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Pinkie keeps trying to throw Anon a Welcome to Our World party. Anon keeps getting injured during her attempts. But this time she totally has everything perfect. Nothing can go wrong.

Right?

Written as a patron fic request.

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Pretty solid Anon tale, not that I'm much of a connoisseur of the genre. I gather the snark is a character trait across stories, but it still comes across as uncomfortable and abrasive. Everyone else is quite on point in a S1 sorta way. I miss this picture of Twilight more than I care to admit; not that I don't like it when characters progress, mind you. This is kind of like looking of pictures of one's dog as a puppy and saying "Aw, look at how cute she was!" So that was well done.

One more pass for typos wouldn't hurt ("specie's","Mrs. Cakes") and I am left wondering why so many parties have happened between Anon's arrival and his welcome party, but overall I quite enjoyed. Thanks for writing!

These tales are like delicious candy that is horrible for me but I snarf them down anyway.

You nailed the irreverent tone perfectly and everyone’s SPOT ON!

Great work, yo. :)

kek

Scribbler? Writing Anon? I'M ON BOARD.

this was funny scribbler your really good at writing comedy too. now i've read a comdey of scribbler's, a darkfic from you, i've read a grimdark from you, a tragedy/drama from you. they were all good what's next a thriller or ooh a mystery. i look forward to it

So the surpriser has just been "surprised"! See Pinkie? We can pull that too. 🤗

Though, I'd harken well to Twilight's "advice". Damn Ponies indeed. :applejackconfused:

Good build-up, but it needs a better punchline. Or a punchline at all. I love what you've done with the characters, but it still feels like the first, or even second, part of a three act show.

Yup. Humans would definitely not last long in Equestria.

brief appearance of a Hasidic Rabbi

Celestia’s sweet ass, Pinkie Pie!

A+ my dude

Damn humans. cant u just be happy anon?
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hospital is particular able

particularly

whole three barrel of

barrels

Mr. and Mrs. Cakes

Cake

not gonna read it because its not my cup'o tea but the 1# shit poster cup earned an upvote.
gday.

Twilight trotted up to where he was still sat on the floor. “You know,” she said mildly. “I can actually induce heart attacks. It’s a pretty simple spell, though it does require some degree of skill and nuance. And, y’know, knowledge of a specie’s biology. If you make even a tiny mistake a heart can just, I don’t know …” She slid her eyes sideways. “Explode right inside your chest.”

Do it purple smart! I never back down for a challenge. If your so petty you want revenge on me pulling a small harmless prank on someone who is so inept on safety standards that I get injured multiple times, then I will bring a hellstorm of sarcastic annoyance upon you so hard that the end only comes when you give up or both of us dies. And I promise you if I die first I will force myself to haunt your ass!

This story seems like it could become a sitcom

Just what is Sparkle butt's problem with Quesadillas?

Twilight trotted up to where he was still sat on the floor. “You know,” she said mildly. “I can actually induce heart attacks. It’s a pretty simple spell, though it does require some degree of skill and nuance. And, y’know, knowledge of a specie’s biology. If you make even a tiny mistake a heart can just, I don’t know …” She slid her eyes sideways. “Explode right inside your chest.”

Yeah, a spell, huh. I'm calling it now. Twilight has the death note.

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And thusly Pinkie was a terrible friend who cared more avout her own desires than thw wellveing of those she claims to care about, and discards previously leanred lessons in favor of self-gratification.

"Threaten me again, Twilight Sparkle, and I'll rip that pretty little head of yours off of your shoulders."

That would be my response to her little quip about inducing heart attacks.

“You know,” she said mildly. “I can actually induce heart attacks."

I looked her square in the eye with a steely gaze.

"You're threatening me, Twilight?" I asked, "Need I remind you that I didn't even want to come here? You had to bribe me, remember; and now you're threatening me? I can still go home, and I'm sure Pinkie would be really curious as to why I would come all the way out here just to leave immediately."

Nah, but for real, that was a super OOC thing for Twi to say.

How does Pinkie know what Inception is?

Funny story tho

Texus #22 · Mar 6th, 2018 · · 2 ·

He sighed and dragged his hands down his face. “Fine! I’ll go.”

hhhhmmm would have been interessting to see him actually not to go if he doesn't wants to.

“Yes, I remember, dear, but we’re ponies,” Rarity replied. “I think we’ve learned by now that we’re more than a little hardier than humans.”

Is this a story again with the logic like "humans have to be weaker than Cartoon characters and die much easier?"
SInce it's theory anyway, the cartoon world could also work differently and in the end everything from the cartoon world could be less harmfull for a human and the cartoons less stronger than we think they are.

I didn't liked this so much, I actually expected Pinkie itself to beg for him to go to another or this party like in the picture.
That and I kind of hoped the ending would make a good opening for a romance sequel, however I don't really feel it.

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Depends on the story, but likely because of her genre awareness. In the show she knows things she should not and can use the cartoon physics of her world to do usually impossible things like offscreen teleportation or appearing in impossible places. One hilarious example of this is when Luna crashed because she got pulled into Pinkies traveling via scene wipes.

Knowing Anon, I'm sure he'd take up that "induced heart failure" offer.

“You don’t look like any of the humans I met at Canterlot High,” Twilight muttered, eyes narrowed suspiciously.

Cause why? Colored faces were normal then!
Or is it cause this guy hasn't stick a figure body?
Maybe he needs plastic horse accessories!?
I'm on Anons side 100%... Hush it Twilight!

“She’s making quesadillas.” Twilight’s whole body shuddered. “Because they’re your favourite food.”

Neat detail! (great you don't spell out why! True fans only^^)

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Done reading in ten minutes flat. Hm to bad...

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If nothing else, I like how you wrote Twilight. :)

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that was really out of place

Twilight trotted up to where he was still sat on the floor. “You know,” she said mildly. “I can actually induce heart attacks. It’s a pretty simple spell, though it does require some degree of skill and nuance. And, y’know, knowledge of a specie’s biology. If you make even a tiny mistake a heart can just, I don’t know …” She slid her eyes sideways. “Explode right inside your chest.”

Princess of friendship everyone, making you go I under cardiac arrest

ALTERNATE ENDING
Twilight trotted up to where he was still sat on the floor. “You know,” she said mildly. “I can actually induce heart attacks. It’s a pretty simple spell, though it does require some degree of skill and nuance. And, y’know, knowledge of a specie’s biology. If you make even a tiny mistake a heart can just, I don’t know …” She slid her eyes sideways. “Explode right inside your chest.”

Anon Smirked "You Wouldn't Do That, You Love Me Too Much." He Said Casually.

Twilight Screams While Blushes" WHAT!? I Do NOT!!! She Said Angrily, Though It Was Clear Everypony Could See Her Cute And Adorable Embarrased Expression.

"Oh But You Do Twilight! In Fact Last Night When I Asked You What His Favorite Food Was, You Wouldn't Stop Saying His Name! Pinkie Exclaims. "In Fact, You Actually sounded Like You Were In Pain! I Kept Hearing You Chanting "Oh Anon" Over And Over Again While Making A Weird Sound While Moaning That Almost Sounded Like...

PINKIE! WE ARE NOT TALKING ABOUT THIS!!! She Yells And Then Transforms To What Appears To Be Rapidash.

Thats "Hot"

Everypony Then Just Stand There, Including Rainbow Dash, Still Chugging Down.

Twilight Then States"If I Even Hear A Single Question From Spike, Starlight, Or ANYPONY Of What Happened Today, Then AS THE PRINCESS OF FRIENDSHIP, EVERYONE IS GETTING OF WHAT ANON WAS OFFERED WITH FOR REAL. GOT IT?"

We All Nod In Agreement

Good! She Happily Exclaims and headed for the side of the room totally opposed to the quesadillas.

At Least One Thing I Learned Today Could Be Considered A Friendship Lesson.

NEVER. EVER. MAKE A PRINCESS WHOS A GOD AT MAGIC ANGRY BY EXPOSING THEIR FEELINGS FOR SOMEPONY.

“S’true.” Applejack nodded. “I delivered ‘em to Sugar Cube Corner this morning. She had to jump through a passel of hoops with Mr. and Mrs. Cakes to be allowed to have alcohol on the premises with the twins around, so she paid for their whole family to go to Funland over in Trottingham for the weekend an’ closed up shop early today to get ready.” She levelled a gaze at Anon that was just short of a glare. “She paid for the whole trip for the whole weekend, includin’ train an’ hotel, jus’ so’s she could throw you a party you might actually like.”

I would slam my door in their faces after the first time that I told them that I wasn't going. Unless they hired Trixie to provide entertainment at it. Then, and only then, would I willingly agree to do something that sounds like it's going to end up with me in the hospital. Otherwise, they wouldn't get me to go.

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