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It's obvious to everypony, themselves included, that Applejack and Rainbow Dash have romantic feelings for one another. The only reason they're not together is that they're both convinced that a relationship between them could never work out. Rarity, on the other hoof, is convinced that it could, and Rainbow Dash agrees to a 'three date trial' to prove her wrong...
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2029926 Indeed it doesn't! I realise that I failed to get across my point in the original version, and I've tried to correct it in the new one. I'm still not happy with it, but it should be a little easier to believe this time around. Thank you for bringing it up, and for the compliment as well. I'm glad you liked it
Bleh, I need to get something to eat before I read, haha. Anyway, judging by the synopsis, it sounds SUPER cute (you're just a pro at writing cute stories).
Ahh, can't wait to read it. Every time you publish a new chapter or a story, I feel like you're giving your readers a really, REALLY lovely gift.
Also, (highlight)
Happy early birthday! Expect to see your present soon. ;D
Will there be anymore to this? I'd love to know what happens!!!
Now that I've got some spare fic-reading time, I managed to finish chapter one, and boy, do I have a few things to say.
Firstly, I was right! Right off the bat, I could 'sense the cuteness' in this story. AppleDash is a really nice pairing, and in my opinion, they are totally compatible with each other.
Secondly, there were a few parts where I just lost it.
1)
SHIPPING GOGGLES! I literally wear my shipping goggles 24/7, so I definitely know how Rarity feels.
2)
Lust-driven, sapphic affair. Dear Celestia, that was hilarious.
3)
'nuff said.
~ ~ ~ ~ ~
Thirdly,
Feels rather repetitive.
Overall, I really like this fic, especially the whole concept of getting the hard-headed Rainbow Dash to realize that she and AJ are perfect for each other (and I'm convinced the latter pony already knows that). This story just has so much space for character development.
I really can't wait to read more.
And as always, keep up the good work ~
2103588 Aw, thank you! It makes me feel all warm and fuzzy just reading that
2103959 There sure will! I'm planning to release a new chapter every day until it's finished. But I just realised that I marked it as complete
Fixing it now, thank you!
2105902 Thank you twice in one post
It is a nice pairing, and it can be pretty fun to write. Admittedly though, this story wasn't nearly as much fun to write as my other AppleDash story - it just feels like there's something missing 
Oh well, I'll find out what it is soon!
1) I never leave home without my shipping goggles anymore! What has this community done to me?! (<-- not complaining
)
2)
Yay! I love it when my little sprinklings of humour go down well.
3) Haha, indeed. Just to clarify to everyone, I wasn't making fun of Appledash! Well, I was... but it's all in good fun. I love Appledash as much as I love all other mane six ships.
And thanks for pointing out the repetition in that one part, I've fixed it now.
You won't have to wait long for more - after your first post, I can't release new chapters fast enough!
This 'new chapter every day' thing is great.
Daily fix of AppleDash~
I really enjoyed this chapter. Things are progressing pretty smoothly (well, maybe not so much for Applejack). Looks like AJ will have to crack through Rainbow's thick skull before anything really happens.
Anyway, I got a real chuckle out of a couple of parts in this chapter...
1)
Eeyup. Thank you.
2)
Now, Rainbow my dear, you stink at expressing delight.
)
It's abundantly clear that somewhere out here is an apple that'll suit you just right.
(I tried.
Didn't pick out any errors in this chapter, really. I can't wait for the next chapter!
And as always, keep up the good work!
2107473 Well, thank you
Yup, oblivious ponies are great fun to write. One of these days I may write a story in which the characters actually know what's going on. But that is not this day!
2109961 AJ trying to crack through Rainbow's skull... it's like a complete reversal of my other AppleDash story. I swear that wasn't intentional
Glad you got a few more chuckles, can't have an AppleDash fic without some sarcasm and wordplay. Speaking of which, your rhyme is... well, you tried 
Next chapter's up, I hope you enjoy it!
Commence read.
Seems like the bet isn't something that Rainbow Dash would be to worried about. She may not be a fan of busy work and chores, but doubt it would bother her as much as it would Rarity.
Commence read.
Story is progressing nicely.
Poor Big Mac, stuck on that roof.
Commence read.
Another nicely done chapter.
Rarity finally played her part. Now Dash has to fix it.
New chapter?!
NEW CHAPTER!
... Okay, admittedly, I read this at like, 6:50 am (when I got up), but was unable to comment on this because a) I was dead tired, and b) I had to get ready for school, wheee.
Anyway, when I read this chapter, I was like...
PROPS TO RARITY, AND....
WHY RAINBOW DASH?!
WHY? :c
Well... at least she's going to do something about it. D; I hope she makes the right choices, though.
Great chapter, definitely can't wait for the next one, and as always, keep up the good work!
P.S. This comment doesn't seem so enthusiastic like usual. Bleh. Maybe it's because I slept at 2 am and woke up at 6:30 today.
Very nice.
2111622 Thank you for your comments! I hope you enjoy the next chapter!
2112079 Thank ya kindly
It's a good pairing for sure - with their shared competitiveness and teasing, it can be a lot of fun to write, as well as to read. I look forward to keeping it up!
2112996 Oh? Well, I'll try not to disappoint
...
2114466 Well, they can't all be super-enthusiastic, even if your avatar is Pinkie Pie. I hate getting up early, knowing that I have to go to work - it always makes me dead tired too (not to mention it also makes me very moody). Oh well... here's to holidays?
Anyway, thank you for the comment as always! Enjoy the next chapter, just one more to go after this!
...I have to say, if you'd posted the fic for the contest in this format? I think it would have been your win, hands (hooves?) down. That's how much I'm enjoying this.
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Still a lot more tired than usual, but I absolutely LOVED this chapter! Gotta love AppleDash.
Anyway, there were a LOT of funny moments in this chapter...
1)
Oh dear. Considering Applejack skipped her chores... wonder when the barn will burn down. :c
2)
This is cute. :3
3)
Okay, so, I'm telling this guy on Skype about this fic, and as soon as I said "AppleDash", he immediately accused this of being a clopfic. I claimed that it wasn't a clopfic, and then proceeded to read the beginning of this chapter. When I got to the quoted part above, I paused, and read this aloud to him. He chuckled, and was like, "See? I told you it was a clopfic. And as Pinkie said... give it time."
4)
Aww, AJ.
5)
For some reason, this made me smile. This line is adorable.
6)
Oh, uh, Twilight?!
Also picked out one error...
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*too.
Overall, this chapter was amazing. Definitely CANNOT wait until the final chapter tomorrow!
Keep up the good work!
P.S. Continuing on from that story with the Skype guy thinking this was a clopfic, I also read the kiss scene aloud to him and purposely filtered the more inappropriate parts and read those sections to him, and he just laughed at me.
Commence read.
Now for the finale?
Either I missed it or there still isn't an actual solution or talk about the reasons why they didn't think it would work out at first.
They thought they fitted together in the beginning but the thing holding them back was their seperate future choices. I don't really see that being adressed here.
I like the rewrite though =)
Now that's the way to get Rarity back. And it's not like a week of doing chores with AJ is going to be that big of an imposition with the way it played out, so I'm not really sure I'd say Dash lost the bet. The only question is how many chores they're actually going to get done in that week.
Commence read.
I was expecting a final day and then an epilogue.
I approve of this.
THAT EPILOGUE.
IT'S SO SHORT. D:
Well, at least it's still pretty cute because AJ & RD finally become fanon.
Not much to say here, but after I read...
I squealed a little bit. Really can't wait for that to come out.
Keep up the good work!
P.S. Grr, still February 14th here. Come on, why won't next Tuesday come already? D:
2118348 Thanks
2118580 Wow, well thank you very much! It's reassuring to hear that this version is actually an improvement (I always have my doubts
)
2118599 Kind of creepy looking picture, but thanks!
2118798 Lots of cute and funny parts?
Yay! Glad you enjoyed it! Now let's see...
1) That barn may as well get rebuilt every other episode, so it wouldn't surprise me
3) Hehe, I can picture that. Oh gosh, I got a little carried away with that kiss scene - I can't imagine how embarrassed I'd be to hear someone read it aloud, haha
And in that case, I'm sorry about the sleeping arrangements tease in the epilogue - I bet he'll have a field day with that 
6) I don't even know why I threw that in there, it was completely random... Darn Twilight, invading other ponies' stories!
7) Noo! That's an embarrassing typo, considering that it's an important line in the story. Thank you for pointing it out!
2119180 Thank you very much! The concept comes partly from something bookplayer (I think it was bookplayer) said once, about how conversations directly addressing the romance are ultimately less effective than when the two characters passively show their feelings whilst simply doing something 'normal'. Or something along those lines anyway.
2121308 I'm not done yet! This was originally going to be the final chapter, and I had a rushed version of said conversation ready to go. But... well, it was rushed. Since Valentine's Day has come and gone now, I think I'm going to take my time to write the 'real' epilogue, where those issues are addressed. I'm glad you like the rewrite so far though
2121549 That is the question, isn't it? Haha, well I'm sure they'll manage somehow. Thank you for the comment!
2121919 Thank you! Considering how much time I spend writing them nowadays, I should hope I know them pretty well
Really glad you like it and I hope to keep it up!
2122470 That is actually a pretty good idea. I'm planning on either rewriting and extending this latest chapter and/or writing a new one entirely. When I do, I'll keep that in mind - I can already see how it would work. Thanks!
2123288 Thank you! And I approve of your profile picture - it's funny because it's true
2124918 Sorry it's so short and rushed! As you saw, I'm going to extend (and rewrite parts of) the chapter, to make the ending more awesome
I'm going to take my time with it, now that Valentine's has passed. First I need to get back to the latest chapter of Eyes On You 
It has suffered for my obsession over getting Trial Run done for the 14th. Sorry!
>>Everyone: I'd just like to say an extra thank you for all your reassuring comments on Chapter Four, which I was more than a little anxious about. You are all awesome
Short, but very nice.
Good job.
men the story was great so far, i'm just on standby for the last chapter update/rewrite/whatever
You know that feeling when you discorver a writer that you like and then you start reading absolutely everything he's written and then you beg for more? Yeah, well, that's what has happened to me with you. Holy mother of fuck, you're, like, my favorite writer on the site right now.
I mean, Twixie and Appledash. Well, that's pretty good, but -no, way, you're writing well-written. wellcharacterized Twixie and Appledash. Hm. Okay. Can I marry you? PLEASE?
This story was very, VERY good. I found the characters somewhat real, incredibly cute and... Applejack was acting so Applejack-ish that I couldn't stop squeeing. I'm fangirling over this shit AND I'M A MOTHERFUCKING MAN.
So, yeah. Insta-fav, follow and comment. Man, this was awesome. I mean, I can't wait for the re-written chapter. I also think you need to expand it a little more, but even with thtat is great, so... yeah. Congratulations.
Pfffft. Trial run. I mean, how the hell do you think about something like that? You lucky bastard...
Lovely. Truly lovely. This is hands down one of my favorite AppleDash fics around. In fact, I think I need to update my profile's favorite list!
2142052 Thank ya kindly
2161541 Thanks! The update is done - I decided to go with a final chapter instead of a rewrite. Hope you like it!
2196410 Oh wow, that made me chuckle
Seriously, thank you very much for the kind words, this brightened my morning. It's always great to hear that someone likes my characters, being an insecure writer person like I am 
Not sure what else to say, really. Getting comments like these on my stories easily makes up for all the work it takes to write them.
As for how I thought of the idea... yeah, 'Just lucky, I guess'
The goal was to come up with an original way for AJ and RD to end up together - avoiding clichés where possible, like issues with fillyfooling, broken wings etc. - and this just sprung to mind (after about a week of trying to plan something out, that is).
Anyway, I decided to forget the rewrite and write a whole new chapter instead. It's up now, and the story is complete. Enjoy! And thanks again for your comment!
Commence read.
Hey an Epilogue.
Great story.
This was a beautiful story.
Oh, I literally just spontaneously combusted (due to excitement) the second I saw this chapter was released. As it is now 1:31 AM, this comment will be rather short, disorganized, and will contain lots and LOTS of grammar errors, I'm sure of it (I don't even know why I'm still up).
Anyway, this chapter... I'm going to be a bit honest here.
It felt a bit... rushed. Not only that, but it also dragged on for a long time (I think I just contradicted myself). What I mean is that the chapter ended on a rather quick note, but at the same time, having Applejack and Rainbow Dash trying to resolve this one conflict dragged on for about... I guess, ~700 words? In addition, in one of your earlier replies to another user, you mentioned you didn't want this story to seem too cliche. While you did achieve originality within your first four to five chapters, this epilogue was sort of... well, unoriginal, for lack of a better word. Rainbow Dash, eventually leaving for the Wonderbolts and Applejack, stuck on the farm, claiming their relationship will not work in the future... eh, for some reason, I'm not really feeling it.
Well, going back to the note of this chapter dragging on, it begins around halfway through the story, when Applejack plays the, "It wouldn't work", card on Rainbow Dash.
Also, another thing that I noticed is Applejack's accent and language is a little bit... funky. For example:
Despite the fact that Applejack obviously has a southern accent, it doesn't really alter her speech. Sure, she says "mah" instead of "my" or "ah" instead of "I", but in the show, she still uses the word, "doesn't". Just a reminder that she still speaks the same way as everyone else. She may drop a couple of words that stick out, such as "reckon" or "ain't", but she'll still say, "Doesn't matter. It doesn't change the fact that the pegasus is right."
And for some reason, I felt like this chapter wasn't as strong. Sure, I understand their worries of having to leave each other one day for their respective dreams, but still. Everything felt kind of linear in this chapter, like Rainbow Dash and Applejack could only come to one conclusion, and it just so happens to be the bad end. In most cases, many other AppleDash stories tend to end with RD and AJ, somehow making it work. I'm not saying your story needs to change. It just feels like at first, the two both believe there is no way their relationship can really continue. Keep in mind that Rainbow is the element of loyalty and AJ is the element of honesty. Admittedly, this bit of advice isn't as strong, but it just feels like Rainbow doesn't trust AJ when she says things will be alright.
Anyhow, I can't say I'm disappointed. As usual, your writing style was amazing, and you portray these characters really well. Just a few mistakes is all. The beginning of this chapter was pretty cute. If there's one memorable quote in this chapter, it's got to be this one:
Just because it's amazingly cute.
Okay, when I start to get repetitive, it means I'm tired. Before I sign out, I just want you to know that I don't expect you to change your story. Just offering some criticism is all.
Anyway, it's almost 2 am now (wow, spent 20 minutes typing this up). I think I should sleep now.
And as always, keep up the good work!
P.S. In the beginning of my comment, I did mention this was going to be short, right? ... Oops.
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(Oops, so it's 2:46 am now. I should've been asleep an hour ago)
Anyhow, thank you for the compliment. I enjoy writing-- a lot (err, content wise, that is). Whether it be writing stories, typing out reviews, or simply rambling on for hours on end (trust me, I do this sometimes). As a result, I always spew out paragraph after paragraph, and before you know it, my messages get pretty long.
Well, you know, if my strange and somewhat quirky reviews (prior to the one I wrote an hour ago) have helped you, then I'm glad.
I might go ahead and
stalkread some of your stories, if you don't mind. :)Nice Job. Earned a Like and I give you a United State Championship
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Hope to see sequel if you do one.
I, for once, think that the ending is kinda original. They don't know if it's going to work. The reader doesn't know either. It seems a bit rushed, that's true, but I can't say anything that hasn't been said before. And, well, I'm too busy fangirling over this shit to leave a proper review. Maybe later, when I'm a little less tired, I will say a couple things more. But, for now? I think it's pretty good. I like the tone.
Although, I'm the only one who thought that Rainbow's speech about not fearing anything was foreshadowing? Like, she didn't want the romance to work because she's afraid of relationships or compromise. Which would have been pretty ironic because she's Loyalty, but y'know. She could have been afraid of being too loyal or not loyal enough to AJ, breaking her relationship either with her or with the rest of the mane six. I guess you can read that she's actually afraid of that kind of things but it's never said word-for-word, but I dunno. I was expecting a sudden realization, so I was surprised when the issue dissapeared like that. Meh. I guess it didn't matter so much after all.
Yay, a resolution (sorta).
That would be 'muzzle'
Fantastic ending.
nice work !
I absolutely loved this fic. Great characterization, great pacing, great development. Fantastic work. I wish I could give any form of constructive criticism, but all I can really say is "Keep doing what you're doing, it's working fantastically."
You have been showcase saturday'd. Congratulations!
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Sorry that you didn't like it. Having said that, it's actually good to hear that you don't automatically like the chapter just because you liked the rest of the story, and are kind enough to provide criticism as well. Although I'm done editing the story (because if I keep going then I'll be at it forever, trying to get it perfect), the advice will come in handy for future projects.
I can see what you mean about it being 'rushed but drawn out'. I tried to cram too much into the epilogue - both explaining the problem and 'resolving it' (sort of) in one scene. It might've worked a lot better if I'd managed to work the 'explaining' part into the earlier chapters. But since those chapters are supposed to be about Rainbow not thinking about the problem (because it doesn't matter), I couldn't really see how to weave it in believably.
When I mentioned trying to avoid clichés, I was specifically referring to the 'how could they get together?' part of the story. And I'm content that I've achieved that goal
But I'm disappointed that the resolution came across as clichéd all the same. Maybe, as I was saying above, it would've worked better if I'd managed to make it more of a major point throughout the story?
Regarding Applejack's speech, I think "Don't matter" definitely sounded (to me) like something she would say in the context. I know she's perfectly capable of speaking 'normally', as it were, but there are times when she doesn't in the show. For example, she occasionally uses "You all" to refer to a single pony, while at other times she uses it correctly - referring to several ponies.
...But after looking back at that section, I'm not so sure of myself... I'll think about changing it.
~
I have to agree that that's a bit off. Thinking way back to episode one, when Applejack had absolute faith in Rainbow and Fluttershy, she managed to pass that faith onto Twilight (surely enough that she would literally let herself drop from a cliff). In the epilogue, she once again has absolute faith in Rainbow Dash, so she should, in theory, be able to pass it on once again. Unless it's Rainbow's anxiety and secret self-doubt (à la 'Sonic Rainboom') that is so powerful that it keeps her from trusting herself?
Honestly, the characters I write are a mystery to me - they are who they are, and there's a reason for every unusual thing that they do, even if I don't consciously know what it is. That probably sounds a bit crazy, doesn't it?
Anyway, I'm glad you liked the cute bit you pointed out. Those little, cutesy gestures are the parts I like writing most (even if they're usually only a line or two). The nose kiss, wing hugs, little affectionate nuzzles - I love them!
Hehe, well thank you for the in-depth comment as usual, and for the criticism that seems to have made my tired brain get overly thoughtful. And I think that's just about the end of my longest reply ever
2196602 Wow! It's amazing to hear that you liked it that much! Thank you for your kind words and for giving the story another read through after the rewrite
2196622 You are very succinct. I like that
Thank you!
2196681 Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed it!
2196707 Unfortunately, I don't have any ideas or plans for a sequel. I'll be sure to notify everyone with a blog post if an idea pops into my head (as they occasionally do), but it's doubtful
Thank you for your comments, and for reading!
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Wow, I can safely say that I've never had one of those before! Thanks very much! And, as I mentioned in the reply just up there ^^^ , I don't have any plans for a sequel at the moment, but I'll let you know if I start writing one!
2197324 Thank you very much
Having read my other works, you'll probably notice that I'm pretty big on open-endedness and that kind of thing. Thus the 'Will it work or won't it?' question in the epilogue. Although there was another point which I've been consistently trying (and failing) to get across - that it doesn't matter whether it works in the long run, as long as they make the most of the time they have (as opposed to denying themselves until they part, then end up wondering about 'what might have been').
Rainbow's 'no fear' speech was indeed foreshadowing! But what I was trying to foreshadow was Rainbow's fear of losing AJ's trust after Rarity pulled her little prank... Being "afraid of relationships or compromise" is definitely a trait I could imagine Rainbow having though, and the whole loyalty angle would add some intrigue as well. But that's a story for another time (or another writer, perhaps? *nudge* * nudge*)
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...It'll do
Hehe, thanks for giving me, like, three tries, but I don't think I'm ever going to get it quite right
As you said, at least this is 'sorta' a resolution, even if it's not ideal.
And thanks for pointing out the typo too!
2199027 Awesome, thank you!
2201110 Thanks!
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Yay! Thank you very much for the kind words! And double thank you for featuring the story on your tumblr (which looks really cool, by the way). I hope I can keep it up in the future!
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You're welcome!
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Now let me be a bum and comment more. :D
Glad to see you can explain why everything is exactly where they are.
From how I view Applejack, I think the creators just wanted her to fit the 'Southern stereotype', a.k.a. southern accent, the hat, freckles, being on a farm, and of course, saying "y'all" as much as possible. That being said, I know she occasionally doesn't speak 'normally' in the show, but I don't remember her ever substituting "doesn't" for "don't". I personally think that the "don't matter" line feels more masculine, and while I know AJ is sort of a tomboy, it just didn't feel right to me, but you know, it's a matter of preference, I suppose.
"Doesn't matter. It doesn't change the fact that the pegasus is right--"
-shrugs-
Also, it's clear that RD didn't care about forming a romantic relationship with AJ in the beginning, but of course, she did gradually begin to accept that she liked her. Even before the kiss, RD could be having some sort of internal conflict, like, "Rarity's kidding herself, there's no way I can get together with Applejack. I mean, I'm a pegasus and she's an earth pony!", something along those lines. This epilogue's conflict came on way too quickly and way too strong from the start.
Buuut anyway, it's not a bad epilogue. Still feels kind of unfinished to me, but again, it's a matter of preference.
(And as always, keep up the good work!)
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I said it when you first posted the new version/first chapters/edits. Had you posted this version for the contest, it would have gotten my vote to win in its category. Probably would have from the other judges too. In fact, I want to reread this now all in one sitting
2212841 Just finished reading this story. Hoped/expected to see you here. Was not disappointed.
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I'm not sure if I should be flattered or worried!
2213334 If I don't see you somewhere in an Appledash, I worry it either hasn't reached you yet or it wasn't worth my time. So...Flattered?
So... this proves that, contrary to what I've always thought, AppleDash can be heart-explodingly cute. Nicely done, sir.
This is very, very good. One of the best fanfics i've ever read!