Tears of an Angel

Fluttershy is visiting with her parents, and hoping to enjoy a pleasant time with them, so why is she crying? And can Applejack help her to know what's truly important?

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Tael_Spinner

Tael_Spinner #1 · Oct 31st, 2019 · · ·

Could tell very early this was going to be a catharsis piece. Nothing wrong with that, we all need to vent.

Also, it is actually very clean. Only really saw a comma which should have been a period and a period outside of quote marks but that was all I noticed.

Art-Jackal

Art-Jackal #2 · Nov 1st, 2019 · · ·

There's nothing bad about turning an vent into creative catharsis short story. We all need to vent at times when life goes wrong. It was actually very clean. There are few grammar errors with commas and period. Along with the story feeling abit too short. But that's okay tho! Keep on try to improve! And didn't give up hope! ^^

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