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A Resident Pony Games Shopkeeper. Of course, the real me is just another MLP fan who occasionally writes a thing when I feel like I can.

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In this short and sweet tale, Hitch, with the help of a new set of wings, tries to impress a royal pegasus. However, he seems to have made a significant mistake regarding the practices of pegasi.

I would like to thank Shrinky Frod for pre-reading and editing this; especially in helping to make the character voices more appropriate and expanding on the rather basic ideas presented.

As a general content warning, this story contains cringeworthy self-humiliation, a brief dialogue relating to virginity and shipping.

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Could've had a little more to this.

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Admittedly, I just had a really quick idea and thought that adding too much more would have padded out the joke and made it gone on for too long, hence why the story is so short. But thank you for the feedback.

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Nah, you should continue this! Even if nobody else likes it, imma like it.

Sequel please? I wanna see the pegasus sisters actually impressed by Hitch and Zoom. Pipp with Hitch. (Pitch?) and Zipp with Zoom. (Zoop?)

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I'll have to see if a story idea along those lines comes to me. This was admittedly just a couple of funny scenes that my brother and i discussed.

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:)

But credit rainbowdas7, a pegasister on Scratch, for making up the ship name, Pitch, and making a G4 version of Hitch proposing to Pipp, and both of them having tattoos on their necks with each others’ names.

Chicken Hitch!

This was hilarious!

Comment posted by WHEN deleted Mar 31st, 2022

This was quite a funny story. I loved it when Hitch clucked like a chicken. :rainbowlaugh:

Keep up the good work! This is going on my favorites bookshelf.

:heart: Blue

“Seems so,” Zippwhispered back with a nod. “He’s got good balance, though.”

You forgot the space between words here.

And now, if you'll excuse me, I am going to break down into hysterical laughter. 🤣

So, can we get a follow up where Izzy teaches Sunny to flirt like a unicorn? I think that would be a lot of fun too. :eeyup:

Congrats on the new adventure!! McDVoice Survey

The scene at the end where the sisters are hiding from the public in the old zeppelin/blimp/air ship station, pushed a fairly simple silly fic, to something to go on the favorites shelf!:rainbowlaugh::twilightsmile:

Finally, Zipp couldn’t take it any more.

“Hitch? What are you doing?”

Hitch stopped pulling at the rigging, lowering his forehooves to the ground as he looked over to the two royal pegasi. His wings held up pretty well despite all the activity.

“Uhm, wasn’t that a traditional pegasus courting dan...” he said, trailing off as he suddenly realized something.

“There is no traditional pegasus courting dance, is there?”

“If there is, it’s news to me,” Pipp answered cheerfully as Zipp shook her head slowly.

Hitch blushed.

“We’re not birds,” Zipp pointed out.

Ya know, for something that could have be seen as outrageously racist, Pipp and Zipp are being really good sports about it.

So where did Hitch get the idea to imitate bird courting dances, to seduce pegasi?:trixieshiftleft:
Did he come up with that on his own, was it part of the old isolationist teachings, or was someone (maybe Sprout) messing with the lonely Sheriff?:trixieshiftright:

Pipp added, “It’s really kind of perfectly on that line between endearing and cringeworthy. Points for effort! But there’s one more question.”

Zipp followed, “Which of us were you trying to impress?”

“Uhm, well,” Hitch admitted, “Kind of... either of you?”

Zipp and Pipp looked at each other before they both let out a chuckle. Zipp stepped forward first, brushing the tip of one wing from his shoulder back to his flank, “You have a lot to learn about Pegasi. Maybe we can both teach you a thing or two.”

Pipp followed up, mirroring Zipp’s motion back to Hitch’s cutie mark. “Including how to properly flirt like a pegasus.”

Zipp smiled over Hitch at Pipp. “Oh, I think he’ll figure that one out himself. Come on, Casaneighva, we were going to go get lunch.”

“Consider it a first date,” Pipp agreed, turning off her phone as they started leading Hitch out of the park and towards the coast.

Ya know, based on the fact that Hitch got an immediate first date with both of the royal sisters after the "traditional pegasus courting dance", it actually worked.:trixieshiftright::duck:
Despite Zipp's assertion that they're not birds.

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Honestly, I was inspired to do this mostly by the "pegasi are birds" meme. I'm not entirely sure where Hitch got the idea, but given that it's also implied that pegasi are believed to eat their young, I can see it coming from similarly racist teachings. The fact that it winds up getting the two sisters, thereby winning them over, does carry some implications I had not thought about at the time, and were I to give the story a revisit, I probably would have gone with something else. It was just something that my pre-reader and I thought would be funny to have happen, with funny in universe consequences like it catching on and becoming a new meme in Zephyr Heights.

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