes, I do love." She gave a small chuckle. "Don't worry, I'll have my way with you in the morning."

Something like that.

2) Sound effects (a.k.a. Onomatopoeia) have to be capitalized, too.

That's really it.

3609535 finally got around to changing the "Sigh" thing. I'll look for the onomatopoeia when I do a comma run through.

I liked it
A lilbit from the norm for vinyltavia
But in a good way

I honestly can't think of anything other then good job!

Comment posted by Super Trampoline deleted Jan 20th, 2014

3952974 thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it enough for the coveted :yay: sign!

3584667 That's Equestrian technology for you. Totally inconsistent.

That ending :facehoof:
Not sure wether to laugh or cry.

I only disliked this story because I dislike this ship. They have never met canonly so why should they ever be shipped? :trixieshiftleft: But that is what fanfiction writers like you are here for. Goodbye, and tell me if you're going to make a clopfic you think I might like so I can fangirl all over it. :coolphoto:

4119932 I appreciate you telling me why you disliked it. Unfortunately, it is beyond my power to change this story in a way that would satisfy you, as you take issue with the concept, rather than the content. In my defense, the two probably have a total of about a minute and a half of their lives, total. We have absolutely no clue what their doing the rest of the time. They could be running an crack cocaine drug empire for all we know. :rainbowwild:

As for writing a clopfic you might like, I suppose you would have to tell me what sort of clop you would be interested in. I currently have one clop fic published, a Shining x Cadance met with mixed to positive reviews. I'm also slowly working on My Little Dominatrix: BDSM is Magic mature link (kinky short slices of life) (writing here and there)
. You may enjoy that once I publish it.

4119993 I love Chrymbra the absolute most. They're just perfect together. :pinkiecrazy: I also have a BSDM fetish so, I'll be there.

4120009 Hmmm. I'm never really thought about how those two would interact. Could be a pretty interesting pairing. I'll brainstorm on how to craft a story around them.

4120049 Just browse through romance, Chrysalis, Sombra. I would though, recommend you read The Heart of Shadows for a better cruise through a brainstorm. Truly great story. :pinkiesmile:

4120423 Huh. Author only posted that one story. Sounds like he's working on more though. ughhh, my "read later" list is wayyyyy to long :fluttershysad:"

4120459 My story list is way too long and I've only uploaded 2 of them. :unsuresweetie:

A very powerful intro to the story with a slight hint of humour. Well played.

And then they fucked.

If there's any good way to end a fic, it's using that sentence. There needs to be more fics that end with that.

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It's probably the avatar. I just recently changed usernames, which might be what's confusing you, but this picture's a hard one to forget.

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