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A filly Twilight Sparkle forgot to bring a book to read on the train, and now faces a horribly boring afternoon...

Or, she does until she notices another filly reading. Surely she can sneak a peek, right?

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rekt

lovely read as always, mono

Monochromatic story? Yes, please!

Hah! You show her, Rarity!

Disgustingly cute.

:D

Smiling the whole way through with this.

Loved that end revenge, it's truly fitting for this.

~Skeeter The Lurker

And my favorite RariTwi author once more posts a story.

And now I want to go read an old mystery/thriller book!

The most brutal revenge against Twilight ever. :rainbowderp::rainbowlaugh:

Hahaha.

Silly fillies. :derpytongue2:

That ending, though! Well done!
Celestia would be proud of Rarity, i;m sure.:duck:

7770073
Thank youuu, Cracked! <3

7770100
:twilightblush: I hope you liked it!

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:trollestia:

7770166
I'm not altogether sure if that's good or bad :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

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Yay! I'm glad you liked it, Skeets :3

7770184
Hehe x3 You totes should o:

7770193
ahahaha glad you liked it, Ferret x3

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lmao i had so much fun with it gosh

7770519
:trollestia:

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She would! She very much would!

7770574
Hehe, thank youuu! Glad you liked it :3

Memories filled her mind, of horribly long and boring minutes she'd been forced to endure during class readings when her classmates spent two whole minutes reading just ONE book page! Two whole minutes! TWO!

Oh man, I can totally relate to this. I've always been a bit of a fast reader myself, so those group reading sessions you had as a kid in like kindergarten or first grade, were torturous! I was always supposed to follow along with the rest of the group, but I got so bored waiting for the other, slower, kids to read their parts that I'd start quietly reading ahead while waiting for my turn to come up again, only to have the aides or teachers or whoever tending to the group only to have to stop to get me to flip back to read my part again. Which I'd then promptly do in a quick buzz, and then the process repeats. :rainbowlaugh:

And that ending...Twilight totally had it coming to her. If I were Rarity, I'd do precisely the same thing to get even. :ajsmug:

:twilightangry2: You will rue the day!
:moustache: Wut?
:facehoof:spoiler
:moustache: Rarity gotcha didn't she
:twilightoops:SPOILER
:duck: YES I did Spikey Boo
:moustache:LITTLE SPOILER

Revenge is a dish best served cold. And it is very cold in Twilight's library, when the air conditioning is on. :pinkiecrazy:

Rhulain #18 · Dec 5th, 2016 · · 2 ·

I'm with Twilight here. Rarity left the book and Twilight was a foal who only knew Rarity would be miserable without knowing the end.
Sure, Twilight could have tried to track Rarity down, but again, she was a child, and they're not known for thinking things through, even when they're as smart as Twilight.
Rarity now knows how much books mean to Twilight, so spoiling the book like that was just undeserved.

7771063 :| .... Khan Noonien Singh, izzat you?

Heh! 125 likes & 0 dislikes, featured #2 on the list within hours of publishing...gotta be a new record for this place! :twilightsmile::rainbowlaugh:

Whoa, spoilers!

THANK YOU FOR WRITING AND PUBLISHING THIS HOMG IT WAS EVERYTHING YOU SAID IT WOULD BE AND MOORREEE AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA—

I agree with this story if you want to discuss the whole story WAIT TILL IM DONE READING THE DARN THING!

nothing like having an ending spoiled, even with good intention.

That was great, had me laughing the whole time. :rainbowlaugh:

... Well, that was quite the zero-to-sixty from Rarity. Though it could also be your fault as the author for making it a super-rare book whose loss probably permanently ruined Rarity's relationship with a very fun relative.

I'm actually more on Twilight's side in this story. She took Rarity's word at face value which I think is pretty reasonable when you don't actually know another person. The train scene actually seemed to be a thing that could happen with a couple young kids. Very well written. The revenge was pretty awesome at the end as well.

This was a fun enough read but in the end it left me feeling unsatisfied. Now, after thinking about it overnight, I think I can articulate why.

The problem is the ending. It's certainly not out of character for Rarity to be vindictive, whether its appropriate or not. But Rarity's action violates one of the oldest ethical rules: two wrongs don't make a right. However justified she felt, what she did was wrong.

However the author make it clear that they agree with and support Rarity's action. This despite a set up which makes it abundantly clear that filly Twilight is actually to blameless for everything except the spoiler. Even then her mistake is just that: a mistake, one born of good intentions combined with social cluelessness. Suggesting that adult Rarity's response is not only understandable but actually warranted is simply wrong.

I feel as if the story's trying to ride on a moral of "people who spoil are always bad and deserve bad things", but the story itself simply doesn't support that moral.

Nothing like a little laser guided karma

Memories filled her mind, of horribly long and boring minutes she'd been forced to endure during class readings when her classmates spent two whole minutes reading just ONE book page! Two whole minutes! TWO!

I share your pain, Twilight. I can read like five pages in that time. During class readings I just sit in the back doing nothing because I've already finished the book, and the rest of the class is stuck halfway through. Nightmares.

...I don`t think I can ever comprehend this ridiculous fear of "spoilers", For crying out loud, I routinely check the end of story after reading a chapter or two just to verify I want to continue reading. It`s not like anyone ever puts in any particularly complicated plots to begin with, it`s pretty much a given any surprise ending is gonna be an asspull.

"Oh! Twilight, you want to go with her? Of course you can! Are you going to try and be friends with her?"

Twilight frowned, confused. "No. Why would I wanna do that?"

Velvet blinked, glancing towards Rarity before letting out a weary sigh. "Oh. It's because of the book."

I love moments like this. These are where you know you're looking at a character and not a plot device. :twilightblush:

Comment posted by Esoteric deleted Dec 5th, 2016

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I feel your pain as well.

7770611 rosebud was the slead

7773109 "Diamond Dogs Dig" by Quentin Palomino -- everybody dies! :pinkiecrazy:

Toootally saw the end coming, But worth it just to see how you wrote Twi's reaction! :raritystarry: :twilightangry2:

Rarity, you are a STINKER, and that"s why I Love Ya!:raritywink: The Ending Was Hilarious!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

7771077 You're missing the big point. It was NOT just that Twilight spoiled the ending.

It was that AND the fact that she got in trouble for THREE WEEKS. It was that her Grandmother NEVER lent her a book EVER AGAIN. Due to Twilight's actions, Rarity's relationship with her Grandmother was PERMANENTLY and NEGATIVELY effected.

If anything I feel like Twilight got off easy, all things considered. I mean it's just a bit of harmless payback. Nothing worse than one of Rainbow Dash's pranks really in the long term.X

Hell even the Show has supported this, back when the whole TOWN played a prank on Rainbow Dash to get her to stop pranking people.

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But that's just it. It wasn't due to Twilight's actions. Rarity is the one who ran off without the book.

Example, if you take a toy to your friends house and forget it there when you go home, it's not your friends fault.

Like I said in my comment, twilight SHOULD have tried to find Rarity to give the book back, but Rarity is the only one to blame for messing up her relationship with her grandmother. She was entrusted with the book and She left it on the train.

7773809 Sure Rarity should have paid more attention, but the on the other hand, Twilight DID take the book from Rarity (Technically without permission) to show her a passage. If Twilight hadn't snatched the book away from Rarity or done of the other things, than Rarity wouldn't have been screwed over. Twilight is still to blame, though more indirectly rather than directly.

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It seems we won't fully agree on which filly is to blame, so lets blame who's REALLY at fault. Rarity's grandma. She gave a very young child one of her most cherished possessions and then got pissy when said child accidentally lost it. Ruby Belle sounds like a crotchety old bat to me.

7773925 The only reason I was okay with Rarity punishing Twilight, is in the grand scheme of things it's pretty minor. There's no lasting pain. No real permanent anguish. If Rarity had done something more serious or lasting, THEN I would have been more upset.

Yeah that just...wasn't the brightest of ideas. She should not have leant that book out PERIOD, considering it's rarity. Like why would you even lend that book to ANYONE who can't easily afford to replace it, is beyond me. Also by leading it to a child whose parents can NOT afford to replace it, is just super dumb.

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yeah, especially considering knowing Rarity, she was probably blubbering tears when telling her grandma. Rarity has always been generous, so to know she lost something so precious to Ruby Belle was most likely devastating to the young filly. And then her grandma punishes her like that? Somepony probably didn't end up in the best retirement home.

spoiler alert: rarity ruined a good book for twilight after finding out she was the filly that accidently stole another good book 10 years before that

This was really cute :twilightblush: Rarity had the chance to be the bigger pony and just let it go but noooooo.

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