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The Psychopath

My very first (self-published) book can be found on Amazon Kindle for 5 or 12 paperback! If you love dragons, give it a look! https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0CSM7QQ2M



Sequel: Left Behind: Sunny Disposition
Apparently it was scouted and is on EqD too

Nightmare Moon was meant to be released after a thousand years. A momentous occasion for her but terrifying for all the ponies on her day of freedom. She would get revenge on her sister and cover the world in darkness and shape everything to fit it.

That was the plan, at least. Instead, something went awry with the spell and she wasn't released when she was supposed to be. The mare-in-the-moon is brought into a world with stagnated technology, giant cities, and no sign of her sister or any of the other immortals. In fact, ponies don't seem terrified of her at all, and the stay within the core of her powers infused and changed the alicorn's body drastically.

The alicorn had no obstacles left! But...she was also a relic of the past. A past everyone seemed to have forgotten. A past she could no longer look upon.

Artwork by ElkaArt. Link in source.
Big thanks to Kryostase for helping spot errors I've missed.

Chapters (39)
Comments ( 761 )

Very fun story so far!
It has a few grammatical mistakes here n' there though. Interested on seeing where you take it

It does? But I passed it through the spell checker.

Long ago in a distant land, I, ̶P̶r̶i̶n̶c̶e̶s̶s̶ ̶L̶u̶n̶a̶ Nightmare Moon, Lady of night and darkness, revealed her true form, ̶u̶n̶l̶e̶a̶s̶h̶e̶d̶ ̶u̶n̶s̶p̶e̶a̶k̶a̶b̶l̶e̶ ̶e̶v̶i̶l̶"̶ tried to get what was taken from me.

But a foolish sister, armed with the magical elements of the harmony, turned against me.
Before I dealt her the last blow, she tore out the portal in time and threw me ̶o̶n̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶m̶o̶o̶n̶ into the future, where I don't know what - the law.

Now I'm trying to go back in time and ̶d̶e̶s̶t̶r̶o̶y̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶f̶u̶t̶u̶r̶e̶ to bring back what belongs to me, Nightmare Moon.

* and then the music starts playing.

I really liked the idea of ​​this story and now I look forward to continuing.

I would watch this fight with this weapon. :D

Okay, not gonna lie seems pretty interesting.

A spell checker will not always catch Grammar errors.

What spell checker are you using?

Language Tool (firefox extension). Actually spotted quite a few errors I didn't see on my first pass over.

This is a interesting take, and I look forward to more

Poor Sunny. Getting volunteered like that.

This situation is so daunting but I'm starting to get an idea where this could be going, and I'm looking forward to seeing if I'm right.

He ran a hood through his mane

He gestured to the ground then the city with his hood.


It is somehow difficult for me to imagine that all the "immortals" have disappeared. At least it seems to me that such a being as Discord can live to the end of time.
I hope they will give us answers to these questions in the future.

I’m excited to see where this story goes!

FFS. I keep glancing over things like this! And the spellchecker don't find 'em neither! Thanks for spotting them.

depending on how rarely I use certain words, I set my word processor's spellcheck to automatically replace certain words with different ones to make it easier for me.

might work for you too.

I don't think it has that option, but I'd rather not have spellcheck work automatically. It's fine, though. I spot a lot of them with the spellchecker, and my friend spots a lot more as well with his SPECIAL EYES.

This is quite beautiful

Curious. That mayor is so over his head he has no idea. Poor student.

Let's see how this pans out!

Poor Nightmare...

Without her precious revenge, she is like a lost kitten.

scattering the armored ponies in decorations that were just as varied

Should be directions.


She used a hood to pull at the skin on the sides of her face

should be hoof.

Just wanted to point those out! Otherwise I'm really enjoying the story!

She's in a predicament alright. The revenge she wanted is impossible. The ones she's angry at are no longer even a memory to the current populace. A thousand years is bad enough, but with Celestia in charge language drift was kept fairly under control. With Celestia gone?! It's become incomprehensible. Now we'll get to see if that changes her goals at all. If she is as smart as Luna, she may have a pretty good future.

great story, but something seems to be wrong.
The Next button is missing.



He's dealing with a pony deity with communication issues and an inexplicable chip on her shoulder.

How can you not be in over your head in this situation?

i wonder if anyone noticed the imagine on the moon is gone or was that hidden already so no one knew about it?

You know, that's actually far less than is usually found in my chapters. It's still aggravating to see, but with this spellchecker, at least there's progress!

Thanks for spotting those, too.

And now she'll start listening to Papa Coach.

smashing head on keyboard
Ah'm writin' as fahst as ah cahn, cap'n! Ah can't put 'n anymurrr!

It's currently cloudy and the sun was out, so they won't notice it yet until much later.

I didn't quite understand Nightmare Moon's reaction to her shape. Did Princess Luna notice that she looks like Nightmare Moon or does Nightmare Moon's appearance differ from what we saw on the show?
Does the presence of blue cracks on the body mean that the absence of the object of envy and hatred destroys or returns the form back to Princess Luna?

Her body is significantly different from what she's aware of. Nightmare Moon's body shouldn't have changed like that, and her feeling 'more' being added to her as she reformed is why. The moons that appear in her mane and tail are important elements as to what happened to her after being trapped for so long.

Is this prewritten? Those are daily uploads... If so, then sate my want for reading by telling me I can read, instead of leaving this story in a queue until I deem it binge worth.

Puny mortal. I don't pre-write. I write the chapters every day! HA HA HA!

AHhhhhh! M-m-monster! Everypony rruuuuuhahaaaannnn!!:raritycry:

Nightmare Moon felt her body slump.

What point is there in being a villain, when there is no hero to fight?

The alicorn galloped past the ponies in front of her to get a better looked at the damaged barbican, trying to see the best way to either reinforce it or add to it to leave her mark. A mark, of course! Using her cutie mark would be too simple-minded. She had done that in the past, but no longer was she pressed for time! She had all the time in the world! All the time she needed.

I remember that in the alternate universe where Nightmare Moon won, we were shown that she restored the "castle of the two sisters" and ordered to change the tapestries every day so that the visiting tourists could admire them. Considering that Nightmare Moon was in the same place, it looks like tourists should have admired Nightmare Moon itself.
I thought Miss Moon would do the same with this castle.

I don't remember. That's an idea, but I meant that she would need a symbol, rather than a decorative change.

Aww... Now I have to actually wait for the next chapter... Noooooo! Actually, waiting!?

I want more horse words!

Maybe I should've stuck with the plan to wait until it was binge-worthy... Least I won't have to wait long for the next chapter.

This is the best type of story: you don't know how long it's gonna be, but you've been here from the start so you won't get overwhelmed even if it eventually reaches something like 100k words.

100k is my preferred binge length. Actually is my preferred length for any story incomplete. Enough time to enjoy, and enough time to ditch before reaching never-ending cliffhangers.

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