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Hearts and Hooves Day is drawing near, and Twilight is determined to figure out this whole "love" business. She's prepared to dig through romance novels and travel through the Everfree Forest and back for answers. However, her research project keeps bringing her back to one particular pegasus, who's been doing a secret project of her own.
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Cool story Bro!
Sounds interesting so far. Will this be eventual TwiShy?
Favorited and thumbed up for now. Looking forward to more.
2147826 Yes, but I'm hoping to build it up a little. And this won't be a very long story, maybe three or four chapters at the most.
Thanks for reading!
Interesting start. Look forward to seeing how Fluttershy's plan collides with Twilight's research.
2148166 Second chapter will be going up tomorrow. Third one will probably be on Thursday. It's going to be short but sweet.
Hurray, another Twishy!
And a good one to boot. Looking forward to more.
Oh my... So Twilight is kind of angry with Fluttershy if I got that right? I'm really excited for the next chapter.
2152130 Twilight thinks she has a reason to be mad at Fluttershy. All will be revealed in tomorrow's finale.
Oh boy, this is not good. I take it that Fluttershy wanted to potion to give her the confidence to express her feelings for Twilight, but Twilight assumed other wise. I can't wait for the next chapter. Lol, why isn't tomorrow yet?
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Wait one sec... The next chapter is the last one?
Oh well, it's certainly been fun so far. I can't wait to see more about what Fluttershy's planning. I hope it ends in fluff, and there has to be a reason everypony's mentioning Twilight's "special somepony."
Anyway, good job! I liked how you wrote Zecora. It pleased me.
2152959 Zecora was a fun writing challenge. And I know this wasn't going to be a long fic, though some of my future stories should be longer, along with the occasional one-shot.
Thanks for reading and liking, everypony!
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Zecora's always a treat to write. Especially when the only words that rhyme don't make any sense because of context!
Any future TwiShy plans? Well, you seem cool. Have a
stalkerwatcher.one thing at the end it would of made it a better ending if suddenly godillza came and fucked up there little romantic moment
That was a short but well written and cute story. Thank you.
Cute! I assume you'll be changing the incomplete tag to complete here soon?
Regardless of that, it was an adorable little story. If I had to give a critique, I'd say Twi's thoughts and emotions came about a little too quickly. At the part where Flutters asked her if she wanted to be her special somepony, I thought that Twilight reacted a little too... well... without thinking it through, which isn't like her.
But I suppose it kinda works with the short story you've got here, full of fluff. I enjoyed it, and hope to see you write (hopefully longer
) more TwiShy. Good luck on your future endeavors! And, if you do write more TwiShy, I'll be there. 
2156948 I'll be the first to admit that romance is not always the easiest thing for me to write, and I knew this story felt a little rushed when I finished it. But I'll hopefully get better with future TwiShy stories. For now, though, I'll be working on other fics (some non-MLP stories on other sites) and probably develop this idea for a Princess Cadance fic.
Thanks for reading!
Overall, twas cute and I enjoyed it ^^
Good luck oj your future endeavors
T'was very cute and sweet little tale. the concept that Flutters needs to drug herself to confess something so pure leaves me with a tender-feeling heart. But if you ask me, this fic was also a missed opportunity for FlutterSpike romance. Looking at how they interacted in the pilot and Magic Duel, it's mind-boggling that there isn't more of it.
I've taken another read of the story, and truthfully, I'm not satisfied with the third chapter. I feel like I may have rushed things toward the end, since I was writing on a self-imposed deadline. I'd like to take another crack at it and maybe add a fourth chapter, so for the time being, this story will be "Incomplete" again until I post the new ending chapters.
Thanks to everyone for liking it so far and being patient with me! I'll try not to disappoint!
I really like this ending. It felt more personal between Fluttershy and Twilight, and it was really cute.
I liked this new ending more to be honest. In the old ending it bothered me, that Fluttershy needed that magical potion to confess her love. Thanks for the rewrite.
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Thanks!
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Glad you liked it!
This can only end well.
Good to see a Twishy, and a good one at that!
Oh, there's an interesting twist! This shall be very interesting...
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I feel bad for not having noticed this story earlier. I usually notice every TwiShy that's posted, but this time I guess I was a little slow
It was a great read though! Good job.
That was a very fun little read! Short and sweet, A very interesting concept, and you handled their personalities perfectly. Very nicely done!
2148166 Huh? What? What plan? She didnt mention a planO.o
Tried to like this, couldn't.
2369816 Well, thanks anyway!
I liked the buildup and the concept, but towards the end it seemed to impress me with a feeling of disappointment. Though it comes to a definite conclusion, it seems to be lacking in some way.
Having just read this story and seen that the end was a rewrite, I'm unsure whether the original ending would have conveyed a similar hollowness or been more satisfying. Despite the noticeable displeasure after finishing the story, I liked the first three chapters well enough that I don't want to press the dislike button. I guess I'll just leave it at that.
I hate having such a negative view of this, especially since I try to hold short stories to lower standards than chapter sagas, trilogies, etc. in the way scenes are built up to and characters are examined (Similar to a oneshot, short chapter stories just don't have room to really reach into the depths of the fiction hat, and that certainly doesn't count against them).
This was a decent fic by any means, enjoyable as a distraction and unworthy of direct criticism by a far poke, but I felt the need to express that the ending felt forced, to put it simply.
2608554 Actually, I find your criticism very useful. Endings have always been a problem for me. I've no trouble setting up the story, but bringing it to a satisfying conclusion is where I run into trouble. Any suggestions on what could've been done differently will be extremely helpful.
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I felt that Twilight was too immediately willing to reclassify her feelings of friendship towards Fluttershy as feelings of love. While it isn't completely unreasonable it took something away from the potential intimacy by having it so plainly there. To me, though I wouldn't dare to be so arrogant as claiming this to be a measure for quality by anyone's standards beyond my own, the majority of the enjoyment from a short shipfic is seeing the process of accepting it. The abrupt surprise, the analyzation of the feelings, the moment (or longer) of denial, looking at the pony through 'new eyes' and finding out whether or not the friendship is more than it seems...
This was good, and there was a bit of examination into how the two reacted to the reveal, with Twilight being surprised and jumping to a particular conclusion based off what she had just learned, and Fluttershy's brief spiral of inward apologies. It had the setup and elements of a better shipfic, but it felt like Twilight was too immediately ready to change her mind and decide she shared Fluttershy's affections, making the first move before either of them really had time to calm down from the confrontation. They decide to be special someponies and end by toasting to their love... It was a pretty dramatic emotional shift. To be blunt about it, it felt like you got bored and stamped out a cookie cutter happy ending to avoid leaving the story dead in the water (A consideration that a surprising number of authors don't share, so thanks in any case).
2608661 Thanks! That's what I needed to hear.
Well, by the looks of this it seams to be a rather interesting story.
On to the next chapter.
~Tobben
Love potions always lead's to trouble, and misunderstandings.
Good job on the dialogue for Zecora. i always applaud those who can rime.
~Tobben
Adorable good job it is because of this adorableness that i stay a faithful TwiShy fan
9.5/10 from me.
~Tobben
4429729 Aww, thanks! I'm glad I always appeal the TwiShy crowd so well.
The mouth of the pegasus goes meep meep meep, meep meep meep, meep meep meep...
A nice, small, fast-paced story. The idea with Fluttershy trying to get a 'courage-potion' as well as this potion turning out to be a placebo was an interesting approach, a nice touch overall aaand a nice twist, too.
Only nitpick: Although it generally is sort of a problem for most stories to be fast-paced, that's not what bugged me here. What got to me was their actual, uh, let's call it 'talk' at the end. Slurp, slurp, 'I really like you', 'yeah, I like you too'... first thought: "Wow... that was... quick... and short..." Or, to recite an old meme: That escalated quickly. I really wish there would've been a bit more dialogue, actually. I think it would do good for this last chapter. They don't have to start rambling for another five hundred words, but as it is now, it feels a bit... off. Too fast. Too easy, maybe.
Still, a fun ride!
Thank you.
5395186 A fair point. Pacing or charting actual growth between characters has been one of the areas I'm trying to improve in my writing. Especially when it comes to romantic pairings.
Still, I'm glad you enjoyed the story for what it was!