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XombieSlayr


Crazy people don't know they're crazy. I know I'm crazy, therefore I am NOT crazy. Isn't that crazy?

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Join Starlight and Trixie as they read through The Book Of Friendship; a legendary long lost book filled with secrets that will change the world! Now, if only Starlight could find the time to research it all...

(*Winner of 2017 NaPoWriMo! This is the most insane thing I have ever written, and makes very little sense as a normally structured story. However, it was very fun to write and just as much to read! Also, it's not quite finished, but I will of course try to update it frequently. Enjoy!)

(Cover art by the ridiculously awesome https://jowybean.deviantart.com.)

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Already one dislike? Yes! That's a new record!.....I shouldn't have done this. LOL. :pinkiesmile:

Comment posted by XombieSlayr deleted Dec 7th, 2017

Wow, there are no comments on this...

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I only just posted it, my friend! What is your opinion on the story, if you don't mind me asking? (I'm not gonna lie, I expect it to do terribly.)

This reads a bit too much like a script or lorebook; I feel it's doing a lot more "telling" than "showing", and it's in a rather odd tense which I'm not sure works here, i.e. present tense vs past tense.

Props for smashing it out in WriMo, and I sense a kindred love of world-building at the core of this, but it's going to need a bit of work to shine. Particularly the early chapters, because that's where people form their thoughts on the fic -- even if it gets better later on, nobody will know if readers write it off and stop within the first few chapters.

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I understand completely. To be honest, this is one story I didn't make to shine. This was the story that won me my first NaPoWriMo win. I felt she deserved to be published, mistakes and all. Although I do appreciate such a respected observation and advice! I will see about making some changes when I have time. I AM still working on it after all. It's not a story in a normal sense, if at all. It's meant to tell things from perspectives with a little improvisation thrown in. It tells you things, rather then shows it. At least for the first few chapters. A little adventure you observe through Starlight and Trixie's interactions.

I apologize that its so crazy. I'll work on it though!

Thank you again! :pinkiesmile:

Winner of 2017 NaPoWriMo!

But, don't you need to finish the story before November is over before you submit it?

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Technically, it was finished, but I added a few things in. It's just stuff that I added in after the story had won. A few new parts of chapters that need to be finished, as well as a few other dialogue tweaks. I'm working on it, and probably going to expand it more as I write.

Thank you for commenting, Nova! And thank you for being a follower with me for so long. I really appreciate it! :pinkiehappy:

Oh boy...the more I read of this, the less I feel that it was a good idea to publish it. NaPoWriMo winner or not, you guys deserve to read something better then the insane writings of a madman with too much time on his hands. I won't be able to fix all of the problems with this thing, at least not while I am working on my Hearths Warming Story!

I think I will just unpublish it for now. Save the world from it's madness. :pinkiecrazy:

This is a very good book, but I'm worried about this chapter.
Isn't one of the rules of Fimfiction that you can't have it be laid out like a script, as it is here?

Now this is interesting! My personal favorite is the Science Kingdom. If G (character of mine, he's in one of my stories) was in this universe, he'd definitely come from there.

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Really? Thank you! I really appreciate that. :pinkiehappy: As for the script-like structure, I agree. I was actually writing it like that so I could better structure the dialogue once I got to editing it. Unfortunately with the madness of NaPoWriMo, I never had the time!

Thank you so much for giving The Book of Friendship a chance! Please let me know if you have anything else you'd like to tell me about or have any questions. Thanks again! :pinkiesmile:

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Designing the kingdoms that united to form The Alicorn Empire was a challenge, but it was also a lot of fun! My personal favorites are The Juice Kingdom (that's Surprise's hometown by the way) The Chocolate Kingdom and The Shadow Kingdom (A very mysterious kingdom with its own unique pony race and strange magic, unlike anything else that exists on Concordia. I'll be explaining more about it soon, in it's own chapter.)

The Science Kingdom is actually the most technologically advanced society in the world, but they despise magic and completely disregard it in favor of science. And some of them are a little too smart, enough to give even Twilight a run for her money. :pinkiesmile:

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You have scored a 3 out of 6. However, there is still the final question to answer....

Popularity is amazing I wish she was real



I mean seriously, her outlook on life is great.

everypony is unique and is therefore beautiful in their own way.

Second, never be afraid to wear something that you know someponies may not find appealing. So long as you like it, that's all that matters!

P.S: They did actually find that city. It's on the moon.

Oh, so that's where Lunaria came from!

Blink: A high speed leg technique where one is able to achieve impercivable movement speed, moving upwards of 100 meters every second. This is thought to be the most easy of the techniques to learn and use, as all one has to do is possess the necessary leg strength to kick off the ground 10 times in one second.

So that's what Weeping Angels do!

The Equine Shock is done by the user first using cloud jump to reach as high as they can into the air. Then harmonizing Shell with blink to become a rapid speed wrecking ball in the air. Then using feather to become weightless, and achieve even greater mobility. Finally the user slingshots down to ground, moves along the ground like a missile towards their opponent and as soon as they are about to hit them, the user conjures a Storm Leg in both legs, while performing Hoof gun in those same legs. Nothing, be it Frogfish, Ursa Mega or Deathclaw has ever survived this attack.

Deathclaw

Fallout reference?

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I'm glad you like her! :pinkiesmile: Popularity actually grew up surrounded by ponies who thought appearance and status was everything. But she was always different. I wanted to make her truly feel like the first Element of Generosity, and what she could teach those who read The Book of Friendship.

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Eclipsa is very...."unique", in her ways of democracy. At least this time, the city was still in one piece...

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Yep. :pinkiesmile: Although back in the days of the empire, there were far more dangerous creatures roaming the lands outside of where Equestria is now. Deathclaws were actually one of them. They kept mostly to themselves and very few ponies ever went into their territory.

Although with Eclipsa's armies watching the border, they rarely became a problem.

Funny. Considering their interactions, I'd think Trixie would be the one hesitant about calling in Discord (And Starlight would be more open to it).

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Very true. However, Starlight is unsure about bringing Discord in on their research, given his, well....chaotic nature. Trixie is less so, feeling it would make more sense for them to ask him, not really taking into consequence of what he'll do, but more concerned with actually finding out about The Song Of Equestria. But if you have any suggestions, please let me know how I can tweak it a bit. Thank you for reading it, and for the feedback!

Have a great day, my friend! :pinkiehappy:

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Do you mean suggestions for that chapter, or the story in general?

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This chapter. But you're free to make whatever suggestions you'd like! I am writing some new chapters after all. Let me know what you would like to hear about! :pinkiesmile:

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Well, aside from altering things so Starlight is a little more accepting of Discord (and Trixie is the one most annoyed by him), I can't think of any other way the chapter can be altered. I'll have to think about future chapters.

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I see. Would you mind if I ask why Starlight would be more accepting of Discord while Trixie would not? Not that I don't see why, its just I would like to hear your opinion. :pinkiesmile:

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Well, "Celestial Advice" showed that Starlight finds Discord's antics amusing, while Trixie just finds him annoying.

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Fair point. I'll re watch the episode for reference. I may have switched things around for the purpose of the story. :pinkiesmile: Thank you for the feedback!

Eclipsa Day sounds dangerous.
Was it illegal to just blink in general, or could you use the tactic of closing one eye and then the other?

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They were allowed to use that tactic, yes. But they were only allowed to blink when Eclipsa could no longer keep her eyes open. Unfortunately, Eclipsa has never lost a staring contest with her sister. She once went 3 weeks without blinking.

Luckily, she would almost certainly have changed this law, do to all the ponies that would be jailed soon after. :pinkiesmile:

I'll be covering Eclipsa Day in the next chapter after tomorrow. :pinkiesmile:

Expect a full summary of the madness yet cheerfulness of this "wonderful" holiday.

What better way of writing about Eclipsa Day then on Eclipsa Day!

Comment posted by fanreader999999 deleted Jun 17th, 2018

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Productive feedback, friend! Thank you. Would you mind telling me what you think can be improved about it? Oh, and thank you for adding it to your favorites, but I don't want you to feel like you have to. The Book Of Friendship is an experiment, and therefore, it is NOT for everyone. I am always trying to improve it though, so let me know what you feel is bad about it when you have the time!

Thanks! :pinkiesmile:

Ughh......why me?

Ha!
I'm really curious to see what happens this Eclipsa Day.

Comment posted by fanreader999999 deleted Jun 17th, 2018

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Fair enough. Alright, lets go over a few things.

1.) The foreword is meant as an introduction to The Book Of Friendship, not Starlight and Trixie's journey through reading it. Apologies if it didn't make sense. I'll see if I can tweak it.

2.) The book not being in the system is a minute detail at most, that I felt needed no real explanation. I would rather get straight to the meat of the story then spend a few minutes writing Starlight arguing with a librarian. But that's just me as the writer.

3.) Homeworld is what both Omni and Eclipsa refer to regarding their homeplanet. Yes, they're aliens. I'm NOT changing that.

4.) I couldn't be payed enough to even slightly dislike Starry, let alone hate her. I love her and Trixie to death, and that is most certainly not changing. EVER.

Finally, I understand if you don't like it. Hell, hate it if you want. But I didn't write this to be perfect or even good. It's an experiment. It was written during a period of time where I had only 1 month to write over 50,000 words. So that's what I did. I could've not even bothered to tell a story, or create characters or anything. But I did. I worked for a whole month on this, and as I've said am still working on it. And still having fun with it. I edit and make little improvements every day. I knew what I was doing when I hit that submit button, but I didn't care. I wanted others to read it. To see what I spent a whole month writing nonstop on. To see what won me NaPoWriMo 2017.

It's perfectly clear how you feel about it, so I'm asking you to please not give it a dislike. You can if you want, but it's clear from your general opinion how you feel about it. All I ask is you give it time, maybe read other chapters, or whatever you want to do. Or just ignore it completely. I've had this up for quite a while now, and have yet to receive as negative a feedback as you stated. But, we all have our own opinions, and as I've said this is NOT for everyone. I still need to work on it. A LOT.

Thank you for the feedback, and I hope you stick around to see more.

Rampaging buffalo.
Children and families fleeing in the streets.
The moon exploding, as the wail of an electric guitar pierced the eardrums of your very soul.
Sandwiches.

Ohhhhh my God yes. All the yes.

Also

The moon exploding, as the wail of an electric guitar pierced the eardrums of your very soul.

Sounds like an evil 12th Doctor.

Oh, my god, yes.

Eclipsa Day had begun. And all the while, the rest of the world (who had no idea about Eclipsa Day) once again looked to the skies in horror, wondering why once again, the freaking moon had blown up for no reason.

Yes.

Comment posted by fanreader999999 deleted Dec 29th, 2017

Symphony sounds like me. Can listen to impossibly loud music for ages and be completely fine. She'd probably like to meet Fireheart. Sound magic meets sound magic!

And she's a fourth wall breaker, too. Excellent!

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Like, good cute? Like a puppy sleeping in a slipper that's too small for him? Or like sarcastic cute? Like a sarcastic puppy sleeping in a sarcastic slipper that's too small for him? :pinkiesmile:

Just curious, but how many chapters is this planned to be?
Because I have it in my read later list, but I'd rather not start reading it if it's almost finished.

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My original scope was around 100 chapters. I plan on adding more to it come the next NaPoWriMo!

If you are planning on reading it, I will warn you: It's pure randomness given readable form. It's not for everyone, and it's perfectly fine if you like or hate it. Just glad to know people are still interested in even reading it after all this time. :pinkiesmile:

If that was her holding back, I'm curious as to what it would have been like if she truly let loose.

By the time you read this comment, I'll have read at least up to chapter 16, so my opinion might change, but so far, it's actually a pretty entertaining read.

When you said it was "pure randomness given form", I thought you meant the whole story was just one REALLY long crackfic, which it's not, at least not in any kind of exhausting way.

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