I told myself I would never write fanfiction, but here I am. Let's see what happens.
After being instigated by her sister, Princess Luna works up the courage to tell Twilight how she really feels about her. Somewhere there is also mention of coffee, disheveled manes, and generally un-princess like behavior.
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It's a bit dry, it needs a more bit of a flare... it's too bland.
If you manage make the chapters more interesting, it would be a great service
Will you continue? This is pretty good.
7671585 I know what you mean. Not a lot happens, and I get that. My problem is, I didn't want to invest too much time into a small piece, which may have lent to it being cut and dry. Do you have any specific areas you think could use a bit more flavor, or are you suggesting more chapters to add some energy? Thanks!
7671592 Thanks very much, I'm glad you liked it! I did leave this story open ended because I wasn't sure what kind of reception it would have. To be forward, I was hoping to continue work on my longer adventure piece, or just start another side story. If this continues to gain interest though, I will certainly consider it.
7672624 yay
Please tell me if you will.
This is awesome.
And sooooo cute
I can't believe that a short story that you made in thought of me, got this popular so fast. I'm so happy for you Feather!!! And I promise to read the rest asap. Now I want at least 4 more chapters and possibly a movie deal. Lol
7673923 It's pretty bad when the person it's written for doesn't even read it.
But thank you.
And that's why he gets the cushy jobs.
7674877 Stand around all day?
Sounds fun on paper, but not in practice
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Oh I never said it was fun. Standing around all day does beat running drills and training recruits though... Unless that guard likes doing those things.
7682720 but but but you forgot the man who takes sadistic joy in training recruits and running drills the one man who good days consists of making grown men weep the dreaded drill sergeant
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but luna all you saw was unicorn twilight holding young you that wasnt a definate you of all ponies should know how weird dreaming is
Wrong heavenly body? Or just a very tired Luna?
I think you accidentally a word or two there.
7813740 Hahaha, I'm always surprised by what's missed during editing. Thanks for letting me know.
Great story. Please continue
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Well thanks! And thank you for the follow. I think it might be due time I add more to this piece.
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I agree. You have a great story here and you can go a lot further with it
Yo, here's hoping for an update soon?
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It makes me happy to know there are still people paying attention to this story.
I have promised more chapters in this past, and I still believe that I can do more. Here's me hoping I can kick my butt into gear and get those pages out! If you don't here from me again soon, feel free to slap me across the face and ask for an update. After all, what is a story without someone to read it?
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:D
I'll be honest though, I've been reading a bunch of TwiLestia and TwiLuna stories the last few days and I've mainly been goin through the ones that have been completed (I just love a happy ending).
But LMAO you've accidentally guilt tripped me into reading your story next. Let's do this.
As promised, I'mma take a risk and hope you finish this story. I can wait a long time, just as long as it gets finished.
Nice start, you've got it set up pretty well.
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final
dragged
Of course, Princess," she said, (comma)
Oh geez...
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sent it sailing
No semicolon
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Thanks for the edits. It can be hard to believe how long stuff goes unnoticed! But otherwise, I hope you enjoyed the story so far.
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There's another one for chapter 2 as well. Once I get off my lazy butt, I'll start reading ch. 3
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No pressure. You read at whatever pace you want, my friend.
Lmao
This is so adorable. :D
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Change semicolon to comma
Your friends?
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I always did have a complicated relationship with semicolons... but I can't believe I actually used the wrong instance of "your" and didn't notice. I am ashamed.
Anyway, thanks for the favorite. I will do my best to own up and get you those promised chapters soon.
I doth enjoy this story very much :p
Here's hoping to more in the future :)