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The REAL Mister Pkmn


I'm a guy, and I was born the year the Pokémon company came into being, so yeah. Trixie is best pony, Luna is best Princess, Rainbow is best Mane 6 member, and Starlight is best reformed villain.

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It is said that 2000 years ago, the Twins of Terror, Scorching Sun and Chilling Moon, caused mass destruction throughout Equestria. However, King Eclipse used the seven Elements of Harmony, artifacts older than Equestria itself, to seal away his rampaging daughters. Nowadays, most ponies don't believe that story to be true, even though the Eclipse Extravaganza is held every 50 years on the the supposed anniversary of the event. But, when Starlight Glimmer, personal student of the King, comes to Ponyville to prepare them for the Extravaganza, strange things occur that get them to believe.

Chapters (16)
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Comments ( 9 )

6832619 It took me a while to get it just right, so thanks!

Shame there's not so many comments here. This really is a fun read!

7913941 Thanks (for this comment, and the fave)! I hope you also take a look at some of my other work too.

Is the title supposed to be 'The Power of Apologies'?

8120231 Wow, I can't believe I missed that! I'll get right to changing that!
edit: fixed.

Hmm...can I say something about this story? Uh...I get what this story is trying to do with Starlight Glimmer and her being Twilight in this and how this is the start of the story just like the show but...I don't get why its structured this way. Every other chapter has this weird explanation on some way Starlight is feeling or something to that degree. However, Starlight is not likable here. She keeps switching between being sad and pushing everyone away. That's...I don't know, that just seems weird. She's a total hypocrite in this.

I'm not saying the story is bad, I just don't get the tone you want to do here.

8122039 Ah. Let me see if I can clarify. I'm trying to show her struggle with how she used to be and how she's starting to become. I guess I just need to make that more clear in the story, but I find it a tad difficult.

Didn't even start reading and I already like it.:twilightsmile:

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