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Hasty Revision


Critique of any kind is always welcome.

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This story is a sequel to Royaltea


There are two things that can be said about Discord with reasonable certainty. First, he will spread chaos wherever he goes and, second, he will be at Fluttershy's on Tuesday for tea. It's an arrangement that nopony else knows whether to take seriously or not, to the point that many in Ponyville doubt it even happens. So far as most of them know, Discord isn't wreaking havoc and the wielders of the Elements (and the Elements themselves) are to thank for it, end of story.

The truth is that the reigning in of Discord rests less on the Elements and more on one mare having the nerve to be his friend in the only way she knows how: with patience, kindness and consideration. It's an idea just crazy enough to work.

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Follows on from my previous story Royaltea. This is planned as an anthology of short stories and scenes based around Fluttershy's friendship with Discord, specifically in the form of their weekly tea parties. Chronological order may or may not be followed from one entry to the next.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 40 )

This is pretty good so far, I'm curious to see what the next chapter looks like. Also, will you be doing some chapters from Discord's POV?

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Thanks for reading, I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. As for Discord's POV, I'm undecided. I've thought about how to approach that and I'm not sure how to do him justice, especially in a first-person perspective. There's a lot of decisions I'd have to make about who he is and how he thinks that, unlike Fluttershy, there isn't a lot of background for. I might try it eventually but for the moment everything I have drafted for this anthology is from Fluttershy's perspective. Sorry to disappoint if you were hoping for that.

Thank you for your feedback, I really appreciate it.

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I'm not disappointed, I agree that Discord can be a bit tricky to write for, so just do what you feel most comfortable with.

very sweet concise and well written :3 I like the way you write Flutters

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Thank you for reading and for your feedback, I'm glad you liked it. I enjoy writing Fluttershy. It's nice to hear it's enjoyable to read.

I'm glad to hear back on your story, but I'm disappointed that we didn't get to see anymore of Discord and Fluttershy having their tea party. SO far so good though. Please write more soon!

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Thanks for the feedback and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm aiming for the next installment to focus more on a tea party in progress. Whether it will be the first tea party or just some random one I'm not sure.

I’m really enjoying this. Flutter shy is great and discord is certainly a highlight

Man I love this.

I really liked the ramble. It wasn't too disruptive and it felt natural as a part of Fluttershy's anxieties.

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Thank you, that's nice to hear. I was worried it was a bit too, well, rambly, for lack of a real word.

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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I'm sorry but I have no idea when more will come. My mind keeps wandering off on new, different tangents and stories.

well!!!it is wonderful for your essay to supply the story about fluttershy and discord!!
there are lack of details between them!!!
i really admire your assay ! they are so peaceful and natural just like they acted in animate!
and this chapter about the begin of the tea party is cute! the reaction of discord is so lovely!!
hoping to see more!!!

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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Thank you. When I first started writing these stories I hadn't intended on shipping, but I confess that ever since the way Discord acted in The Breakup Breakdown my thoughts on that have become... less dismissive.

That was soooooo much fun to read. I love the first chapter.

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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I hope you like the other chapters, too.

Oh my God, you have such a delightful grasp of these two adorable characters. Now, my perception and recall may be a little colored by a recent influx of alcohol, but this story has consistently put a smile on my face from day one for the excellent capture of Fluttershy's voice and the way Discord's antics flow so naturally and constantly somehow without being overbearing.

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Thank you, I'm glad you (and possibly your alcohol) enjoyed it. I'm especially glad to hear I've struck a good balance with Discord. It's hard to translate him into text and I spend a lot of time trying to make sure his little stunts feel like him without clogging up the pacing.

This is almost violently adorable.

Love the optimism Shy has regarding how the animals react.

Like the synesthesia suite.

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I hope that doesn't mean that it's too much?

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She's a very optimistic mare when it comes to her animals. After all, she assumes the best of Angel Bunny.

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Thank you. It seemed like something Discord would have.

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No it’s good. Just paraphrasing John Oliver’s description of a bucket of sloths.

What an enjoyable late night read !

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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've been working on more off and on for what feels like forever. Hopefully it'll actually be ready soon.

Ohhhhhh this is so freaking adorable. Fluttercord 4 life!

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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I can only hope for more scenes of Fluttershy and Discord spending time together in the upcoming season.

Story 1: Jovialitea
I related so much to Fluttershy in that first paragraph. I really don't go for scary things. :twilightsheepish: You wrote it so well I honestly wondered if that was how you felt about such things too. :derpyderp2: Fluttershy dressed up like that and laughing with Discord would be adorable. :twilightsmile:

Story 2: Hospitalitea
*Story begins with a very thoughtful analysis of episode events*

"And it was all my fault."

Er... Come again, Fluttershy? :rainbowderp: She just finds every possible way in which she can blame herself, doesn't she? :facehoof:

I loved your idea about how Fluttershy and Discord exchanged letters, very chaotic. :derpytongue2: And the descriptions of what Discord's letters were like kinda make me feel like I wouldn't mind having Discord as a pen-pal. LOL. :rainbowlaugh:

“It's probably for the best that you aren't here!”

*Snickering* :twilightsheepish:

The first half of the story - predominantly Fluttershy's thoughts and perceptions - gives us good insight into her choice to invite Discord to tea for the first time - which is a fantastic idea for a fic by the way. Firsts can be really fun! :pinkiehappy:

You portrayed Discord with all his chaotic manipulations of the physical world nicely, and all while still getting across his cheery disposition - I especially liked the part where the clock acted up. 🕰 Well done! :twilightsmile:

I think this story was my favorite of the anthology thus far, though if your concern is that the first and second halves of this piece don't mesh like you'd like, perhaps a small extension would more neatly tie up Fluttershy's earlier concerns about the whole vine incident. 🤔

You could have Discord and Fluttershy have a brief heart-to-heart where she expresses her concerns and reassures him they're real friends and she'd never betray him, and then he could be all reservedly touched and agree to handle things better in future and trust her, you know. 😊 But I enjoyed this piece for what it was too. It was cute, unique, and fun! Now, onward to the next title! :rainbowdetermined2:

Story 3: Festivitea

“Why so shocked?” An arc of electricity sparked up between his horn and antler with a loud crackle.

Way to bring back puns with a flair, Discord. :trixieshiftright:

A pair of them flipped back out and landed neatly on a plate along with a fresh, piping hot cup of tea.

Awww. :pinkiesad2: He noticed that hers went cold because she was focused on the conversation. :twilightsmile: I wish the Discord in the show did more things like that. :fluttershysad:

This was a rather nice read too! :pinkiehappy:

Your reasoning for him choosing to abstain from something he would enjoy for the sake of another was both surprising and clever. :eeyup:

The way you write characters often seems to render them more easy to empathize with and understand - I'm guessing that may well be just your own considerate disposition shining through. :raritywink:

You did a great job with Discord's physical use of chaos in this one as well. :derpytongue2:

Thanks for the stories! :twilightsmile:

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For Jovialitea, I do usually avoid things like horror films or especially grimdark entertainment, but I wouldn't say I'm quite as averse as Fluttershy.

I'm always glad to hear I've gotten Discord's chaotic quirks and gags right. He's tricky to translate into text without bogging things down describing all the things he gets up to.

It's good to hear that the characters come across in a sympathetic light. I mostly just try to fill in the blanks under the assumption of "never ascribe to malice that which can be adequately explained by incompetence, ignorance, or apathy".

For example, we know he abstains from Nightmare Night because, if he didn't, there'd probably be an episode about him and Luna butting heads. Knowing who he is and what he stands for, this seemed like why he'd do it.

Thank you for reading, and for your feedback!

Despite your jumbled mind or whatnot, your inspiration struck gold. Good job

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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. I've been stuck on the next chapter of this for what feels like forever because my mind decided it only wants to write about dragons now. I'd mark it as on hiatus but I know for a fact that I'll start writing it again the moment I do.

It's almost strange to hear so much from Fluttershy, but it makes a lot of sense for her inner thoughts to be so extensive, especially all the second-guessing she does. Like other commenters have said, you do a great job of weaving in Discord's antics without breaking up the narrative, and the portrayal of the friendship between the two feels very natural. Looking forward to more, whenever it comes.

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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! The second guessing angle is definitely one I have in mind whenever I work on this one, and I do still work on it, even if I make no progress. Discord is a challenge to write, but also a lot of fun. I've always wondered if the animators of the show felt the same way. He'd require a lot of extra work with all the unique things they'd have to make, but the room for creativity he allowed had to make it at least a little bit worth it.

“Oh, Discord! That’s so considerate of you!”

I love this.

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Thank you. It's always nice to hear that the little details work for people. Thanks for reading!

...I really need to finish the next chapter of this at some point.

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If your update schedule is pure chaos, then you’re doing it right.

Please don’t quote me in that.

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