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MrSpartan


Just a man. Nothing special. I like almost everything I can find about sci-fi and epic high fantasy. I like plenty of other things, but you don't really care about that I'm sure.

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Discord knew this was coming. He knew. So did Princess Twilight. They knew. They saw it coming a mile away. Yet, they let this happen anyway. Why couldn't they just let things stay the same? Who's the bigger fool here?

As of Nov/12/19 this story has made it to the featured page! That has never happened to me before! Hell yeah! Welp, as of Nov/16/19 the story isn’t on the featured page anymore. Oh well, nothing lasts forever.
Author's Note: Okay! So this is a pretty simple story I pumped out because I was in a depression-fueled journey through immortality and its repercussions after seeing the finale of the show and realizing we've been right about it all since bucking SEASON 3! But whatever, it's fine, we're all fine. Just so you know I did NOT have any proof readers or editors so if you want to point stuff out that I got wrong, I'll happily fix it. COMMENTS ARE MUCH APRECIATED! Please leave one if you can think of something to say or if you just have something relevant to share. Also, maybe let me down gently if I suffered from "talking heads" too much in this. Improvement is a slow process and I'm rusty as all hell. Okay? Okay.

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That... hit hard and hurt. I'm, oddly enough, genuinly sad right now. Good work. Great read, heavy pain.

Wow. That hit hard.

IT IS SO SAD AND BEAUTIFUL!!!!
I AM TOTALLY IN TEARS
I LIKE THE ENDING ABOUT DISCORD, YOU KNOW, IT MAYBE POSSIBLE FOR THEM TO MEET AGAIN IN OTHER WORLD.

What Discord said is what a lot of people would want... the people they care about to be with them forever

Well, that was gut wrenching. I absolutely love it.

This was excellently written and paced. I loved the gut wrenching sorrow of it all. The prose and pacing was deliciously smooth.

FUCK YOU! It is too well done

It's wrong to keep Ponies alive if they dont want to be. Very good. I'm glad to see I'm no the only one with anti immortality story here. Thumbs up!

Ehhh.... depression storys; I have a few of those.
Yeah...
*you posted in you just want a comment ;) *

holy shit

i repeat everything everyone said about this fic

i wanna write a "sequel" inspired by this. fuck

The truth that we all know will be coming for twilight and discord. Put this topic on a teen show there would be a whole season of just watching them lose a bit of them selves at every funeral. Well written story.

Alondro trots in, "Hey Discord... you DID kinda-sorta raise Sombra from the dead after he got blowed up real good. Just snap your fingers and bring everypony you want back from the dead, and bend their minds so they like it. You have already demonstrated your capacity to rework a pony's personality as you desire. THERE IS LITERALLY NOTHING STOPPING YOU.

Discord's eyes grew HUGE, like "Tiny Toons"-shocked-level exaggerated. "I... AM GOD OF EQUESTRIA!!"

Alondro nods, "Pretty much, yeah."

Also, Celestia and Luna got over this crap long ago. Do you have any idea how many ponies they knew who died? Millions. Literally. Millions.

Just more proof Twilight was NEVER WORTHY OF BEING AN ALICORN IN THE FIRST PLACE!!

As usual, I was right all along. Ha!

Twilight put a hoof to her chin as they walked together. “Alright, I give up. Where are you going?”

“Nowhere,” he said quietly.

Twilight was in front of him now. “Uh, you mean nowhere in particular, right?”

“I mean nowhere, nada, zilch, emptiness, anywhere but here. Comprende, Miss Sparkle?”

Ah, so he's going back where he came from in the first place... only to forget everything after a few epochs of oblivion and drift back through the interdimensional void to where he slipped into Equestria… to repeat the same thing over and over and over for all of his temporal loop eternity.

And I get to watch from the much more awesome universe I constructed... since I have a vastly better imagination and don't do emo. :trollestia:

I always find it hilariously pathetic when babies try to whine to me about how their 20 years of life or so is so unbearable. What wastes of organic matter!

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Yeah. I would prefer to leave this world rather than stay forever. Immortality is a curse.

:trollestia: In the black void of Discords making came a faint voice "It took you long enough, But I forgive you"
"You're here?"
:flutterrage: "I'm surely not Angel Bunny!"
:derpytongue2: "Well cross my eyes"
:duck: "Before you make your stay permanent tell my Spikey Wikey I miss him dearly"
:twilightoops: The more we know
:facehoof: The less faith we have
:trollestia: pass the tissues

A somber but important tale about the role that death plays in the world.

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Then I’ve done my job. :scootangel:
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How hard? This hard?

https://m.

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If everyone can’t be immortal, why should anyone be?
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So you thought the pacing was good? Alright. I was worried about things moving too fast but I didn’t want to make the conversations last longer than they logically would. Although I had some wiggle room since both Twi and Discord can be pretty big talkers.
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Actually I have your story on my To Read Later List. I’ll get to when I can but I’ll DEFINITELY leave a comment now. I might not have much to say though. I’m terrible at giving editorial criticism. I usually try to leave at least one comment on every story unless it’s from 2015 or earlier since a lot of the time those writers aren’t on this site anymore and I figure I’m talking to no one. I guess I’m actually one of the few older fans of FiM that’s still here and still occasionally writing (since 2012). Huh, weird.
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And thank you for leaving one!:twilightsmile:
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Feel free if really want to, I guess. Not sure where we could really go from here since this is a pretty self contained story though.
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Or ALTERNATIVELY! Who Wants to Live Forever

A tombstone lie next to five others

a tombstone lied/lies?

“Discord, it’s been a month

I feel like Twilight should have some throwaway line about being too busy (maybe diplomacy stuff, maybe domestic stuff) to have heard of Discord's sentry-standing before this. Maybe something like "I would have come sooner, but [excuse here], and.. honestly I had been hoping the thought of the Spirit of Chaos being immobile for so long was an exaggeration..."

he felt stiffness as he turned his serpentine body halfway around to stare at her [...] with only one bloodshot eye.

I just want to be sure I understand because I like the image: his lower extremities don't move at all, while his upper half twists 180 degrees (fitting for his nature), and one eye sticks out to maintain sight of the tombstone?

She was looking at him from under a screen of magic that was just big enough to keep her safe from the rain.

And, I sort of feel like Twilight might have extended the rain screen soon after seeing Discord was really there, even though he doesn't need it- especially if over the decades Twilight has come to consider Discord a true friend.

would be nothing more then a pile of rubble-if that

than
And although I'd understand that he wouldn't choose to, Discord could keep the marker in repair.

Standing around here day in and day out, it’s not healthy,”

It may be part of the 'talking heads' you mentioned, but without some more description of Twilight's voice or facial expression, this feels a little tone-deaf of her to say.

“Discord I-“

He pushed her out of the way with one claw.

I like that abrupt action. I think it really helps solidify Discord's obsession.

If he didn’t keep an eye on it, he just knew it would be nothing more than sand and dust the next time he blinked.

And I like this because it makes it feel like immortality had made Discord careless with time and now he's 'grasping at straws' in a way.

one thousandth two hundredth forty seventh

Fourty seven hmm? sounds like a Star Trek reference to me! And that'd be almost Fourty-two times a day depending on the month! :ajsmug:

“You’ll only succeed in making yourself miserable.”

"more miserable" might be more fitting given how long she knows Discord's been standing there.

“Ex-cuse me?! [...] Do you really think I’m perfectly okay with that?! And why wont you look at me?!”

I think Twilight's outburst here is very well done.

She huffed.

“Neither is life Princess, but beings like us have to go through a lot of it anyway.”

Maybe: 'She huffed. And Discord continued, “Neither is life, Princess, but beings like us have to go through a lot of it anyway.” '

“I’m not here as the princess, [...] with the exception of a few uptights and the princesses

Should Princess(es) be capitalised?

“No Princess, nopony ever died- ever. Not once in my thousand years as a ruler [...] They could live forever in my wonderland of confusion and fun, where nothing had to make sense.

I just want to say that I've always enjoyed the headcanon that time itself didn't function as normal under Discord's influence, but I understand this rendition of Discord isn't one where he has universal power reach.

“I went back on our little deal of course,” Discord started again, wringing his claws together. “I kept her alive longer than she would have lasted otherwise. Did you know that, Princess?”

I like how this story can sort of work as a companion to Somber's One Last Snap

Watching them go had been, hard.

maybe have an ellipsis instead of a comma?

Perhaps it would make him feel better? Perhaps it would make him feel worse. He didn’t know and Fluttershy wasn’t there to give advice anymore.

This is a good monologue on the vulnerability Discord feels and how much he came to depend on Fluttershy.

I can fix any mistake if I really put my mind to it, at least according to, Fluttershy

I'm uncertain if the comma before Fluttershy is intentional. Another ellipsis instead?

a few green specters flew about while whaling

wailing? And should there be some explicit mention that Discord broke eye-contact with the tombstone? Since Discord emphasises that he did so later, mentioning the eye-contact break I do think should be minimal. I just know that for myself I can get tripped up when something important like this happens subtly, and I break immersion to keep rereading the lines thinking I missed something rather than continue on with the story to get the explanation later on.

Another snap and a portal surrounded by ticking clocks

STOP!” Twilight yelled, using the Canterlot voice

I do wish we could have once heard how Twilight's Royal Canterlot Voice would sound.

Are you not entertained?

:ajsmug: I have to wonder if anyone can fully unironically use that sentence ever again.

At least then I don’t feel anything!

I no longer know if it's just fanon that Discord was conscious during his petrified state.

Discord held the claw in the air a moment longer but the crackle of energy had gone. His eyes were cast down and his ears drooped.

This may benefit from one more line of tension to let it really sink in for Discord, but again, such a rapid cancellation of Discord's intention might be showing how strong the invocation of Fluttershy's wants has on Discord. Fluttershy's wants are also the perfect (maybe only legitimate) reason for avoiding '(chaos)magic solves everything'.

There was a very slight chip that hadn’t been there before. Had he done that?

This is a good reminder of Discord's obsession combined with his immortal carelessness.

He had failed again. Another mistake he couldn’t take back.

I appreciate the realism in how one mistake creates a cascading collapse of one's feelings of self-worth.

She wasn’t a friend to all, because she was dead. She wasn’t the Element of Kindness, because that had already been passed on to another. And she certainly wasn’t here. All that made her who she is was gone. Her thoughts, emotions, memories, they were all somewhere else now. She wasn’t coming back.

:fluttershysad::fluttercry::fluttershbad:

She had honestly been grasping at straws at that point,

I won't pretend that what I type here is anything more than one interpretation (and I'm probably being heavily influenced by Shining Armor's behaviour in Aquaman's Zealots of Canterlot), but I feel that by this age Twilight would have come to feel that Discord may need a distraction like she suggests, but later, and that right now he just needs the unspeakable presence and companionship of someone who has some portion of understanding what Discord is feeling.

“So you’re going to your house in the chaos dimension then?” she asked.

Maybe more description of Twilight's emotion here?

For all her years as a ruler, when she was alone she still at times acted like that same little unicorn Discord had met so long ago.

I was thinking this too. Twilight acknowledging this to herself to some degree makes up for her seeming (to me) a bit ~immature for her age.

then they probably won't at all

It was the same piece she had to put back together, every time becoming both a bit more sturdy and fragile all at once. “No no no! You can’t just leave. Equestria needs you! Y-you’re our ace in the hole.”

Twilight potentially losing one of the friends she had counted on never having to worry about is definitely a strong point to make, and although 'you're our ace in the hole' feels a bit utilitarian of her, it's understandable since she's been grasping at straws.

“What about me?”

Yes. Yes... Very good.:moustache: I'm not even thinking about the shipping here either.

I’m sure she’ll be on the chopping block soon too. It’ll be like they never mattered at all.”

Very powerful bitterness, Discord's whole retort to Twilight's plea.:moustache:

“You might wake the dead with that racket, [...] oh right! You can’t.”

Discord's armour-piercing responses are all extremely well-piercing, in my opinion.

The only way to win this game is not to play I’m afraid

I know I don't fully grasp all the context behind that reference, but the juxtaposition of friendship to that is interesting.

She was losing another friend, one she never considered she could actually lose.

Oh.. a lot of the stuff I was typing above sort of gets pointed out anyway :ajsleepy:

Her ethereal mane and tail hung limp at her sides

This only partially matches the feel but I think it's close enough
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This story genuinely made my heart hurt.

I don't usually handle these sorts of stories very well, the whole concept of "eventually everything has to die" and the notion of immortality being a curse.
Still, this was very well written, the character dialogue was very believable. I could hear them saying their lines in their voices and it meshed perfectly.
The subject material was handled respectfully, and your story gave me something to think about.

Bravo!

This...this is...

Oh, what can I say that hasn't already been said? :fluttercry:

is that emoji too soon?

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No. More like this hard. :fluttercry:

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THANK YOU for this helpful and detailed comment so much! I love these! Although you DID post the same exact text/comment twice in one post. You should probably edit that.

“a tombstone lied/lies?“
You know, I’m STILL unsure about that?! Until someone gives me a more concrete reason, I’m sticking with what I got for now.

“I just want to be sure I understand because I like the image: his lower extremities don't move at all, while his upper half twists 180 degrees (fitting for his nature), and one eye sticks out to maintain sight of the tombstone?”

Close. It’s more like his upper half twists like licorice towards her while he keeps one eye at the back of his head to stare at the tombstone. But I support different interpretations of scenes as long as they aren’t basically something I -the author- am explicitly against. So either interpretation works fine my dude.

“And, I sort of feel like Twilight might have extended the rain screen soon after seeing Discord was really there, even though he doesn't need it- especially if over the decades Twilight has come to consider Discord a true friend.“

Yeah, but it serves as a metaphor here and later in the story. From when it’s just her, to when she manages to get both of them under it, to when it just fizzles out.

“And although I'd understand that he wouldn't choose to, Discord could keep the marker in repair.“

I know that. HE knows that. But wouldn’t that be both a violation to Fluttershy’s promise in a way as well as just postponing what he feels is inevitable? Not to mention, in his current state of mind, why should he even bother?

“It may be part of the 'talking heads' you mentioned, but without some more description of Twilight's voice or facial expression, this feels a little tone-deaf of her to say.“

You’re right. I should probably fix that.

Fourty seven hmm? sounds like a Star Trek reference to me! And that'd be almost Fourty-twotimes a day depending on the month! :ajsmug:

I’ll leave that up to you.:raritywink:

“I like how this story can sort of work as a companion to Somber's One Last Snap

Oh, I love that story! It’s one of many Discord stories in my favorites. You ever read Paper Butterflies? That’s really good too!

“wailing? And should there be some explicit mention that Discord broke eye-contact with the tombstone? Since Discord emphasises that he did so later, mentioning the eye-contact break I do think should be minimal. I just know that for myself I can get tripped up when something important like this happens subtly, and I break immersion to keep rereading the lines thinking I missed something rather than continue on with the story to get the explanation later on.”

Well I do want it to be subtle since he didn’t even notice at the time and I think people will figure it out fine. “Never treat your readers like idiots” as they say. It’s probably fine.

:ajsmug: I have to wonder if anyone can fully unironically use that sentence ever again.“
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“I was thinking this too. Twilight acknowledging this to herself to some degree makes up for her seeming (to me) a bit ~immature for her age.”

I believe that, in her heart, she IS still that same lonely unicorn who loves books, studying... and her friends. All that regal aura? All that stoicism and Celestia-like attitude we saw in “The Last Problem” was just a facade or an experienced ruler who’d been doing that same job for awhile. And none of her friends -and presumably family- were even dead yet! So yeah, she’s acting less “adult” than she normally does, but I certainly think the situation and circumstances call for it.

“then they probably won't at all“

You ever read Two Words? I did.

“Yes. Yes... Very good.:moustache: I'm not even thinking about the shipping here either“

Neither was I when I wrote it. But with a winning ship name like “DiscoLight”, how could you NOT right?

“Discord's armour-piercing responses are all extremely well-piercing, in my opinion.“

He’s always been good at that sort of thing.

She was losing another friend, one she never considered she could actually lose.

“Oh.. a lot of the stuff I was typing above sort of gets pointed out anyway :ajsleepy:

And that’s a good thing. Right?

Also I’ll go and fix some of those other things you mentioned. Thank you again for the long comment! Love it!

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Great. I hope you will like it. I made it to try and provide a good alternative to Twilight outliving her friends.

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a few green specters flew about while whaling

wailing?

Nope. Whaling. Tiny little spirits waving harpoons. This is Discord we're talking about! :trollestia:

All of the oooof feels.

there are only a few stories that can get me to feel the way i felt during this one and its a perfect story that will definitely save to my favorites

I love and hate this. It's written so well but makes me feel so sad that now I just want to go have a good cry and I think I will once I'm alone.

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So you thought everyone was in character, the dialogue was believable, and it handled the immortality topic appropriately. Good to know! Well it was my pleasure to bring such a story to others that (apparently) isn’t complete and utter garbage.

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You could always leave a funny or appropriate image if you can’t think of anything to say. I certainly do that.
Yeah, a little.

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Aww, glad to hear that! :twilightsmile:

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So you feel conflicted and sad? Well that’s part of what I was feeling while writing this so I guess that’s appropriate.
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"Now if you’ll excuuuuuuuse me, Princess. I have nowhere to be.”

Ok, ok. Now in all seriousnes... What can I say that hasn't been said already? This was a very emotional and beautiful read. Upvoted. :moustache:

Rather selfish of Discord there.

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It was still there. It hadn’t weathered. It hadn’t crumbled to dust, not yet. And just how long do you think that will last you old fool? Discord pushed the thought away for the one thousandth two hundredth forty seventh time. He’d kept count, more out of boredom than anything else. He finally released his hold on her. Then Twilight cantered to his side again. Of course, why wouldn’t she...(question mark)…. She was probably going for the hard sell this time. He braced himself.

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Oh cool, you the guy who wrote a 14th-century friar in celestias court! And yeah you might be right, you might not be. What reason does he have to stay when he thinks Equestria and everyone in it doesn’t really need him anymore. Or perhaps he simply thinks it’s his time to exit the stage much like Celestia and Luna did. Maybe near infinite life span and chaotic disposition give him incite we don’t have. Or maybe he’s just being a selfish prick. I’ll leave that up to the readers.:scootangel:

It must have been pretty compelling because I started skimming the beginning only with the intention of finding out what it was about, but I ended up reading the whole thing. Very well done. As for grammar, it seemed to me there were a lot of commas in places they didn't need to be in, separating things that ought to be a single clause. Not a big deal. The only thing really concerning (as in, breaking my immersion while reading) was this: after all your attempts to reach out and reason with them every year, then they probably wont at all –especially Tirek. I'm not sure what this means and I think that's because there's errors in it. I think you meant "when they probably won't at all". Even then, I'm a tad confused. I know you're trying to say they won't ever be able to be reasoned with, but this wording needs a bit of touch-up. By the way, I'm really glad you were able to get this bit of info in your story. Twilight trying to reform them every year, I mean.

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Always kind of flattering to be recognized. Yeah, if I were two throw my two cents in, I'd say he's being selfish. Our lives are about more than just us. In fact, I would argue that which lies beyond us (other people, our communities, and the transcendental - love, generosity, courage, etc) is that which allow us to be happiest. If we act like our lives are just about us, we ultimately find ourselves confronting our finite nature, as Discord does here. If, by contrast, we look to other people and to infinite things, we may find comfort in knowing that life and goodness are not limited to our own limitations. Having worked with people who have suffered chronic depression and other such hardships, I can tell you that one of the most important and healing things for people, whether they are religious or not, is to realize is that they're part of something bigger than themselves. That other people can add so much richness to our lives, and that some things (charity, compassion, justice, etc.) transcend and outlast death and tragedy. A great many people who survived such tragedies as the Holocaust or the Rwandan Genocide said exactly this - that looking to the wider reality is what helped them to cope and lead fulfilling lives after losing everything.

Because Discord is unwilling to look to that which transcends death, and unwilling to look to lives beyond the very narrow pool of companions that he has left for himself, he not only deprives Twilight of a friend, he also deprives himself of all the many rich joys and friendships he might have had if he'd grieved and moved forward. Further, he deprives all those people of the impact that he might have had in their lives. Ultimately, I think he not only deprived the world of the benefits of having him in it, I think he deprived himself of all the benefits of the world that he'd closed himself off to by refusing to confront loss. This also means that all those friendships he might have had didn't get to happen, and thus those people are denied the wisdom and insight of a brilliant mind.

But that's just my two cents from the limited picture we get of a complex creature whose current status is somewhat ambiguous. People are, of course, free to disagree.

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Hmm... I think that both of them are hurting a lot, and both of them are acting for what they think is true friendship... it's just up to the veiwer which is wrong. Of course, it might well be a different answer if Fluttershy had been of a different opinion - what did the rest of them think, I wonder?

I don't see anything sweet about this sorrow. It's just… saddy sad sad sad.

And I don't see how they could have ended up in this situation, really. Why would Fluttershy insist on dying when she could be… not?

How foolish of me to hope for a happy ending... Seeing them all age in the show finale made me realize their mortality and it sent shivers down my spine, eyes watering. I felt genuinely sorry for Twilight having to endure what's inevitably going to come. Not a single though about Discord, though. Of course, Fluttershy was his best and only true friend. She mattered to him more than anything. In all of his eternal life he cared about nothing more. How ironic is it to see the Lord of Chaos struggling for some kind of permanence? You should know better than anyone, Discord, nothing lasts. If Twilight managed to move on, make new friends despite knowing full well they are also subject to impermanence, why can't you? Afraid of the possibility? The Master of Change can't deal with his own essence.. You managed it once. To feel the immeasurable worth in someone. The flip side of impermanence is that what happened once can happen again. And you have the rest of time to find it. Again and again and again. Because it's worth it. It's worth paying to heavy price in the end. Every single time.

Very well written and paced. Discord's randomness at times like this felt off but that's his nature after all. He's the Changer of Ways. It's believable. Good job for not making him seem goofy. Also it's not just sad for sake of sadness, the show left the question unanswered (for a bloody good reason.) Leaving it up to us whether immortality is a good thing in the first place. Celestia essentially cursed the young purple unicorn with the same fate she lives herself. To serve the land in constant flux, as is seen from thousands of years of ruling. Stating that alicorns aren't really immortal is a bold move. But very meaningful, considering they do age. Just far, far slower. Will Flurryheart always be a baby? No, of course not.

Anyway, my tear ducts are thoroughly flushed, thank you. Thank you for filling in the gap. For telling the story that needs to be told.

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Although you DID post the same exact text/comment twice in one post. You should probably edit that.

:pinkiesick: Embarrassing. More embarrassing than the time it's taken for me to reply back.


Until someone gives me a more concrete reason

It took me a while to accept how far my language training has decayed, and phone a friend and open a physical dictionary (and boy howdy was getting that third opinion a dry affair). ‘Lay’ sounded right to me, but I wasn’t confident that the word itself was both a present and past tense (to match the ‘was’ and ‘stood’ which surround the sentence)
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From all these things that I've done, I really do think that 'lay' is right.


You ever read Paper Butterflies? […]You ever read Two Words?

I have now. Two Words in particular had a number of comments as intriguing as the story itself (which I add to my excuses of tardiness). Thank you!


All that regal aura? All that stoicism and Celestia-like attitude we saw in “The Last Problem” was just a facade or an experienced ruler who’d been doing that same job for awhile.

:ajsleepy: That does coincide with Celestia and Luna's private behaviours in the show. It always makes me want to know more about immortal psychology in general. I really like how the Lunaverse constructs how immortals work (...except, that's only concerned with natural-born alicorns... and I just remembered that alicorns in this story aren't of infinite lifespan)


“then they probably wont at all“

:twilightsheepish: I meant to point out that there was an apostrophe missing in 'won't'.
Also here:

And why wont you look at me?!”


And that’s a good thing. Right?

Good for the story, and I guess good too for revealing to me that I am being impatient instead of letting the answers fall into my lap.



And I hope you'll humour my enthusiasm for your work by letting me put this here since it has nowhere else to go:

“Oh living for eons was easy -but that was because I was insane. Fluttershy made me sane in the most delightful combination of chaos and order. And now that she's gone, and because I’ll always remember her, I can never go back to that. How wonderful: I'm stuck being miserable for eternity instead. I suppose I could see this as poetically fitting for being so bitter about Celestia turning me into stone and then so happily suggesting it for those three.”

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Well if you insist and it DOES seem to be supported well enough. I guess I’ll use Lay instead. Still not 100% sure though.

I’m glad you like the recommendations! I love sharing other people’s good work. And TRUST me when I say I have a ton of favorited Discord stories. He and Twilight are my fav characters on the show.

Also where did you get that last quote? Whatever it’s from sounds very interesting!

Also, I just wanted to say, I’m particularly proud of this little line right here.

“And now they’re all dead. How’s that for the magic of friendship,”

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Also where did you get that last quote?

Iiii..uh.. made it up. Considering how a conversation can be about the same subjects but still follow different paths, it just sounded like the sort of thing Discord could have said in one of those alternate strings of conversation.

“And now they’re all dead. How’s that for the magic of friendship,”

I do like it too, because it's asking what was it all for if they have to lose their best friends forever. Even if the remane5 and all the others were Twilight and Discord's friends until their deaths, once they die it still feels like the friendship itself dissolves since relationships tend to be in constant evolution and part of friendship is being able to rely on others for help and in turn help them. There is something to wonder at the role of memory, since it can be argued that the ossified memories of those gone helps those remembering, while on the other hoof 'respecting' or 'honouring' the memory of the lost can serve to ~help the dead inasmuch as their societal influence being perpetuated to potentially continue helping the living... but that's starting to feel real strange to me because the dead's free will and self-determination is gone, meaning that the authority of their memory can be rendered and recontextualised into serving things they wouldn't agree with... except that happens to living people too, constantly.
Friendship.. what IS friendship? [insert parody of Spongebob Fun song here]

Oh, and just in case any of you were wondering when Fluttershy will be back “On the Morrow” here’s a basic breakdown of what will happen. Its TOTALLY legit I promise!:trollestia:

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This was a good read. I see now why people in my comments were claiming All Things in Time reads like a prequel to it. Personally, I don't see Discord taking this route, but I also can see why he would.

Well written, and kudos on the feature.

I really have to stop reading soul-shattering fics at school. I have to be an adult but these just make me want to cry

Make new friends Twilight. That's all you can do.

What can be said that hasn't already been said? That hit hard.... and it hurt. Okay, I think I need a good cry now...

This made me cry. I just dont cry, but this was too emotional for me.

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