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Titanium Dragon


TD writes and reviews pony fanfiction, and has a serious RariJack addiction. Send help and/or ponies.


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When Twilight visits Celestia's private hall of stained-glass windows, each bearing the image of a long-gone friend, one in particular catches her eye.

Who was this pony?

Why was she so important to Celestia?

And why does she look so familiar?

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Comments ( 310 )

Oh, I do like this. Dramatic irony might be the word to describe the overall mood of this story. The reader begins to suspect around the mind point and is grinning like maniac by the end. And poor dear Twilight doesn't get it. Ah, to see her face once she finally cottons on. :pinkiehappy:

A lovely story. I especially approve of the power of tea to tell you who a person is cross-incarnation. Celestia's own truth, that. :twilightsmile:

Wow, I'm impressed with this story. There's so much said with so little and there's this serene tone that when I read which makes for an engaging piece.

Oh wow.

Very nicely done, TD! This touches on several tropes - immortality worries, reincarnated lovers, and more, without getting caught up in excess angst or melodrama. Bonus points for not rushing or forcing the Romance tag.

My only issue: the story makes more sense if it's more explicitly set prior to S4E02. At some point Twilight will have seen her cutie mark in enough places that she couldn't fail to make the connection between prophecy, history, the Tree, the Element of Magic, and her own rump, and now with a certain piece of repaired stained glass.

Also I'm betting it takes her less than a day to grab an Old Equish dictionary and look up "Scíma".

Appears to be a formatting glitch here:

“Wow. That’s kind of embarrassing, actually.”

“I never told most of them.” Celestia lifted a hoof to set it flat against the window. “I told her, though. She thought it was funny.”

“Who was she?” Twilight asked, tilting her head.

“She was a very special pony,” Celestia said, closing her eyes.

And do you mind if I add this to the appropriate groups for you?

It takes about 600 years to truly become an immortal -- to get the mindset -- for everypony to forget what tea the ponies you knew drank.

Nice use of eternal recurrence. Not a trope/concept you see explored often, but this was really neat becuse of it.

Bravo! :heart:

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Thank you! I'm always super happy when my stories make you happy, so I'm glad you liked this.

Ah, to see her face once she finally cottons on.

Someone will need to take a picture.

Or better yet, bring along one of those video cameras, so see all of her expressions.

A lovely story. I especially approve of the power of tea to tell you who a person is cross-incarnation. Celestia's own truth, that. :twilightsmile:

Of course! Thank you very much for the compliments. Going to go straight to my head.

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I have to admit I'm kind of a sucker for pieces like this, but I think I've gotten better at these over time. I'm glad it worked for you, and communicated the sort of tone I was going for. Thank you. :twilightsmile:

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Yes, I'm sure it will be very exciting for her when she looks up that pony's name in an old dictionary. Probably going to be a beat after she goes "Hey, that's funny," before it really sinks in.

I had originally had her name be a much more obvious form of "Twilight", but people told me I was tipping my claw too much with it in the write-off, and that Twilight would have instantly gotten suspicious over that name.

I'm glad you liked it. I figure that Celestia has to be a pretty mature individual overall. Someone who is a thousand years old doesn't need to rush the Romance tag. :raritywink:

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Good catch! Fixed it.

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Thank you! It was sort of inspired by how I had wanted another story to end, and thus, I just had to write this.

I always find it funny when something that seems blatantly obvious to the reader goes straight over the head of the protagonist. Guess it's the whole outside-looking-in thing.

Twilight will be in bed when suddenly, her eyes shoot open and she mutters, "Ooooh, I get it now... I wonder if Celestia will let me into her bed tonight?"

This is such a wonderful sweet story that really says a lot about the Princess and her interactions with her ponies as well as Twilight. And it's always nice to see non-angsty immortality stories.

Oblivious Twi misses giant sign in the sky.

This was a great read. Made me smile as the story went on, especially after it clicked what Scima's Cutie Mark was. Enjoy your fave and like!

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Hehe, thanks! Yeah, it is funny how those mysterious observers can catch things you miss.

Gotta make you wonder what terribly obvious things you're missing in the narrative of your own life. I know I've missed some obvious things myself.

Clearly I need to squint and read the subtext more often.

Twilight will be in bed when suddenly, her eyes shoot open and she mutters, "Ooooh, I get it now... I wonder if Celestia will let me into her bed tonight?"

For snuggles, right? :duck: :trollestia: :twilightblush:

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Thank you!

Gotta admit I like non-depressing stories about immortality as well; never been overly fond of immortality angst as a genre, and I like writing stuff like this.

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It is hard to read the writing on the wall when you're facing the wrong way. :twilightblush:

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Thanks! That's exactly the feeling I was aiming for while writing this piece. I'm happy to hear it worked!

That was nice. Although Twilight is oblivious as hell... And it fits.

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Thanks!

Alas, Twilight was looking at the wrong angle of the problem, and thinking about reincarnation in general, rather than about herself specifically.

Nice little story, thanks for the good read :twilightsmile:

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You're welcome! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :heart:

I love the uncertainty. Celestia may be a mistaken romantic. Twilight may be an oblivious cynic. It's not clear, and so we readers come to our own conclusions, much like the foals with marks that Celestia recognizes. Excellent polish job, TD. I'm glad to see this here.

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Is that directed at the story, or the reveal, or what? :unsuresweetie:


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naw brotha its just me being a n00b and screwing around with the sites tools

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Thank you! I'm glad you think I improved it in editing. Only took me eight months to get around to doing it. :trixieshiftright:

I had fun coming back to this, and I'm happy that others are finding it to be interesting.

Lovely short story.
Said much better than my attempt at a similar theme.

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Thanks! That's always a nice compliment to receive.

Was that The Stars Relit you were referring to?

... Wow.

Just wow. This story is so ... I can't just say "good". It's better than that. Way better. If I wasn't already following you for your blogs and your friendly nature, I'd follow you for this story. This is quite possibly taking the spot for my favorite short story on the entire website.

Once I get home from work (I read this in between activities at a construction site) I'll be using my computer to make a special place for this fic on my profile. I can't believe how much I loved this story, and how well you wrote it. I'll be reading it again tonight, for certain. Reading this on my mobile phone at work in a few minutes here and a few moments there just didn't do this story justice.

I can't wait to see what you write next, Dragon. Really. I'm rather excited.

Well I don't know why Twilight hadn't realized that Celestia meant that she thought that Twilight is the reincarnated version of her first Wife. Sure she must have realized it.

Wow, what an amazing story! Keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

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Those are some really high compliments there. I'm terribly flattered.

It is always really nice to hear that something worked so well for someone and impressed them to that extent. I'm really glad I got it so spot-on for you.

As far as what comes next... not quite sure. I have about 20 stories waiting in the wings in various states of "doneness"; most of them are waiting for me to edit them up for proper posting. I've been trying to put out content on a more regular basis; we'll see if I can keep my productivity up so I don't keep folks waiting too long.

Thank you for your kind words, I really appreciate them. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you! I must have done something right to earn such high praise. :heart:

Nicely mature handling of the immortality delima:moustache:

Twilight: "Let me get the door for you,":twilightsmile:
Celestia: "You said that before, too.":trollestia:
Twilight: "Huh?":twilightoops:
Celestia: "And that.":trollestia:
Twilight: "Wai...whut?,":facehoof:
Celestia: "That, too.":trollestia:
Twilight: "Will you stop that!?,":twilightangry2:
Celestia: "Yes...just like always....":trollestia:
Twilight: "GRRRRR!!!":twilightangry2::twilightangry2:
Celestia: "Oh, that brings back so many memories.":trollestia:

:trollestia:Trollestia is Best Lestia! :pinkiehappy:

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Ah, yes, the trouble with reincarnation, time loops, and immortals.

Celestia looked down at Twilight. “You know, a lot of ponies had very funny ideas after my wife died, that living forever would be very painful. But it isn’t. Everypony has loved ones die. It would be selfish to think that we’re any different just because we live longer.”

Honestly this is my favorite take on the immortality blues and I've been looking for a story that actually follows this. This is definitely a favorite

Scion of the Golden Throne

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ALL HAIL THE GOD-EMPRESS

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Thanks!

I'm generally not a huge fan of the immortality blues for this very reason; I've known some people who have died, and I know lots of people who have had lots of people important to them die, and it just seems a bit strange to me that an immortal would react any differently. Some people do struggle, but many don't, yet they seem terribly underrepresented in fiction for some reason.

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well, You clearly wrote an amazing story! :pinkiehappy:

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Things just haven't been the same since the Lunar Heresy. :rainbowdetermined2:

Though if the Royal Guard are her Adeptus Astares, she clearly got a bad batch. :trixieshiftright:

So, today I learned that the semi-authorized spiritual sequel to a fic I wrote got featured during the 24 hours I wasn't paying attention to FimFic. Now I'm being flooded with random notifications and messages and god knows what. This has all been very confusing and surprising.

So, this story. I feel I should probably make a comment on it, given where it comes from. I will say it's been a while, but I feel like you did a lot to try and curb the concerns I laid out with the original version. I have... a lot of thoughts about this fic. When I read it I didn't really get sucked into the romance angel or the reincarnation angel. That said, I really did appreciate some of things Celestia was saying and have considered writing my own fic about Immortality Angst discussing some of these issues in a similar manner. Also, the final bit at the end was pretty great. After having thought about it though, the overriding feeling I ended up having is that the whole thing was actually really tragic. No matter what Celestia says, having that kind of feeling and not being able to act on it has to be painful. She's acting in the right and for the right reasons, but that doesn't mean the situation is fair to her, or that it isn't torturous.

I guess that makes the ending all the sweeter though.

Still, I think you improved it a fair bit, and I dug some of the things you had to say.

Good job.

I liked this and what it implied.

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So, today I learned that the semi-authorized spiritual sequel to a fic I wrote got featured during the 24 hours I wasn't paying attention to FimFic.

It never fails - you go away and that's exactly when you wanted to be there.

Now I'm being flooded with random notifications and messages and god knows what. This has all been very confusing and surprising.

Hopefully in a good way?

When I read it I didn't really get sucked into the romance angel or the reincarnation angel.

That's too bad.

That said, I really did appreciate some of things Celestia was saying and have considered writing my own fic about Immortality Angst discussing some of these issues in a similar manner. Also, the final bit at the end was pretty great.

I'm glad you thought so.

After having thought about it though, the overriding feeling I ended up having is that the whole thing was actually really tragic. No matter what Celestia says, having that kind of feeling and not being able to act on it has to be painful. She's acting in the right and for the right reasons, but that doesn't mean the situation is fair to her, or that it isn't torturous.

I guess that makes the ending all the sweeter though.

:twilightsmile:

Still, I think you improved it a fair bit, and I dug some of the things you had to say.

Good job.

Thanks! That means a lot.

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I like to think that sometimes, subtext can be far bolder than anything you put on a page.

Thank you. :twilightsmile:

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