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Teacher, short story writer and VNovel storyboard leader. Please forgive any faulty grammar you may find in my page/stories/blogs; English is my third language and I'm still struggling to master it.


Rarity tries to find out if Applejack really does smell–and taste–like apples.

My deepest gratitude to First_Down for editing, proofreading, reviewing, and polishing the fic. Also, thanks to SerenityViewer for his suggested changes in the first few paragraphs.

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Comments ( 51 )

I'm always amazed with your ability to write so descriptively. I also really like this ship, and, more importantly, this story. Thank you for this very pleasant, very satisfying read.

Wonderful as always! Your prose is always stunning. I hope you don't mind if I spread this around. Also, why is it not published on the site yet?

A very wonderful story to add to my collection, thanks Wellspring

I really loved this story, very wonderful! :pinkiehappy:

Nice little bit at the end there. Very flowery language, but the story was good all the same. :raritywink::ajsmug:


Very nice. I feel like the prose matches Rarity's personality very well.

A well written story! Everything was beautifully described. Plus, it had marshmallows. :pinkiehappy:

The infinitesimal crystal droplets wink with a flash of prismatic scintilla, aglitter with delicate sparkle.

Look at this sentence.
F#$%ing look at it.
This sentence is so beautiful I want to marry it.
I want to marry this group of words.
What have you done to me.
I will continue reading now.

Love the ship, love the story, and your vocabulary is STUNNING. I enjoyed this read very much. It flowed so elegantly and your descriptiveness gave a wonderful backdrop. Bonus points for the ending. Applejack's last line was priceless and made me laugh.

I was waiting for something else from you! Glad you're still at it. Also best ship!

:fluttercry: Such a beautiful soliloquy within a odd story premise. I like it a lot. :pinkiehappy: I am quite impressed.

This...this was incredible. Wow. That's all I can think to say, really. Wow. :twilightsmile:

Boy, am I glad to have found this story! Not only it features my most favorite ponies, but is also written in a such a delightful way that I can only sit here and gawk, astonished, at your expertise with language. This story definitely goes to my all-time-favorites list, to read again in the years to come, and I will check out your other works as well.

:heart: This is without question excellent, and I am in no way complaining, yet all I can think is that I want to see you write from a point of view where the depths of your command of language would be out of place, just to test if you can tone it down. I dare you to write a comedy in first person from the point of view of a Cutie Mark Crusader.

This was actually a good fan fic, in my opinion. Though, I would have to ask, why does everyone say that Rarity hates that she smells/tastes like marshmallows? I think marshmallows are pretty good tasting. So, why would she hate that she tastes good?

I find this very difficult to masturbate to. :fluttershysad:

4779801 Possibly because marshmallows are fairly common, uncomplicated in production, associated with inexpensive tastes, and combine the sharpness of raw sugar with a softness and texture reminiscent of overindulgence? No doubt Rarity would much prefer a personal, ah, essence which conveyed refinement and subtlety, with complexly interwoven high-class and exotic notes, mysterious and ineffable. Instead, she gets told she tastes like Pinkie Pie.

4780183 Ohhh, I never thought of that. Thank you. ^^

It's a bit too purple in places and you have a few hiccoughs in Rarity's speech ('You got me' is not something I can hear in Rarity's voice excepting in a sarcastic moment) but they are very, very rare. It's a rather nice piece, thank you for sharing.

Your story isn't great. It's FLAWLESS. It was beautiful, I... I can't think of any word that would perfectly describe this fic. Well done good sir/madam, well done.

you got rarity down perfect i have never seen some one do such a good rarity bravo! now if you can do a scootaloo that would be something

I was on board until you plagiarized The Great Gatsby when they kissed (and the "incarnation was complete" line doesn't really work as well when the other character isn't named Daisy...). It kind of ruined things afterward and in hindsight because then I couldn't be sure how much of the rest was your own words.

Very good, especially Rarities last line.

Love it.. hope there is a second part or the ponti on view of Apple Jack.

Loved it! :pinkiesmile:

:pinkiesad2:I don't get it can someone give me a link or help me understand what is with this whole rarity being a "marshmallow" I feel so left out:raritydespair:

I usually after reading a tale as ,well frankly amazing as this I tend towards writing my praising comments in an assortment of severely off colour vulgarity. I will not pollute any part of this page with such. I just can not do it. This is one of the most beautifully written stories i have ever read.
Absolutely lovely.

4783240 Rarity looks like a marshmallow, and one of her kin (sweetie belle) looks like a marshmallow.The joke was then made funnier when rarity taught her friends how to make smores (how to cannabalize her own kind ).

thanks I really didn't get it but the jokes were humorous:pinkiehappy:

bout to start reading this. hopefully its just as good as Ptolemy and AAR.

What would my peers in Canterlot think?

She knows no peers in Canterlot. She knows stuck up unicorn bastards who think they are better than everyone else.

"Do you mind if I catch a whiff of you again once you are properly tended and refreshed?"
"...Sure ah guess."

We bang, okay?

She, that tomboyish southerner. If she would tend to herself as she did when she was Appejewel, then she could avoid being mistaken for as a cute colt. Her brash and straightforward manner does not help, and neither does the taut hardness of her body.

<heavy breathing> This is why I like Applejack so much.

"Because you're– Well,” I clear my throat, “you're the closest Earth pony friend I can do this to without it being awkward."

Racism is Magic. Also, Pinkie would happily let her do this. Do this count for alicorns, part earth and all?

she saw an entire herd of alicorns."

About two, three hundred years early, Littlepip confirmed that.

This is their lifestyle I guess.

That's racist! That's farm living, and it's much more relaxing than her sauna.

apples–and cinnamon?

That's my headcanon. Ha!

Applejack bursts forth and without warning–without warning at all–takes me in her hooves and yanks me into the water!

The Lion King's Simba did the same thing and he got laid that night. This moment is going to be the highlight of her week.

"Ya taste like marshmallows!"

I was going to finally act like the adult my license says I am, and not say a single joke about that. But you just HAD to say it didn't you?:twilightangry2:
She cuddles with the pillow? That's not the real thing, and she should have the real thing.
Great writing, I think you're the one who said "Show, don't tell." Does Pinkie taste like helium?

Is there going to be a part two?

by Celestia's holy beard

I like this ship okay, I just feel too sorry for Spike to support it! He never wins, he deserves SOMETHING! At least to be let down softly, not let on over and over again!

Everyone else has already said what I want to say... but I feel I need to repeat this
I applaud your eloquence. Everything was a la Rarity, and the first-person POV definitely added to it. :duck:
It was an outstanding story, earned my upvote and adding to favourites 5 times over :twilightsmile:
You are a splendid writer. Keep at it. :eeyup:

One instance of "Applejewel" (I believe the second) is missing its first 'L'. It reads Appejewel.

Otherwise, flawless. Rarijack is glorious. Where are you, Tchernobog? This is what you must come see, admit defeat!

Hi there Waypoiny. First of all, thanks for reading. :pinkiehappy: To clear things up, everything except the quoted paragraph is mine. I try to emulate Fritzgerald's writing style in this fic so I thought it only proper to give a shout out to the inspiration with a direct reference. In addition to this, the fact that Rarity can actually remember–and relate–to (the Equestrian) 'The Great Gatsby' adds to her romanticism.


Does Pinkie Pie tastes like helium?

I'm more inclined to think that she tastes like dark matter.:pinkiegasp:

Unfortunately there isn't. :pinkiesad2: This fic is only for my practice with a flowery-fps POV. It's meant only to draw an image, not necessarily to tell a story. I'm gonna be practicing further with other Rarijack, so you can look forward to that. :pinkiesmile:

There was a time when Gaia was to me a figure of a formidable war goddess whose shrieks quaked the earth and whose breath stirred hurricanes. But as the year wore on that image was slowly reduced to that of a mere little forest nymph, foxtrotting through the alleyways of trees; and it is Applejack, taming mountains with her plow and conjuring fruits at her command, who took the place as my image of the spirit of the earth.

Now that is my headcanon!

I've been kicking around the site for awhile without bothering to sign up and I've read dozens of fics (including a ton of clop) but this one really gets AJ and what makes her so intriguing. The Flowery language reminds me a lot of Wild Rose which I can only express as a compliment, and coming from Rarity's perspective makes it work in character.

Someone does need to explain to her those high-class Unicorns in Canterlot are complete tools though. Liked and Faved. Great stuff!

This had some great little character building moments, but honestly I was pretty bored throughout the story. The chemistry you usually find with these two just wasn't there for me. It was all too direct and sort of went on and on without doing much else to make me feel things were really going anywhere.

Shame too, because it's the later half that really brings out AJ for us. But as far as Rarijack and even the non-ship Rarijack focused stories, this one just fails to keep me interested in the two. I guess Rarity just sort of failed to be Rarity for me. And the premise of earth pony hairs being used is a bit awkward but I rolled with it.

Not bad, just not a Rarijack I'd toss into my vault. Nice bits for AJ though.

4784398 I'll say "lol" and then actually lol to most of this. :raritywink::scootangel:

What a wonderful and very beautiful read! :raritystarry: :heart:
Well done on it all!

And even though I am not one to support mare x mare types of stuff, I can't help feeling that this was really just a (friends) thing. :heart: :scootangel:

That was rather beautiful. Loved the style, and the concept, silly as it was, was also adorable. :heart:

I loved the almost poetic language you used with Rarity's inner musings. Very nice.

"Her shadow eclipses the daylight and the anger in her eyes becomes my world. "

I've been meaning to leave more feedback lately and so this is one of the lucky ones.
I hope you weren't expecting tips on how to improve, thoughts on making sure characters stay in character, or anything helpful.

Because I have none of that to offer you. This story is just simply too cute and well written. There probably are typos and things that could be improved, but I was simply too in love with the fic to notice. Rarijack isn't exactly one of my favorite pairings, but it's still very enjoyable and you make Rarity's mental ruminations very in character. Everything from her self denial to the choice of words feels spot on.
Oh, and that ending... so good. :raritywink:

I have spent the whole reading process listening to a very fitting song which gave it all the more admosphere...
It was an almost sensual experience... like, hearing the wind blow, the scent of a fresh smelling orchard.. and Rarity's feelings present, all of them, the curiosity, uncertainty, heart beating...

I loved this FFs a lot, I was looking for something like this for some time now, thank you so much! :ajsmug::raritywink:

I love :ajsmug::heart::raritywink: !

P.S.: The song is a light tune from Supernatural, season 2, episode 17 named "Destiny Calling"
Heh, the irony... :scootangel:

Oh, and this neeeeeeeeeeds a second part or AJ's POV version.... Pretty pretty please? :heart::heart::raritystarry:

That was absolutely delightful. For the first time in ages, I found myself annoyed by the presence of dialogue because the narrative was so much more entrancing. You maintained an almost surreal narration without ever hitting that oft-feared boundary of purple prose. In fact, about the only thing I can complain about is that the dialogue itself felt so terribly out of place amongst the narration, which creates a disconnect in that Rarity doesn't speak in the same way that she thinks.

Other than that, this was absolutely wonderful. I'll be perusing your other stories for my RiL now.


Wow.... Just wow....

This was magical. The narration did a very good job at painting a picture in my mind. Amazingly well done.

This is the first fanfic where I've actually wanted to come back and read it again. Love it just as much as when I first read it. I love love love it :ajsmug::heart::raritywink:

I like it, but it's there supposed to be an author's note in the middle?
Specifically this paragraph

I know that when I kiss Applejack, and forever wed my unutterable visions to her perishable breath, my mind will never romp again like the mind of Celestia. So I wait, listening for a moment longer to the horseshoe that has been struck upon a star. Then I kiss her. At my lips's touch, she blossoms for me like a flower, and the incarnation is complete.

It's formatted differently than the rest of the story, and I am legitimately confused if it is intentional.

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