Twilight is unstuck in time on a city in the liminal space between now and never. Rarity comes after her. Together they have a lot of thinking to do.
Written for the RariTwi bomb on Tumblr, one day at a time.
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Good story so far, keep it up!
Excellent!!
This certainly looks like it's going to be an interesting ride. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.
This isn't second-person, or does that come later? (I usually skip 2nd person fics, but the premise of this intrigued me and it's quite good so far
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The entire first chapter is a second person address except for a handful of rarity moving about.
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Hmmm, I guess my definition of second person is too narrow :) I always assumed it meant the narrator giving events in second-person perspective.
Well, Raritwi is always nice, and this setting is quite evocative. I think there may be layers I’m missing of what Twilight’s going through, but it’s a good hook.
Is this actually going to have an ending or is it going to leave me and the characters in a suspended limbo between time like that Applejack one with a similar theme you wrote? I guess I wil just have to suffer until I find out,
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Not sure if you meant it that way, but that's decidedly not the way to get someone to write something.
The mental image of surprised horse noises echoing through this abandoned city is a wonderful one, and I thank you for it. Likewise Twilight's happy dance.
I think we all love Lady Rarity here, but we also love that there's more to her than just the Lady.
(And, why, yes, she's not immune to happy dances either. So she can shut it.
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I'm sorry but happy dances are part of your daily recommended intake of Twilight Sparkle.
You play suspense like a musician.
Thank you.
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I respect you enough to figure you’d do whatever you intended regardless of the opinions of a random internet person.
Hmm, so there’s a little more going on here than a mental construct of Twilight’s....
Now I'm curious about the lights, too.
As far as sentences go, "If only they would stop moving!" is right up there on the list of supervillain early warning signs. Thank goodness Twilight could learn to appreciate the dance.
Eagerly anticipating the confrontation, such as it will be.
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Alternatively it’s the kind of thing an angel says in America, if you get it
Hey, can I get a full-size version of the cover art? Thanks.
On the one hoof, you could say there wasn’t that much of a conflict. But this makes for a good character study. And let’s face it, I’m always happy for a bit of (even lightly salted) fluff, especially with these two.
A lovely little journey. Thank you for it.
Touching
Hm, should those lights be trusted...?
I have to say, in every installment that features Twilight in a relationship, she always expresses some curious ideas on what she thinks of love.
I really like how you had this last line.
This I wanna know too!
Well, this was cute. Thanks for writing it!
Although I did expect some Jannah stuff I must sayI really do like your RariTwi fics. They always help to remind me to enjoy the quiet moments of love all the more, and appreciate the idiosyncrasies of my partner.
I enjoyed this story a lot. It's a nice quiet story examining Twilight and Rarity, and both narrators were written well. The atmosphere was great, with the I suppose you could say uneventfulness only adding to it.
This was really well done! :)