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Fluttershy has always been a fan of romance. She reads books about it all the time, and her dream stallion's always on her mind. However, her whole world starts to crash down around her when she recognizes those unmistakable signs in her friends... Could they be hitting on her?
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Hey, you forgot to ship her with spike
This was just hillarious. Nuff said
I just want to say that i liked this story and i like the way you dont confirm if they are in love with Fluttershy or not.
But let me guess, the pony that Pinkie likes is Twilight and she likes Pinkie too and this story happens before "The Reason I Love You" and Fluttershy is just being paranoid(my guess has nothing to do with the fact that i like Twipie more than Twishy and that i dislike Flutterpie)
It seems like the events in this story could have been rearranged in any order, that's not usually a good sign.
Ha, I like Twishy and RiriShy
1990963
It was more of a hint towards it, and could go hand and hand. Glad you liked it!
I was thinking about it, but decided not to.
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Thanks! And haha, you noticed that?
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This story was meant to be a light-hearted type of one-shot, rather than a totally serious ship-fic. I'm glad you read it, though, and I appreciate the feedback!
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I'm glad you liked it! To me, Fluttershy seems like the type of pony who'd be shy (obviously) about romance, but would read and fantasize about a strong stallion to protect her. Simplicity was the idea I had in mind while writing this, but thank you!
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I like TwiShy a lot, which is probably why I dragged that portion out a little subconsciously...
"...she'd read the story times..." Wha?
Might wanna do a wee bit of proof reading. Still, hilarious little fic. Needs a sequel with her making the same mistake with Spike, Discord and the Princesses.
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Thanks for that. I did go through and make some changes before posting, and I made that mistake when editing that part. I appreciate the comment, and a sequel with those characters would be hilarious. 
...
A textbook cease of projection. Fluttershy's developing crushes on all her friends, but only because she's lonely as heck, and the novels aren't helping. Worse, she wouldn't even submit it to herself, because homosexual is not the norm.
(Joke) Alt. Title: Oh My... Did I Get Paired Again?
...Is this your card?: "Featured"
Rainbow Dash is the pony who's the most shipped
They are total opposite, but they can be so cute 
The only pony who's good enough for Fluttershy, I think, is Rainbow Dash... Yeah buck me
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No offense, but a shipping is not enough exciting if the two are too similar (yes Rarishy and PinkieDash, I'm looking at you)
Anyway, good story, very well written, poor Fluttershy forever alone
... This gave me feels everywhere except for AppleShy. I just don't get that pairing.
Oh well.
Great story!
wait I dunno I mean MAYBE fluttershy is right :
As I Pinkie promised, I read it and liked it. Good job!
But you know what I liked more... The TwiShy scene, of course!
Just one question... What will eat Angel now?!
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If you're referring to the photo, I did it myself. (Not very proud of it, though.)
However, I do agree with you on the 'opposites make best couples,' though. 
I like Twinkie a lot. Anyway, I'm glad you liked it!
I'm joking--I know what you mean. I guess he'll just end up throwing a fit and make Fluttershy feel bad! 
I like how you describe it. Very nice!
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Haha, would've totally used that, had I thought of it earlier.
1996192
She sure is. She has a little chemistry with everypony, but she's not in my top pairings.
2002112
I've never actually read it before, so I guess I can't say I understand it too well. Although, I guess I could see AJ liking a withdrawn pegasus, and Fluttershy liking a hard-worker like Applejack. (Just look at the FlutterMac shipping!) Thanks for reading!
2005088
...Perhaps...
2016689
Thanks, and I had the most fun writing that part out, too! And Rarity, of course. Not sure why, but it was very entertaining. "What will eat Angel now?"
2017194 Angel would do that!
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Do They Like Me?
Grammar score: 10. I saw nothing major or even minor.
Pros:
Funny throughout.
Gave a good reason Fluttershy didn't fly during the market that fits with her.
Quite... logical how she got her ideas.
Cons
Not much... Maybe adding Spike? Or a sequel with others?
Notes Section:
This was short, but sweet. Funny and rather well-written. All of them in-character but it flowed organically. And perfect setup for a sequel.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story/ this story:Spanner in the Works.
2017566
Thank you for picking my story!
I'll get to yours when I get home from school, which would be in about... eight-nine hours. You can start expecting your review around there.
2017194
Yeah me too, I love ship the Mane 6 with : FlutterDash, RariJack and Twinkie, and...
Wait a second...
Oooooooh
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Hehe... Caught me red-handed there. I was thinking about Twinkie when I wrote that part out.
I don't know why but any fluttershy ship's that aren't Fluttermac just don't do it for me. But this was hilarious so like and fave from me!
+ Any time I read the fantasy sequence I die of D'AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
Really funny.
Very entertaining. I want to read more, see more of Fluttershy's paranoia and the special sompony's of the others
Very cute. This was well-written.
LOL
At the end.... There's sorrow and rage in Fluttershy... Like.. Oh.. So you're not making advancements? Or am I making advancements and you are attempting to ignore and repent?!
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Name of Story: Do They Like Me?
Grammar score out of 10: 9
Pros:
Pacing - So the pacing of this story is smooth, and nothing feels very rushed. I always think that is something to praise because it shows the author is taking time to develop the scenes and let them play out fully.
Dialogue - I thought the dialogue was good. Everyone feels in character, most of all Fluttershy.
Story - The story is cute. A shy person like Fluttershy would certainly lose herself in romance novels or fantasy books, something to take her away into a world that feels more safe or exciting. The comedy aspect of this story is there, a little too light I think, but it's there and it works. The encounter with Twilight was really good and I liked that you made a call back to something that you established earlier that Fluttershy finds attractive.
Cons:
Encounter with Rarity - So there were some cases where I feel there wasn't a strong enough misunderstanding between Fluttershy and her friends to warrant her thinking that said friend might be crushing on her. With Rarity, the misunderstanding seemed a little weak. If you had added more from Rarity about wanting to spend more time with Fluttershy or something else to give a bigger misconception of liking Fluttershy a little too much, then it would have worked better. Maybe commenting on Fluttershy's looks or something else from Rarity would have worked.
Encounter with Pinkie - It didn't seem like the encounter with Pinkie was all that much of a misunderstanding. Instead of Pinkie giving away a free cupcake, she could have said she already had a special stash of cupcakes she makes for all her friends for whenever they might need one, or some other baked treat that could be mistaken for a token of love (like a heart-shaped cookie where half of it is pink and the other half is the color of her friend's mane or coat). It feels like you could have done more with someone as intense and in-you-face like Pinkie. Even a kiss on the cheek would have worked too.
Encounter with Rainbow - And here, it feels like nothing happened at all. I would have given Dash more time to be around Fluttershy, perhaps not totally believing her friends because Fluttershy is always afraid of something or always overreacting to social things. I don't personally know, I ship Dash with AJ, but it seems like hardly anything happened there between those two to warrant Fluttershy thinking that Dash might have feelings for her.
Notes Section: I know the con list is longer and more in-depth than the pro list, but that doesn't mean I didn't enjoy the story. From the looks of things, a lot of people liked this story and it's clear why. It's a good idea and it's done well, but there are places where it could be better and the writing could be stronger. You have good ideas and I hope you keep writing them out.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story: Friendship has a Generous Heart.
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Oh My... Did I Misread the Signs?
Grammar score: 10/10 (Or close enough that I didn't notice anything.)
Pros: First of all, your characterization of Fluttershy is excellent. While the story might be going places the show does not, the character of Fluttershy feels like the pegasus we know and love. Next, the story is pretty funny, and had me smiling through each of her encounters with her friends. And finally, the ending was very sweet.
Cons: I didn't really notice any glaring cons. Grammar was great. You stayed in the character's head the whole story long so we could identify with her the entire time, even though we were aware that she was reading into things. (Or was she?
) I don't know if it's a con, but there was something a bit sad about it, though. Fluttershy seems pretty lonely...
Notes: I don't often read shipping or comedy, but this was adorable. I kind of found myself rooting for Fluttershy to be right about at least one of them, so she would have someone. I think you do a terrific job of keeping the ponies' personalities intact, while taking them on your own journey. Fluttershy just shines. Twilight is great. And that last line made me smile.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story, A Spell for Lyra, when you get the chance.
Glorious. Quite funny, and just what the doctor ordered.
Liked and faved!
And congratulations on making "Weekly featured fics."
put me on the side that thought it was funny because this was funny. Poor naive, adorable , little fluttershy .
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Thank you for choosing my story! I'll be sure to give yours a look-through as soon as I can. Sorry for not getting to you sooner; I haven't been on the site for a while due to lack of internet.
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Oh, thanks! And really? I wish I'd been on to see that... But still, that's awesome. Thanks for letting me know
2619943
Haha, thank you! I was hoping it would be humorous
Nice short story and I'm a AppleShy fan myself since they would look so cute together
but I cant really see Twilight and Pinkie pie being together ?
? 
Pinkie seems to work with two of the mane 6 and that's with Rainbow or Rarity...but that's just me 
~ Authors Helping Authors return critique ~
Oh My... Did I Misread the Signs?
Grammar/Mechanics:
Style of writing:
Concept of story:
Execution of story:
Pros:
-Some nice characterization of Fluttershy
-The Fluttershy/Twilight scene is pretty cute
-You seem to be doing a good job of forcing Fluttershy to interact with each of the mane 6 wihtout making it obvious that you're doing so
-Oh lawd, that ending.
Cons:
-Had to ding you a bit on style for sentences like, "She was wearing a long, pink dress." or "Besides, she was okay with him just being one of her fantasies anyway." (Exposition that could have easily been shown instead of told, redundant use of besides/anyway, respectively.)
-Had to ding grammar/mechanics a bit for things like: "plopped down on her sofa and, from" (A- the comma should be before 'and', B- the following clause has no subject, so is not a complete sentence, so no comma at all is necessary, actually.)
Notes
-You've got a mild case of lavender unicorn syndrome (look it up) When it becomes necessary to refer to a character repetitively, 'she' or 'Fluttershy' are better choices than 'the pegasus'.
-I was about to ask, "Why wouldn't Fluttershy just fly over the crowded market?" ... but then I remembered that not thinking of flying as a solution is pretty in-character for Fluttershy. ... Ah, I see you mentioned this later on, a bit ham-handedly.
-While I agree the double hyphen ( -- ) is a suitable substitute for a dash in casual writing, I think a published story is not casual enough for it. They're easy to fix by using a find/replace tool. (And where you used the first one, you need spaces on both sides of it.)
-I don't really like your use of 'AJ'... Again, shorthand good for casual writing, but I like stories to look more professional. You might pass it off as exactly what Fluttershy thought, but even then, I don't think it's in character for Fluttershy to refer to Applejack that way. She never says 'AJ' in the show, always the full name if she refers to Applejack.
-Sorry, I really have to pick a bone with your use of parentheses... They can be used in fiction, but if so, they need to be used consistently and be incorporated into your writing style, which I don't see here. You can instead -- very usefully -- use dashes to separate parenthetical remarks.
-"The pegasus flew off with the yellow pony." This is bad. Lavender unicorn syndrome for one thing, but also because 'the pegasus' is a useless descriptor when both characters in the scene are pegusai.
Overall, pretty good and entertaining. I'm not a fan of your style of sentence structure, but at least it is pretty consistent, and all the issues I pointed out are relatively minor; they don't break the story.
If I was to do it, I'd choose just one of the mane six for Fluttershy to mistakenly think has a crush on her... giving more time to deal with it in-depth and compound the errors in perception... perhaps even make it reciprocal -- they both mistakenly think the other one likes them. (And besides, having to deal with each of the mane six in turn does (by necessity) make it a tad predictable.)
A cute and fun story, though. Worth the read.
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Ah, I've been waiting for this.
And you didn't disappoint. I'd like to thank you for getting back to me, and for going above the call of duty on cons. The reason for the hyphens "--", is because I had written this specific story on a tablet. What that means is it wouldn't auto-correct it for me, so I did the best I could.
I wrote this story a while ago, and am now aware of what Lavender Unicorn Syndrome is, as well as why using "AJ" instead of Applejack isn't good prose. I think at the time it was my way of getting away from repetitive use of her name, but it did more harm than good in hindsight.
Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it and gave me some very helpful insight! This story was done nearly 6 months ago--oh wow, that's half a year--and I like to think I've improved since then. I think the biggest problem I still have is show vs. tell, but I'm working to remedy that. Oh, and I don't use "AJ" anymore, unless in dialogue. I understand that it's unprofessional in essence, and despite fanfiction being an amateur author's work, I would still like to be the best I can be and present my writing as cleanly as possible.
...That came off nicely. Anyway, thanks again and I'll certainly be on the look out for your stories!
This was a fun little story! I enjoyed reading it. :)
Hi there. I hope you don't mind, but I liked this fic so much I have put together an audio version on YouTube.
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I've never had someone do a reading before, so I'm really excited to hear it. So far, your Fluttershy voice is amazing. Thanks so much for doing it, and I'm glad you liked the story! 
Oh wow, that's great! Of course I don't mind.
MASS SHIPPING EFFECTS AND AFTEREFFECTS!!!
YYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!
Well that was a fun bit of silliness. It's always the quiet ones, isn't it? XD
Congratulations. This story has good enough grammar to be added to the Good Grammar Directory, a comprehensive directory of grammatically correct stories on FIMFiction.
If anything
I would have thought Fluttershy had feelings for the rest of the Mane Six.
Ha! This was a cute story! Also, I doubt that Fluttershy isn't bisexual after the whole Twilight thing!
So I was listening to the reading, having no idea what this story was about, and I found myself wondering, "Gee, wouldn't it be funny if Fluttershy thought all her friends were into her? I should write something like that." AND THEN OP DELIVERED :D I couldn't be more pleased.
And I'm surprised you didn't ponify "Rapunzel". :B Few could resist that temptation.
*Laughs* oh jeez.
This was adorable. I read a similar story about Rarity shipping everyone with everyone else; Fluttershy shipping everyone with herself is pretty cute.
And of course, the conclusion of her still having her suspicions is wonderful.
I love this
when I go back to school 
I can just imagine what would happen if I thought the same as
I am going to do this with my class and see what develops
of course I will not tell anyone what I am doing
Now I need to see a fiction where everypony fights over fluttershy and fluttershy has no idea Permission to write that?
It will either be funny or disturbing
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You may write whatever you'd like. I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
Good job.
Liked the TwiShy scene more, but that is just my personnel opinion.
If i wear to give a rating on this it would be a 8/10 not perfect but very well done.
~Tobben
listened to scribbler's reading and my favorite part of the fic is still the tub bit. it always makes me laugh; even got that bit on my phone to listen to when i'm out and about
This is so light hearted, and comical, and cute. I loved it. XD
I think this story will always be one of my favorite one shot's.
thanks for writing such an awesome story. XD
this was so cute and hilarious i love it