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Alpha Scorpii


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But she doesn't care.

A short tale about Big Mac and Applebloom. Nothing too spectacular, but I hope you like it. Takes place a couple of years before the start of Season 1.

Special thanks to Inumaniac for being my proofreader once more. The amazing cover has been done by PapaSam. Used with permission.

Read the polish translation here, courtesy of Dolar84

Reading here, done by HeySagey; and here done by TheArchitect

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Comments ( 63 )

"My Big Brother Best Friend... Forever..."

I would like to see more scenes with Applebloom and Big Mac in the show.

Anyway, thanks for reading, I hope you liked it. Thanks to the moderator who approved this story, whoever may it be, and thanks once more to Inumaniac for his help and to PapaSam for the great cover art.

:twilightsmile:

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indeed, i would love to see more sibling scenes :rainbowkiss:

oh here have a little song

Short, sweet, and utterly adorable.:heart:

This is adorable :raritystarry: Great job!

O.O So much D'awwww

D'aaaawwwwwwww so Adorable! Heh the ending reminded me of FOE openings xD Me gusta

Adorable, and sweet.... siblings through and through

Really cute story, wish there is more like that.:eeyup:

D'awwww, so sweet! This is really nice and well written.
Where'd you get the inspiration for it?

so cute :twilightsmile:


i loved this! Amazing job! :eeyup:

1707090 To be honest, I have no clue. :twilightblush: The idea just came to my mind, so I wrote it.

Oh man, a new story from Alpha Scorpii? Today is a good day.

And I must agree with you, I would love more scenes of Big Mac and Apple Bloom together, just being siblings. Hey, we might get lucky and see that in the Apple Family Reunion episode.

That aside, this a great story, especially the way you wrote Apple Bloom's point of view. How she sees the world and tries to compare it all to her family, because family is the most important thing to her.

Well done, I salute you sir.

I'm glad the story was well-received. :twilightsmile:

Till next time, Alpha. :pinkiesmile:

Beautifully written. The repetition of themes gives it a chantlike, dreamy quality that I love. The craftsmanship is impeccable. Well chosen to avoid names. :twilightsmile:

*dies 'cause of his diabetes*

Big Mac is the best big brother, with Thunderlane coming in second. Shining gets a pass because Twilight doesn't need him anymore so big brother time is up.

1707462 In the original version there were names, and more dialogue. I'm glad I changed it, it certainly looks better this way. :pinkiesmile:

Ow. My heart. :heart: Alpha, you really need to stop making these heart-exploding stories.

There goes the old ticker, overrun with sweet diabetes from this story.

Nice and sweet, great job on this story.:pinkiesmile:

This is gonna get featured. I see it coming.

This story is as adorable as a squirrel hugging a bunny.

Beautiful, short and to the point.

This should get featured. It's just too adorable and sweet. Really wish the show would delve more into AppleBloom's relationship with Big Mac.

Beautiful. Just beautiful.
Words alone cannot do this story justice.

I like it. Short, simple, evocative, and sweet.

"That is her brother, the one who doesn’t talk much. But she doesn’t care." I know that you're building a theme here, but this bit still sounds a little awkward.

Totally unrelated to that: DAAAAAAAWWWWWWWW xD

1713608 I admit it, that line doesn't sound as good as the others. :ajsleepy:

I needed a transition from the narration in past tense to the narration in present tense, and I couldn't think of anything else. :twilightblush:

1713667 The real problem is that it sounds like she doesn't care that he is her brother.

How about:
That is her brother; he doesn't talk much, but she doesn't care.
or:
Yes that is her brother. He doesn't talk much, but she doesn't care.

Can't really think of something, without changing the synthax away from the theme though.

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That is her brother; he doesn't talk much, but she doesn't care.

I think I'll take this one. It sounds better to me.

Thank you so much for your help! :twilightsmile:

The present tense is a tiny bit confusing, but I think I understand what you are going for. Otherwise, I love this. Family should be cherished.

I liked this, its adorable in a sense of familial love.
Sidenote: WHO VOTED THIS DOWN?! :flutterrage:

:heart: loved it no more to be said.

Nothing too spectacular, but I hope you like it.

You under estimate yourself. This feels very much like a child's picture book and I found myself imagining the pictures that would accompany each page. This is truly a beautiful gentle piece.

This deserves more attention then it has so far received.

The child's point of view was very well done and it was very sweet.

Wish there were more like it, excellent work. :twilightsmile:

Delightfully sweet, and easily deserving of a favorite. :twilightsmile:

Man, this was really neat! I'm a little late in reading this one, but at least I finally got around to it. Was worth every second! It'd sure be neat to see this kind of family involvement in the show in addition to the family reunion.

Short, and very, very sweet. :twilightsmile:

(I admit I was giggling a bit at first because it sounded like you were going to stick to him never saying anything but "eeyup" and "nope" despite us seeing him speak full sentences on the show, but you handily addressed that in due time. :rainbowlaugh:)

This story is fuel for sweet dreams. :twilightsmile:

I loved this. short, sweet, and from a child's perspective.
it was adorable.:pinkiehappy:

Absolutely wonderful! So sweet I almost shed a tear. You earned my fav! :pinkiehappy:

Short, sweet, and absolutely adorable. I enjoy reading from the young child's perspective. The innocence is refreshing.

I also did a reading of this. I hope you don't mind.

3340275 Of course I don't mind! :twilightsmile: Thank you, it's a great reading.

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