Hearth's Warming Eve (Original Story)
I could practically feel the air shake as Applejack slammed her masterful hooves against another apple tree. Every single clump of snow tumbled from its branches and landed in heaps around the smiling farmpony. As always, it was awesome to watch her at work. Even if it was kind of hard for her to get all sweaty and shiny on a cold day like this, she was making one hay of a go at it.
I sighed longingly as she trotted off to bestow her wonderful blessing on the next one in line. “Lucky trees,” I muttered. Almost too late, I snapped my head back behind the cloud as Applejack looked up to investigate the voice with her bright, emerald eyes...
“Rainbow Dash? That you up there?” she yelled. The sound of her sexy accent calling my name made me bite my lip to keep from squealing.
I cleared my throat, faked a yawn and stretched out my hooves before peeking out over the edge of the cloud. “Huh? Oh, hi, AJ. I was just taking a little nap up here – totally haven't been watching you or anything.”
Applejack giggled. “I swear, I've never met a lazier pony in my life. Is there ever a moment when you ain't itchin' to get to bed?”
“You have no idea...” I threw her a suggestive smirk. I guess she didn't see it, because she just shook her head with a smile and went back to her trees.
They had her attention twenty-four seven... Even when she wasn't working, Applejack's mind was back in the orchard, tending to those trees with her firm, loving hooves. It felt kind of weird to be jealous of trees but... well, I was. And I'd had enough of it.
'This is the day,' I told myself, staring determinedly down at Applejack's perfectly-curved flank. 'Today, I'm gonna tell her!'
I rolled my head around – stretching the muscles in my neck and making the bones crack awesomely. Then I bent down, fixed my eyes on my sexy target and pounced from the cloud. As I soared downwards and the wind whipped through my mane, it was way hard not to just tackle her to the ground right there and then... but I had a feeling that that wouldn't end too well.
So I just about managed to keep my cool and landed next to her instead, just as she finished bucking the snow from another tree. She looked up at me with an eyebrow raised, obviously expecting me to say something. I licked my lips. 'Play it smooth, Dash...'
“...Whatcha doin'?” I said coolly.
Oh yeah, that was smooth...
Applejack gave me the sort of smile that said she thought I was slightly crazy. “What's it look like? I'm bucking the snow out of these here apple trees.”
With a quick gulp, I composed myself and smirked at her again. “Mind if I get in line?”
Applejack grunted in surprise and smiled more honestly. “Well, now that you mention it, I could use a little help. Mighty good of you to offer, RD.”
I opened my mouth to tell her that's not what I meant, but shut it a second later. If I was going to tell her how I felt, I'd need an excuse to spend some time with her. And as much as I hated the idea of working on a snow day, maybe helping AJ out would... soften her up a bit.
“Uh, sure!” I said, puffing out my chest proudly. “You know you can always count on me, AJ!”
I caught one last wink of her awesome smile before she turned and started towards another tree. From this angle, the view was just about perfect. I knew I probably should've been focussing on the bucking technique, but the pony doing the bucking was way more interesting – especially the way the muscles in her flank curled as she kicked out in slow-motion...
I only came back to my senses when she looked up at me expectantly. Wiping the drool from my mouth, I turned to the nearest tree and hurried over to it. I figured it couldn't be too hard, so I just did my best Applejack impression – spinning in place and kicking out my sexy, muscular legs to strike the wood with a satisfying thud.
The snow started falling from the tree in globs, and I flashed AJ my proudest smirk. Instead of smiling back though, her eyes went wide as she stared at something above me...
Next thing I knew, something cold, heavy and super-embarrassing landed on my head – crushing me, face down, into the snow. It took a while for the shock to wear off and the ringing in my ears to go away. When it did, I heard the muffled sound of Applejack's laughter coming from overhead.
Normally, not a bad sound to hear. This time, it made my cheeks burn so hot that the snow around me started to melt.
“Y-you okay down there?” Applejack laughed.
I planted my hooves either side of me and pushed myself up, shaking the snow out of my mane as I went. “I totally meant to do that!” I said, turning to frown at the still-snickering farmpony. She lifted a hoof to try and stop the giggles – or at least make it look like she was trying – while I just stood there, feeling like a complete, snow-plastered idiot.
Just as I was trying to convince myself to forget the whole thing and take off to save me the embarrassment, Applejack trotted right up to me, until our snouts were barely a step apart. Still smiling, she lifted a hoof and ran it through my mane, brushing the last of the snow onto the ground. My eyes bugged out.
“Not as easy as it looks, is it?” she said softly.
“Uh huh...” I grunted. Her eyes were half-lidded in that kind, honest sort of way that made me want to bounce forwards, push her to the ground and--
She pulled her hoof back and started trotting away, coldly snapping me out of my daydream. As I watched her tail bob from side to side, I felt a sudden stab of panic in my stomach. “W-wait!” I called out.
AJ turned to look back over her shoulder with raised eyebrows.
I couldn't just let her walk away – not this time... not today. But I also had no idea what else to say or do to keep her there. Even if my stomach cringed at the thought, I knew that I had to come out and say it...
“...Let's go build a snowpony!”
...Or come out and say something completely random and weird...
Applejack gave a single, confused chuckle. “Beg pardon?”
Gulping down the urge to hide from the look she was giving me, I straightened up and tried to wing it. “Y-you heard me! Let's go build a snowpony.”
“...Why?” said Applejack, turning her body to face me properly.
“Why not?” I threw back. “It's a snow day. I'm here, you're here, and we haven't hung out in, like, days. So let's go.”
She narrowed her eyes and drew back a little. “Ain't we hangin' out right now? You're... actin' kind of funny, RD...”
“Kind of hard not to when you're around,” I muttered.
“What?”
“Nothing! You coming? Or am I gonna have to drag you?”
Applejack blinked at me. Then she turned her head to look around at the orchard full of trees that were still covered in snow. “Well, not that I wouldn't like to or anything, but--”
I groaned and pulled down on the bottom of my eyes. “C'mon, AJ! It's Hearth's Warming Eve! Wouldn't you rather be spending time with me than with them?” I glared at the nearest of the trees – daring him to make a move. He didn't have the guts.
“'Course I would!” said Applejack defensively. “But that don't change the fact that I've gotta get all the snow out of these trees before tomorrow. Why, I'd never forgive myself if one of 'em got hurt on account of my slacking off!”
With a roll of the eyes, I turned to look at how much work was left to do. There had to be hundreds of snowy trees left, versus the two-dozen that Applejack had already cleared. It'd take hours to finish, and I couldn't waste that long waiting. So, naturally, I came up with an awesome plan.
“Alright, here's what we'll do – you come and hang out with me now, then, when we're done, I'll go convince Twilight to come clear the rest of the trees. Okay?”
Applejack gave me a doubting sort of frown. “Didn't she say she was magic-proofing her bedroom for when Trixie comes over tomorrow?”
I waved a hoof dismissively. “Pfft, this is Twilight we're talking about – I bet she's already finished. Besides, she's probably real nervous about their magic duel or whatever it is they do up there, she'll be happy for a distraction.”
AJ huffed and gave the ground a bemused half-smile. “You ain't gonna let me say 'no', are you?”
I shook my head firmly.
She rolled her eyes. “...Alright, fine. But you'd better not slack off when it comes time to get back to business!”
My heart did a backflip. “Wouldn't dream of it!”
A snowpony? Oh man, what was I thinking? I hadn't made a snowpony since I was a kid! Still, I guess I'd managed to get AJ alone – away from her trees. Now I could at least talk to her without having to worry about my competition listening in.
As the two of us wandered down the snow-covered trail away from the farm, I realised how cold it was. I mean, I wasn't cold – pegasi don't get cold as easily as other ponies. But, now that she was out in the open, Applejack was shivering a little every time a gust of wind blew past.
Being naturally gallant as I was, I moseyed on over to share a little body heat. At least, that was the plan... until she looked across at me. Then I quickly decided that it was a little forward and backed off, hoping that she didn't notice.
“Uh, something bothering you, sugarcube?” she asked.
“Huh? Who, me?” I flashed her an innocent smile. “No, nothing!”
“Really? 'Cause you seem to be havin' trouble walking in a straight line...” She narrowed her eyes. “You haven't been drinking, have you?”
“No! I--” Actually, that gave me an idea. An awesome idea. “I-I mean, yeah, maybe a little...” I hung my head and looked away, pretending to be embarrassed.
I gave it a good three count, then deliberately tripped and stumbled sideways, bumping into AJ's sleek, firm body. She gave a little grunt, but didn't fall down. I hadn't really expected her to.
“RD! Are you alright?!” she asked urgently.
I couldn't help but smirk to myself.
“Uh, y-yeah...” I grumbled, turning to blink up at her as if I was totally disoriented. “Just... kind of wobbly still. Do you think I could maybe lean on you for a bit? Just until I sober up?”
She blinked at me. For a minute, I thought she saw right through the bluff. But then she shook her head and smiled. “Aw, sheesh, Rainbow Dash. Go ahead. But don't expect no sympathy past that! You should know better than to be drinking at this time of day!”
In a flash that probably gave the game away, I shot up to my hooves, unfurled my wing and wrapped it around her. I pulled her close, until my side was pressed up against her coat – all warm and messy from where she'd been bucking those trees. It was hard not to laugh in triumph. 'Score one for Rainbow Dash!'
She didn't say anything as we started down the trail again, though I did catch a couple of funny looks. I didn't care – she'd understand everything when I explained. And right there – cuddled up close and in the company of her warm, apple-scented breath – seemed like the perfect time and place.
“Hey, AJ, I--”
Before I knew what was going on, she stuck a hoof in front of mine. I tripped and hit the ground face-first for the second time that morning. When I managed to shake it off and scramble to my hooves, I shot her a look, only to see that she was smirking.
“W-what was that for?!” I snapped.
“Sobered up now?” she said slyly.
My mouth fell open for a few seconds, trying to make sense of what she'd just said. When I did, I adopted a deadpan expression. “Yes. Thank you very much.”
“You're welcome,” she chirped, turning to trot onwards without so much as a look back.
I stared at her swaggering flank for a moment, then a few more moments for good measure. “...Man, that was sexy...”
“What?” she called back.
“Nothing!”
I kept a... 'comfortable'... distance as we made our way down the trail. Ponyville was getting closer, but that wasn't where we were heading. About two minutes out, I trotted off the side of the trail and glanced back at AJ. “This way.”
She raised an eyebrow at me. “We ain't going into town?”
“Nope. There's a tonne of snow on that hilltop over here--” I pointed towards it. “--It should be perfect.”
“...Looks kind of dull to me,” Applejack observed.
“That's right! No ponies, no trees and absolutely no distractions! It'll be just the two of us. Alone...” I waggled my eyebrows at her.
The farmpony blinked. “If you say so,” she said indifferently, making to trot up the hill. When she'd passed me, and I knew she wasn't looking, I did a little victory jig in celebration. She wasn't in the bag yet, but we were getting close.
The hilltop really was deserted. It was totally flat and covered in snow, and that was pretty much it. Well, the view was okay – Ponyville in the not-so-far distance to one side and the rolling plains leading up to Canterlot to the other. Kind of boring, but that wasn't really important right now. We'd make our own fun...
“Okay, we're here. Now what?” said Applejack half-heartedly.
I smirked at her. “What's the matter, AJ? Never built a snowpony before?”
“Nope.”
“...Really?” I said, surprised.
AJ shook her head. “Never needed to.”
“Well, you never need to build a snowpony,” I explained, rolling my eyes. “You just do it 'cause it's fun. Remember fun, Applejack?”
She threw me a glare. “Hey, I'm fun!”
“Oh yeah?” The smirk made its way back onto my face. “Show me then. I dare you.”
She leant forwards and raised her eyebrows. “Well tell me how to make a snowpony and maybe I will,” she said condescendingly.
I scoffed at that. She was getting competitive. That was good. That was very good...
“Alright – snowpony one-oh-one...” I trotted over to the middle of the hilltop, swatting her playfully with my tail in passing. The way she scrunched up her nose was so cute that it was hard to resist making another pass. But there'd be plenty of time for that later...
Making a snowpony was kid-stuff, so it didn't take long to explain. And, once I'd rolled the first hoof to demonstrate, she got the gist of it and started on the next one. That's another cool thing about AJ – she's smart. Not 'Twilight smart' or 'book smart' or 'street smart'... just the perfect amount of smart for me.
“So, uh, AJ,” I said, trying to spark up a conversation as we went through the motions. “You ever had a coltfriend?”
“Me? Nah.” She said it so coolly, didn't even look over at me.
I couldn't help but grin to myself. “...Marefriend?”
“Nope.”
“Huh?” I furrowed my brow at her. “So you're still a--”
“Yup.”
...Wow. Just... wow. I wasn't really sure how to feel about that. Kind of excited, I guess. “So... you're just waiting for the right mare, then?” I said hopefully.
She shrugged. Didn't get all defensive or anything. Just shrugged. She was cool. And I was awesome... We were practically made for each other!
She idly glanced over at me. “I guess. Why d'you ask?”
'This is it, Dash,' I told myself. 'Never gonna get a cleaner shot...'
I took a deep breath and braced myself. “Babe, it's 'cause I want to be that mare.”
Oh man, it felt so good to finally get it off my chest. And with a delivery that amazing, there was no way she could resist. All that was left now was for her to gallop over and confess her undying love in a passionate kiss that--
“...What mare?”
I blinked. “What?”
“What mare do you want to be?” she asked, furrowing her brow.
...Huh? Was she making fun of me? She couldn't be serious, right? “T-the mare,” I explained. “You know, the right mare.”
“Right for what?” she said, starting to sound annoyed.
I stared in disbelief. “For what we were just talking about! Were you listening or what?”
“I was listening!” she threw back. “We were talking 'bout whether I'd ever had a special somepony. Then you suddenly came out sayin' you wanted to be 'the mare'. You're already a mare, RD!”
“No, you--” I broke off as I realised what she'd just said. “Wait... I am?”
She gave me another funny look. “You been taking randomness lessons from Pinkie Pie?”
“Wait, go back!” I said desperately. “Did you say I'm already the mare?”
“Alright, end of weird conversation,” Applejack declared, turning back to finish rolling her snow hooves.
I mouthed at the back of her head, trying to grab her attention back, but I couldn't make any sound. Had she meant what I thought she'd meant or not? Was I the mare? Was I?!
“Now, are you gonna help me build this thing or not?” AJ said as she finished her second hoof. “'Cause if you want to skip this part and get back to work in the orchard--”
“No!” I blurted out, almost panicking. She raised an eyebrow. “I-I mean, yeah! Sure – I'm helping!”
She stared at me blankly. I got to work balancing the hooves upright and tried not to look her in the eye. My cool was starting to slip, and I couldn't let her see that.
So, the rest of the snowpony building went pretty quietly. I was way too focussed on composing myself to worry about looking for opportunities to romance her. She rolled the body while I rolled the head. We actually worked pretty well together. I mean duh, how could we not?
By the time we'd balanced the two bigger snowballs on top of the hooves, I was starting to feel a little better. Just a little... Enough so that when we stepped back to admire our work, I could offer AJ a sidewards smirk.
“...It don't look much like a pony,” she observed.
I rolled my eyes. “Uh, yeah – it's not finished yet. We've still got to add the details.”
“Details?” she repeated sceptically.
“You know, like face details and stuff... Take you, for example.”
“Me?”
Yes! Another brilliant idea from Rainbow Dash! I walked around in front of her and stood close enough that I could reach up with a hoof to touch her face. “There's the ears--” I brushed a hoof past the brim of her hat. She twitched, but she didn't make any effort to pull back or try to stop me. So, with a smile, I carried on.
“Then there's the rough, golden mane--” I made my way slowly down her mussed up hair. “And the cute snowpony nose--” I hesitated for a sec, then pressed my hoof up against her nose. Weird that I had to fight the urge to say 'boop'... I guess Pinkie was rubbing off on me after all.
AJ's eyes crossed as she tried to look at the end of my hoof. I was so in the zone. “Then there's... the lips--” I half-expected them to be chapped or something, but they was totally soft and rosy... totally perfect.
I slid my hoof gently down off of her snout and onto her chest. Then, not wanting to lose my momentum, I leaned in. “And the eyes,” I whispered, staring into those beautiful, grassy-green orbs. She stared back. I could feel her warm breath against my nose. She batted her eyelashes. It was too much...
I let out the breath I'd been forcing myself to hold and leant forwards, resigning myself to the tension. I closed my eyes. 'Here it comes,' I thought. 'The most awesome moment of my life...'
“Oh, I get it,” said Applejack.
She moved to the side, and my hoof slipped off of her chest. I didn't even bother trying to stay upright as I fell forwards and landed on my face. Again.
“Whoops, sorry, sugarcube!” She grabbed me by the scruff of the neck and dragged me up out of the snow. Then, without so much as a worried look back, she trotted over to the snowpony and started slapping on globs of snow for the ears and nose.
That was pretty much the last straw.
My face started heating up, my eyes narrowed and my hooves started trembling. The side of her thick, stubborn head was the perfect target... I grabbed a hoof-full of snow, bounced it once to test the weight, then hurled it.
The snowball struck its mark with a satisfying thud. That brought one heck of a smile to my face. “Ha! Take that!” I yelled. Applejack stared blankly at the snowpony. After what felt like minutes had passed, my smile started to fade. “Uh, AJ?”
She turned slowly to look at me. She didn't say anything, but I could see something in her eye – a real dark and vengeful sort of look that made me a little uneasy.
...Okay, maybe more than a little.
I took a step back and shifted my wings as she lowered her brows fiercely. “Uh, don't go nuts, AJ...” That was probably a pretty pointless thing to hope for...
She scraped her hoof against the ground and blew a puff of air through her nostrils, preparing to charge as I'd seen her do a bunch of times before. And, normally, I'd pretend to be caught off guard and let her hit me. A little tickle torture wasn't so bad, after all. But, judging by the fire in her eyes, that wasn't what she had in mind...
She pounced, and I took off. I barely snapped my tail out of the way in time to dodge her gnashing teeth. Catching myself in midair, I spun around and stuck a pose. “Missed!”
And then a snowball hit me in the face.
I shook the snow out of my eyes and turned to scowl at AJ, who was smirking. Almost giggling, actually. “Hey!” I yelled.
She rolled her eyes. “Oh, I see – you can dish it out but you can't take it.”
My mouth fell open. “Oh, you did not!”
She stuck her tongue out defiantly.
It was so on...
I twisted my body to get as much speed as possible as I dive-bombed towards her. Wasn't fast enough though – she dodged to the side and swatted me with her tail as I passed. With a growl, I scooped up a hoof-full of snow, flipped over and threw it back at her, catching her square on the flank.
From there, things escalated pretty quickly. Of course, with my awesome aerial acrobatics, she didn't have much of a chance in a straight up snowball fight. I shot all over the place, launching attacks from every direction and leaving a super-cool rainbow trail behind me. Too bad AJ couldn't see how cool it looked, being on the receiving end of the snowball barrage...
“Gah!” Something grabbed hold of my tail and pulled me back so hard that I almost got whiplash. Applejack was biting down on it with a proud look on her face. I flapped my wings and desperately tried to slip the hold, but she was too strong.
She threw me to one side, then – before I could even regain my balance – she was diving towards me.
It was like being hit by a gorgeous, fluffy cannonball. I had to admit, as the two of us plummeted towards the hillside, it was pretty sweet, having her pressed up against me like that. But it was kind of hard to enjoy it after we hit the hillside and started bouncing down it, head-over-hooves. I tried to gain the upper hoof, but every time we slammed into the hillside I completely forgot where I was.
When we finally hit the bottom – kicking up a massive snow-cloud – I didn't even know which way was up. My head swirled with dizziness... It took me a while to focus enough just to get out a few words. “A...Applejack? You okay?”
I felt something shift near me, but she didn't say anything. I waited for like, a minute, before I started to get a little worried. I tried to get up so that I could look for her, but something had me pinned to the ground. It took a bit longer for my head to stop being all foggy but, after that, it wasn't hard to figure out what it was...
Sure enough, when the snow-cloud cleared up, AJ was laid on top of me, pinning my hooves down with hers. Her hair-thingy was missing, so her mane kind of flowed down over her face, half-covering that cocky smirk on her lips. Amazingly, her hat hadn't moved an inch, and that just added to the awesomeness of the sight.
Yeah, she wasn't just 'okay' – she was perfect.
AJ batted her eyelashes. “I reckon I win that round...” she said quietly.
I stared at her.
“Uh, you okay there, sugarcube?”
As she frowned and leaned in closer to make sure, a tuft of her hair fell out from behind her ear and brushed against my cheek. That touch was all it took...
“...AJ, I think I love you.”
It was that simple. Just like that, I came out and said it – how I actually, truly felt...
Applejack drew a sharp breath as the weight of the words hit her. I felt my heart do a backflip – she finally got it! Her shining, green eyes blinked twice slowly, before her lips curled up into a smile. I bit my own lip in anticipation as she opened her mouth. Her next words would either make me or break me...
“...D'awww!” She leant down and rubbed her snout against mine. “I love ya too, RD – you ol' softie.”
She pulled back with a friendly smile on her lips... a friendly smile – leaving me to gawp at her. “N-no, AJ – I meant 'I love you' as in--”
“Yeah, yeah – don't worry,” chuckled Applejack, standing up to her full height and stepping off of me. “I won't tell anypony you got all sappy. But hey, you shouldn't worry about tellin' your friends you love 'em on Hearth's Warming Eve – it's what you're supposed to do, silly.”
She trotted off to pick up her hair-thingy from where it'd landed in the snow and tucked it inside her hat. All I managed was to get steadily to my hooves and gaze after her. “...Applejack, I don't think you're quite catching my meaning here--”
“Oh, I see what's going on here,” she said, turning to smirk over her shoulder at me.
“I really doubt that...”
“You're trying to distract me so I'll forget about your promise, ain't ya?” She gave a short laugh and shook her head. “Nice try, but that ain't gonna work on me. I reckon we're about done playin', so y'all get along to Twilight's right quick and keep up your end of the bargain, y'hear?”
I groaned and hid my face behind my wing. 'Oh, to Tartarus with this. I'll try again next week...'
* * *
As Applejack closed her bedroom door late that evening, her body still aching from the day's work and play, she breathed a content sigh. Curling up into bed seemed like a perfect idea right now, but she just had one last thing she needed to do. It was Hearth's Warming Eve, after all...
She closed the curtains and crouched down to pull a box out from under her bed – filled with presents for each of her five best friends. A book on the history of apple farming for Twilight, an extra-specially huge tube of Sweet Apple Acres Best Cake Frosting for Pinkie Pie--
Her eyes fell on the present she'd been looking for. Carefully as she could, she bit down on the thick, red envelope and lifted it from the box to lay it down atop her bed. She stared at the name on the front for a long moment before reaching in and pulling out the card inside. When she nosed open the card itself, she smiled. The chain was still there... As if it could've gone anywhere.
She ran a hoof over the custom-made pendant of two cutie marks side-by-side, overlaying a big ol' pink heart, all made from fancy glass. Kind of a sappy gesture, maybe. Okay, a really sappy gesture. It'd probably never even get worn. But that was okay. It was the message behind the gift that really mattered. And it was kind of hard to misinterpret this message.
She leant down and laid a soft kiss on the cold pendant, then drew back and chuckled to herself. “You're in for a surprise tomorrow, RD...”
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Oh my gosh, I love this so much! It's so sweet and I'm totally tearing up at how cute it is. It had just the right amount of humor, and that ending! It's perfect, thank you so much for writing this for me.
THIS STORY...
IS SOOO CUTE!
IT MAKES ME WANT TO OVERUSE EXCLAMATION MARKS EVEN THOUGH I NEEEEEVER DO THAT. UGH. WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO MEEEE?
I WOULD TOTALLY LOVE LOVE LOVEEE SOME SORT OF CONCLUSION / EPILOGUE THINGY MAJIGGER ;___; WELL ANYWAY, I HAD LIKE, TWO TOO MANY DRINKS LAST NIGHT SO EXCUSE MY EXCITEMENT & OVERUSAGE OF CAPITALIZATION AND THE WHATNOT.
WELL ANYWAY, ONTO THE STORY...
WHEN THE SNOW FALLS ON RD, YOU DESCRIBED THE SNOW AS COLD, HEAVY AND SUPER-EMBARRASSING. UM, AS FAR AS I KNOW, THE SNOW ITSELF ISN'T EMBARRASSING, BUT THE MOMENT WHEN IT ACTUALLY FELL ON RD... WELL, YEAH. YOU GET THE POINT.
ALSO,
Gulping down the urge to hide from the look she was giving me, I straightened up and tried to wing it. “Y-You heard me! Let's go build a snowpony.”
"WING IT"
I C WAT U DID THER.
PROPS FOR PEGASUS PUN.
LOVE YOUR WRITING STYLE AND STORY IDEAS.
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
Wow, this was hilarious!! Had me grinning the whole time.
I do wish there was a bit more, I wanted to see the look on Dash's face the next day.
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Holy.... You got a fan now UnlicenseBrony. And I don't think it was just two... Maybe like a thousand...
But overall this ain't a bad story, I only wish it wasn't.. You know, finished. If only there was Dashies reaction to the gift.
AAWWWWWWEEEEEEEEEEWWWEEEEWEWEWEWWEWEEEEWWWWW x3
So much HNNNNGGGG!!!!
even I'm not the romance loving guy.
Damnit now I really wanna see RD's reaction...
oh well, i guess ill just have to dream up my own version when I hit the sack in a few, Awesome story anyway!
You HAVE to make another chapter of this.
There's no questioning it, make another chapter
Dash deserves the closure since she still thinks that everything sailed right past AJ
That. Was awesome <3
I want to See RD's reaction now, though
Adorable. Goddamn adorable.
All my Christmas love, my friend. All of it.
Not even sure why you have the dislikes. People are idiots obviously.
Very funny fic, enjoyable to the last word. hell, I didn't even expect the ending so kudos on that too.
Hey everyone! Thank you for all your comments - it's always awesome to come back after a few days away to see all your feedback and kind words.
RE: Conclusion/Epilogue/Continuation: Apparently a lot of you are eager to see an epilogue... and I think I'd like to write one. But I am very busy with everything right now. Mid to late January should (in theory) be a bit quieter, so I'll make it my goal to get an epilogue written by the end of that month!
1846965 You're very welcome - I'm really happy that you liked it! And thank you for putting forward the idea!
1848968 Thanks!
1849075 Ah, it's only a slight overusage of capitalization! Thank you for the compliments and the feedback. I'll definitely take another look at the 'embarrassing snow' bit - it was supposed to be a metaphor but I could've written it better. Also I'm quite fond of puns, especially pegasus-related ones
1849217 Thank you! It's awesome to hear that I actually wrote something funny for once
1849226 Thank ya kindly
And your wish will be granted, some time next month!
1849344 Not quite sure what to say to that... Except, of course
"Yay!"
1852307 Sweet! A "HNNNNGGGG!!!!" and 4 hearts from someone who doesn't love romance? High praise indeed!
Thanks!
1852556 Thank you! I wish I could dream things up at will
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"Okay..." Well, yeah, she does deserve it I suppose. I look forward to writing it!
1852957 Yay! Thank you! Although you can't see it 'now', I'll get an epilogue done quite soon (see above)
1853779 Christmas love, right back at you! Thank you very much!
1856448 Awesome! Good to hear you found it funny, I'm new to writing comedy. As for the dislikes, I don't know - I don't think anyone's ever left me a thumbs down and told me what it was that they didn't like
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You're punny.
Anyway, gosh, I love that you're planning on doing an epilogue. Take your time~ I'm pretty sure it'll be worth the wait!
Also, I looked back at my comment that I left you the other day...
Gosh, I can't believe I act like that when I drink alcoholic apple cider.
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YES!! Epilogue
Happy is me.
Continue please
This is how appledash is done.
Its cute and funny and that ending...I don't even have words to describe it.
That is the most buckin' adorable thing I have read in a long time. Oh Applejack, playin' hard to get
So cute! Love it
Absolutely adorable. Trying-too-hard Dash is always fun and you did an great job with her here.
And.... dammit. I can't believe I thought this was cute. asdfghjkl, I've gotten too soft.
I love this story!!!! It's funny though, I was going to write an AppleDash story that went almost exactly the way this one did. I had it all planned out and everything... Oh well, I guess I better write it anyway.
Ok so I was reading this and I got to the part where rainbows trying to show her love for aj and at the time I was listening eminem's song asshole and these lyrics were sang right after this part. "Good luck trying to convince a blond" I pooped a little. (not literally)
So, you were trying to have them build a snowpony a year before Princess Elsa suggested it? Are you a wizard?
I slapped my forehead so damn hard