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The Spring is Sprung Feast is a yearly tradition in Ponyville, full of food, fun and dancing into the early hours of the morning. Derpy asks Rarity for help 'dressing to impress' when Cloud Kicker sets her sights on Time Turner as her date, but Rarity finds that she gets more from helping the clumsiest pony in town than mere job satisfaction.
Continues in Feast of Love.
Inspired by the fanart 'Bowties' by SketchyVibes, which is also the cover art of this fic.
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A really nice story.
Aye, quite a good story indeed. Though now I am left feeling a need for stories where Derpy and Rarity hang out.
Well, this turned out different than I expected. Not that that's a bad thing, even though was a bit letdown. Had thought this would be a new ship from the tags, but was still awesome!
Poor Derpy and her scornful treatment that's done more often than not, as far as I know in stories. Felt kinda sorry for her, even if it wasn't stated as intentional (like usual), her actions and such. I was curious as to why nothing worked as far as you did with Rarity, for a dress to impress Time Turner, but eh, suppose it was to go with the pic that inspired this story. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png Interactions between Derpy and Rarity were kinda touching, even if it was a bit shaky with how you had Derpy talking when she was EXTREMELY nervous, and how cautious and self-hating she was towards herself.
But as long as wasn't you hating on her (which I strongly doubt, but never can be too sure? No offense 
), I'm kinda cool with how you portrayed her, especially since it all turned out alright, pretty much. 
...Even if again, had thought this would be Derpy/Rarity romance, a newbie for me and thought things would happen during their little spa outing. 
But still, very well done, and hey, just noticed you're the same one who wrote That Is A Friend Who Cares!
Boy, do I feel like a tool, since wasn't checking for names and such before reading. 
Anyway, will definitely see about keeping an eye out for future fics by you, obab! And agree with above guy, feel like could use another story, even if wouldn't have Derpity (that sounds wrong, but nothing better as far as name for this potential ship) romance!
Please do a sequel :D I wanna see what happens to the Doctor and Derpy, because that is best ship.
I don't usually read stories with Rarity as a main character, but I'm glad I read this one. It was both heart-breaking and adorable and I greatly enjoyed all the detail you put in to it.
I also really liked the touches with Derpy's problems with language. I'm thoroughly fascinated by social anxiety disorders and the speech problems thay bring about, so that tickled my fancy.
That was awesome! Great Job.
meow
1995894
Thank you. ^_^
Such a touching story, and I am happy for Derpy.
1995929
Can you imagine Rarity designing outfits for Dinky? It'd be Honey Boo Boo, pony style!
1996106
Um, woof woof?
1996042
Cheers very much.
1996028
Cheers muchly.
Since Derpy's voice is such a sticky wicket, I thought I'd avoid canon and explore that aspect a little more. I'm glad it was successful. 
1996002
I'm planning a companion piece around two other characters at the Feast (it might even become a series of fics if I have time), so I'll see if I can wangle them in there for you.
Very very cute. But, I need to point out some spelling/grammar errors.
clarity
looking
plate
That's all I recall noticing. But in all seriousness, I really loved this story. It was so sweet and I loved the interaction between Rarity and Derpy. I'd love a sequel to this!
1995995
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I now have an uncontrollable urge to write Derpy/Rarity, just so I can use the tag 'Derpity'.
Thank you for your thoughtful and articulate response. I feel slightly foolish not being able to reply in kind. I have a real soft spot for Derpy, so no worries there; her backstory is so rich with tragic possibilities that she's a gem to write.
Thank you again. I really appreciate this kind of feedback.
~Scribbler
1996245
Actually, alacrity is a word; it means 'speed' or 'swiftness'. I'll concede you're right with the other two, though. Those slipped through the net.
I'm hoping to write a companion piece about two other characters at the Feast, so I'll see what I can do. Also, on an unrelated note, I've been watching QI a lot recently and I swear, for a second there I honestly thought your icon was Stephen Fry.
1996233
I suppose but I doubt Dinky would be raised to be as rude as I've heard the people on that show act.
1996238
Yay for creative, original ideas!
I also (as evidenced in my own writing) like the idea of Derpy being very aware and self-conscious of the destruction she unintentionally leaves in her wake. Her self-depreciating nature is very touching and also something I find very relatable. I really enjoy that kind of true-to-life-ness (if that makes any sense) and found the whole thing kind of poignant, from Derpy's depression and sadness to Rarity's...almost-blunder in attempting to help her, yet still managing to do so fabulously. It makes me wonder what kind of odd friendship they would have after the end of this story.
1996262 I see, I thought it was that she was doing something with clarity, my bad.
Never saw myself looking like Stephen Fry. lol But I was more going for a Doctor Who look.
Aww, that was a nice story.
I enjoyed this immensely. A very good, self conscious Derpy story, and your characterization of Rarity was spot on.
(Joke) Alt. Title: I Are What I Is: Bowties Are Art
I never liked that Cloud Kicker. "Winning pony" my @$$.
1996241 That would be nice!
I thought this was lovely. Your Rarity is an absolute gem and I would love to read more about her.
I think you mean come, not some. X3
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Oh! It's you! I didn't even notice until I scrolled through the comments and saw your avatar! XD
Anyways, you did a great job! I almost shed a tear or two in places! A tiny part of me is sad that it's a one-shot, but then I realize that that's why the story even works. Brilliantly done. :3
Simply, fantastic
Also, what happens if we introduce the Doctor to le~ moustache
"Have a jelly baby, and a mustache. I wonderwhatifIcombinejellybabiesandmoustachesohIdea!whataboutjellybabieswearingmoustaches3Dglassesaandboetiesandfezzes,yaknow,there'saplanetsomewhereouththerethathasI'mramblingagainaren'tI?" - The Doctor's ramble on combing Jelly Babies, Moustaches, Fezzes, 3D glasses, and bowties. Never forget the bowtie.
This was quite nice and not to over dramatic on Rarity's part.
Some reason Derpy ended up talking like Yoda, odd.
Man where's a Derpy Bop when you need one?
Super nice story and I love your Derpy.
It's a sweet idea, and studies of Rarity's generous side are depressingly rare in fan fiction, but you waaaaaay overplayed Derpy's speech impediment. It made the whole thing smell like one of Hollywood's "special needs" movies.
2004098
Thank you.
2007294
Whoops!
Yep, it's me. Cheers for the review!
2007686
Thank you ... I think.
2012667
Thank you!
Actually, Derpy's speech is based on a student I taught a few years ago. He was a Star Wars nut, though, so he'd probably be pleased to hear he talks like Yoda on his bad days. 
2017586
Thank you!
2035641
I can see how it could sound that way, but actually Derpy's speech is based on a student I taught. Granted, this is based on one of his bad days, but he genuinely talked this way and often had to write things down for me to understand when he was too embarassed/frustrated to speak.
Sad to think that Rarity's generosity is so neglected in fic, since it's such a defining character trait of hers.
1996252
And glad to know I've... inspired you? 
Happy to have done so, I REALLY do recall enjoying this fic when I read it last week (maybe will re-read it again later today, need to head to bed soon and take care of some other things on this site today; as kinda behind on checking messages from groups/others am watching, for stupid reason, even though I keep checking notifications every now and again 
). And sorry again for saying it how I did, but even if I can't think of any specific examples, I am aware there's probably others (not necessarily on this site alone) who write about ponies in a negative way, cause dislike them maybe. 
Just had to be sure, I guess. 
Sorry for the late reply, but you're quite welcome!
And I'll be interested to your see other fic(s?) with couple other ponies from the feast, as I've read in other comments you made! And if you DO make a Derpity romance fic, since I coined the term for you to use! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rarity_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Derpy_Hooves_lolface.png
2036571
This may be true, though there are few examples I can think of where she shows her generousness in stories I follow or have read, I believe. Though... it REALLY makes you wonder how she makes a living via canon, though I assume not too generous or always uses her gem stock, since those can apparently be equivalent of money as of the latest episode.
And a teacher? Or just a tutor? If um, don't mind my asking.
Huh. I do believe this is the first "proper" Derpy fic I've read. Very nicely done.
2036670
'Tis a shame. I like the idea of her being outright selfish to the point where her natural sympathy kicks in and makes her more generous than any other pony.
I don't mind at all. I'm a secondary school teacher.
Ponies get everyone in the end.
2052646
I'm glad I was your first.
2052927
Quite possibly, more than likely not doing so. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rarity.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_duck_flip.png
*nods* Well, I may utilize this aspect of hers in a story idea centered around it, thanks to MY comment before.
Also still have yet to re-read this like said I would, but hopefully will... soon.
Really sweet and well written, I love the concept and it would be awesome to read more about Rarity and Derpy's friendship.
2126859
There is actually a sequel called 'Feast of Love' set at the feast itself. Rarity and Derpy only cameo but they're in there. ^_^
Damn you like button! Why come I can only click you once!?
Manly tears have been shed ; _ ;
On the side of q certain blunderbolt you are my favorite writer/reader
I also went into this expecting Derpity romance, but I think I'm happier with the way things actually turned out. There isn't enough Derpy/Time Turner stuff out there, anyway. That said, I liked this take on Derpy. I'm normally not a big fan of seeing her have a speech impediment, but this one worked very well and seemed more 'natural' than a lot of the others I've seen. I tend to mangle words a bit sometimes, myself.
Your Rarity characterization was outstanding, too. Spot-on dialogue, believeable fashionista-ing, emphasis on generosity... definitely some of the best Rarity I've read yet.
And you actually gave the Spa twins a little bit of personality! That hardly ever happens.
I expected something more silly and came out surprised, in a good way. Overall it was heartwarming, with fundamentally real characterization, as well as very well constructed. Very well done.
2436525
^ this its spot on even i couldn't say it better than this lol
Well, judging by the parade of comments already here, I am late to this party. Most of what I'd say has already been taken care of by others. So I guess I'll just say thank you for writing and sharing this, I really enjoyed it.