It's time for Twilight to learn how to raise the sun too.
Written for the Writeoff's Keep Pretending prompt.
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this is EXTREMELY adorable!!!
Celestia:"Can't raise the sun. Back to magic Kindergarden . . "
Twilight:"AAAAAAAAAAAAAH!"
So, uh, what do I call this story?
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Up
This was really nice. Very sweet, a little sad. I love it.
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As we can see from that flashback, Twilight looked to be very happy to have "sun-raising duties" then.
Given the prompt, I thought this was going in a very different direction. All told, excellent bit of character interaction. You fit a lot of story in surprisingly few words. And the bit with Twilight reflexively preparing to fight some great threat to Equestria was fantastic. Thank you for this.
Short and simple, yet conveys it's intended point quite well. Well done!
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*Later, at dinner*
Luna: "Sister, Didist thoust have trouble raising thy sun?"
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Celestia: "Luna, you're reverting to Ancient Canterlot, again."
Luna: "Sorry. It's just--when I raised the moon this evening---why is my moon scorched!?
Celestia: "Whoops! I knew I forgot something when I was speaking with Twilight.
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Despite the spelling, I like to pronounce it "😎"
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Thank you thank you thank you!
👍
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You need to learn to raise the sun, Twilight.
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XD
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I had never seen that before!
This was beautifully, elegantly, done. The insights and flashbacks especially brought the characters to life, and gave them additional depth. Thank you for this.
Best title ever. What is actually the name of this story, though?
I love how articulate and on point this is. Well done!
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"↑"
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Okay. I meant like a name; Up, Arrow?
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I read it as just "Up", as in a concept or expectation of direction.
A cute little story
. One edit, noted in red above.
I was hoping this would take that darker path.
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Okay, I can go with that.
So, is she learning in case something bad happens to Celestia? Why was Luna brought up? Please explain . . .
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Sometimes a person has bad nightmares, and the only way to prove them wrong is by doing the thing that the nightmare causes 'trauma' to. Like having a super bad nightmare about driving a car, and driving anyway to prove that nothing bad will happen. That's the point that I personally gathered from this.
I'm glad you decided to keep the title exactly as-is. Nice to see your story over here, too.
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Interesting!
This story is trash. The raising of the sun and the struggle surrounding it are boring as hell. There is no background as to why that is, and this story seems more like a slog through the man-pits of shit along the path to the gates of Hell. Please do even remotely better next time?
And for you softies, I WILL curse and criticize to the point of being an ass. That is the only way to criticize. I will NOT deliver criticism in a bullshit feminine tone.
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Of course! The title is probably my favorite thing about this piece.
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I don't actually know. For me the important thing isn't really why Twilight and Celestia are doing this, but the moment they're having together.
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Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate it.
More seriously, I understand that it isn't a particularly exciting story, but I do have to object to the word 'slog'. It's barely above the minimum word count to be posted on this site; if it's boring at least it's short and boring.
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Being an ass doesn't make you cool. It makes you
[puts on shades]
A cranky doodle donkey.
Love the story. As exiting as a sunrise
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Oh, okay.
That was just what it needed to be.
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"Upsies" :V
So what exactly was that vision Twilight saw? A nightmare? A manifestation of her fears? A prediction?
So that didn't age well.
Just reading this fic again. It's still lovely.
Cute, not bad.
Whilst not the most exciting story it is entertaining and enjoyable.