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Twilight doesn't know what to write for her weekly friendship letter. So she bugs ME about it. Lucky me. ~Spike

This was written to get me through a bout of writer's block. Hopefully it works.

EDIT: Should probably include a cover picture, huh? Oh, and mark it as complete.

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I enjoyed this :yay:. The smileys all over the place and the references I didn't get (links...) were kind of bothering, but altogether it was a nice story with enough humor and good pacing to make it work.

when the Everfree forest went bananas! And then you negotiated with the pirates from the south

Love those kind of references to let the reader just imagine whatever he wants. Works great in that context.

"So do you think Celestia trusts you?"

And it all had a point.
I'm only a little disappointed that you didn't go with the "trusted me" to the very end with that sentence:

"Of course! She thought I had matured enough to grow a pair of these!"

This is the third sentence about the princess, and the two last began with "she trusted me...". This one doesn't. In a perfect world, the repetition would have been kept, maybe even by Spike (well, maybe with a variation of the verb "trust" to not be too direct and lack subbtlety.)
Maybe a "she showed her faith in me" or something like that.

But quite honestly, I'm just nitpicking for the fun of it. Nice little story. And I totally identify with Spike, which means that the story has done its work in my book. :twilightsheepish:

3511112 I know I'm moving up in the world when I get unsolicited advice! Thanks for the constructive criticism. I'll go back and tweak stuff though not right this second. Have a great day! :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks for the constructive criticism.

Thanks for taking it so well :twilightsheepish:.

Have a great day!

Thank you. I hope that writing this story will have helped you with the writer's block.

Like and fave because Fimfiction ads are best story ads.:pinkiehappy:

3520761 Thanks! :twilightsmile: but I think you mean "Ad" not "add" :facehoof:

3520764 I'm new, too check me out!

I love the postscript at the end, and how Spike has more than 300 ways to placate Twilight listed down. Comes with living with a OCD pony, eh?

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You have NOOOO idea. I mean, we're talking about a mare who once set a kitchen on fire because her oatmeal was lumpy. ~Spike

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and also blowing up golden oaks library because of 'just a test".

Spike (staring at tattered remains of pillow armor.) "well that didn't work... Maybe its time for a new line of defence" (takes a checklist from Twilights stash and starts scribbling...) "muahahahaha!"

Once again, I love this guy! (Thumbs up if you get the reference.)

3633346 Thanks! Unfortunately I don't get the reference. :unsuresweetie: Unfortunately, a search for "I love this guy!" Isn't very helpful.

3633382 :rainbowhuh::rainbowlaugh: The Lorax. Didn't think you'd get that one. But it was a good story!

3633517 The only part of the movie I've seen is that one weird catchy song that I ironically can't think of the name of right now where The Onceler is singing about economics and social darwinism and biggering and biggering.

but I love the book. :twilightsmile:

3633549 Yes! That movie had one of the best bunch of songs ever for an animated movie in my opinion. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Glowing Ember deleted Apr 29th, 2014

Couple of little grammar issues, a missing capital letter here and there, but a nice little oneshot. Not entirely sold on the gimmicky emotes, but the OSHA link was a nice find. All in all, good stuff :twilightsmile:

I wonder exactly how many Twilight Placating maneuvers there are...

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