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Mr101


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This story is a sequel to Chaotic Love


[The sequel to Chaotic Love, reading it is advised.]


It's been ten years since Discord defeated his inner demons and married Fluttershy. Now the father of three children, Entropy, Pandemonium and Songflower, he lives his days in peace & quiet with his wife and their friends.

He couldn't be happier.

But when something from his past threatens to resurface and possible tear apart his whole world apart, he stands to lose the one thing he cherishes over all else.

His family.


Temporary Hiatus whilst plot gets slight re-vamp. Apologies!


Humanized ponies, cover art done by ManiacPaint, background from Google images. Edited version to come!

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 63 )

Damn you create wonderful art and stories!:heart:

What happened to Discord blaryrublur!!!! :rainbowderp:

Oh dear...this is going to be serious. Can't wait for more.

Wow. Can I get a few more sizes on Fluttershy? Jesus.
(Just kidding. As soon as I finish Chaotic Love, I'll read this one!)

That cover art is horrendous.

A lot of spelling errors in the first parts of the chapter. Other than that,
VERY GOOD!

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True, sadly.
Someone could maybe make a better one, at least I hope that will happen...

A perfect start to a sequel.
Leaves a lot of potential foreshadowing, as well as some issues readers could relate to.
I'll give it a :yay: out of :yay:

war hammer chaos symbol. Oh you:derpytongue2:

IM SO GOING TO READ THIS

(yu just made my day Mr 101 thank you):pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::rainbowkiss::raritystarry::twilightsmile::trollestia::twistnerd:

i prefer the first stories art than this one.. the first one discord is a man and i know
many a people hear would go gay for him.:pinkiecrazy:
but yah the new one is just bad looking plse change it and ull wont get comments like mine:rainbowwild:

The HiE List doesn't accept Sequels. Original story is fine, just not sequels.

It seems some jerk is going around disliking positive comments on this story.... I SHALL FIND THEE!
:flutterrage:

The onlys problem I have with this story is that the cover art is so horrible! The one in the first story was WAY better, Discord and fluttershy were really realistic while in this one they are both ugly and discord looks like a anthro!

I quit MLP for a while, I come back and I see this. Why are you so sexy, author? My only complaint, like with the rest of the people, is the drawing. The art for the first one looks like a A quality anime while this looks like the C quality fanart of the drawing in the first one. But honestly, I do like the children's drawing but not Fluttershy or Discord.

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Ah well, thougt I would try something different. Can't progress in life without a little experimentation. I've changed back to a temp one using the original cover (with the title changed of course) till I can find something better (unless people prefer the changed one.)

Apologies again. :twilightblush:

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Ah okay, didn't know that my apologies.

When I saw this, it made my fucking Christmas. Thank you so much for continuing on with the story!:rainbowkiss:

Enjoyable. Like the style of switching from Fluttershy and Discord, to Tia and Luna. And are the characters human? I have to check the tags :pinkiesmile:

When Discord went into the house it reminded me of the episode Daring Don't! And, why does it have a SEX tag? Will it be in later chapters? :trixieshiftright::duck:

3684637 Apologies accepted! Just try to find someone who can do a good cover pic not some random dude or yourself.

I've read this and Chaotic Love, and might I say, GREAT WORK.
P.S. Have you given consideration to maybe inserting a horizontal line of some other indication where the story changes over from different scenes, like from Fluttershy and Discord to Celestia and Luna?

Other than that, KEEP IT UP! :yay:

A very good start. It's rare to see a sequel to a romance story. Most authors call it a day once the couple gets their 'happily ever after.' Hopefully this will be as good as the first one.

Though I do wonder how the Equestrian-Changeling alliance came about and why Discord and Fluttershy are so sympathetic towards Chrysalis. She was the main bad guy of the last story, after all. But I'm sure you'll fill in some of the gaps of what happened over the last ten years as we go along.

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Well, many things have happened in the ten year gap and one is the fact the changeling's became allies to Equestria (which will be brought up again, OR WILL IT??)

And thanks, I'll try my best to keep it as good as the first one. (Though I doubt it, many sequels are never as good as the first)

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I believe in the first story there was sex later in the story. Good things come to those who wait :raritywink:

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Unlike with the first story, there isn't going to have much in the way of sex (due to what will happen). The tag is mainly there for sex-like moments such as the part with Discord waking up in the second chapter.

There's going to be some more teen-rated sex parts in the story later though so don't worry. :twilightsmile:

Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!! A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! FINALLY!!!! YAY!!!

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Fair enough :twilightsmile:
Whether there is sex or not doesn't bug me. I'm just giddy with how the story will develop :twilightsmile:

“Keep reading!” Lua giggled.

I didn't know a computer program could giggle.
Other than that, Good work!

So I was reading the short summary and I was like :twilightsmile:

Then I see the tags that look like this:

Teen · Sex · Gore

and I'm like :rainbowderp:

Then I read the summary and I'm like ohhhh.

In short, I was slightly confused.

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Might wanna write him better, one moment its:

Pandemonium

The next, his name is:

Pandamonium

Ok who ever this kid is going around a disliking every comment, he should just stop :ajbemused:

If you don't like our positive feedback in this story as well don't like the story you should just go

Also I loved the story, it was really well written, I can't wait for more

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Nah, let 'em. Tis entertaining me :rainbowlaugh:

Glad you're liking it so far. :twilightsmile:

3689440 Major issue arisen! I just got done reading up on both stories in one sitting. And I found a really big problem. Well, a problem to anyone paying attention... Entropy is the name of is his son, yes? Well, when I first read that, I thought it was nice how you named him after Discord's father. You mentioned his father, Entropy, working as a servant before being framed and imprisoned? But he was a Dracoequus, right? So, he should have been immortal? Now he's dead, and to top it off, you now have him named Maelstrom in this story? Mind explaining?

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Okay, the father's name is an error and I'll fix it as soon as I get on my laptop (on my ipod atm) as for the death. There are different ways immortality works, it will be revealed later how he is dead but if you want I can pm you how.

3693695
Be silent and enjoy the story

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Nah, no spoilers for me, I'll wait for that explanation.
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I AM enjoying it, rather well considering minor grammar and run on sentence issues. I just have a tendency to point things out that threw me through a loop.

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"Lemme rephrase that, shut the fuck up," C.M. said
"There's no need to be so mean."
Josh suddenly appears in his usual attire; nothing.
"There is always a need to be mean!" Josh shouted.
"Narrator, SHUT THE FUCK UP AND GO AWAY!!!" C.M. shouted into the heavens.
"Yeah, narrator, go away." Bob said to the gods above
"Narrator OFF!"
YOU CAN STOP ME BUT YOU CAN'T STO-
Finnaly

I'm not sure about the ages of some of the characters so far.

This is set about 13 years after the original as far as I know so presumably the foal cast from the original series are in their early 20s (i.e. Sweetie Bell, AppleBloom, Diamond Tiara, etc).

I can see a 13 year old crushing on a 20 year old but I'm not sure if Sweetie would be playing with Songflower in that way, although I don't suppose its outside the realms of possibility.

So Golden Crown, I assume he / she is Diamond Tiara's younger brother? The ages wouldn't match up with him / her being her child and as they were going to talk to Filthy that would fit as well.

Uhhhhhh from my understanding Berry Punch is seen to be Cheerilee's sister.

As far as the fandom says.

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In fanon she is by some yeah, me included. But in this universe they aren't. :twilightsmile:

This is a lovely story. Plz do continue.(Rarity voice)

So far, Awsome! However, I need to stop.......For now -mischievous smile-.

Class is about over, and Econ is next. Hurrah for Boring classes and senior-itis!

It has been weeks where is the next one

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