Twilight and Spike lived their childhood in Canterlot Castle under the benevolent eye of Princess Celestia and violent protection of her resident, so called, monster. A monster she returns to to find peace with but also unexpected danger and threats.
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The ending of this chapter could not have been done more beautifully.
Cant say they didn't deserve it.
Was kinda hoping there would be two Reagdans for some reason. It would be weird as he isn't a silly person so i would have no idea what to expect from that... also he knows better anyway.
Oh god, I'm getting End Of Evangelion flashbacks!
Yay! Two thousand likes! :D
Man, Ponyville just got wrecked. It's kinda sad that they don't realize how truly dangerous the forest actually is. He should go back in there, bring out that abomination's body, and shove it in everyone's faces.
That entire debate about the blurry lines between discipline and child abuse was a stroke of genius, especially since a healthy chunk of it was literally ripped straight from last chapter's comments. Nice job taking a throwaway argument and turning it into something comedic and memorable.
It's almost as if he's speaking to us directly.
Im in tears. The apology at the end and pinkie. Amazing.
Oh sure Regedan spanks 3 fillies and says a swear word, but pinkie destroys part of the town with messing with forbidden magical artifacts but gets applauded. Nevermind Regedan is the one who solved the problem in the end. Also who else hates the flower trio as much as me.
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Who knows, maybe in a future installment. Fingers crossed.
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The Lunar Guardsman; now with PTSD flashbacks.
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It is the most nervewracking countdown...countup?... count! Many thanks to all over two thousands of you!
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...A very defining moment of giving them the "finger" I would say...
Get it? Finger, finger monster...
Ok, sorry!
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No. Nah, no, no, no. Nooooooo. Nope. Nuh-uh. Nnnnope!Yes...
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Yay, success! Glad you enjoyed because that was the last of the lighthearted chapters. Next one is the date one and with it we get back into the full seriousness mode and start heading back to dark territory.
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You might be forgetting the huge list that Twilight read to him. He has been busy. Also...
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Why didn't Twilight or AJ jump up on stage and explain to everyone what good Regedan has done for Equestria, like oh i dont know protect Princess Luna from Celestia's cult guards, another is oh yeah stopping not only foal nappers but also destroying said organization and its followers who abducted fillies and colts and, destroyed their innocence and murdered them after they were done. Another one here Got a corrupted cult fanatic captain discharged and taken out of power, and also raised, taught and protected one of the six most important mares and 1 dragon vital to equestria's safety Twilight Sparkle, and Spike, saviors of Eqursestria, the crystal empire and the world all around. I think to redeem Regedan you should have a monster attack ponyville and have it to where Regedan fights it and gets severely hurt to the point the Cutie Mark Crusaders are the first ones to beg for someone to help him, as they cry over his broken body. He lands obviously but let the town see what he is willing to do to protect Equestria.
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Why would he need someone else to do it for him?
The point is that he could have said these things and tried to convince them himself if he wanted to. He could even have, far simpler, simply gone along with the simple request, get up there, and say "I'm sorry for everything. I won't do it again." That was all that was basically required of him and the slate would have gone clean.
There is a big difference between being redempted and being useful. Doing stuff that benefits Equestrians, like helping Luna, Celestia, Twilight, the ultrasound mimicry on this chapter, killing monsters, all these are useful. Yet none of these are done for the benefit of ponies. He doesn't care about them. He cares about a few, certainly a few more than when the story started out, but still. It's all done for his own reasons, and they are not altruistic in the least. Do you believe that if someone held a gun to Twilight's or Spike's head and told him, "either I kill him/her or you kill everyone in Ponyville" that he would hesitate for a single second? That he wouldn't immediately hurt, kill, or torture whoever and as much as it takes for the sake of a few being a little safer? Do you think that he would hesitate to trade one of the main six's lives for that of Spike for instance?
For Raegdan to be redempted needs far more than a sappy scene where he gets hurt no more than he hasn't already in the past, only in a more public setting. It needs for him to make a change in his worldview, in his character, and to prove that change by making a sacrifice. To put what is important for all and those he cares over what is important to him. This is the endgame of the story.
He could get public acceptance or be likable easily if he wanted to. He doesn't. He prefers people to stay away from him and be seen as the monster on the leash by them. It fits his purpose, as if something goes wrong he can be the one who takes that blame on (as seen with the guy in the hospital who he killed), and the less people who like him the less chance there is for him to like them too. And that makes it easier for him to have less compunctions about doing what he might think needs to be done at any point. He is not doing anything to protect Equestria. He doesn't want or care to. He cares about his own. That's all.
He is not a hero.
That was the most beautiful apology I have ever heard. Raegdan coud retire and become a politician.
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*Begins reading new chapter* Wait a minute this discussion is beggining to sounding famili-- You sly dog you. Keep this up its outstanding. The apology as well or lack there of was fucking brilliant, I took entirely too much joy in it and Rainbows reaction to it.
*reaches the end* LMAO. I did not see that coming. However if we think about it logically she did exactly as the crusaders did. Wandered into the Everfree alone without telling a soul. Raedgan if nothing else is consistent with his views on ponies entering the Everfree.
One day, you'll regret not ridding the world of vermin that don't deserve to live.
I loved that last paragraph.
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Equestrians certainly do have double standards.
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Thankyou
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You're welcome.
dang it now i'm just hoping to se an army off reaingar send in the ever free and kill off all off those lurkers in that cave and be done with it that would be something XD
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This is funny because I looked up politician apologies for some pointers.
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There's nothing like consistency about when and why your ass is getting a beatdown.
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...Ominous.
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Oh, good! I was trying to show this whole arc that there has been a slight change in them. It was never intended to be big but be revealed as a great one simply because it was unintended and genuine. Raegdan and Luna in the beginning would have shrugged and gone, "she will be fine," or "she never got hurt," and not see any big deal, Raegdan would never have even appeared at any apology, and Luna would not see any reason in wasting her time in medical devices when they could be making other stuff instead or actually resting.
Also, my deep condolences for your cruel fate awaiting you.
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Holy overkill, Batman!
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I apologize if I instilled some dread in you.
I fucking hate Leaf Stream with a passion.
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Yeah, she's really starting to push it. At this point, when the Solar guard fanatics make their move (and you know they will eventually) I fully expect her to sell out the entire Night Guard just to get an chance at Raegdan.
This below.
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Did you just imply glory holes? Because that's where my mind led me to, which promptly broke it.
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It's to the point where I wish Raegdan would just beat the shit out of her every time she opens her fucking mouth.
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Just so you don't get the wrong idea, this is Raegdan's current relationship with Leaf Stream.
And if you notice, he gives as good as he gets.
And let's not forget what he trains her like.
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So basically Vegeta and Tien in DBZ:Abridged. If Raegdan does more than snark back, she wins, and he knows it. Fair enough...but I still think she was pushing it this chapter. She underestimates Ponyville's herd mentality, and probably could have actually gotten a mob going after him at a couple points even before the end.
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Not really. The idea behind Vitriolic Best Buds is that the two characters will take every chance to belittle, taunt, and perhaps cause very light injury, to each other, all the while having an innate understanding that there are limits and have each other's back. (In one of the late chapters during their trip to the Everfree, Leaf Stream tells him that he is on the verge of losing even Spike and he should start doing something instead of sitting back and waiting for all ties to be cut off - starting the Ponyville chapters you see that Raegdan -and Luna- have taken to actually answering her and Spike's letters, actually keeping a steady contact).
It is spread among many chapters so that is why it is not noticeable, but considering their history and characters, as well as opportunities both of them have to really hurt each other (Leaf Stream for instance knows everything) then seeing their interactions again is nothing more than simply shoving each other.
Vegeta and Tien are different in DBZ Abridged. I don't think this is what they have. Neither of them would shed a tear at each other's misery (heck, they cheer) but what they have is an understanding of sorts. Perhaps more like a rivalry, one that Vegeta thrives on. They build up on who can burn the other the most, and the reason Vegeta loses if he kills Tien is because then that means that his wit falls short and he had to resort to violence because his mind and comebacks were not up to the task. Killing Tien is throwing the towel and accepting that the cyclops was smarter, more sarcastic, and could throw down better than the Prince of All Sayians.
But do see their interactions more like what Tien and Vegeta have and you might enjoy them more. It's a pissing contest mostly.
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Still hate her and wanna punch her every time she opens her stupid mouth.
I think the Beast has had enough shenanigans for the day
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You've pretty much spelled out why I like Raegden.
Yes, he's a complete asshole. Yes, he's extremely selfish (sort of. Family and friends matter to him more than himself, but literally nobody else matter at all).
However, he's competent enough that he still doesn't hurt anyone more than any other average person. (at least, when you sum up the harm/help he does)
You don't need to be good AND competent. You just need to be enough of either in order to not be a problem.
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Leaf Stream stares you right in the eye, her devious smile mocking you as you approach her fervently. Your fists are tight by your sides, and the mere sight of them only makes her smirk wider. She examines you, up and down, and raises her eyebrow in a disappointed manner, her exaggerated sigh feeding your rage as she dismisses you with but a look. She glances up for a moment, as if in exasperation. It's a theatrical play for two, and you can tell that the only audience she amuses is herself; the only person that matters to her at the moment.
"Yes, give in to your anger." Her voice comes slithering out of her lips, still insulting, still bellitling. "Strike me down, and continue your journey to the Dark Side of the F—"
Your punch nails her right below the eye socket.
"—Ffffuck, that hurt!!!! Why did I even do that? That's so not-canon it hurts even worse than this punch. Barely!"
"I mean, you hit like a girl. It stings."
"Okay, I'm out of here."
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I like that idea.
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Did Raegdan get it from Sheridan?
Or did Sharidan get the idea from Raegdan?
It'd certainly shut down some possible storylines, but I honestly expected to see Raegdan freak out at any moment because the rift was near the mirror pool and after cloning herself, the original Pinkie had accidentally stumbled through it.
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Not really. Child abuse is still a very serious issue, even in the "developed" world. It's understandable why making light of it would cause people to be upset.
The greatest part of Raegdan's character is how he never asks for thanks, whether he's helping friends or strangers. He's only concerned about him and his own, but he goes above and beyond to make sure his kin is safe.
However, this is a double-edged sword, for this indifference to the opinions of others, combined with his overprotective, selfish nature and impulsiveness is ironically what endangers those he cares about. Look back to when he, still severely burned after the fight with the Leviathan, dragged an unconscious and gravely wounded Luna from the safety of her hospital bed and was ambushed by a platoon of gryphons, or how he allowed Pinkie Pie to be poisoned during their first meeting in order to determine whether or not the assassination attempts on Luna were still ongoing, or, more recently, how he trekked into the underbelly of the Everfree to gauge the deadliness of the abominations which lurked there.
I'd say one of the themes of this story, correlating to the theme of change, is recidivism. People aren't so much what they want to be as what they must be, and Raegdan is representative of idealistic ambition vs gritty reality in this regard.
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I think this must have mostly been a case of Greek idiom not translating well to English. What I meant to communicate was that she threatened to tear off his mane by plucking each strand individually (a common, often humorous threat, by women here), and I gave it my best shot. I thought it made sense the way I did it.
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When you put it that way it does make a lot more sense. I think replacing "pull" with "pluck", "rip" or "yank" (far more forceful verbs) would help to prevent misreads, but by no means would it be a necessity.
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Oooh, I like pluck! Alright, changing it to this then. 👍
Love ya, bro!
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Every second spent creating that was a second too long. GG m8.
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Buhbuhbuhbuh......maaaagiiiic???
The TV tropes page makes it sound very dark.
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It has its moments. The thing that is unclear from the TV Tropes page is that it also has a lot of humor and comedy (no seriously, wait until you see Twilight Velvet), and normal moments. Seriously, I think 40% of the comments is people saying how they enjoyed the funnies.
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Well, that's great for you. I, unfortunately, don't usually read these kinds of stories, but to each their own, eh? When I read darkfics is kind of complicated, but there are certain circumstances where I do, usually involving my mood and the story's description. Anyway, best of luck to you, Crimmar, and Merry Christmas (or as the ponies might say, Hearth's Warming Eve).
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Well, if the stars align, and the wolves howl their ancient tongue-speak at the blood-red moon, the story will still be here. Till then, you have a fantastic Merry Christmas and a glorious New Year!
Crimmar, as one individual, who aspires to write well, to another can I ask. How do you equip your “writer’s tool box”? I have heard that the key to good writing is reading, writing, and rewriting. I gather, based on your profile, that this is not your first fanfic so you have the writing part down for the most part. But, how do you go about in the other parts? What are you reading? How are you rewriting? How many editors do you have, at least for this fict? The reason I ask all this is because I am currently working on a fict that may end up being similar in length and I want to do it well, very well. Also further question, how many chapters do you normally have written before you start posting them?