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Big Macintosh has always watched over his family, but sometimes watching over them means he learns things nobody else is supposed to know. What is he supposed to do with a secret that isn't his own, which clearly wasn't meant to be public knowledge?

Applejack/Rainbow Dash.

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Comments ( 57 )

This is pretty good.

I love this. It's so sweet. Big Mac is best big brother, and you captured AJ and Mac both perfectly in so few words.

Wonderful job.

I really liked this! (Valentine's Day? I think you mean Hearts and Hooves! haha)

While I'm more of "Macintosh is a secret genius" kind of guy... you do keep a pretty consistent picture of him and you paint it well. (Though you do drive the point home about his slowness one too many times). Overall, I enjoyed this story quite a bit. Not a bad start by any means.

D'awwww, that description of Applejack and Rainbow sleeping is just too cute :heart:

Well written, loving, sweet, and properly describes Big Mac's character :ajsmug:
Hope to see more stories like this from you soon! :heart:

I loved this. A nice big slice of 'cute' and 'd'aww's. You've earned yourself a watcher!

This story was definitely a change from the normal depressing and sad stories I read.

I must say this was done exceptionally good. I would give it a 4 out of 5. A 4 because I wish it had been a bit longer or had some kind of better closure, but...I guess that would have ruined it huh?

Do note, I am very hard on stories, getting a 4 out of 5 from me...might as well be a 5 out of 5, good work!

I am looking forward to reading more of your work. The only error I did see (Aside from my, perhaps to picky opinion about the end) was you put valentines day, should have been hearts and hooves day, but your story, so, keep up the good work!

Liked, Favorited, Watching.

Aw, that was adorable! I like how you went over the Appledash romance thing from Mac's view - it was cute and refreshing. Lovely job :pinkiehappy:

Very well done, consistent all the way through. Loved the narrative device of dawn / midday / dusk.

Couple of corrections:

as he explain working the farm to her = explained

He couldn’t smell anything bad, but that was indicator. = no indicator or not an indicator

It's very rare that I see shipping told from the point of view of a character who's not being shipped. It was a nice change of pace, and really cute.

That was very excellent. I really did enjoy how you used dawn, midday, and dusk to describe the amount of time that has passed; I don't see that very often. Also, I've never seen a shipping fic told from the perspective of a character who isn't being shipped. Said character being the strong and silent Big Mac adds a lot of character development to him, even if it is fanon. Well done!

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Thank you. :twilightsmile: That's really high praise for my first fic. I'll be squeeing happily in corner if anyone wants me. :pinkiehappy:

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Did I really make such a basic mistake? Feck. :facehoof: Thanks for pointing it out.

Since writing this I've actually developed a fondness for the idea of Big Macintosh being a prime candidate for something academic (I'm leaning towards science - how about you?) after he finished school, but then he gave up his opportunities to stay home and help run the farm when Granny Smith's age started catching up with her and his sisters were still too young to help out properly.

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Thank you. :twilightsmile: Wow, there's no greater praise than readers wanting to see more of a writer's work. Thank you very much!

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Please write moar, please?:fluttershysad:

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Really? Golly gosh, and I've barely been around this site for a fortnight! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you. :twilightsmile: That's really high praise for my first fic. I'll be squeeing happily in corner if anyone wants me. :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you. I just really, really wanted to write something from his POV, but at the same time I'd just finished watching Applejack and Rainbow Dash beat the tar out of each other during the Running fo the Leaves, so I wanted to write them too.

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Ah feck. I feel embarrassed at making such basic mistakes. Not such a great first impression, eh? :facehoof: Still, thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.

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Thank you. :twilightsmile: Since we rarely get to see much of the secondary characters in the show, fanon gets to have fun filling in the blanks, right? And what fun we all shall have! :scootangel:

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Maybe. I do have an idea for a coda/epilogue type thing for this, but right now I'm all eaten up by an idea for a Chrysalis/Shining Armour/Cadence fic and I'm currently writing a whole-cast multi-chapter that is getting more epic each time I sit down to write some. :twistnerd:

Hey, that was pretty cute :twilightsmile:

The only thing that really stuck out to me was 'Valentine's Day'.

Enjoyable read though. Big Mac, such a nice older brother :ajsmug:

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Author Interviewer

Heard this on Reading Rainboom and liked it. I particularly like that the romance is second to the actual plot. Treating Big Mac as slow is kind of an unusual choice, and I almost have to say it wasn't necessary, but neither did it impact this story at all, so no harm, no foul.

somethings not right here, what was it........ o yes, i compleatly forgot to like :) my bad aaaaaaaaaaannnnd problem solved. NOW i can DAAAWWWWWWWWW

That is a GOOOOD question... guess I gotta read to find out! XD

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You're gonna end it THERE?! That's just cruel! ; ; (ergo, ya dun good.)

1561512 don't forget about this one after you finnish that one.

Loved it! AppleDash is one of my favorite parings and I love how you captured it here. :rainbowkiss:

D'aw, big mac, you big softie. :rainbowkiss:
Lovely display of showing how Dash got accepted in the family. Mobbed by foals, ehehe :rainbowlaugh:

XD Now that's nice... We don't get to see the ACTUAL shipping/journey, but this... This is a nice change of pace from how most shipping fics go, and for that, this is an AMAZING story. Be proud of yourself. :moustache:

If I could I would favourite and like again. A nice touching story.

that was really quite nice. i always love big mac being a big sweet guy.

D'aaaw. That was lovely.

That ending is amazing, it's so well worded I can really feel the love and acceptance. I can't help but just keep reading it over and over.

Really well done

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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it enough to want to read it more than once. ^_^

I'm glad you wrote this second part it ready helped the first part shine. Don't get me wrong I liked the ending where it was before but this just put the cherry on top. :ajsmug:

This was a sweet little couple of vignettes.

loved it I feel you got his mind set just right any tips for some one who has struggled to breath life into a story? I have made things b4 but tend right my self into a corner and can never figure out how to get out with out taken a huge chunk of story out I fined it hard at times to get thoughts out onto paper

...Too late for me to do a proper review of this one. It'll have to wait for when I have some free time. :pinkiesad2:

Daaw.

I like the southern euphemisms you peppered here and there in the story, though there are a few grammar issues that still need to be resolved, but not many.

:facehoof: Now if only this could work in the bible belt.

not quite what i expected, but cute.

kind makes that reading you did of Treating Her Right not make sense, though

PS i never realized there was a second chapter. really looking forward to it:scootangel:

turns out i DID read this bit, back on fanfiction.

still, same enjoyment as before in reading this

i like this face so i'm using it:derpytongue2:

I found this surprisingly sweet. Your descriptions of Big Mac's thoughts were pretty powerful in building his character on how he must have felt about his family barn. It added a lot of depth to him. His actions regarding :ajsmug: and :rainbowdetermined2: were also very kind and considerate to the point it really got me invested in the character even more. :eeyup: is such a likable guy here. I think you did a good job.

Really sweet story.
Appledash is a theme that's been growing on me.
:rainbowdetermined2::heart::ajsmug:

Wow, I don't even like Apple/Dash and I adored this. Great fic, both chapters. Really adorable and Big Mac's whole inner thinking was great!

PresentPerfect
Author Interviewer

Very nicely written, Scribbler. :) You've done service to a genre I tend not to enjoy.

100% bishop approved

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