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Silentpegasus


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A pegasus stallion by the name of Storm Chaser has landed a job as a weather pony alongside Rainbow Dash. At first he doesn't think much of the rainbow speed demon, but when the mare falls on hard times he will be there to help her in any way he can. But Rainbow is still suspicious of him, why does he hate the Wonderbolt's and what is he hiding behind a black metal door?

Rainbow Dash X O.C.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 86 )

I WIELD THE SWORD OF FIRST!!:trollestia::moustache:
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On a more serious note, it seems interesting judging by the description. Will read later when I have time.

Already interested when i read the description.

I bucking knew you were gonna make an OCXDash fic :rainbowlaugh: + thanks for game mentions :pinkiehappy: This is looking great and I hope you do awesome with it :raritywink:

Hey thanks fro covering for me back there.” Rainbow said.

gotcha spelling error:twilightsmile:

Is it just me, or does this seem to be moving along pretty quickly?

2000816 Don't worry I have a plan.

Alright read both chapters, I will now point out stuff I have to point out.(do not take it as me being mean/rude)*big Fluttershy breath*
In chapter one I find it hypocritical for Rainbow to be bothered with Storm napping since she does it all the time.
Chapter 2 last time I checked Rainbow owns her house and has no roommate, so I'm wondering whats that about?

“This is Storm Chaser.” she said as she pointed to the stallion.

“Yer what now?” Applejack asked

I confused with Applejack's question, she already knows who Storm is so why is she asking as if she never heard of him?

So far that's it, besides that It's still a great story and of course I will keep on reading to see what happens.

As she slung her hair back, Storm couldn’t help but look at the mare’s attractive features, Her mane being completely wet and sticking to her well toned body.

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Comment posted by Silentpegasus deleted Jan 22nd, 2013

2001390 Well Fail on my part.:facehoof::facehoof::facehoof: thanks for the feedback. While Rainbow does like to nap it isn't all she does, I'm sure she prefers flying and doing stunt tricks than napping on a cloud or ina tree.....just my assumption though. :twilightoops: I'll explain the whole roomamate thing later on.:rainbowdetermined2:
Nice pic. :moustache:

Storm lives his life one day at a time, hes fallen into the same routine, wake up, fly to work, work and fly back home :pinkiehappy: GETTIT!?! But seriously this is great, Dash and Beat have so much in common:rainbowkiss:

:rainbowkiss: hehehehe, you have yet to write something that ceases to amuse me:twilightsmile:

I love that nickname for Rainbow 'Skittles" HAHA!!! Sonic Blaze-boom sounds terrible. I'll let you know if I think of something that doesn't make me cringe to say.

2022718 Sorry about the Blaze-boom, it was the only thing I could think of.:twilightoops:

2022722
Blaze-boom is bad, but in a good way. I though he just said that as it was the first thing he could think of.

Comment posted by lettersofthealphabet deleted Jan 27th, 2013

Ok i am going to say this again gaaaahhhheeeem

:rainbowlaugh:Hahahaha your clop scenes make me laugh, don't know why, they just do:pinkiehappy:

Wow, just wow, no words can describe the feels now.:raritydespair::ajsleepy::pinkiesad2::fluttercry:

I don't think the pony version of Hallmark makes a card for: Sorry an organization you used to respect, killed your dad, drove you into alcoholism, gave you the village bicycle for a girlfriend and drove your best friend to commit suicide.

“Just business. He was of no more use to me.” he retorted. Storm grabbed the red stallion and started to pound his face into a pulp. Spitfire and Soarin were trying to restrain him. He broke free, grabbed a letter opened

Letter opener

Oh my god, oh my god, like legit watery eyes right now:fluttercry:...kinda reminds me of "A precious rainbow" ya know that one alternate ending fic about Dash losing her wings....thanks to Pinkie:pinkiecrazy:

2032921 I cried when I read that.:raritydespair::raritycry:

white hoodie? hmmmmmm ASSASSIN'S CREED YEA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage:

*phhew* finally got here, ok my review of the last three chapters *big Fluttershy breath*
Chapter 3:
Why is it that all your characters have nightmares?
Kinda knew that Gilda was her roommate(there aren't any other griffin characters anyway so no surprise)
As for explaining how they became roommates got no objections (except it was Rainbow's house first, so technically she should have kicked Gilda out, Im pretty sure there some mumbo jumbo law or policy that would back her up one that.)
Storm being a badass racing and saving Dash's life(like a boss)
Wing boners (ha:rainbowlaugh:)

Chapter 4:
Applejack being sneaky(naughty, naughty)
Your now posting pictures, that's good(I feel like that I'm responsible for that, or is that just my ego?)
Storm being more open than your other characters(don't make him emo):fluttershysad:
Storm and Rainbow become a couple quicker than your other characters.
As soon as they become a couple they get down and freaky,(again quicker than your others) have no problem with that.

Chapter 5:
White hoodie, just like what Onyx said(ASSASSINS CREED, had the same image in my head)
Using pictures again(good show)
Storms awesome moves at the show(so awesome:rainbowkiss:)
Storms-ex was Spitfire, didn't see that coming(seriously didn't see that coming)
Storm crying like a pussy(warning going emo:fluttercry:)
Finding out everything he blames The Wonderbolts for(HOLY SHIT!:rainbowderp:) That's mess up bro:pinkiecrazy: (how you keep finding dark origin stories that one up your other OCs is beyond me).*end of review*

All in all this story is going faster than your others but is still very entertaining(good show, jolly good show), keep up the good work(going to fav now so I won't fall behind again.)

2033892 Wasn't thinking of assassins creed just thinking of matching it to his fur color.
2034834Quite honestly I don't know where I get my ideas either, they just come to me. I'll try and throw on the brakes in later chapters there's still more to go.

Not sure what else is left, usually when we find out about the characters past the story comes to a close. Do how your extending it is beyond me(don't mind it either, I prefer long stories over short ones)

2035831 Oh trust me I still have a few tricks up my sleve.:pinkiecrazy:

Hmm interesting,:trixieshiftright:, can I get feedback on my feedback?(does that make any sense?)

2036773 Since when does Rainbow Dash like things slow? :rainbowwild:

2037147
There are so many sex jokes I can say from that comment that I can't decide.:applejackunsure:

Moar! MOAR! This story is bloody amazing!:pinkiehappy:

“I love you too skittles.” Rainbow looked into his red eyes and smiled, she wrapped him in a teary hug.

This deserves a D'AWWW moment.:twilightsmile:

2045228 Thank you, I'm still writing the next chapter. DAWW level expectation: +9000!

Sweet mother of Celestia that was compelling:rainbowkiss:

*ahem* Once again its review time:pinkiehappy:(I think I'm going to do this to all your new and ongoing stories).
Exactly when did Spitfire and Soarin called the paramedics? They weren't around when Storm hit his head and especially how fast the paramedics arrived when Rainbow just pulled him out of the water and started doing CPR?

Storm in limbo(or dreamland) talking to his dead best friend(hmmm why does that sound so familiar I wonder?)

The ending had plenty of D'AWWW. *end of review*
All in all it was a good chapter, this chapter was shorter(and maybe a little rushed) and if possible stop repeating things that you have done in previous stories(shit gets old man.)

“I love you too skittles.” Rainbow looked into his red eyes and smiled, she wrapped him in a teary hug.

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2045973 I will explain the Wonderbolt's actions in the next chapter, they still have a role to play.

A little star wars episode 6 ending with ghosts for the wedding funny

Rain-gasm.....really:duck:

2049545 No. SONIC Rain-gasm. :rainbowwild:

Short but definitely great:pinkiehappy:

Use the force Storm Chaser...

Review Time:pinkiehappy:
Chapter 7:
What would have happened if the paramedics arrived and Storm was fine?(wouldn't Spit and Soarin pay a fine or something)
Storm proposing to Dash at the show(EPIC DWAAA:rainbowkiss::pinkiesad2:)

Epilogue:
Took 8 months to get married(Is that a little long?) beginning with that I had assumed that Dash was pregnant.
Using one last pic before the story's over, awesome(seriously, did you get the idea for posting pic from me?)
Celestia is conducting the wedding(must be a pretty big deal for that)
*snicker*:rainbowlaugh: Sonic Rain-gasam :facehoof::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:*end of review*

Even though this story was shorter and rushed than your previous stories, this had plenty of Dwaaa moments that make up for it. All in all this story gets three :rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2: out of 5.

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