Twilight Sparkle can't fly. She's tried as hard as she can, but she can barely lift her hooves off the ground without smacking her face into something. Rainbow Dash has tried to teach her a thing or two about it, but it only leads to failed attempts and frustrated antics.
Princess Celestia decides that this will not do. A princess who cannot fly is not much of a princess at all. She asks the captain of the Wonderbolts to remedy the problem before the public learns of Twilight's shortcomings. As they spend more and more time together, Spitfire and Twilight will forge a bond far stronger than that of a simple student teacher relationship.
The cover art for this story was commissioned from a very talented artist on another site by me.
Chapters (5)
Hot stars!!!!
Phew! It's not Soarin! Otherwise I would have caused you an uproar of people replying to me!
I look forward to more of this. This is a pairing I actively like seeing more of.
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I'm the same way. There needs to be more TwiFire... I barely see any at all. I'm glad you've enjoyed the prologue, though.
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Do you dislike Soarin' and Twilight shipping?
4013344 Yes.
Soardash all the way motherbuckers. 
Yay
, uncommon pairings are awesome.
I could have sworn that Twilight met Spitfire in Hurricane Fluttershy though?
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Yes, but they didn't really get the chance to talk or necessarily get to know one another. Still, I understand what you're saying and will re-word that passage a little. Thanks for letting me know!
(Also, uncommon shippings are awesome.)
I've seen this ship once or twice, never really got into it, but I've never had a reason to be turned off of it (Unlike, say, Twilight x Rainbow Dash
) so I'd like to see where you're going with this.
Though I am curious about the possibility of Twilight x Wild Flower, but that's not here or now.
Now calm down, Twi, keep in mind Dash is the impatient type. Also, it's possible the problem is with the teacher, and not the student.
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I've always had a soft spot for this shipping for some reason, though I'm not entirely sure why. But despite that, I'm glad you're giving the story a chance! I hope it doesn't disappoint. (I agree with you on the problem being with the teacher and not the student, though. Poor Twilight, haha...)
Thanks for reading!
This is a boat I have not heard of before. But I am intrigued....
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True, she's seen Spitfire in person several times, but we've never seen them properly introduced.
Anyway, let's see more of the Scholar and the Flymare!
Not a bad story at all. For the most part your characterization is good, and the plot is engaging. Pacing pretty good as well. I do have one problem with the story though...
This seems rather out of character for RD. As she herself put it in episode 2, she'd never leave her friends hanging. While we have seen her get frustrated with things, I have a hard time believing the Element of Loyalty would just give up that easily, even after a month. She's teaching Twilight flying. She knows first-hand how difficult it can be for younger ponies (See: Scoots
) and adult ponies (See: Herself), and I personally feel she'd understand that Twilight's going to have a tougher time of it, given she's only had her wings for a month. Granted, you may have a chapter later where she does cool down, reconciling with Twilight, but this really stuck out for me as a reader.
That being said, I do think I'll have to keep an eye on this one. Keep up the good work.
Wow, that was a painful read! Only Spike was remotely in character and that's only because of his lack of lines.
So let me give this straight, Rainbow Dash, a pony characterized to never give up on her friends dumps Twilight almost right off the bat because she's having difficulty learning. Twilight acts wangsty about her inability to fly and even worries about Celestia banishing her....despite being Princess herself now.
Celestia naturally doesn't even bother encouraging her to have more faith in her friend and instead has the second half of the ship waiting in the wings.
Other problems with this story:
Because you know, it's not like Celestia doesn't know the disadvantages of pressuring anypon- Oh wait she does!
Overall verdict? Neat shipping pair, no thought in actual structure with pretty out of character MCs. All in all it looks like the story is going to focus more on the ship itself to the detriment of all else, just to make things work. Rainbow Dash a loyal friend? Ha! Author ignores this entirely just to have an excuse to get Spitfire in the picture. On top of this, Twilight's characterization completely ignores the development she's gone through up to this point.
I think shipping characters for the sake of it isn't enough to make a good story.
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I appreciate that you're pointing this out to me. First of all, I'd like you to know that this is by no means my best writing (especially the characterization), and I did exaggerate some behaviors on purpose. While the only tag on this story is romance, I did want it to have some comedic elements, which is the reasoning behind some of the character's actions. (Still, in the recent Discord episode, Rainbow Dash did just leave her friends hanging. Just something to think about.)
I'm sorry if you do think the story was painful to read. This is really not a good representation of my work at all, so I hope you don't think poorly of me as a whole. The prologue was only meant to get things started in a comedic fashion that might make it more interesting, not come off as poor characterization or that I didn't care for the characters and what they'd already been through.
I hope you stick around for at least another chapter so I can show you that I can write something that is worth reading. If not, I understand.
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I'm inclined to agree. Please don't think that this story will be fluff-filled and completely pointless (as in lacking conflict) if you do read further. I understand the prologue was really short and may seem like things are going to be that way, but don't be deceived. On the other hand, if you don't like stories that focus only on a pair of ponies, this may not be the right story for you.
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Thank you. I'll admit, Rainbow Dash probably wouldn't do that, but I don't think it's fair to paint her as the perfect representation of her element. I hope that if you do read more of the story that it'll be something you enjoy.
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But it isn't comedic. It's just silly. Twilight might be a bit neurotic, but at this point, she's evolved past the "Oh no, the Princess will banish me!" freaking-out stage. Rainbow Dash might be impatient, but she's also experienced enough as a coach—and loyal enough—to stick with a friend who really needs her help. And the new Discord episode is hardly a counter example. The writers simply needed to get everyone but Twilight out of the picture as soon as possible. I'd also argue that Dash didn't see Discord as a threat, hence why she was OK with leaving the others to deal with his shenanigans.
Great story, but I don't like the characterization that you have given Rainbow Dash. I understand you had to write that in to explain why Twilight would need Spitfire to teach her, but I think it would be a better idea if Rainbow just decided that she was not good enough to teach Twilight and recommends that maybe she ask Princess Celestia to send a better flight instructor.
k interesting... short... but good
RD seems a bit off... maybe make it where she was having a bad week or something, and she comes back when they were going to practice next and say that she did not mean it... or something... i dont know... but I understand why you did what you did.
needs to be longer... thats my major thing here....
im looking forward to the next part, hope to read soon!
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As already pointed, Rainbow didn't leave her friends hanging for it wasn't one of her friends who had a problem.
Can you tell what purpose?
About my previous comment, it was more of a warning. Be sure this upcoming shipping part will have a solid basis and good reasons, as well as a step-by-step evolution, for too many stories and people tend to only focus on the kisses and "I love her mane" stuff
It's a nice story. You have a odd ship, but if you make it work then, it works.
I wouldn't worry about rainbow being OOC. You can argue she is out of character, but I can easily picture her getting fed up, frustrated and saying something that she either didn't mean or would latter regret. Really she dose it a lot. (You can also do some bits when rainbow comes back to help again, but now twilight is training with spitfire. Oh the havoc you can play with that.
)
Your writing is good, or you write well enough that I can't find anything to complain about.
My only complaint is not a whole lot happens. I know it's a prologue, but I this is my pet complaint.
Yep, a bit OOC.WHERE THE LOYALTY DASHIE? :P
You know what's funny? People complain about Rainbow's disloyalty being out of character in this story, but she has abandoned / been prepared to abandon her friends multiple times in canon. (The whole group in Ticket Master, Fluttershy in Dragonshy, Pinkie and Rarity in Last Roundup, Pinkie in Mmmystery on the Friendship Express, and Twilight in Canterlot Wedding)
4017791 If anything, she is more likely to give up due to the reasons you mentioned. She has a tendency to get irrationally angry at minor things and storm off. This is a prime example of said incident. Sure she might come around after a while, but cooling off takes time and Dash would rather just go at her own pace. Will that's my opinion anyway.
But the story itself is good, and TwiFire is adorable when done properly.
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I understand. It was just the first example that came to mind. But there are plenty of instances where Rainbow Dash isn't the best representation of her element.
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Don't worry, Rainbow Dash isn't going to be characterized this way for the entire story. I can see why you don't like the way she's been written so far, though.
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Thank you! I'm glad that you like it so far. And about the length--I assure you, the following chapters won't be so short. This one only was because it was a prologue.
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My reason isn't exactly as noble as I'd like it to be. It's kind of like how a person really likes or admires something, but it isn't meant for them specifically. (The Cutie Mark Crusaders in "The Show Stoppers" would be a good example of what I'm talking about. They were all talented in one area, but wanted to pursue something else.) I think the style of writing I'm trying to imitate is really cool and I wish I could pull it off in a way that works. Except, I'm terrible at it and should probably stop trying at this point.
I'm sorry if that doesn't make any sense.
As for taking it slow, I'll be sure to. I have the same opinion as you when it comes to shipping stories; if it goes too fast, it feels unnatural. I'll do my best to avoid that.
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I'm glad that you're enjoying the story so far! Also, I agree that not a lot happened, but I promise a lot more of a satisfying chapter will come next.
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Yeah, I didn't realize it was going to be that big of a deal.
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Thanks, and I know what you mean. I hope I'll be able to write a good story for a ship I care about.
This is the start of something interesting.
(i say that because this is a prologue and not a chapter. Just my view on things. 
)
Spitfire is my 2nd favorite background pony and Twilight is my 2nd favorite of the mane 6, so i think i will enjoy this fic.
Looking forward to the first chapter.
Oh Twily, you so silly!
Has promise and that's not just because it's a twilight x spitfire fic hope it's a long one.
Looking forward to more.
You have my curiosity. I'll be following this.
And, I'm gonna agree with some of the other comments and say that Dash was excessively cruel. I can understand getting frustrated, given her personality, but she completely gave up on Twilight, insulted her, and stormed off. That's pretty harsh by any measure, let alone doing it to one of your closest friends. Even more so because Twilight was making a genuine effort.
Seems like a ripe opportunity for a "What the hell, hero?" though. I do hope that at the very least Dash regrets what she did and apologizes later. Perhaps that's how she finds out that Spitfire is teaching Twilight?
im still on the fence with dash in this,
if she shows up later and apologizes than maybe.
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She will show up again. It'd just be a bit anticlimactic to have it happen so soon.
Ha, nice.
Did you just-
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Thank you.
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There's not enough GOOD Star Wars/Pony crossovers.
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Never said that, however, I just realized even though I've seen you posting all over the comments across the site, I never thought to check for any stories you've written.
Having looked at your profile I see that I have been remiss.
Commencing info dump now...
Let me guess: karate kid?
ok you do still have my attention... I have no problems this time around... looking good so far!
In fact I cant wait for the next part! I hope it wont be to far way!
karate kid anyone ?
Now I want to see fanart of Twilight wearing a trench coat
Oh god.
More
More!
MOAR!
All in all it's a very good story and I'd like to see where this ends up. I'm a huge fan of Twifire stories but I can't find a lot of 'em.
Keep it up!
~Xela
I find this to be enjoyable.
Well, then, what a surprise! A TwiFire story that is both incomplete AND shows promise?
I FEEL LIKE IM GONNA EXPLODE!
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I'm currently working on the next chapter for this story; it will be the next thing I update (excluding the story I'm marking complete tomorrow). If all goes well it shouldn't be too long until this story's updated, within the next couple of days would be my best guess. Though I definitely should apologize for the wait, as I have been offline for a few months.
4625169 I am nevertheless going to EXPLODE!
Nice to see the story has updated again. As for updates, no need to worry, as I'm pretty patient when it comes to fics. Keep up the good work!
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Thank you very much, I'm really happy to hear that you enjoy this story (and are patient as well). I hope you'll like the new chapter in particular.
Manaphy is an awesome Pokemon, by the way.
Nice to see this continue! I look forward to the implementation of the chicken suit...
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It will be done as swiftly as possible.
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I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it. And about that, I can't wait to write it out...