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Twilight adopts a wounded baby tentacle beast from Fluttershy for the sake of researching the never before seen monster. This is their story.
Trigger Warnings: Journal style writing
Thank you Foals Errand and ZodiacSpear for prereading.
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Posting all of the chapters to a story at once usually isn't the recommended course of action.
I'm going in!
~TOOWC
EDIT(X2): All in all, it was nothing special(no offense). Worthy of a like, at least.
5528657 I tried fixing the line as you are correct that it was a good bit harsher then Flutters should be. Also, thank you for spotting the screw up there in the story. As for the whole, don't publish all chapters at once, this is written to be a one shot, but two chapter breaks made sense to me since the middle chapter is so full of page breaks and is of a different style then the other two.
THAT'S SO SAD
5528934 Quick question. Did you ever think you would feel bad for the tentacle beast in a tentacle fic?
yea i would if it wasn't the raping killing kind then i would
5528949 Oh, a tentale beast is a cliche thing now, so subverting expectations is in vogue. There are quite a few unfortunate tentacles there in the archives.
I'm not quite sure what happened there.
Also,
Why is there a sex tag?
5529229 It is because of sexual bits that are suggested and talked about in the journal though no sex happens. As for what happened, Tentle left. I have a couple different reasonings for it, but I like to leave it to your interpretation.
A new tentacle fic? Whoah it must be my birthday
Oh wait... it is my birthday
5529449 Happy Birthday!
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5529471 Nu. Take that.... thing away.
Awww I feel so sorry for Tentle now. The feels are real
way to give in to peer pressure, twilight. 'other ponies wouldn't understand.' fuck other ponies! he trusted you, and you left him to fend for himself! fuck you twilight and fluttershy, just fuck you.
5529705 I see it as her remembering it is a beast, a dangerous one at that. If Twilight had not done what she did, there could have been dire consequences for other ponies and him by the end of it.
5529730 and discord was the physical incarnation of chaos, yet they let him get reformed. and he didn't even stay reformed! he betrayed them later on! at least Tentle was raised on pony nature. yeah, there were some hiccups here and there, but he never hurt anyone, and clearly demonstrated that he was intelligent enough to both understand and communicate with ponies. so how is him getting left in the evefree raised? that would be like raising your dog domestically, and then releasing him into the wilds.
5530254 I could argue that nopony wanted Discord in the first place and it was only on Princess's orders that he was allowed to be released and live with others. Discord also didn't kill ponies, something Tentle showed himself to be very capable of. I would really rather not continue this argument though as this is currently the worst voted thing I have and that is just down right depressing for me. I'm sorry you can't see how Twilight might be hoping to protect him with a plan made on such short notice, but this is how I decided to end the story and I'm sorry you don't like it.
...You have my attention
5529705 It ate a fucking bear. I think it'll be okay
Interesting story. I applaud you for writing a non-clop piece of tentacle fiction and I especially like how you provided a reasonable explanation for why tentacle creatures have sex with mammals.
But this story has a couple of issues that I think are holding it back. There are a few grammar/punctuation type errors and some odd sounding dialogue. But the larger issue is that it's a bit too short. There's a lot going on here and you gloss over a lot of it. Twilight's growing acceptance of her new pet, why she is so convinced pony's won't understand if she wants to keep him, and Tentles rapid growth.
I like the journal entries mixed with regular story telling, I just think there needs to be more of it. It's hard for me to feel bad for the tentacle monster if I barely know him.
Alright, a couple of times you strayed from the journal entry format to standard narrative, with no transition.
The story really needs something to make the entry portions more clear if you are going to use both styles. I have seen both 'all italic' and 'quote box' formatting work quite well in other stories with this style of writing.
5530294 I wouldn't really worry about the guy who can't even use proper grammar in his posts. Especially if his arguments and similes don't hold water.
Really? Because it is nothing like that. Dogs have been raised domestically for thousands of generations and had their instincts deliberately bred out. So then, given that generations of select breeding makes a poor comparison to an individual that was the first of its kind to be taken from the wild and raised in captivity, lets say a wild born wolf.
Well, no that still doesn't hold water. Wolves are pack hunters depending heavily on strength of numbers to overcome stronger prey. Tentle tore apart a fucking bear. Highly territorial with asexual reproduction requiring only a host of any fair sized species for incubation means that it is most certainly a solitary predator. Extremely strong, armored core, proven 'super predator' by the bear, survived an alicorn's panicked attempt to kill it, and camouflaged... That right there just fucking screams apex predator. It was also at least the size of a manticore at the end there and it was never stated that it was finished growing which makes it one of the largest predators, baring the Star Beasts. So then the final, accurate, simile would be;
...
Wow, with an accurate simile the very basis of his outrage just shrivels up.
Tehehehe, he really just said that they were wrong because Tentle was raised by ponies and then immediately asked in what way was Tentle raised by ponies! He really just pissed all over his own argument!
5531517 Out of curiosity, did you enjoy the story still?
5532195 Oh, yeah. I liked it. But you talking about it being your most unpopular being depressing, some people will dislike just for the tentacle thing. Given the guarantee of anti-tentacle dislikes any real issues that could potentially bring a reader below the actively upvote threshold will have a disproportionate impact on the overall rating of the story.
Needs an alternate ending.
This didn't follow any of my expectations and turned out to be one of the sweetest pony/pet stories I've read. You combined Twilight's of fear of the unknown and uncommunicative and her tentative (lel) confidence that her friend won't hurt her intentionally and it worked very well. I also felt your characterization of the ponies was faithful to source in an otherwise bizarre situation, so kudos.
So thanks for that.
5866630 Thank you.
Tentle noooooooo
Well, that certainly didn't go down nearly the way I expected it to, just going by the tagging. One of those rare few times when morbid curiosity actually paid off for me - that was an interesting and kinda of heartwarming read, in a slightly depressing kind of way.
5529471 uh... wut now?
So it starts...
Get ready, fasten your seatbelts, put on your helmets!
Found a small error here:
Must be a lowercase L.
Tentle... such a name. Good choice!
Interesting story! This isn't one of these standart-tentacle-stories.
I'm curious how Tentle will take this "I’ll take care of it tomorrow".
Poor Tentle...
What will happen of someone find him accidently?
(Better not think of that.)
And what will happen if he remembers the way back to Ponyville?
Will he be mad/happy/sad/something else to see Twilight again?
5529471
Do you want to scare the living daylight out of us?
Because that's how you scare the living daylight out of us.
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I believe this word is meant to refer to Tentle, and as such, the word should be "he"
This was a nice story. Gave me some of those feels. No tears, of course, but it was nice.