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Why do I write? Because I can't draw! I write mainly as an outlet, and don't take it too seriously. If you like what I write, awesome! If not, that's cool too.

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The name's Applejack. Canterlot, the capital of our kingdom was beset by a plague of changelings durin' a weddin'. Had it not been for Cadence and Shining sendin' them packin', we might all be changelings by now. Not long after, Princess Celestia ordered a stallion from every house to enlist for the counterattack against them. He served his kingdom, as did countless other colts, and he came back without a scratch on him. Or, so Ah thought...

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I rather liked this one, Bronius. It was a bit different, and not so bad at all! Good to see ya branch out a bit. Approval.

Mac attack.
Sorry.
Bad, randomguy, bad!
Oh, and in the description...

Canterlot, the capital of our kingdom were beset

And yes: our editing skillz iT the most besterful on,es there is.

This story has intrigued me. I shall surely read it soon.

Being a veteran myself, these stories always hit me hard. I will read it tonight after I get home, as I will probably not want talk to anyone after I am done reading.

This... this was amazing! I liked this very much, good job :)

PS. This came out perfectly. It's 2am here and I can't sleep. But thanks to this story, I might finally get some sleep. Thanks ^-^

This is a very, very powerful insight into PTSD, and very impressive for a story under three thousand words. Even a glimpse shows how completely different Macintosh is after facing combat, and these are only two out of potentially dozens, if not hundreds, of episodes.

Hard stuff to read, but damn if it isn't a good story.

God damn it

2427202 Is that good or bad?

Goddammit, why does this have to be so damn short? It's positively amazing, and I'd love to see a longer fic based around this idea of a shellshocked Mac.

2427237 I thought about making it longer, but I didn't really have any more I wanted to cover. I didn't want to drag it out.

Here's an image source for ya.

For future reference, dragging the image into the google search box is a really easy way to find sources.

2427244 Yeah, but ya know? There's just so much stuff you could do with this. There is so much depth you could get out of this idea! Though as it is it's really good, it would be even better more fully-fledged. :3

2427003 thanks! I had a touch of experience with the subject, though not as intense as this. Just some long talks.

PTSD Ponies. Not sure how I fell about that, but it was well written. Have a like.

2427228
The story is good, it just brings up bad memories. Keep it up.

2426836 Since no one else has said it, thank you for your service.

As someone on tour right now, I sure as hell hope I don't end up like this.

Damn good writing, Maximus. Damn good.

this was quite tragic, you can't help but feel for macintosh.
Well written :eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup: 4/5 eeyups

PTSD Macintosh. Now there's a pony you wouldn't want to run into in an episode.

2429241 Thank you for volunteering to serve your fellow countrymen! I would hope the UK has services in place for soldiers once they return home.

Well written. An eye-opening look to the potential damage that war can cause to an individual's mind. I liked it. :eeyup:

very well written story, it makes me wanting more!

Oh Mac. :pinkiesad2:

Excellently written.

oh bronimaximus....this was......... I almost cryed! :ajsleepy:
wonderful!
mac sure is......the best

A little piece of me, to you...
The Creed

Personally, seeing as Equestria is by far a predominantly female country with many females in the higher powers, I would have made it an 'able bodied pony' from every family in Equestria and had AJ volunteer only to be told it had to be Mac as she and the other Elements were needed for defence.

Then again, that would probably make the story more about how AJ feels it's her fault that Big Mac has to go through this and make her comforting of him seem more out of obligation than familial love, which would cheapen it.

Eh, good story over all.

Wow. That was a blow to the gut.

This is well written, a brief look-in of PTSD. Adding this to my ever-expanding favorite/good fanfic list. You deserve it buddy.

Best song to listen to while reading this story.

The title, 'When the Field Becomes Fallow," made me think that something bad happened to Big Mac's testicles. Fallow doesn't mean 'infertile' now that I remember, though.

Damn, this was very tragic and realistic, you done a very great job on it, I'm seriously impressed. Poor Macintosh,he really does not deserve such a cruel fate, having to remember such darkness, even the Gods can't help him now it seems....poor guy:fluttercry:

Very good.

Don't worry I didn't take it as some soap box speech but it was definitely a shockingly real story about the effects PTSD can have on a soldier and their family. War is hell . Great story with powerful emotions.

I'd never let him go this alone
*go through this*

Other than that, excellent. It speaks for itself. I've never been around my stepdad when he had an episode (Desert Storm vet), but my mom's told me what they're like. His major trigger was the smell of gunpowder, so fireworks were a no-go for him. Your story was pretty spot on.

This does a lot in a short time, and is emotionally affecting without being manipulative. Excellent work.

2489083 Thanks! I was really going for feeling without dragging anything out.

2489093
Well, you succeeded. Brilliantly.

What can be said that hasn't already? Loved this. Got its point across without many words. I actually have a mother who has suffered from PTSD although for reasons more complicated than war. Thank you for taking on this subject in such a strong manner.

Thought-provoking.

This does not need to be, nor should it be, a single word longer.

As much as military conscription goes against my headcanon of how Equestria functions, this story makes up for it in spades, and has easily earned my like.

The only flaw I see is that it starts off in what looks like present tense (Applejack awake in her bed is "now") but then goes into past tense and stays there until the end (when suddenly working out in the orchard is "now").

So moving, and so concise! There's barely a word wasted in this story. Applejack's unwavering loyalty toward her brother is inspiring, but at the same time just heightens the tragedy of the situation. I like the ambiguity of the ending; the story is much more powerful for your refusal to answer the question of when (or if) Mac will recover.

2493154 thanks! Great hyphen use!

I was on the verge of tears, but the story didn't quite cut it!

Still, the fact that it was so moving to bring me on the verge of tears certainly says something. This is a fantastic look at the apple family. :ajsmug:

Well written story and it didn´t leaft me with this bad feelin that says "Something bad has happened and they´ll never come over it!"
No it´s like "I´m sure they´ll get it...together."

A excellent demonstration of how to use first person narrative. I'm not quite so sure I agree with the virtues of concise presentation with regard to the topic, but I can't argue about the quality of that presentation, There was only a single line that I found unclear, and little things like that tend to get absorbed into the narrating character's voice anyway. ("I was relieved to not have to explain what had happened to her" By splitting up the subject and verb you have confused what it happening to who, implying that something happened directly to AB rather than explaining to AB a thing that happened)

I'm blatantly biased when it comes to the message itself, so I'm hardly surprised it didn't speak to me all that much. Not that it isn't a horrible—and very real—thing, but this sort of thing is everywhere in the world. Still, the flip side of being somewhat inured by years of study in unprocessed trauma also stokes a huge amount of respect in me for the message you clearly have conveyed. Indeed, I find that fact that Vim said 'This author does a great job conveying how important family is to Applejack' to be extremely telling in regard to that. I don't think that's a fair assessment of the setting at all; I think it only shows that family ties like this are not as socially normal as I would wish them to be. I think that says more about our world then theirs. After all, it doesn't take a family bond to support someone with a mental health disorder. It only takes compassion.

-Scott

2494465 I tweaked that Apple Bloom line, but thanks for the praise! I've always been better at 1st person narratives than 3rd for some reason.

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