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When Big Macintosh saves Applejack from a broken promise on the last day of harvest, she starts to worry she's been taking him for granted. Intent on fixing it, she takes him and Apple Bloom on a camping trip into Whitetail Wood, determined that they all have a good time together, as a family.

A simple story about a brother, his two sisters, and how much they mean to each other.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 54 )

"Ah said Ah'm fine. Ah could buck another hundred trees if needs be!" Pretty sure that should be need and not needs. Also, realized and realization and such are spelled, well as I just spelled them. lol That's a common mistake that I even make a lot.

Seriously though, other than that, this was a delightful chapter. I love seeing interactions between family members, especially the Apple siblings because there's a lot of untapped resources that someone can write about. MUSTACHES! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Apple Bloom walked up to him. She was still a little shaken up. "You are stayin' in the tent with us, aren't you?"

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That was what I pictured as soon as I read that line. lol I imagine most will. Another super sweet chapter. Got me right in the feels! :applecry:

That was too cute! Super sweet story; probably one of the best Apple Sibling stories I've read. MUSTACHES! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

If it's the South Korean thriller A Tale of Two Sisters, it'll end pretty damn tragic! :derpytongue2: But I'm guessing it's a story about Applejack and Apple Bloom, so it should be alright. :ajsmug:

Just finished the whole thing, and really enjoyed it. I've always liked Big Mac stories, and this is definitely one of the finest ones I've read in quite a while.

Comment posted by peachcheeks12 deleted Mar 30th, 2013

My reaction upon finding this fanfic and reading the description:
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There is literally nothing I love more than sweet, simple "slice of life" stories. And I fucking hit the jackpot when I learned this was dealing with not only my favorite pony (AJ), but her siblings and the relationships they share that I adore so much!

Oh man, that scene with Apple Bloom being stuck in the brambles and AJ coming to save her...that left scars on my heart! I could just feel the pain coming from both ponies! :applecry: But the part with AJ and Big Mac swimming was pretty sweet and took away some of the hurt! :rainbowkiss: I swear, these adorable sibling interactions you have written here will be the end of me!

This chapter. THIS. CHAPTER.
So much going on here! So many feels I experienced. Big Mac silently comforting Bloom during AJ's scary story. The "Mare Witch", haha! Great pun, that one! The reveal of AJ actually writing a novel! I loved that you made that a thing! This spoke volumes about the distinct character of Applejack you're writing, which I am head-over-heels in love with! You expand on her character in your unique ways while keeping her very close to her established traits in the actual show! The whole interaction between Bloom and AJ after she snapped at the filly -- that was just heartbreaking. But again, AJ knows her fault and patches it up like the great pony/sister she is! And then the three of them sleeping together -- freaking ADORABLE! And then the jump into Mac's more existential thoughts. Oh god, just the scenarios of AJ and Mac's foalhood are adorable, and again, add a really deep look into their characters, both together as siblings and apart as individuals. Both the stories of the "splinter" and "Old Hallow's Cave" left me rolling!

I know I've said it before, but these interactions between these siblings are just the sweetest bits of fanfiction I've ever read. Not only do you write extremely well, but the emotions and character-building analysis you instill in your prose is truly unique and something I genuinely appreciate. Thank you for this fanfic. If I could favorite it a second time, I surely would!

This story is too sweet and cute to end! :pinkiegasp: NO FAIR!
But at least it was a satisfying ending, and one that I will remember, considering how much I adored this fanfic as a whole! Well done, sir! You've really created a "grade A+" story here! :pinkiehappy:

This story. THIS STORY!
THE FEELZ!
This story is underrated.

This story is one of the best things I've seen on this site for quite some time.
Bravo!

Just read the whole damn thing in one go.
Ah, feels so refreshing to read a all-around well writen,f rom both a technical and a creative point of view, and cute slice of lifey story, and about the apple siblings no less.
10/10 :ajsmug::eeyup:
I can safely say this is one of my all times favorite and I thank you for it.

Can't help but think of how clear waters are dead waters; not fit for drinking.

Aw... If only I could give it fifty more upvotes!

JBL

Stop pulling on my heartstrings dammit!

JBL

This was *cue Mr. Burns voice* eeeeexcellent!

That was really heartfelt. Bravo!

2343089 ... You're not from the U.K., are you? A lot of words with Z's are spelled with S's, realised being one of them. (There's a few that are even more confusing in the U.K, as they use BOTH spellings, though one to mean a noun and another to mean a verb! (Or something like that.))

The more you know!

AJ

To 8686:

Whoever you are, you are what some people call a hidden gem, a diamond in the rough, a light amidst darkness. I read very little on fimfiction, mostly because almost everything is either incredibly out of character and/or incredibly off tune with the simplicity and innocence the show radiates. Your work is not among those. It's true to the Magic of Friendship :pinkiesmile:

3507757 Well excuse me! I was mainly going by how my word document underlines realize when it's spelled with an s. What do you care anyway? You're not even the writer. And no I'm not from the UK, I'm from West Virginia. Not that I'm always the best speller either, I was just trying to be helpful to the writer (not aware of s being a proper spelling with realize). If you write realize with an s on here it underlines it as a misspell too, so I wasn't technically wrong.

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Yay! Big Mac to the rescue!

Just beautiful.:twilightsmile: Coming from a family of three younger siblings, there was a lot that resonated with me in this fic. Five out five, thumbs up, and faved.

Almost choked on the Mac n Jack beer I'm drinking. Knew there was a good reason it's my favorite.

Jesus christ I didn't even read this story and already it's a feels trip. As a brother that has two sisters,(and a little bro) good shit, bro.

Now that was good.

A friend of mine linked me this today, and for the first time in over a year, I sat down and read a pony fanfic(had to remember my friggin password to this site), and I am beyond glad he did.

Coming in already with a love for these three characters, I was pleasantly surprised with how well you handled the characterization. It was incredibly fun to read, and in the end it had warmed my cold, nearly dead heart just a tad. And aside from the very few, countable on one hand really, errors I noticed (I can point them out of you wish to correct them), the story is exceptionally well written from beginning to end.

Thank you for writing this, honestly. I really needed a kick back into reading, and this certainly helped! I'll be sure to recommend it to others.

Just finished reading this. It was very sweet. It's funny too, because I just recently got caught up on "Keeping it Simple" which is telling kind of the same story about Big Mac wanting to feel needed, and yet you've done it complete in 16k words, while that one is as 200k and still going. :twilightsmile: Anyway, I really liked this. Nicely done.

This was a delightful read.

Thank you for writing this. :heart:

That was great!

I gotta say, it really hit me in the feels. I was kind of surprised it did it so hard! Those simple interactions between siblings acutally carried a lot more emotional weight than some of the over-the-top deaths in Tragedy tagged fics:twilightsheepish:
That scene with Apple Bloom in the brambles! Aww!

You wrote a cute, believable, heartwarming story, and I really hope it gets more views and likes:eeyup:

I accidentally thumbed this up on the first chapter, thinking that was it. Imagine mah surprise when there were four more sitting in my favorites!

And now it's even more worthy of the thumb. :moustache:

Sibling bonding? I like where this is going.

Also, Apple Bloom bucking the Grandfather tree? The greatest.

Oh man, I'm loving this.

I am noticing an odd thing, though. You're writing it is as "Big Macintosh" here. In the snowball fight, I recall you spelling it "Big McIntosh."

This story is pulling on all my big brother strings. Dagnabbit. :pinkiesad2:

I'm struggling to find the words that properly describe how much I loved this story.

This was excellent.

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I only relatively recently became aware that, 'McIntosh' is the preferred, more canon spelling. I actually prefer to write 'Macintosh'. because to my ears, reading 'McIntosh' puts the emphasis on the second syllable (Mc-IN-tosh) whereas we all know it falls on the first.

I worry about details like this more than I should.

I have no idea how this happened, but I completely missed that this existed back when I read the story. I really don't know how I missed this. I'm horribly, deeply confused.

Anywho, that's a real nice book AJ has there. Quite the way to wrap up the story.


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On top of missing the Epilogue, Fimfiction never notified me of your reply here. One day, Fimfiction. One day.


I definitely agree with why you prefer Macintosh.

Not gonna lie, I was *rolling* at the description of Grandfather Tree - I live out in the country, and I've known more than a few trees that'd fit the description of an old, gnarly bit of twisted wood. :rainbowwild:

You write the Apple family so well.

Amazing work. You have a strong grasp of the characters that pulls the reader in with the simple interactions, without any need for over the top dramatics or life-endangering perils or hammy villains. Simple and sweet and touching and real and honest, just like the family the fic portrays. Thank you very much for sharing this!

A very entertaining story.

Thank you for posting.

This is one of the most adorable stories I've ever read. It didn't have much of a plot, but it didn't need one. It's the characters and their relationships that shine here. I really felt for Big Mac, thinking his sisters didn't need him anymore. I'm glad AJ made him feel appreciated.

I forgot to mention this in my review for BBBFFBR, but I love the way you write the country accent - there's just enough of a hint so you know it's there, but not so much that it's distracting (like in 90% of FIMfics).

I know I just commented two other of your fics but this story is just amazing and I just wanted to point that out. With love.

Perfection, as usual. I need to stop reading so much of your work at once, because I can't help but comment on how well it captures the tone of the show, the character interactions, and the love that's evident in every chapter.

A beautiful story, thank you for writing it

Nice bit of conflict at the start between members of a family that take honor a bit too seriously.

"I said I'm fine! I don't need to be carried around like a foal just cuz I got a boo-boo, sis."

I love the juxtaposition here.

That scene with Bloom was exciting. Love the splashing contest.

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