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Applefai


Hey y'all. I'm a christian brony born in 1996, I just love making stories. Picture of my oc done by a really good friend of mine. And though I'm a Christian, I may write M rated stories if I can.

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Sunny and her friends travel far to look for a relic of friendship past, but are met with a treacherous terrain, but during the trip, a face from the past shows himself.

Image: artist xekinise

Audio reading by Straighttothepointstudio: https://youtu.be/iP4R1DJiVzM

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Well this was a very sad short story and it must be very hard for Spike to see his friends go and throughout his thousands of years how Equestria fell apart but it looks like there's still some hope for it and he trusts it sunny and the others to keep an eye on the items of the main six and himself so their legacy will never be forgotten this was good a little fast but it was good keep up the good work

What even happened to the dragons or the other races???!!! Was there another villain that actually cause all of this to happened??!!

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Where did the unity go in the first place, what about the sisters and Discord? When we last saw a races where living happily as one. I get divides form over time but everything seems to separated for all that had happened. During Twilight's time there was still quite a bit of interaction between all races at least.

Ah, the backstory, currently in the fan's hands, which (if any) will the series use or will they strike out on their own ....

The pacing felt rather fast, to be honest. One paragraph they were searching and the next they run into Spike immediately hands over Mane 6's stuff.

"Now please, let's hurry, my time draws near." Spike said as he led them into a cave, illuminated by torches of his fire. Inside the cave lay six display cases on wheels, inside one that had an apple encrusted on the front, was a brown Stetson hat with two red ribbons in front of it. Another display had a rainbow encrusted on it, and inside was a series of books titled Daring Do, another display, with a butterfly crest held a tea set, a display with a diamond crest housed a heart-shaped fire ruby, a display with a balloon crest held a canon of sorts, and a display with a six-point star crest which housed a crown.

cannon

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Thanks for the reply.ill fix the canon .

Alondro #7 · Last Monday · · 5 ·

11010269 Hasbro, carrying a huge armload of G4 canon, "Well, we won't be needing this!" Tosses it into incinerator.

I think it went something like that. :trollestia:

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Probably, but oh the fanfic possibilities.

I haven't watched the movie, honestly.

But the premise alone makes it a worth read, and boy, I liked it.

A cute idea for a story, but as someone else said, (now that I think about it), it could use a little more "meat" so to speak. If you were only intending to write a cute little fluff piece, that's fine and you did well.

You've actually got to feel sorry for the current heads of the franchise. They're in the same bind that Beast Wars found itself in with Transformers. This is a new cast, and a new world of sorts, to try and make new stories with, without trampling on the toes...hooves of the old in this case. That said, Beast Wars is remembered now as one of the best parts of Transformers, and given what we've seen in this movie, I think that same dedication is present in the G5 cast and crew, to make their mark, without forgetting their heritage. We will, of course, have to wait and see.

That said, a neat little story, the ending pace is a bit too quick, but I can see why you didn't want to linger on that final moment. Overall, a good job.

Spike can finally rest in peace. :fluttercry:

we'll do our part hoof to :heart:

Weird jump from trying to keep them away and then going:

"Heres my most valuable treasures. Take them when i die"

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I might try to see if I can make a few edits, but the treasure is not why he wanted them away, he feared they would get hurt in the terrain.

Spike, loyal to the end...

judging by his head size alone, that Spike was the size or maybe even bigger then Canterlot (Mountain), o.o

I feel like this could have been fleshed out a lot more. I like the premise, but it felt pretty rushed. It needs to breathe a little.

Well Spike at least you made it buddy now you can be with your friends in the other side you can rest now buddy.

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AHHHHHH!!! WHY DO YOU MAKE ME CRY WITH ONLY ONE SENTENCE! :raritycry:

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Which sentence would that be

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Well think about it he's been through a lot seeing his friends go one by one like the mane 6 gabby thorax ember little strongheart big mac and everybody he knows and how Equestria fell apart that is a lot of think he went through but at least there are still hope when he saw Sunny and the others they can make a difference and at least he can count on them to keep their legacy go on and now he can finally rest easily now

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Wow that's pretty deep boy I feel bad for Spike 😢

oh hecc another spike in g5 fic 👍

Okay, I'm a sucker for anything featuring old Spike. Upvote. I'm reminded of The Centerpiece Of My Collection, only I'm not shorting out my laptop with tears this time.

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More important... what happened to DISCORD?

This brought me to tears not going to lie. Especially the part where it hint of spikexember my favorite#1 mlp ship. This is a beautiful story^^

Not bad though was kind of hoping Spike could maybe fill us in on what exactly happened. Obviously Rainbow, Rarity, AJ, Pinkie and Fluttershy died of old age but Twilight, Celestia, Luna and Discord should still be around yet they aren't. Would've liked some kind of info on that.

Otherwise a nice, bittersweet story.

Such a heartfelt and beautiful work of writing! And it's nice to imagine how Sunny and the others would preserve the old times and artifacts as to never forget them! Awesome stuff! Hope ya didn't mind, but I just couldn't resist making a reading of this lovely fic of yours!

Audio Linky!: https://youtu.be/iP4R1DJiVzM

(I don't mean to offend anyone with this comment in any way!)

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I don't mind at all, I eagerly await the premier. I am overjoyed that you loved in that much.

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Pleasant concept - my enjoyment was very much wounded by the size. Could've very much benefitted from a bit more detail and buildup. Regardless, still fun.

Thanks for the tears and goosebumps, this is a nice end for the great and mighty Spike.

i read it with Spike having Paarthurnax voice.
awesome.

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Did you know he is voiced by charles martinet who did the voice the ever-popular Mario Luigi Wario and waluigi

what a nice short story

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yes and no. i am a spanish native speaker, so i played Skyrim in spanish. so the voice i have in mind is from another voice actor.

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