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Pleasure justifies survival.


Applebloom follows Big Macintosh into the orchards in the evening to find out what he does when he is alone.

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to bad i dont have time to read it right know; but ill get to it affter school


I always did like making poetry and have a few pieces. Nothing pony related sadly.

"Awwh" sums it up, this was actually really cute. I normally avoid cute stories. But, I enjoyed this.

You know? I'll read simply amazing things like this and then I'll start thinking to myself, "Why the hell can't I write like this?" :twilightangry2:

One: I loved the story. I really did. :pinkiehappy:
But two: I also hated it because I'm now thinking that maybe the stuff I write isn't good enough. :fluttercry:
Three: I'm going to favorite this just because of how great it was. :yay:
Four: I really do hate my self-denial and lack of self-confidence sometimes. :fluttershysad:

If you want to read my stuff you're absolutely free to. :eeyup:

Wow. Just . . . wow. That was awesome. I'm speechless. :derpyderp1:

Cherilee? NO! YOUR GOING TO LOVE FLUTTERSHY! :flutterrage:

:twilightblush: I kid! Lovely story.

I always thought Big Mac the introverted intellectual type.

That touched me,
and I really liked the ending to the poem.
What a lovely story :twilightsmile:

I wish i had a little sister too look out for


I'm impressed, to say the least. You didn't edit or correct it before submission? That shows talent.

I have to thank you; in a sea of words and writing styles, techniques and advice, you got across a story in a simplistic form that packed the most punch. Excess words did not need to be added, because you hit the nails on their heads. And if there's one new thing that caught me, it was the segmenting you did with perspective shift - brief little snippets that drew the mental camera back and forth, just long enough to soak up every second of a reader's initial attention.

Booyah. :eeyup:

306192 I have a little sister. Trust me, you're not missing out on much.
Oh, alright fine. I admit it, I love my sister.

I couldn't fight it back. :twilightsmile: D'AAAAAAAWWWW

That was really sweet man. Heartwarming, cute, just beautiful. HASBRO MAKE THIS CANON!

This has earned a spot in my tracking and favorites.

I like poems for they are nice
I read your almost thrice
The verses so heart warming
unleashing D'aaawww without warning

The world needs Big Mac

A greater poet the world has never seen
But if only we could grasp what the words truly mean
For when he looks at the moon
Till dusk reaches noon

The world needs Big Mac

He spends his day at the farm
Never causing any harm
He works hard with Applejack
Lifting loads on his back

I say I say the world needs Big Mac

306377 Better That having an older sister and brother
Meh Wait a few years could have a daughter.... same prospect

is it wrong when I saw the word count I immediately thought of the firearm?

Anyways great story! Glad I decided to click on it.


There isn´t an icon to show being touched so I´ll jsut put Pinkie:pinkiesmile:

that was... :fluttercry:beautiful:fluttershyouch::fluttershbad::pinkiesad2:

I now have a big smile on my face. Thank you! :twilightsmile:

This was a very sweet story. I always love prose and poetry mixtures. Good work!

I loved it :) it had amazing poetry and it had a touching ending.

This is awesome- I'm glad I watched you when you put up that Pinkie one a while back. The descriptions were awesome, and even though you say it's unedited I only see one correction that's glaring(to me anyways)-

>He probably wont turn around,

I'm hoping this story makes it into that box on the right with all the attention it's receiving!

Everyone certainly has their quirks. This was a good piece.

Heh, the moon never says much. That was a good line. :twilightsmile:

This was really sweet.

Holy #$%@ing Celestia, I've never got this much attention so quickly before! It was really that good? :twilightsmile: I'm so happy!

306398 You are a champion, my friend! :ajsmug: You've made the author feel nice, and that means another nice fan fiction later. :twilightsheepish:

Poetry isn't all rhyme,
Quite a misconception it is to think,
that all poetry is matching one word to another.

However after reading this I find,
that some people like to rhyme,
So I guess from time to time
Ryhme isn't too bad of a crime.

306594 :ajsmug: Thank you so much... *edit edit edit* :rainbowkiss:

306751 I rhyme all the.....day.
I'm a poet and I didn't even realize it.
I can rhyme if you've got the...hour?
I'm a poet and I can... brag about it?

306801 Woah, that's a REALLY nice Colgate avatar you got there... Where'd you find that? :twilightsmile:

306398 Very nice :ajsmug: do you write poetry often?
>>CelestialBrony same question for you too! :D

306825 Not really just something I do when bored

306749 Thank you kind sir

306835 defiantly one of the better hobbies out there i think.

306842 Yeah it's creative and works your brain

I liked Celestial Brony before he was cool, http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2011/156/a/1/hipster_rainbow_dash_by_blackfeathr-d3i5yd7.png and why the heck does the word brony have a squiggly, "this word isnt real" red thingy underneath it on an MLP website?

That was seriously a beautiful piece of writing. I'd never seen Big Macintosh in that way before. That was short, simple, and amazing. Thank you for writing this. I enjoyed it very much. :eeyup:

306807 I got permission to use it from this awesome drawer(it was feature on EQD and I checked the source link). If you wanna see the original post, the link's on my page.
I definitely did not draw it, I have little to no talent drawing.
Also, I took a print screen of this story in the suggestions box at the top, but I can't for the life of me figure out how to put it in a comment. Look, though- you made it into that glorious box! Congrats, and I hope to get there someday.

306825 While I don't write poetry very often, I have written a lot since the end of the summer of 2011. Consistent writing isn't my thing, really. I get bursts of incontainable inspiration once in a while, and it just flows naturally... Kind of like this story. It took me half an hour to get to the point where Granny Smith fell asleep, and then it took me 20 minutes the next day to do everything from that point onward.

I also wrote a 1040 word poem about the Mane 6 in about 20 minutes at my grandmother's house one day when I was bored. That can be found here. http://celestialbrony.deviantart.com/art/Kindness-289471889

If you've got any requests for poems, I'd love to hear them. :twilightsmile:

This is deffinitly a goodin'.

KONY 2012

The title can be easily misconstrued as something dirty.

I don't usually read sappy fics. But when i do, it's When nopony's looking...

I really like this fic. It's well written and very "awwwhhhh" inspiring

Your awesome story makes me want my own applebloom

This almost made me cry so much it's cute. Man, I haven't found not even one word spelled wrong in this thing. You are awesome. Sincerely.

This might just be one of the cutest things I ever read. Your poetry is incredible. Blessings. :heart:

Holy %$^@ing ^%@#, you guys... I'm about ready to cry. I worked so hard on my other fan fictions, and their ideas just kind of died to me. Last night, I sat down at 11:00 am with 300 words pre-written, and I was finished by 11:23.

Just... Holy shit, I don't know how to say how I feel right now. :applecry: I was going to give up on writing yesterday and switch to trying animation because things weren't going the way I wanted...

Just... Thank you all so, so much. :yay:

My hopes are high, and my dreams have begun
beneath Celestia's warm, lifegiving sun.
I'll do my best before she takes me
to give my work to those who make me;
I'll give it all to you, my fans. Each and every one. :heart:

(Just wrote that... Took 2 minutes. Woo hoo!:yay:)

307182 Your comment melted me... :eeyup:

And your avatar... Just... I LOVE IT! :3

Holy crap featured on day of release? I present you the award of four moustaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:


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