Of all Twilight's experiments, none have worried her mother as much as Timber Spruce.
Entry in the Writeoff Association's September 2019 contest, under the prompt "On the Verge." Edited by Dubs Rewatcher. Set in the same continuity as "...But It Often Rhymes."
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Good Timber! Good mad science! General Mayhem! Excellent.
I'm still in the Why Couldn't It Have Been Sunset crowd though :p
Always interesting to see EqG-ified characters, like Twilight Velvet in this story.
For those not aware, this story appears to refer to the music video Mad Twience:
Oh also “In this house we obey Asimov’s Laws of Robotics young lady!” Great line.
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I think most of us are.
Does this imply that Sci-Twi brings strange older men over regularly, if so what does she do with them, I get the feeling that Sci-Twi is a closet slut and not as innocent as she is supposed to be.
I vaguely remember you running this idea past me. I don't remember what I said about it at the time, but since you didn't get me to edit it for you, I'm afraid it's a 0/10 by default. Cease your rebellious attitude at once, young man.
Oh hey! It's this story. Super cool to see it featured in Fimfic, it was cool to read it in the Writeoff.
You tend to consistently write the best middle-aged women in this website, which is an oddly specific praise, but still rings true, and hey, I for once welcome it with open arms. This story's cute, Timber is a well-realized, charismatic guy, and Twilight comes off as charming -- but if you ask me, Velvet steals the show by far.
Because, like -- she comes off as genuine? Emotional maturity is not something I look for when reading ponyfic cause, ahahah, come the fuck on, right? But this one has it in spades, in a very subtle, 'oh that's what I feel a mom would actually think' sort of way.
Real good character study by use of a very specific situation, in other words. Cool story. You have a knack for making readers give a shit about characters they wouldn't care for otherwise, and that's not a small feat in the slightest, so cheers to that, man -- really liked it.
That was fun. She Blinded Me With Twience would have been a good title too.
This story now has me pondering the ethical implications of romantic/sexual relationships involving intelligent talking animals. If the lack of informed consent is the main reason that bestiality is so bad, then is it more moral for a sapient animal to have sex with a human than it would be if it had sex with a member of its own species? I don't like that I'm now thinking about this. Damn you, Posh!
You know, I don't get the downvotes on this one. It's cute, a little inappropriate, but not to the point of vulgarity, and it captures both Twilight's mad scientist persona and highlights some of Timber's more positive features. I have to admit that I find it slightly jarring that it takes such a deviant turn on that robot dog from "Mad Twience," but it's not like it was a major character that's getting derailed here.
Yeah, overall this was a pretty fun read. Have an upvote, and nice work on this story.
9959765 IIRC, this was written in a night, for a writeoff, while you were asleep. These are all ingredients that kept me from extending an invitation to you.
I sowwy.
9959833 "Best middle-aged woman writer in the fandom" is very high praise. It's an odd, specific niche, but I'll take it (even if I don't think I entirely agree; Horizon does exist, after all).
That said, I'm curious what your definition of a middle-aged woman is. The only other stories I've written that feature older women as POV characters, or essential players in the plot, are the ones starring Cheerilee, who's only in her thirties in all of them. Are thirtysomethings considered middle-aged?
I mean, anyone older than me is a decrepit old bastard, anyway, so...
9960533 This story raises ethical quandaries that it doesn't really care about addressing, and I am all about that life.
9960618 At the risk of sounding arrogant, I'm going to attribute a big part of the downvote ratio to Timber Spruce salt. I'm pretty sure most of those downvotes wouldn't exist if I find/replace'd every mention of "Timber Spruce" with "Sunset Shimmer."
In fact, I almost wish I'd done that as a social experiment.
9959671 Velvet is referring specifically to Timber Spruce. Don't be obscene.
Velvet plays the mom who barely tolerates her daughter's boyfriend very well.
Well, that escalated quickly.
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Yup. Just look at the first comment.
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I wouldn't be so sure. I like Timber and Twilight, for one, more than Sunset and her.
Adorable mad Twience! And a very reasonable, all things considered, Twimom, and a very nice Timber.
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I read that as Twilight spinning out fantasies of having a family with Timber in her diary, and Good Girl taking them literally.
Don't worry Velvet, they're young and there's still time for change.
Alternatively, because the pricess got her first
That's one hell of a regret and a serious, serious problem when said family member suddenly gains sapience. I wonder how many awkward conversations that shall spawn
Twilight installed some pretty serious soldering lasers on that thing. How many watts are those things putting out to make it dangerous enough that you have to dive out of the way to avoid serious injury? What kind of power cell is she using to give them enough power to be that dangerous at more than a few milimeters?
Well, that happened, and it was fun. Overall, I enjoyed that, and it says a bit about Timber's mental fortitude that he didn't run off screaming after the megalomaniacal cynoid happened, so, there's that in his favor. Word of warning pine-boy: its only going to get worse, because she's still learning.
That, right there, was what really put me off to the whole SciSpruce thing: dude reminded me of too many pickup artists that I've had the misfortune of knowing. And most of them are skeevy creeps. That may not have been what they were going for, but its how it came across, at least to me.
Because the overlords at Hasbro wouldn't allow it? Or, the writing team really wanted to give Twilight a boyfriend for some reason? Or, despite the fact that Sunny's bi (acording to WoG), Twiggles was never meant to be too? (the last one isn't too big an obstacle. See Legend of Korra or Buffy the Vampire Slayer (Willow and Tarra)) Personally, I've accepted that SciSet will never be canon, but that doesn't mean I can't enjoy it otherwise.
Wow, Twilight has a middle name.
9961132 They are hypothetical progeny.
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Tell me about our hypothetical progeny, Posh.
I know, right?
"Bright side, I've come up with some fun song lyrics."
I get the feeling that every human instance of Twilight Velvet has had to say that at some point in her life.
"I was creating artificial life, Mom. It's an appropriate use."
"So long as you don't go dropping out of school, young lady."
"Mom, this is me we're talking about. I'm upset that I'll have to stop going to school one day."
Timbertwi still isn't my thing, but this was a most valiant defense of it. Plus it makes great use of the robot dog and the only logical reason why Twilight might have built it based on the context of the music video. Excellent work. Thank you for it.
Is anyone else reading 600D-61RL with the voice of a Dalek? Surprisingly appropriate, though, considering where she goes a few paragraphs later.
I agree with FOME. Since Twi was the one creating life, and not the life being created, she's really taking the not-so-good doctor's role.
This was absolutely P-E-R-F-E-C-T.
The only thing is that the description left me waiting for a dark twist that never came – it made it sound like Timber was a humanoid equivalent to 600D-61RL, seemingly without even knowing it. That might be on me for reading the word "experiments" in a bit too specific a sense, though.
10342692 Timber was grown in a test tube. Just not by Twilight.
LMAO.
Posh, you know how to do comedy splendidly. Though, the last line had me trying not to snicker. Poor Spike, when are they going to tell him?
10514853 It’s possible Spike knows, and Twilight was just so hyper fixated that she ignored him whenever he tried to remind her.
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Are you sure something like this didn’t happen next?
10515616 why are you like this
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I think the real question is why aren't you?