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Applejack is an awesome, hard-working and totally cute friend, and that's cool. But she's also totally oblivious to Rainbow Dash's advances. With just one more day before Hearth's Warming, the pegasus is determined to get through to her crush... whatever it takes!

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Oh my gosh, I love this so much! It's so sweet and I'm totally tearing up at how cute it is. It had just the right amount of humor, and that ending! It's perfect, thank you so much for writing this for me. :ajsmug:

THIS STORY...
IS SOOO CUTE! 

IT MAKES ME WANT TO OVERUSE EXCLAMATION MARKS EVEN THOUGH I NEEEEEVER DO THAT. UGH. WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO MEEEE?

I WOULD TOTALLY LOVE LOVE LOVEEE SOME SORT OF CONCLUSION / EPILOGUE THINGY MAJIGGER ;___; WELL ANYWAY, I HAD LIKE, TWO TOO MANY DRINKS LAST NIGHT SO EXCUSE MY EXCITEMENT & OVERUSAGE OF CAPITALIZATION AND THE WHATNOT. 

WELL ANYWAY, ONTO THE STORY... 

WHEN THE SNOW FALLS ON RD, YOU DESCRIBED THE SNOW AS COLD, HEAVY AND SUPER-EMBARRASSING. UM, AS FAR AS I KNOW, THE SNOW ITSELF ISN'T EMBARRASSING, BUT THE MOMENT WHEN IT ACTUALLY FELL ON RD... WELL, YEAH. YOU GET THE POINT. 

ALSO,

Gulping down the urge to hide from the look she was giving me, I straightened up and tried to wing it. “Y-You heard me! Let's go build a snowpony.”

"WING IT" 
I C WAT U DID THER. 
PROPS FOR PEGASUS PUN. 

LOVE YOUR WRITING STYLE AND STORY IDEAS. 

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! 

Wow, this was hilarious!! Had me grinning the whole time. :twilightsheepish:

I do wish there was a bit more, I wanted to see the look on Dash's face the next day.

1849075
Holy.... You got a fan now UnlicenseBrony. And I don't think it was just two... Maybe like a thousand...
But overall this ain't a bad story, I only wish it wasn't.. You know, finished. If only there was Dashies reaction to the gift.

AAWWWWWWEEEEEEEEEEWWWEEEEWEWEWEWWEWEEEEWWWWW x3:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

So much HNNNNGGGG!!!!:heart::heart::heart::heart: even I'm not the romance loving guy.

Damnit now I really wanna see RD's reaction... :raritydespair:

oh well, i guess ill just have to dream up my own version when I hit the sack in a few, Awesome story anyway!

You HAVE to make another chapter of this.
There's no questioning it, make another chapter :flutterrage:

Dash deserves the closure since she still thinks that everything sailed right past AJ:raritydespair:

That. Was awesome <3

I want to See RD's reaction now, though :rainbowkiss:

Adorable. Goddamn adorable.

All my Christmas love, my friend. All of it.

Not even sure why you have the dislikes. People are idiots obviously.

Very funny fic, enjoyable to the last word. hell, I didn't even expect the ending so kudos on that too.

Hey everyone! Thank you for all your comments - it's always awesome to come back after a few days away to see all your feedback and kind words.

RE: Conclusion/Epilogue/Continuation: Apparently a lot of you are eager to see an epilogue... and I think I'd like to write one. But I am very busy with everything right now. Mid to late January should (in theory) be a bit quieter, so I'll make it my goal to get an epilogue written by the end of that month!

1846965 You're very welcome - I'm really happy that you liked it! And thank you for putting forward the idea!

1848968 Thanks!

1849075 Ah, it's only a slight overusage of capitalization! Thank you for the compliments and the feedback. I'll definitely take another look at the 'embarrassing snow' bit - it was supposed to be a metaphor but I could've written it better. Also I'm quite fond of puns, especially pegasus-related ones :pinkiehappy:

1849217 Thank you! It's awesome to hear that I actually wrote something funny for once :twilightsheepish:

1849226 Thank ya kindly :ajsmug: And your wish will be granted, some time next month!

1849344 Not quite sure what to say to that... Except, of course :yay: "Yay!"

1852307 Sweet! A "HNNNNGGGG!!!!" and 4 hearts from someone who doesn't love romance? High praise indeed! :twilightsheepish: Thanks!

1852556 Thank you! I wish I could dream things up at will :pinkiesad2:

1852955 :fluttershyouch: "Okay..." Well, yeah, she does deserve it I suppose. I look forward to writing it!

1852957 Yay! Thank you! Although you can't see it 'now', I'll get an epilogue done quite soon (see above) :twilightsmile:

1853779 Christmas love, right back at you! Thank you very much!

1856448 Awesome! Good to hear you found it funny, I'm new to writing comedy. As for the dislikes, I don't know - I don't think anyone's ever left me a thumbs down and told me what it was that they didn't like :fluttercry:

1858752
You're punny. :twilightsheepish:

Anyway, gosh, I love that you're planning on doing an epilogue. Take your time~ I'm pretty sure it'll be worth the wait!

Also, I looked back at my comment that I left you the other day...

Gosh, I can't believe I act like that when I drink alcoholic apple cider.

This is how appledash is done.:ajsmug::heart::rainbowkiss:

Its cute and funny and that ending...I don't even have words to describe it.

That is the most buckin' adorable thing I have read in a long time. Oh Applejack, playin' hard to get :ajsmug:
So cute! Love it :rainbowkiss:

Absolutely adorable. Trying-too-hard Dash is always fun and you did an great job with her here. :heart:

And.... dammit. I can't believe I thought this was cute. asdfghjkl, I've gotten too soft.

1859169 Done! Enjoy :twilightsmile:

1859448 :yay: Yay! Thanks a lot! This is my first foray into AppleDash so I'm glad to hear that I pulled it off. There's definitely more on the horizon! In new stories of course.

1861632 Thank you very much!

1865485 Thanks! Rainbow Dash is a lot of fun to write, however you decide to play it. In fact, I'd probably go as far as saying that she's now my favourite to write. Expect more Rainbow Dash soon!

1865852 Always good to hear that my stories are cute. Thanks!

I've gotten too soft.

*reads comment*
*throws a questioning look at your screen name*
...
Nah, that's just your imagination :pinkiehappy:

“Ho-ly letters to the princess!” yelled Twilight.

Oh my god :rainbowlaugh:

I can't wait for your next AppleDash fic :pinkiehappy:

an update I was waiting for some while!!

i just love this fic, is so much lovable!!:heart:

WHAT IS THIS CUTENESS?!
I'D FANGIRL EVEN MORE IF IT WASN'T 5:30 AM.

THANK YOU FOR THIS, SIR. THIS WAS A GOOD READ AND DEFINITELY GOING TO BE WORTH RE-READING.

I also like how you implied at... well, Twixie. RANDOM ASSUMPTION, but does this take place in the same universe as EoY, and is it AFTER the events of said Twixie fic? o:

Gonna re-read this when it's not 5 am in the morning, haha.

Anyway, keep up the good work, and can't wait to read more of your fics. :D

I'm a little sorry that I tossed you to the rabid AppleDash wolves with that request. . .

But not that sorry, if it produces fics as cute as this. This is awesome. Great job!

“Twilight's coming by later, if you were wondering – she has to take care of her visitor slash not-so-secret lover first. But it's cool, huh?”

And who is it? All bets are on! Derpy, Trixie, Luna! Chrysalis maybe? 10 apples minimum!

You didn't have to continue the story, but you did. I love you for that. :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

This was a surprise. A wonderful surprise.

"Ho-ly letters to Celestia!":twilightsheepish: greatest thing Twilight's ever said.

1974378 1974386 1976954 Thanks! I'm glad you all liked that - I always love hearing that I've made a successful funny :pinkiehappy:

1974446 Aw, thank you! Glad you liked it!

1974626 You and your crazy reading times! Not complaining though, it's always nice to see your comments! Thank you! I didn't intend to write this in the same universe as EoY though - the bit of Twixie was just a random nod towards Twixie shipping that I hoped would get a smile or two :fluttershysad:

1975072 Not only did you throw me to the wolves, but you got me hooked on writing Appledash and showed me that I'm not as bad at comedy as I thought. So... thanks :twilightblush: I hope to produce more cuteness in the future!

1975075 I don't have any apples to bet :fluttershysad: But it's got to be Derpy, right? :derpyderp1:

1975656 Aw, thanks :twilightblush:

1983508 Thank you!

1984779

I would say Trixie but then again...i am a massive Twixie fan :pinkiehappy:

"Twilight's secret lover line."

This story is great all around, but do we really NEED to have extra shipping shoehorned in? It just distracts the reader from what's going on by making them consider questions that don't affect the story.

Besides, everyone knows her lover is the Reading Rainbow guy. :trixieshiftright:

By Celestia's beard, they had a free show! Why wasn't I invited? :rainbowlaugh:

Thoroughly enjoyed! start to finish!
very very cute and well written!

I wanna note the "Holy, LETTERS TO CELESTIA!" part, but it seems like others have already did. :twilightblush:

I'll summarize all of my yes in this: BEAUTIFUL! :ajsmug::heart::rainbowkiss:

'Oh, come on!' screamed a voice inside my head.

Strangely, the voice inside my head sounded like Sweetie Belle. :unsuresweetie:

*Grins and applauds* Very cute fluffy fun. I really loved poor Dash trying again and again was beautifully done.

“RD! This is serious!” Applejack hissed. Her cheeks were practically glowing now. “I'm bearing my soul out here!”

:rainbowlaugh:
Ahem...you do not get to say that after faking out Dash yesterday *mock punches*

23 weeks later comment roundup is better than never? :twilightoops:

1985307 As am I! I extend to you a much belated brohoof /)

2007640 Thanks! Nah, the suggested Twixie was really just a superfluous nod to fellow Twixie shippers. The story was always meant to be kinda silly, so that just made its way in there. :trixieshiftright::twilightsmile:

2036250 I know, right? You'd think they'd at least send the author a couple of invitations to pass out :pinkiecrazy:

2040147 Thank you very much!

2057967 That line is my pride and joy :scootangel: Thanks a lot!

2760750 Really? The one in mine sounded more like Jim Carrey

...:pinkiehappy:

2806142 Thanks a lot—great to hear you liked it! Hehe, yeah, serves AJ right :rainbowlaugh: :ajbemused:

2810368
I know right? I mean come on, authors like us tend to be jelly in the scenarios and worlds we put in for the character, at least they could do is send us a ticket or some passes or better yet, some pictures or a movie would be nice :rainbowlaugh::ajsmug:

Huh. I kind of saw this as a one-shot when I first read it. But, hay, I'm not complaining!:pinkiehappy:

2996962 It was originally a one-shot - the epilogue was something I added later, just for those who... well, wanted an epilogue :twilightsheepish:

3010718 Well, I can't argue with that logic.:pinkiehappy:
Really, though, it's a good story.

1974626 I think this is a legit assumption. Yesterday Twilight was Trixie proofing her house for the next day but nopony knew why Trixie was coming back. Twilight was missing the next day and Pinkie referred to the only other person she would go see that day as her lover.
3010718 Where is this taking place? In Rainbow's house? Or like someplace else? RD doesn't own a house they could all just walk into, if you could clarify that would be epic!

Overall this was the best thing ever. Cute pleasant and without the needless violence that would throw of the cute mood. Keep it up I hope to see some Twixie in the future.

3270887 It's actually Fluttershy's cottage! I realise I didn't make that clear though, I should definitely go back and make a quick edit when I get the chance.

I'm really glad you liked it! It's great to see people still enjoying this after what feels like so long.

without the needless violence that would throw of the cute mood

:raritywink: That was subtle, haha! :heart: My Twixie story is coming along, and when the next two chapters release, I hope to have corrected that problem. Still with conflict, but more cute and meaningful, less violent!

Thanks hugely for your comment! EDIT: And I hope to have some Twixie to show you soon!

I love this story!!!! It's funny though, I was going to write an AppleDash story that went almost exactly the way this one did. I had it all planned out and everything... Oh well, I guess I better write it anyway.

3355502 Well, if you loved this, and write one like it, then you'll love that too, right? Guaranteed win! :pinkiehappy: Hey, thank you! And good luck with your story as well!

Wow I'm super glad you wrote an epilogue because it took the story up to 11. A truly epic appledash tale.

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