Starlight Glimmer wakes up one morning to discover the Castle empty. Figuring, Twilight and Spike just forgot to inform her of a trip, she gets ready to go visit Trixie to give her a gift. Starlight discovers something truly terrifying, and the only pony that can fix it is herself. She had to stay calm, but it was hard when all the pressure of success relied solely on her hooves....
Preread by: Bricklayer and Skyward Sword
Edited by: Skyward Sword
Updates: When I have time.
Hopefully bi-weekly on Wednesdays.
Chapters (2)
All this is missing is a pony version of Rod Sterling...
I was really curious as to when this would wind up getting posted when you shared it back in June, really excited to see we where it goes, it’s a neat premise!
Why mature rating?
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It's there to be safe, but there's no sex in this piece if that concerns you. It's mainly for the implied violence.
Very good work Nails, happy to have helped.
This seems to be a real promising story.
There are a few spelling errors and missing words or spaces, but I'm hooked.
I can point out the parts that's missing stuff if you want
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If you would please and thank you. <3
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Welcome
Here you need a space and change hues to eyes
Here you might want to take out the "s" in times or just take out at this times or just take out "at this" and add random and you need a space.
Here you might want to make into to in or change with to putting a small blue box with a purple ribbon into it
Here if it's Zecora saying "perhaps seek elsewhere for clues, so that you aren't so blue" you're gonna want to separate it
Here you might want to add letting out Infront of a
Here you might want to explain why they're calling her a hero or add something in here to indicate that it's a false memory
Might want to nix did and add happened
Just need to take out the period in front of no
Interesting plot, but I'm going to need more, to understand what's going on.
Tracking...
Pretty good, a few errors but good, I can edit them out if you'd like.
And Double Diamond is an earth pony, party favor is the unicorn
Hmmm
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Alright, I'll fix it shortly. Thanks!
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Welcome
Holy shit, Twilight's fate was totally shocking & unexpected
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tehehehe. It's just getting started. It gets worse.
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Is that second “a bit” intentional? That aside I like where it’s going so far, can’t wait to see what happens next!
Simply put, here you won't find solution to your problem because fucking with you I am