Fluttershy's life is changing, and she can't stop that change. But perhaps she can decide what it means.

Thanks to RazedRainbow for pre-reading, and to Monochromatic for the idea. Whether you wants it to be true or not, technically I wouldn't have had this form of the story without you!

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 30 )

*narrows eyes*

Milton reference...

7340766 Sad but not overly sad Fluttershy was surprisingly hard to find.

Now I feel bad for touting out the cockatrice encounter as one of Fluttershy's crowning moments of badassery. Kind of.

Wow, the tone set here is awesome. Very... Sad, and reluctant. Awesome job so far

Also, small nitpick but

The birds hadn’t left, and probably wouldn’t until long after she was gone, probably.

The second or first "probably" should, probably, be removed

A plaintive mew emanated from the rate as the cart jumbled again.


Twilight’s magic touched her first in her hooves and tingled.

This sentence seems odd... If it were me, I'd put a comma after the first "her" and an "it" before tingled

I thought this was one of the saddest and most moving stories I have read in a long time. I think you capture the emotion and the sense of loss very well. The dialogue is excellent - spot on. Truly a piece of art. Well done.

This was a great read! Sad without being dramatic, which can be difficult to achieve. Nicely done! :twilightsmile:

This is the last chapter? This story is so... Heartache and nice

This was a lovely little sad story.:twilightsmile:

Hmm. Interesting. Lets see where this goes.

You're being a little too coy for my liking as to what's going on here.

Ahh, so here's what happened. You see, Twilight? This is why you bring Guards and stuff.

Well that was a cute little scene. I kinda like where this is going.

Stop making me like Rarity! Just kidding, she's cool.

7371367 Rarity is obvs best pone Corejo

If not then Twilight is obvs superior pone

That was a soft story. Nothing grand but moving all the same. I'm glad I read this.

Oh. My. God.

Fluttershy is going bald isn't she?

This was really depressing. And yet, wonderful at the same time.

I'm sad now. This made me genuinely sad.

Congrats on that BTW. It's hard to make me feel things for stories like this.

This story too me THERE...

You're being a good friend, Rainbow.

A very finely crafted reflection on loss and change, friendship and compassion. I enjoyed the development of each character through acts of kindness and different ways of helping each other out. Fluttershy's sensory appreciation for the world around her, and for her loving support system, made me feel genuinely happy for her even as I sorrowed with her losses. You've captured her gently optimistic spirit and still allowed her realistic grief. I'm glad her friends are understanding of that, and, like Mac, I'm glad this story ends on a hopeful note. And a good sturdy ship. :)

positively sad yet uplifting
I weep for her loss and her courage to continue to live
this was/is beautiful

For the first time in my life, I am at a loss for words. My heart hurts.

...I need to cuddle my turtle.

I'm wondering if she's running into... what's it called - where muscle turns to stone? Or something like that. I like yours better :|


This wasn't exactly the turn I was expecting, but it was wonderful - and that's a word I don't use often. Great, amazing, fantastic, brilliant even - but so rarely "wonderful".

My first comment though - I really wasn't all that far off! :'D

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