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[An idea I had based on Breaking Out to Avoid Being Broken In, written by Justice3442 (story and author are clickable).]

It's breakfast time for Twilight Sparkle, and she finds an unexpected guest at the table.

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its good and funny:rainbowlaugh::twilightsmile:

I love adorable changeling stories. They're my one weakness. That and kittens.

Kind of interesting if Chrysalis would share a room with Spike.

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So, you're saying that if I want to defeat you, I should write a story about a changeling getting a kitten? :duck: *makes a note of that*

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Actually, she's sharing a room with Starlight Glimmer. I'll try to make that a little more clear.

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No! Not that! Anything but That!



(Yes. That. Please.)

Heh. Cute. A few errors here and there, but good enough for an upvote. :twilightsmile:

This was cute.

That's a nice one. Pretty hilarious. xD

That was amusing. I take it Shining Armor and Cadence are a bit too 'friendly' in this universe.

"Well, the biggest and most obvious clue was the fact you sing in the shower." Twilight rolled her head and gave a shake of her head. "Even if you didn't have such a distinct singing voice, I don't think anypony else would sing a song about getting revenge on Thorax."

A green blush formed across Chrysalis's cheeks as she sank down in her seat, glaring at a snickering Spike.

So, what's with the blushing? Is this ChrysalisxThorax or something?

I think it's hilarious how we all think from the title going in that Chrysalis is who is going to surprise Twilight, nope it's Trixie, because Twilight knew and she is a troll :twilightsmile:

this is one of those "the description and cover art make you think twilight is going crazy, but actually new it all along stories." huh?

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No, she very much hates Thorax. It's more embarrassment that she would do something as foolish as singing loudly in the shower -- which would easily give her away -- when she's supposed to be hiding and sneaking around.

At first, I thought Twilight didn't care because she was so tired. :rainbowlaugh: Boy, was I wrong.

"You're right," she said. "I probably should have told you. You live here and do a lot of work, so you had a right to no. But I didn't want you to get caught in the middle of things, having to decide whether to keep it secret from Celestia or not."

know

"Speaking of the bathroom," Twilight continued, "there's also the fact that you left your hairs behind from time to time. Very long, green, and easily recognizable hairs. Then there were glimpses of you here and there, like when I would nearly catching raiding the kitchen in the middle of the night or when you would transform in a flash of green flame just before I caught sight of you, and one or two glimpses of you out of disguise in the halls or such. Add to that the letter I got from Shining Armor and Cadance stating that you had been there, but fled after 'attempts at a mutual diplomatic alliance' -- which was in quotes by the way -- and I pretty much knew you were here and why."

Should this be "...would nearly catch you raiding the kitchen..."

Purely stylistic, I know, but shouldn't these be em-dashes (—) (Alt+0151) here? Also fairly certain that they shouldn't have spaces as they're taking the purpose of parentheses.

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No.
A cute cuddly kitten that is in actually a changeling infiltrator.

--Spade

"You're right," she said. "I probably should have told you. You live here and do a lot of work, so you had a right to NO. But I didn't want you to get caught in the middle of things, having to decide whether to keep it secret from Celestia or not."

An spelling error.

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I'm not seeing that. It was pointed out before and I corrected it. I just double-checked it, and it shows it as "know."

What a lovely follow up to Breaking Out to Avoid Being Broken In. I just read that one and loved it for the... Diplomatic relations... Well specifically Chryssi's reaction to the Diplomatic advances. Seriously though, what kind of monster is in to nonconsensual diplomacy.

This one being a well written follow up to a great story grants it access to an upward facing thumb and a gold star.

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oh well its just what I saw. Just wanted to point it out. looked back and it was corrected, who know what happen.

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The last story was Shining and Cadence inviting Chrysalis to diplomatic talks, and really it was more of a sex dungeon trap. She barely managed to escape. They find her really, really hot.

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but how did sparkleplug know?

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Her own room? You mean she doesn't want to be a bedbug? :rainbowlaugh:

While kittens are adorbs and deathly cute, there's a lot to be said about puppies too. That and when they grow up, they won't ignore you like cats (you can also train them to attack certain reformed changeling lords). Kinda surprised Chrysalis does have a dog of her own by now?

Hmm, then again, now that her hive bailed on her (all the children left the nest!) it's almost a foregone conclusion that she'll turn to pets for "children" and love. I have this very strange and confusing vision of her and Flutters now as the animal caretakers. :twilightoops:

Excellent! Please make this a regular thing, because both stories have just opened a box of wild and crazy random roommate adventure stories!

Sequel! Do it! You know you want to! Maybe even a collaboration with the writer who inspired this work?!:trollestia:

This was adorable, I love it! :pinkiehappy:

"I WILL STRANGLE YOU WITH YOUR OWN CAPE AND STUFF YOUR BODY IN YOUR STUPID HAT!"
^ I would totally pay to see that.

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Her own room? You mean she doesn't want to be a bedbug? :rainbowlaugh:

Hahahahahahaha! I enjoyed that almost as much as the story, lol. :twilightsmile:

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Uhm, because she knows her brother and sister-in-law very well? That, plus the quotation marks around 'attempts at a mutual diplomatic alliance' in the letter they send her about their encounter with Crysalis.

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:moustache:Only if you look like Rarity

and of course Princess Celestia
:trollestia:Keep your friends close, your enemies closer

Don't you think that as someone who lives here, I should have been told we have a former villain staying in the castle?"

You mean like.... a third one?

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Ever wonder what would happen if Spike was in a secret relationship with Tiara?

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No. I mean, I've thought a little about Diamond and Spike, but never enough to pursue it as a story idea (aside from a background event in one story), and have never really thought about having someone in a secret relationship. However, I have also read A Diamond in Crystal if the question is somehow tied to that.

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Trixie doesn't technically live there. She's just there a lot when visiting Starlight. Technically she has her own place.

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While I could probably come up with one or two amusing stories, I don't think I could do enough with it to have it be a proper full story, and I really don't want to do another story that is more like a collection of shorts. One is sufficient for me.

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Let's just say that "Principal Shining Armor" and "Naughty Student Cadance" is something that Twilight cannot forget, and still regrets walking in on.

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Trixie doesn't technically live there. She's just there a lot when visiting Starlight. Technically she has her own place.

C'mon. We both know that when she is in Ponyville Trixie now showers at Twilight's Castle, eats all the food at Twilight's castle, does all her laundry at Twilight's castle, and probably swipes toilet paper for the next time she hits the road. I'd count that as living there.

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That's why I said "technically." (And any rumors that it is Trixie who added peanut butter crackers to the shopping list is completely and utterly denied as absolute lies)

will there be a sequel?

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No, or at least not by me. If someone else wants to explore Chrysalis living at the castle while Twilight and friends try to reform her, feel free. Unfortunately, I don't know what to do with it other than silly little stories similar to an anthology, and as I said before, I don't really feel like doing another one of those.

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Yeah, the collection of short chapters was where I was heading, but it's cool if you don't really want to, just throwing that thought out there for support reasons. Later!:moustache:

Ok, this was just the perfect piece of fluff for my staycation. Thanks.

"Chrysalis, don't threaten Trixie," Starlight ordered. "And Trixie, don't antagonize her."
"But it's so much fun," the two both whined out, getting a groan and head shake from both Twilight and Starlight.

Come on, Starlight. Let them (and us!) have some fun.

:moustache:: "Don't you think that as someone who lives here, I should have been told we have a former villain staying in the castle?"

It seems you don't have a problem with Trixie and Starlight. Another additional villain wouldn't be that bad, would it?

Nice little story. Still, I found a few minor things you may want to edit.

Horn lighting up, Twilight gabbed her brush in her magic and gave it a quick run through her mane. /quote] I'm pretty sure that should be "grabbed".

They all stopped as she entered the room, turning to look at her with various expression.

That should be plural.

He raises an eyebrow then turns to look at Twilight again.

This seems a bit odd since the rest of the story's done in past tense. Shouldn't it be "He raised an eyebrow, then turned to look at Twilight again."?

This was nothing like I expected. I love it.

I lost it when Twily said she knew Chrissy was there the whole time.
This was good and funny.

this is just sooooooooo good i love it.
more please.

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Trixie as Kramer, huh?

I dig it.

Short but sweet. I like it!

"Wait a second," she called out as she turned around and pushed the door open, looking at the two unicorns, changeling, and dragon sitting at the table.

Oh please tell me it's going where I hope it's going

"What are you doing here, Trixie?"

Yes! I nearly lost it at this point.

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