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An Intricate Disguise


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Filly Twilight is teleported far, far away from Celestia. Now Chrysalis has her, and she's fully intent on keeping her.

But maybe the powerful, loving filly is more than Chrysalis expected?

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Not to be that type of person but this is perfect set up for a multi chapter story. Really love what you've created here!

9016901
That's no problem! This was partially an experiment with the concept and I do have other ideas for a continuation, so I'd love to hear if people want more. Thanks for the compliment!

This story was amazing and I definitely want to see more :pinkiehappy:

I needs more, especially see how or if Chryssi decides to give her back :pinkiehappy:

9016901

Yeah, I agree this would be the type to get a multichapter sequel. This kind of reminds me of, A Foal in Daybreaker's Room.

9016934
A partial inspiration in regards to this concept! Definitely a fun read.

9016936

I can imagine a fight between Celestia and Chrysalis over who get's to be Twilight's adoptive mother at some point. That would be funny as hell to witness.

9016903
MOOOOOOOORRRRRRREEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please:fluttercry: thank you in advance:yay:

A story?

Written by An Intricate Disguise?

Rated E?

With no sex whatsoever?

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JackRipper
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Filly Twilight is teleported far, far away from Celestia. Now Chrysalis has her, and she's fully intent on keeping her.

But maybe the powerful, loving filly is more than Chrysalis expected?

I don't get it, where's the sex?

9016903
If you do you got a reader in me!

Adorable.
If a continuation were to happen, would it be on this fic, or a sequel?

I certainly wouldn't mind seeing this continue.

I honestly thought I was seeing things when I saw your username on a story without the sex tag.

It's looking good so far though, so keep it up!

9016903
This is a great story and should definitely be continued. I look forward to seeing more of it.

This was sweet and heartwarming! I'd love to see more. Just to watch Chryssi blow up like a zeppelin.

9016980
That's rather pragmatic; I give her a week.

Well now I really want to know what happens next. Reminds me of The Moon's Apprentice, as far as where it might go from here.

1: I 100% agree with the others who have asked for more! :twilightsmile:

2: For the few who ask "where's the sex" :facehoof: *baps them with a rolled up newspaper* "No! BAD Ponies!"

3: I can just SEE Celestia's reaction to leaning Twilight likes the changelings :rainbowlaugh:

4: *places this story of my favorites, and tracking* :pinkiehappy:

I need more of this.

But...but what about Luna when she comes back in a few years time?
:applecry:

9016980
Ha the time Celestia finds little Twilight the whole hive will look like that:rainbowlaugh:

Also this is too good to let it end here plz let there be more :heart: I'm going to put this in the Adorable shelf with the rest of my diabetes inducing books.:yay:

I would like to see more of this. twilight growing up in the hive.

9016903
You should do a sequel. With each of the Elements of Harmony wandering into Chryssi's territory.

"Hi! I'm PinkiePie. I was wandering around after I finished working on the rock farm and I didn't know where I was going and the floor collapsed, but it's okay because I fell in and found you! I didn't know we had a secret civilization of bug ponies as our neighbors and I think that's cool and awesome and do you like parties? I love parties. Parties are great and fun and we should do one to commemorate our new neighbor relationship."

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The Pink Menace is called that for a very good reason, or several... :pinkiecrazy:

Listen, and understand! That Pink Menace is out there! She can't be bargained with. She can't be reasoned with. She doesn't feel pity, or remorse, or fear. And She absolutely will not stop... ever, until you get your party!

Aburi #30 · June 30th · · ·

This feels too incomplete. It really needs to be continued, or at least an epilogue.

I demand a sequel, NOW!

I do like the “filly Twi gets lost” storylines. There just so much that can be done with it. Cute, but I just don’t feel like there was enough here. It was a bit too light.

Is it just me or did that end abruptly?

Indeed. This seems fairly unfinished.

B_25 #35 · July 1st · · ·

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foalcon, baby

Punk #36 · July 1st · · 5 ·

9016901
Really? It seems to be a self-contained story. I don't see how this could inspire a sequel. Did you read it?

9017766
Ya my dude lmao, what kinda question is that? Easily could continue on how long Twili stays around Chrysalis, more of the backstory on how and why "Celly" became a surrogate mother to Twilight, how this effects the entirety of the world building in what Intricate has created here.

Its a pretty open ending, theres plenty to continue with.

God damn it, now that's two young-Twilight-being-adorable-around-a-villain mental pictures that have my muse in a full nelson.

I hope you're happy!

I'll PM the link to you when it's done.

This was super adorable, thank you for sharing. :pinkiehappy:

Do more nerd

9016930
Equestria's most adorable tug-of-war rope, Twilight Sparkle. :rainbowlaugh:

Is there a chance for multiple chapters?

I can only hope you choose to make another story in the same universe.

I wasn't ready for this much cute that early in the morning. Very fun read, hoping for more :pinkiehappy:

I hate when a story has such a fascinating premise but ends up as a one-shot. And the reason I hate it is that I don't want to sound whiny or demanding, but I desperately want more!

9017933
Send it to me too!

9016980

My, that's rather pretty.

9018669
That's why she rejects the metamorphosis; she's afraid to look pretty instead of scary.

Behold the power of cute

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