Twilight and Spike lived their childhood in Canterlot Castle under the benevolent eye of Princess Celestia and violent protection of her resident, so called, monster. A monster she returns to to find peace with but also unexpected danger and threats.
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Shit, I can't help but wonder if even more bombs are gonna start cropping up now that they've figured out a way to mass produce them.
Also, Raegdan's survival puts even more stock into the whole "immortality" from a random god theory. He never realises this due to his focus on survival- Never willing to fully test out his limits, in his mind, even if it may have happened a few times before.
Oh, and that manipulation of Celestia was dirty. I wonder if they've already figured out how to break the encryption the spy's use?
Yeah. He needs to see a doctor. At least he doesn't think he's Batman.
I'm not sure if this has been said but this story is starting to reek of Rick and Morty pollution.
7534543 I was WONDERING why it that line seemed so familiar when I was writing it down. Oh god!
7530374 One of my personal favorites. I'm quite proud of this one
7536095 It would be much nicer for all involved if he thought he was batman...
7536125 Uh oh. That doesn't sound good... what do you mean exactly?
7534210 *gives medal*
Well that was fast. I certainly approve of getting more immediately, though.
technically solid charge still broke rank and was insubordinate, raegdan is still princess lunas personal servant vassal etc etc in her absence in such a instance he wields her authority, solid charge overstepped his rank that should be called out.
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Technically he prevented her personal servant to knowingly and needlessly killing the target they were sent to recover for questioning. His authority in her absence does not extend to directly countermanding her orders for purely personal reasons.
That's it! My tolerance is gone. This punctuation error is so distracting that I have to critique: the lack of a comma before a character's name when someone addresses said character.
When person "A" speaks with person "B", there is a comma to separate when "A" is either talking at "B" or about "B". Example:
I see plenty more "about's" than "at's", making the sentence's subject be a different word. Here are some of the biggest ones and what they look like (to me, at least):
Adjective noun. It's a type of sugercube, the "corridor sugercube".
Adjective noun. It's like a type of spell, the "Twilight teleport".
A later time. "Is everyone behind me?".
O_O Um... doing as in sex or...
Too much Twilight, plz nerf :P
This story is so fantastic, I read each new chapter start-to-end as soon as I see it. But, as I said before, this punctuation error (there are more) distracts me at times. Sorry if I sounded harsh.
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As things stand now, Raegdan is technically outranked in the Lunar Guard both by Leaf Stream and certainly Solid Charge. Think of him though as a special case. He is the more experienced one, and Solid Charge will of course be listening to him. He is also the personal bodyguard/servant/maid/everything of Princess Luna so he can give commands as long as they come from "orders" he has from Luna or what he knows Luna wants to be done.
But, Solid Charge was given the rank of Commander for a reason. He is the only one thus far who has stood up to Raegdan of the three of them. Leaf Stream may talk but won't risk getting in his away again, and Cast Iron is scared of him. Solid Charge was placed there for that exact reason, that if Raegdan tries to do stuff he shouldn't, Solid Charge will be able to outrank him and stop him. Raegdan said so himself and backed off because he realized, due to Solid Charge holding him back enough, that he was in the wrong. If he hadn't, Raegdan would have just gone ahead with his threats, picking up steam and not stopping even for a second to think if he should be doing that. After all, Luna sent them there to grab the guy, not give Raegdan a toy.
IF you wonder how he could be so stupid to want to kill Sharp Chisel after all that, the answer is; First, Raegdan is currently in a lot of pain. Remember, he is still suffering from his burn wounds and it wasn't even a week ago when he made a pincushion impression and almost got his back broken with his own hammer, plus what he got from the bomb and the concussion effects. He wants to share that pain around with a big shovel, and secondly the guy could have gotten Twilight killed.
7536623 You DID NOT sound harsh at all. If fact, I facepalmed quite a lot after taking a look at your examples and understanding what you meant.
Yeah, that one quite cinched the deal. I assure you, you will be seeing this a lot less in the future (no promises for not at all because it would be a lie). English is not my native language but I am trying to improve, and giving me notices on this kind of grammar errors help a lot to refrain from doing them again. A HUGE thank you for the lesson and your kind words.
7536158 Yeah but then he wouldn't be the loveable sumbeach we like.
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Twilight upset. You no like Twilight when Twilight upset. Twilight get angry, skin turn green. Not fur, though. So Twilight look like vomit pony. Only make Twilight more upset. Vicious cycle.
Indeed. We all want her. Most of us won't ever get to do her.
-ALTERNATIVE-
Indeed. I want many things over the course of the day. Most of those things are nothing at all like doing Twilight. Most.
Agreed. Twilight is banned from future Fighting is Magic tournaments.
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Truthfully I just chalked it up to his usual violent impulsiveness being triggered by the very sudden revelation of what was going on and why coming so soon after the bastard nearly killed his daughter and companions.
Someone refresh my memory,
“We still need to talk about Princess Celestia. If she finds out what you and Luna did she’ll think you only invited her to dinner so you could get access to her reports. You need to tell her the truth and ask permission,” Twilight softly said.
What truth? That ponies have been trying to kill her for ages or that she's weaker than a Unicorn at the moment? And permission for what?
7536158 sorry nothing to worry about. It's just my booze addled mind seeing parallels in common that probably aren't even there. To explain I just recently finished watching the first season of Rick and Morty for the first time. I saw comedic elements from the show in the first couple of paragraphs of this chapter. Again my alcohol-soaked brain drawing conclusions from nothing. At the time of my original post I was an 18-pack deep. I've been following the story since the beginning. it a good read and I want to read more so no worries.
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If the punctuation bothers you, perhaps you should consider volunteering to help edit his work.
7536823 Twilight means where Luna lied to Celestia about wanting to read her reports for learning purposes when she and Raegdan actually want to get their hands on her spies' reports. Twilight wants them to tell Celestia straight what they want access to instead of going around her back and lying to her for no reason at all.
7537844 Yep.
7537524 And then go show it to Celestia herself, still laughing like maniacs.
7536004 One day he'll come to the startling realisation that he died years ago. It's only his will and devotion that's keeping him alive.
Velvet is the true master mind of all... lover her
also wish to know what pic they gave to that pony
Again you spoil us with this double release. Im really loving the direction this is going and honestly I want cannot wait until the Wedding and Empire events, that is if you do them. Eitherway I am content
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Oh well... Incentive to get better or switch to making horror comics instead I guess.
7536700 Maybe I could help you that by being a beta-reader or something.
7541336 If you wish to, that's fine with me. Another set of eyes wouldn't be amiss. If you really want to do this, and don't mind doing harsh critique when you see something done not well at all or just blatantly wrong, then just shoot me a PM with your email address so I can share the file when I'm done writing it.
7541055 Hold on a second... That's from the Princess Bride, isn't it? You sly dog!
On an related note, I still have that movie on VHS somewhere around here though it got kinda worn down since I must have watched it a hundred times when I was a kid.
I have either missed something or forgotten what Celestia is and isn't aware of. What is it that Twilight keeps referring to Raegdan and Luna having done?
7545290 Remember all that talk and rabble that had been done about them not being open or talking or keeping secrets? Luna and Raegdan just told a straight out lie to Celestia so they could have a look for the spy reports they are certain she has encrypted among normal, boring documents, instead of saying what they want out straight and asking to have access to them.
This was good. They deserved a win.
7546031 Ah yes I remember that now! The deception is getting complicated, that and reading a lot of stories at once confuses me. It takes time to remember in what story Celestia is inept, dangerous, guarded, a pickle jar, or otherwise when so many versions exist in my head. Thanks
Discord has got to be having a fiesta right now. The Elements are busy and the leader weakened by some serious emotional dilemmas. Both Princesses are out of town, with one of them greatly injured while the other is up to her neck in work, and plenty of time to just relax as fanatics continue to take up everyone's attention. A perfect, erratic storm of delicious chaos.
7553003 Doesn't even have to be huge for me. Love the sea, but hate everything that lives in it, barring dolphins I guess. I'd rather fight a bear with nothing but a wet towel than swim somewhere where a shark has a 5% chance of being around. As for:
Oh boy... just, just keep going. And wait till I also get going some more.
7536289 Not at all.
Solid Charge and Leaf Stream are now the Commanders of the Lunar Guard. Raegdan, while still an active member of the Guard, has willingly stepped down from the position and is now the former Commander--a bit more of an advisory position insofar as training the current Commanders now. This little mission functioned somewhat as a training exercise. Solid now has to show he's got the balls to really pull Raegdan off a valued target when they need to get intell from the capture.
As for what happens to Sharp Chisel after they've finished pumping him for info....well.......that, too, may be part of "some opportune training"
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Fair
I have an idea for the story, what if after A while that the people that abandoned Reagdon finds Equestria and finds him as he is looking at the only accessible rift, the one where the people were going, and they don't remember him at first, but Reagdon does, and try's to get rid of them before princess Luna finds out are anyone else.
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Sometimes I think I've gotten two thirds of all faves on this story due to that scene alone.
Who could have guessed that the secret to success in FIMfiction is Pony-on-Human golden showers?
And I'm a sir, thank you very much
...Choosing Luna as an avatar might not have been the best decision possible for perpetuating my self-confidence in my masculinity.
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I just love when the "humans can't do X" argument for why a pony can't do something comes up. Humans also can't use magic or fly.
Wait.... i caught up? I mean, that was the goal..... but it was a little shorter than my mind made it to be.......
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Man, woman, intersex, or tennis ball, all may praise and bear her image with equal form. But with the way you talk in some of your comments you lean more towards sounding like a male, tomboy, or a person raised without a female influence.
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I'm actually making fun of myself and the idea that there are some parameters of masculinity that I am supposed to be obliged to fulfill there.
Kind of funny since the primary influence in my life has always been my mother. On the other hand, she is the kind of lady that will stitch a flowery tablecloth while she has heavy metal music playing through her cellphone, watch horror movies over everything else, and used to disco dance while dressed as a cowboy, so I'm not quite sure how much that counts.
To Twilight:
Hell, use stencils. Steel stencils on a copper sphere and bam, bam, bam, three perfectly formed ux'cal runes right there, or whatever they're called. It's the most basic kind of type there is. You could make miniature rune arrays that way in record time that would otherwise take days of engraving.
It says a lot that this felt like more of a crime to me than killing Luna would have been. I have opinions on people who destroy art because they don't like what it says - and say what you want, that sounds like a masterpiece. The sheer degree to which the protagonists of this story are dislikable can make it hard to read sometimes.
It is, in fact, that easy. It only ever gets easier, even. The thing about "right" and "wrong" is that, continually, doing the wrong thing is simpler, more pleasant and more rewarding than doing the right thing. If it wasn't, there would never be a question of what to do at all. Being "good" means looking at all the way things could be easier, quicker, more beneficial to you personally, and then not doing it anyway because it isn't right to use the methods required for it.
Who knows how a species of alien ponies might feel about this, but one of the things about people that they don't ever tell you in school? Is that killers are, by and large, not unusually bad people. It fact, the fact that they aren't unusually bad people is often how they end up killers at all. Wanting to hurt others or getting so angry you want to kill them? That's something only bad people do, and you aren't a bad person, so most people never learn to watch out for the moment they stop thinking and start acting on instinct - if I'm not a bad person, then they must actually deserve what I'm about to do, or I wouldn't feel good about it by exclusion. Crimes of passion start where making informed choices stops. The thing is, by and large, killing is fun. People enjoy it intrinsically, or are at least predisposed to it, which is only understandable for a species of scavenging predators like us. In nature, all animals will enjoy doing what behaviour is required for their survival. There is a reason young cats and dogs playing will re-enact simplified hunting behaviour without even realizing.
Yeah, I don't exactly hunt because it's easier than buying a steak in a supermarket. I do it for enjoyment. Not the happiest thing to realize about yourself, is it? It's a lot easier to keep a hold of your worse impulses when you realize that it's just your inner reptile making up excuses for yourself.
Dude, I've read a lot of long stories on this site...
Dis summa dat gooood shit.
Took too many chapters to comment, sorry mate. I haven't been hooked like this in awhile. Good story!
That human is more durrable than Batman and makes everyone twice as terrified. Magnificent
Head trauma sure do quite a thing to our MC.
Hm... So he really was a genius in art. Sad that his talent will go to waste.
Goood goood. Give in to your hate……let it flow through you, give you focus, make you stronger