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When Flash Sentry got into Fillydelphia State, nobody was more surprised than him. He never counted on having a future. Now that it's in front of him, he can't wait to see what the world outside of Canterville has in store.
If only he can figure out how to break the news to Sunset.
A prequel to ...But It Often Rhymes.
Fourth place in Oroboro's 2019 Sunset Shipping Contest. Edited by Dubs Rewatcher and DannyJ.
Cover art by Blynxee
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This is definitely the most atmospheric entry I've read so far. The tension between Sunset and Flash is deliciously executed, and they really do feel like they're in a relationship under strain. Definitely looking forward to the rest of the story.
This feels so real. There's a groundedness to this story that's really refreshing to read, and the chemistry between Sunset and Flash is there even despite their tension.
Also Derpy is incredible in this as well so that's cool too. And it's good to see your Cherrilee again, in any form.
Just wanted to comment on how amazing your Derpy is. That final part of the scene is just such a shining moment for her, and I'm really rooting for her to find some kind of happy ending by the end of this. And somehow, I feel like even she doesn't end up with Flash, she'll still find that ending.
You know, in all the years since Sunset showed up in EqG and stole our hearts, I've read a lot of different stories (and written a couple too) about what would happen to her in the future, after all the high school stuff was done. The two outcomes for her always seemed to involve her doing something great and amazing and changing one or both worlds with her incredible skills, or trying to live a quiet, peaceful, normal life. I've never been a huge fan of fics which placed Sunset in the second position, because I always though that Sunset's characterization didn't fit with just wanting to sit on the sidelines.
But you've managed to sell me on Mundane Sunset, and for the first time in five years, I finally understand what all those other authors saw in her. So thank you, thank you for opening my eyes and allowing me to freshly appreciate a host of other fics in addition to this one.
Huh, wasn't actually expecting this to be a prequel to Often Rhymes. That's neat.
Very cathartic talk between Flash and Sunset, and some really interesting insights on their relationship. I also didn't see how the ending with Derpy would play out and was pleasantly surprised with how well it fit into the whole down-to-earthness of the fic.
This is definitely the most grounded, solid entry I've seen so far, with the best exploration of the couple and how their relationship falls apart of all the entries. Definitely wishing you the best of the luck in the contest.
9834296 ...But it's in the story description...
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Dear, not everyone reads the fine print. Some of us are too pretty to have to possess attention to detail.
This was a whole other level of great. It ended with a perfect balance of... everything.
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Not saying Sunset isn't biased here but I actually ended up in a very similar high school experience to Sunny here down to having to go for five years. I still was able to turn the less stellar years around with a lot of work and you can still get into some pretty good schools that way, though some might reject based on the transcript (I had this happen) and most schools will ask for an explanation, but that's about it.
And if you're wondering how that turned out I'm typing this comment from my dorm.
(Sunny probably could've gotten into some good places too, if she applied to the right scholarships and submitted the right stuff. A previously homeless(?) girl who turns her life around even without the magic aspect could fall in the same scholarship opportunities that minorites and first gen college students have. That sorta thing.)
9834887 For my part, I tanked my sophomore year, and my junior year grades weren't much better.
I have an MA.
Thank you for crushing my hopes slowly this time and giving them back... at least, to a few characters.
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So far I just have a nice hat
Posh, why does everything you write make me physically ill?
9839006 Allergies, I suppose.
Aw, that ending landed much farther along the 'sweet' end of bittersweet than I thought it would. After the much more depressing end to Cheeriset, this was quite refreshing! Also on the note of that story, I liked the subtle call forward with Sweetie Belle disliking Flash. I also like how you incorporated the running joke of Derpy (or Muffins, if we're going by her unimaginative canon name) always consoling Flash in the movies, and you got them together in a way that felt natural. I guess this can only mean that we'll get a sequel where their relationship falls apart tragically in about a year from now, right?
And don't think I didn't notice you quoting the Metal Gear Solid 2 soundtrack at the end there, pal. Now I'm over here wondering if this is some secret code regarding the release of the new PGS chapter...
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9840024 The punch has been spiked with vocal chord parasites that make lesbians confess their true feelings for one another.
Shh don't tell.
No, I'd actually say that Flash and Muffins are that rare couple that goes the distance after high school. I have no problem with confirming that they actually are going to be together for a long, long time.
(And thank you for catching the significance of sweetie's cameo. She actually had another scene later on that got cut for time, but... well, I'll talk about it when I inevitably get into discussing the story)
Oh Flash. Good intentions sure like to find that road to hell.
That was really good. It probably wasn't quite the post-Camp Everfree SunFlash content I've been looking for given how it went, but it was nice to see while it lasted and this new thing with Muffins looks nice too.
I was a little suspicious most of the way through that we were going to find out that Sunset was planning on just going back to Equestria eventually if nothing worked out for her on this side of the portal in a parallel to Flash not telling anyone about his secret. Hypocrisy for everyone, but apparently not.
9848826 That would dovetail poorly with the two stories this is a prequel to, but...
Well, hold that thought.
I love this line for so many reasons.
Also this exchange. :D
You've found the perfect way to pit my love of FlashSet against my love of FlashDerp. You monster. >:V
Yes! Good end. Good end. You don't need that harridan, Flash, when you've got a girl as good as Muffins by your side! >:V
Also, "Aikido!" just about killed me. XD Someone needs to show this to Bevin Brand, I think she'd love it.
Ooo, oooooooooooooooooooo, boy howdy you did an absolute solid on that feeling of ever encroaching dread; the subtle, inescapable feeling of a joyous moment slipping away and that there is nothing anyone can do about it.
Not to mention I adored your characterisation of Sunset not wanting to achieve because her whole life has been defined by being an achiever and the overwhelming pressure that puts on a person. Flash was super sympathetic too and even though he did the wrong thing he didn't do it for the wrong reasons.
A story of bitter melancholy, I loved it :D Nice work!!
I'm glad I read this. Aragon sent me, naturally.
After feeling kinda lost and listless for a while, and recently suffering a breakup, this was the right kind of thing to encourage some catharsis and introspection. In ways I can relate to both Sunset and Flash.
Also, this is the best written Derpy/Muffins I've read in a long time. Granted I'm not reading as much as I used to, and she was never my go to, but still!
Thanks for the amazing read! I may stick around a while.
10346943 Not really, no. I don’t have a lot of interest in Flash as a character, and I don’t really like pairing him with Sunset. This was a prequel to another story, actually, that pairs Sunset with a different character.
I wanted to write something that shows Flash and Sunset breaking it off, but remaining friends by the end. Both characters needed to grow up a bit before they found the people they were meant for.
Posh, I want you to know how salty I am at how criminally under-read this story is. You did an amazing job of writing the atmosphere of a breakup, and the feelings that surround it. I loved it when I was judging the contest, and I realised I may not have praised it enough at the time. I've always admired your grasp of how people interact, and the ability to capture the emotional strain that happens as a relationship is ending is honestly sublime.
I was having a 4am discussion of positively solid fanfics that are good for evoking emotions, and this was one of the ones I recommended on my server because honestly more people need to read it. And I realised I hadn't commented my thoughts on it and I know I'm about 2 years late but I loved this story so much, and you need to know that.
10803860 “Heartshine was talking about my stories at 4 AM” is the third most validating thing I’ve ever been told in my life.
The one directly above it is “baby elephants think I’m cute,” and it is an incredibly razor thin margin.
im out of breath, fucking PLEASE
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I never thought it could be possible, but you’re right, and now I’m torn