It’s vacation time! And much to the chagrin of everycreature but Ocellus, Professor Rarity has given an assignment: use your unique skills to provide a service for your friends.
Ocellus has a great idea! In order to help propagate love, her service to her friends is the chance to take a practice run at admitting their feelings to their crushes, a task made easy by her changeling magic. It’s a great idea!
Maybe.
This story takes place shortly after She’s All Yak.
The idea that the griffon wants to charge for his generosity just makes perfect sense and makes me giggle.
And now the changeling is oblivious to the feelings of her friend. Great stuff. Also, apparent Tsundolder is always a good thing.
Fantastic little story! Very well-written, everyone was in character and the dialogue was believable, as were the interactions. And as an added bonus, you used all my favorite ships for the Young Six... mostly.
RIP GallBar...So, yeah! I really enjoy this story! Great job!
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Hah, I blame my iPad for that. Every once in a while it corrects on to in, or vice versa. This one must have just evaded my notice.
Gallus: “A mere 2 bit charge is generous!”
Smolder x Ocellus OTP, of course. Also I have to remember to write Ocellus less like Fluttershy and more like this. She’s not really all that shy or timid once she gets into something. Plus, of course, cheerleading.
Pure adorable and oblivious changeling all of the way through. I love the way she's written in this.
And that last appointment was just amazing. Perfection. Feelings. All of it awesome.
This was a great read!
The trick is of course, how much can Ocellus act like the creature she’s impersonating? How accurate will it actually be?
To be honest while I don’t mind the Gallus x Silverstream ship, there’s always a bit in the back of my head wondering if I’m just pairing the spares, or pairing the two birbs.
D’awww...this bug really needed that right now. Well timed, Smolder.
And this is going on my list of reference fics for how to write the Young-6.
knew*
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Maybe it WAS knee!
...It wasn't knee.
Thank you
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I'll have to keep this one in mind too. This was really great!
Ohhhhhhhhhhh fuck yeah this hits the spot
I literally went to sleep last night wishing for more Smolcellus and what do you know, I wake up to find this!
Really, really cute. The emotional conflict in this is great—I like the whole 'keeping track of your own mental health' moral.
This is some tasty slice of life, my dude.
It's not often something romantic and fuzzy makes me emotionally moved. I enjoy my romance, just one glance at my body of work shows that! But, my man, this hit me right in the vacuole in my chest cavity. My teeth might develop cavities from this sweetness, and I might even have to suffer a life of diabetes at a young age!
Seriously good writing, man. Very show like, and the moral of the story was well done. I am so stoked to see Ocellus and Smolder getting some much deserved love lately. I hope the Student Six get even more soon! I lurve them to bits!
Five minutes later, the school was on fire.
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Well, with Yona and Sandbar the only canon couple and Smolder/Ocellus your fave, who's left for them?
Spike, give it up, man. It's not gonna happen.
So, you arrange dates to do romantic stuff? You get your datebook out, and arrange to in advance when you're going to be romantic with your boyfriend or girlfriend? That sounds really romantic.
In case it isn't obvious: I'm being sarcastic. I'm not a fan of how "dating" has become popular in modern society, it feels like a really unromantic way to do romance.
Well, alright, now I'm tearing up, that was so sweet
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Hehe, that line was in my head from the second I came up with the story and I was really looking forward to reactions to it. I was considering writing a tiny bit more in that chapter after that line, including a line about how the love Ocellus felt from that moment tasted so much better than the love from the other appointments since it was actually meant for her, but I really liked the simplicity of just ending the chapter on that line
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It's beautiful
GASP!!!
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Personally, I ship them because their scene in What Lies Beneath is just PACKED with romantic tension.
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I think that’s the episode that did it for me too. Either that or the one with the scavenger hunt.
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Out of the possible pairings, they're probably the only ones who could have kids.
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I mean, they all live in a ridiculous world of magic and cartoon science, so I rather doubt that.
Plus while Ocellus probably can't maintain a female dragon shapeshift for long enough to gestate an embryo or eggs (e.g., weeks or months of time), she can probably maintain a male dragon one for long enough (just a few minutes...well, hopefully a lot longer than just a few minutes, if you know what I mean...) to impregnate Smolder.
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👏magic 👏changeling 👏pussy
Ah shipping. And mostly the canon pairings that we're able to see or guess about...still curious if they can indeed do it, as we do see Changelings are able to do quite interesting things in their altered forms.
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Wait, would the sperm even be able to fertilize an egg? Considering that Ocellus is a female changeling she may be able to just make it seem like real sperm but it could be sterile or just her own female ejaculate coming out instead. And even if it was fertile, would the sperm be specifically hers or that of whom she is disguised as? Meaning that Smolder would have the child of some random drake Ocellus changed into just so they could have a kid together. There are a lot of unexplored avenues with this train of thought, such as if something like this was common occurrence back when changelings stole love and if there are any foals who have a changeling as a biological father because of this.
Oh my, this was such a cute and lovely little story
I've always loved the idea of Ocellus being that friend that helps her friends with their crushes...and also being completely oblivious of her feelings for somecreature else (and the feelings somecreature else might have for her
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And Smolder's confession? MY GOD IT WAS GOOD, I'm not the biggest fan of that ship but man, I loved them here, this is so good and you did and excellent job!
(and thanks for using my drawing as the cover, I'm honored
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I think it would be potentially fun to explore, though. For my part, I think that when a changeling turns into a thing, they are that thing, inside and out. So Ocellus would while a male dragon produce real male dragon sperm, though come to think of it she’s probably need to hold the form for at least a few days to give her body a chance to produce lil’ swimmers. I’m sure there’s a magical solution to the problem.
Likewise while changelings obviously can become actual creatures they can also become no particular creature, not a copy of anyone existing.
This is all headcanon, of course.
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Oh, that picture is yours? Heh, I probably should have asked for permission first
I was searching for a good picture of her for the cover and that one immediately jumped out at me. It was too adorable!
Short, sweet and truly a lovely read. Love all these ships and these characters, and there’s a reason this story was one 1 on the feature box all of a sudden
Really? No! I never would've guessed! /sarcasm
Because they totally keep spare Sandbars lying around, in case of Sandbar emergency.
Isn't it time Princess Cadance got a faithful student of her own?
I wonder if Ocellus could change into a little old lady with a charming German accent to give relationship counseling.
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Don't we all??
Fixing that one, thank you! My iPad has this thing where if I capitalize a word and it doesn't recognize it as a proper noun, it'll sometimes autocorrect it to have an A in front of it for some reason.
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Eh, unless we assume the magic of Equestria can help bypass that somehow. Wouldn't be the first time I've seen shippers jump to that conclusion, and there's really nothing in the show that'd suggest it couldn't be a possibility.
Besides, not every relationship is about having kids. I've met couples that were perfectly happy to have each other, even if they never have kids. So as long as they're happy, who am I to complain to that, y'know?
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Personally, I had always thought it was more Smolcellus that was "shipping the spares," or at least that was part of what helped it to catch on so much in the end.
But then seeing I lean more towards Gallus/Smolder myself, I'm probably bias on that.
I'm fairly sure Smolder likes Gallus. That smirk after burning his book...
"Accidentally" burning things is probably the dragon-equivalent of yanking the pigtails of the girl you like but don't know how to tell.
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Like she said. BEST IDEA EVER. If the school isn't on fire, the plan was incomplete.
Alright that was already a super well done confession, but geeze that last line really put it over the top. Also I think I have a cavity. So thanks for that. Can't wait to finish.
Yup, and that was a good way to end it. The whole story has a very well designed light hearted quality to it that makes the style flow with the subject matter perfectly. I think, for that line at the end at least, it has to get a fav. Great job.
Wow, at the top of the feature box, AND 0 downvotes! that's impressive!
She got that many couples together in one day. My word, Cadence will be impressed, she’ll probably want to mark this occasion. I can see it now, come speech day, the “Ocellus Award for Services to Shipping” annually presented to the student who hooks up the most couples in a year.
There's a lot to appreciate about this story. My favorite aspect, to be honest, is its pacing. The chapters were all shorter than what I'm used to, but everything was so crisp, the dialogue used beautifully, the descriptions plentiful enough without being overbearing, and (to get odd) the rhythm of the sentences and story made it a pleasure to go through. I think this may be a story I come back to in terms of prose, as I attempt to rekindle my own voice.
This, in particular, made me chuckle with the pacing.
The characterization is brilliant.
So many gems, I'm surprised Smolder was able to focus on her feelings without giving in to hunger. And that wasn't as good as your metaphors and descriptions, which I feel were very special. And although it may be lost in everything else, I thought you had Rarity as a pony and as a teacher spot-on.
And then the plot development, along with the pacing, was very nice. It developed well, and Ocellus's own development throughout was wonderful. Comforting-Ocellus scenes are a guilty pleasure of mine; I love watching friends stick up for her when need be. And the epilogue was an excellent wrap-up to it all.
I'm gushing over this story. Everything was just so well done, and leaves me feeling happy. Well done to you! I have a few criticisms, but since I've been away from the craft for so long, I don't think it would do well for me to offer them to such a beautiful story.
amazing story, I can't expect a more exciting story.
Highly enjoyable and certainly a fun read
I wrote a quick little review for this story.
You can find it over here.
This was super cute and a good read after a crap day. You made smile friend. For that, I thank you.