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Jade Ring

“Stories have to be told or they die, and when they die, we can't remember who we are or why we're here.” -Sue Monk Kidd



This story is a sequel to Dear Sweetie Belle

Years after the events of 'Dear Sweetie Belle,' Rarity convinces herself that her not-so-little-anymore girl is stealing her beauty. What lengths will Rarity go to in order to take back what is rightfully hers?

NOW WITH A NEWLY UPDATED (and hopefully less confusing) ENDING!

Fantastic cover art by SwirlingLine. YOU ROCK!

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Comments ( 33 )

I loved it. That was freaky and awesome at the same time. :rainbowderp: Got me shivering.


EDIT: Wat, how am I second.

1509714 Yes, but did you like it? :trollestia:

First reaction: AAAAAAAUGH!

Second reaction: Oh, phew! Haha, that's a–

Third reaction: Bwuh?!

That was intriguing.

Was this a one-shot, or are you planning to do the rest?

that was a really good read.. hope to see what's coming for twilight (and maybe the rest of the 6?)

1512986 Excellent question. Thanks for that.

This was originally part of a much longer single story called 'Deadly Seven' in which the Mane 6 and Spike would have nightmares wrought upon them by a powerful evil based on the Seven Deadly Sins of Christianity (Pride, Wrath, Gluttony, Lust, Envy, Greed, and Sloth.) I decided that some of the stories didn't work, so I decided to just do my favorites.

'Envy' got finished first, so I made it part of my three Halloween stories. I'm hard at work on 'Slender' (the final Halloween story) and right after that I'll be jumping straight into 'Dear Scootaloo.' Based on that time-line, 'Pride' should be finished early-late December.

So keep an eye out for 'The Sin of Pride, or Everything You Ever Wanted.' Hopefully it'll be just as great finished as I see it in my head.


I can see how some of the sins would easily fit with the rest of the Mane 6 and Spike. My guess would be that Rainbow would be sloth, and Pinkie would be gluttony, to name the two most obvious possibilities.

1513505 Nail on the head.

Rainbow Dash= Sloth
Pinkie Pie= Gluttony
Spike= Lust
Fluttershy= Wrath
Applejack= Greed

Dash's story wasn't terribly interesting, nor was Fluttershy's. Spike's seemed mean-spirited even in the outline. Pinkie's was... weird. Really weird. And I didn't like it.

Applejack's I really liked, though... Perhaps I'll revisit it another day.

Well you did like a Sir:moustache: a very good short story:twilightsmile: i loved it :heart: and hope for more :rainbowkiss:

Umm... is Sweetie, you know? (PLEASE SAY NO!!!)

Two words. Fucking. Awesome.
A story has never scared me this much, seriously :rainbowderp: Have a review, upvote and fave, good sir/ma'am. :pinkiesmile:

Thank goodness it was just a bad dream... but I'm still going to kill that monster thing

I love it! Are you planning on doing one for each of the other main characters? Because you certainly set it to be a series, ending like that. Also, I love the idea of each of them representing one of the seven deadly sins(that is the direction you were going right?).
I know it's not as popular as your "Dear Sweetiebelle" trilogy, but I hope you consider returning to it.

Good read, but...let's just say this coud be considered scarier than ol' Slendy himself.

So... that was awesome if you do decide to make more of these I certainly wouldn't mind

That was pretty crazy right there not overly gory but descriptive enough to be frightening.

Funnily enough, something like this, though far more PG, happened to Rarity in the IDW comics. The result?

2736061 I KNOW! How cool is that?


Omigosh, I LOVE what you did with the ending! A great way to shake up the 'gore' genre by giving the story an ending that really redeems the characters from the previous images of violence!!! :pinkiehappy:

I have to say, your stories are absolutely amazing, but you should really work on ending them a paragraph earlier.

Comment posted by KomodoBrony deleted May 13th, 2014

So a to be continued?

That was creepy cool!

I must destroy her.
She is slowly ripping my beauty from me. I have to rip… it… back.
I will be the loveliest again.
Yes, that’s all she is. A mistake…
And mistakes must be corrected.


The scream was cut off by a wet gurgle… and the apple’s red skin was soon coated in a far darker shade of crimson.



Those nightmare guys are going to be interesting villains. This chapter gave me chills.

Comment posted by Wahtiff deleted Mar 27th, 2017
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