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The Cloptimist


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Starlight cuddles Trixie as the sun comes up. That's it. That's the whole story.

...Well, mostly.


Featured on 5-6 February 2021 - thank you!
Featured on Equestria Daily, March 2021

Reviews
7.5/10, My Little Reviews & Feedback
4.4/5, Reviewers' Mansion

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 25 )

Dawwwh. This was a wonderful look into Starlight's character and how the many events led up to the realization that Trixie and her are perfect for one another. This felt very wholesome, though I must not deny the Oc gardener felt a little out of place. However other than that I really enjoyed this, keep up the good work! *pet*

Trixie is proud of you

And that made the fic for me, right there.

Worrying that tomorrow morning, Starlight would finally realise she could do so much better, finally put into words what Trixie knew she had been thinking after every malfunctioning spell, every crazy idea gone awry, every badly chosen word, every broken teacup.

That time is gone, and it's never coming back.

I can't put it into words, but there's something about this epilogue that I just absolutely adore. It's the 250-word cherry atop the 6K sundae.

My compliments to the author! Very well-executed.
:)

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Thank you! Yes, as you correctly spotted, that scene actually came from an abandoned attempt at a speedwrite quite a while ago - I junked the rest of that unfinished story because it wasn't going anywhere, but I kept that little scene because it might sort of fit somewhere one day. I always liked the idea of having a scene where Starlight was confronted, or at least worried about being confronted, by some of the family or friends of her village ponies; I thought it would be the kind of thing that would play on her mind during a sleepless night.

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Me too. :trixieshiftright:

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Thank you very much for saying so! I always wanted to keep a little scene back where the focus would shift to Trixie, and it seemed to work better as a separate "bonus" chapter (though I think the story works quite a lot better with it than without it.)

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Aw, thank you! I'm glad you liked it :twilightsmile:

This was a wonderful character piece. Your Starlight is probably the best interpretation of her I've seen on this site in a long, long time. I've had trouble before finding deep, meaningful StarTrix stories; I'm glad to have found this one. :twilightsmile:

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Aw, thank you so much for saying so, it means a lot. :pinkiesmile:

Absolutely beautiful story, like utterly wonderful.

How this escaped FIMfic's attention is beyond me, as this is a astounding story. Like, I can feel the sheer raw emotion in the page. That's not an easy thing to pull off.

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Thank you very much! This one did get featured, only the third time that's ever happened for me out of 16 stories (and the first time in a year and a half!), so it could have been worse, but it's much more important and appreciated to get lovely feedback! :twilightsmile:

What an absolutely gorgeous depiction of both these characters! Beautifully written, showing a lovely side of each character and a very sweet, cute and believable relationship! Might become one of my favourite StarTrix stories to date and I'll probably re read it in the future!

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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! :twilightsmile:

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I seriously did! Can't wait for "Me Cline" 2 :trollestia:

And I am now completely sold on Glixie

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Thank you all very much, and to everyone who said nice things over at Equestria Daily - I'm so happy people have been enjoying this story! :twilightsmile:

Yeah, I know, marrying Sunburst wouldn't have worked out particularly well for either of us, but... well, you know what foals are like. It was just one of those things I assumed was going to happen because it was supposed to happen. (If I kind of cringe at the thought now of Dad giving us his knowing winks and talking about how his little punky-wunk had a crush, I can also suppress a little giggle at how wildly off-base his guess turned out to be.)

You know, I keep saying SunBurst is a terrible ship and I stand by that. I saw Uncommon Bond in season 7! They can barely tolerate each other anymore and so I don't think they'd ever become lovers!

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This story had me tearing up, and I created an account just to make this comment.
It was so incredible, so amazing, so beautiful, I don't have words to describe it. I've always related to Starlight, but this story took it to a whole new level. I love love love how loyal you are to her character, and how you can turn her into something so realistic and sincere. I love how you expanded on her story after the show ended, with her traveling. The portion about the pinking shears pony was really intriguing, I also like the detail about Princess Luna and the way ponies that work with her view her.
The whole section about Starlight's childhood and teen years was almost hard to read. The emotions were so raw and real. I felt like I was looking back at my own life, with the "emo nerd" isolation, smothering father, and dark thoughts. I can almost heal in a way through this story.
I'm so glad Starlight got a happy ending.
Outstanding work :heart:

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That's very kind of you to take the time to say, thank you! This has always been one of my favourites among the stories I wrote, I'm really glad you got so much out of it. :twilightsmile:

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You're most welcome 🤗

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