Twilight and Spike lived their childhood in Canterlot Castle under the benevolent eye of Princess Celestia and violent protection of her resident, so called, monster. A monster she returns to to find peace with but also unexpected danger and threats.
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Feels good to see your story in my recently updated again, thanks for this
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Nah. Thank you for your patience. I took too long to finish this one.
Looks like the spell Luna put on twilight is wearing off. Thanks for the update!
I missed this so much, glad to see your quality work again.
Chapter had me laughing the whole time, if Luna and Raegdans date goes as Rarity sets it up I can only see failure due to differences in how all three see romance and affection.
That line was a thing of beauty. This story needed this. There are so many lighthearted and memorable moments, from Raegdan's display of love for Spike, to the Lunar Guard being more like a dysfunctional, yet entertaining, family than a proper team of trained killers, to the comfortable spa date with Luna, Rarity and Fluttershy, and it has all of my yes! This right here? This was the best chapter in a while. I'm sure I speak for everyone when I say it's always worth the wait when quality like this is posted. Boy, oh boy I can't wait till shit hits the fan!
This probably all sounds like superficial flattery, but it's quite the accomplishment to fill a chapter of 21000 words with so much personality and not cause it to painfully drag on. Be proud of yourself, Crimmar, for your storytelling is stronger than ever here!
thank you for the update this chapter was by far the cutest thing I've read in a very long time. Except for maybe Twilight because she's still being a little bit of a bitch because she can't see the bigger picture. So thanks again for the family Appreciation Day chapter it was super awesome.
Finally Luna's mind wiping/altering spell, which by laws her own sister made was COMPLETELY TABOO, is wearing off. I don't like this Luna. Wanting to rid of the Elements, wanting to take over without any Nightmare help, and altering Twilight's mind without any care. She's not "best Princess", but a jaded, cynical pony who sees no recourse but civil unrest with her sister and "supposed friends".
With the activities he gets to, it's not like he needs it
I once wrestled Celestia for a piece of cake. I lost, and she became even larger.”
So much win.
Spines are overrated.
Holy fuck. Theres long and then theres this! (Thats what she said. ;)) Im not complaining but, my word. I love it. This was definitely worth the wait.
Great chapter. After so much intense moments a simple slice of life is what was laking. Simply perfection. Love the gags. Cant wait for aftermatch of spinebreaking sleeping.
Every update makes me smile. Good story bro. 😉
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Thanks! Here's to hoping I can be faster with the next one. I can't wait for the date either. I know it feels like a cliche thing to have, but i plan to wring the crap out of it for comedy, emotional, and character advancement.
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W00t! Looks like Celestia fat jokes still work :D . I'm going to try to bring up the darkness again a little slow this time (who am I kidding? We all know I'll go for the sledgehammer), and not for a little white yet. Next chapter is gonna be when we see what the "training mission" Tidal Wave mentioned was, and Twilight, Raegdan and Luna having a day out and visiting some ponies, like Pinkie and Fluttershy. And Raegdan is of course gonna be glad to see his main man once more (Angel Bunny) Still, glad to know you liked this. You have no idea of the STRESS that comes after publishing. I was eating my nails, going "you idiot, you got nothing really interesting happening, you updated after this long no one's coming back, the jokes are not funny, it's too fucking long and you bored them to death, etc, etc." Always fun stuff.
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Aw, be more nice to Twilight. She carries quite the emotional baggage right now and she's quite divided and out of her depth.
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Actually, if you think about the timing, considering that Luna just recently cast something on Twilight, and the conversation she had with Solid Charge, Leaf Stream, and the others, Luna wasn't renewing the spells or putting more of them on her. She is slowly removing them. That's why Twilight is surprised that it took so long for her to seriously start thinking about the situation.
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I always wonder, you know. I mostly stick around to 10k chapters, but what do you all think about the length? Should the chapters be longer, shorter, or just go with whatever I feel or think each one needs as I mostly do? Maybe it would have been better if I had divided this one into two?
Good chapter. Update a little faster. I'm starting to see a reflection of myself.
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I think that if you feel a chapter needs to be 20,000+ words to depict what you want to tell, then by all means, write a 20,000+ worded chapter. Some people might argue for a split chapter at that point, just for frequency's sake, but I personally dont mind waiting. I'm a patient person, and I understand that an artist needs time to paint the picture.
I guess when it comes down to it, it depends on who you ask. Some people will bitch and moan about it, some won't. It's all really up to you. I'll read the newest chapter either way, be it 50 or 50,000 words. Though, reading 50,000 words might take up the better part of a day.
This chapter had so much fluff I loved it~
I especially love how Spike was all whatever eyed from having his dad at school... Spiiiiike <3
This is the dramatically perfect moment for another assassination attempt and/or another kidnapping attempt on Twilight.
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Whoah, a little quick on the trigger there, ace?
Not yet! Let me have a few more days to have some fun. And then put a little twist in there...
OMG i have missed this so many laughting mahters and gold moment's! i absolutly love reagdan carakter how i have missed read this!!
keep it upp so i might die happy!
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You just hover there for a couple of hours constantly refreshing to see how many views you have, whether someone's posted a comment, whether your earlier chapters are being read by newcomers interested in your story. Yeah, I know the stress that comes after a chapter is posted.
Also, 8419812 has a point. Twilight rudely cut people off in her conversations nine times throughout the chapter, and was very abrasive.
Aww, this was adorable in a way..
We need to kill it before it grows and breeds..
But jokes aside, really a very enjoyable, mellow chapter, quite a nice read and it made me go: "nooo! It's over!" So there is that. Looking forward to the next.
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Armed ponies storming the library while Celestia is sleeping on the couch/human because nobody knows she left Canterlot?
Hilarity!
For all her flaws, I think Leaf Stream might just be the funniest character in this story.
Oh wow, I would not have expected you to just slip that in like that. I figured the other's would've made a big deal out of this.
I really appreciated the levity in this chapter. Adventure's all well and good, but just sitting down and laughing is pretty great too.
As for the length, I'll be honest, it was a lot to read at once, but it's just such a fun read, it's easy to keep at it.
Twilight, you speak with Luna and Celestia on a regular basis.
Smart guy. Better to wear a corpse than to be a corpse, right?
I don't care what anyone says, I'm shipping these two from now until the end of time. They play so well off one another! The ship shall henceforth be named "Carity".
Also, friendly reminder to everyone that Fluttershy is still a filthy spy. Don't let her adorable nature fool you. Did you notice how she turned down the champagne at the spa? No one turns down champagne in the presence of friends.
I love the twins still, even if they only had a line each, and Leaf stream and bat pony lady whose name in having trouble remembering are gonna be the death of me.
Obligatory 'I fucking hate filler' here, as that is exactly what this vacation had turned out to be so far. While it's greatly heartwarming to see Cast Iron? (I get the two mixed up) helping out poor Ditzy, it's frustrating to have the ongoing story basically put on hold, especially after the wait. That said, don't worry about the wait. You work on this however you can and don't rush to please anybody even if I say I need more immediately.
Now the talk about headaches had me split on what was being implied until i read your comment. I thought that the headaches were from not having the spells actively reinforced and that they were alleviated whenever Luna boosted them, but it's good that she's FINALLY rolling them back. About time some progress on that was being made.
Overall, not bad, but goddamn do I hate filler.
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But conventional wisdom says that it is spies that drink. Never seen a Bond movie? On that note, I'm now sad I didn't have the spa twins come in and offer them drinks instead, and have Fluttershy ask for her stirred, not shaken.
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Well, we're going to stick on what you call "filler" territory for a while, but don't fret! The plot moves even now, and I intend to use it to explain in-story elements a little more naturally rather that doing exposition later on. Like the armors, the photo, Luna's character advancement, stuff like that. But I'll go a little heavier soon. I'll have the Tree of Harmony appear on one of the next chapters (maybe the very next one), explain a few things about magic, and some subtle hints that I'm sure no one will identify how much they explain certain things because I'm a miserable bastard. So... two more chapters or three I think before we dive right back to action.
Just enjoy the levity for now, cause later on we're going DARK.
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Ah, but then they'd have to be drinking dry martinis instead, wouldn't they? Champagne is a recreational drug, and Flutterbutter was very suspicious in not partaking. Almost as if she wished to remain completely sober to absorb as much information on the Lunar Guard that Luna was so freely sharing as possible, leaving only when the conversation turned to gossip.
I'm talking out of my behind, but this sort of zany speculation amuses me.
not sure which i like more, the violent side of Raegdan or the Dad side of Raegdan, but good god was this chapter just adorable and funny, with Raegdan's accidental fix of complimenting Luna and Raegdan's Celestia fat jokes respectively being the highlights. though i'm also now happy that my favorite background pony (Ditzy) was in this chapter, not that i expected her to be but i hope to see more of her (please, maybe?)
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"1) Luna did not choose to be a heartless monster. Immediately as the poison took effect she focused on figuring out what the poison was. She didn't simply stand aside and watch. As soon as she was able to refocus on her surroundings she stopped the fight."
Then a single throw away line of "Rae get them away from Pinkie, I will figure out what happened." Would really illustrate this as in your description she just sits there and drinks tea, not giving any indication that she was doing anything at all other then possibly enjoying the sight of a dying mare.
"2) While it is true that this scene would play entirely different if either Raegdan or Luna acted a little smarter, a major theme of the story is that they did not and fail to do so in a semi-consistent matter. Lack of communication is one of their faults, so in this way it works as a foretelling of things to come. It is a consistent failure of their character to keep things close at heart and not share responsibilities or burden, and even not explaining themselves truthfully."
Although this is true it still seems weak, despite thinking that the poison might be magical she makes no attempt to stop Twilight from casting the spell, and the entire time she simply allows the situation to devolve more and more by the second while there is no indication she is doing anything at all. A simple line like "Luna gasped, breaking out of her train of thought and reaching out with her magic in order to stop Twilight, however Rae beat her to the punch." Would have had her involved, and explain what she was doing during this time.
3) Luna chose efficiency and analysis as well as making sure that no one else would be hurt/killed by the application of the poison instead of trying to save the single person in front of her at once. Again, this is a part of her character. You may call it monstrous or complete pragmatism.
But she doesnt... By not trying to stop Twilight and not simply saying "stop a moment while I think." She is introducing more variables and making things more difficult on herself, also again there is no indication that she is doing anything during the scuffle at all meaning the reader is forced to assume that she is indeed doing nothing at all. Again, a single little line added like. "While you were panicking I think I nailed down the poison." Would have both excused and explained her inaction.
"Notice that the only two who did keep their cool in this situation were Raegdan and Luna, though again that didn't help a lot as they had NO idea about the proper way of calming those around them or taking charge in a peaceful and orderly way and thus this happened."
They didnt even take charge in a non peacefull way. Rae resorting to violence against almost the entire mane six and Luna being forced to scream at everyone is hardly what i would consider "keeping their cool."
For what its worth I must apologize for my rather pointed comment as the whole "Everything could be avoided if every single person wasnt an idiot" trope is one of my most hated. Also I must ask that if you recognize that this scene doesnt really work well why not simply rewrite it?
The addition of like three lines would have changed the entire scene and would enable the reader to not be forced to assume that Luna and Rae are little more then the bumbling, uncommunicative idiots they seem to be?
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True, it would. I went the way of non-verbal communication. The way I imagined it, Luna nodded at Raegdan, silently prodding him on what to do as she did her part. It is simply that the others in their panic did not notice. Also... I accept the guilty verdict in that I saw a good chance for what I consider in-character drama and went with it.
Remember that I'm not using an omniscient point of view. And admittedly, I did want to add some "what the hell is going on here," for the reader, yes. In character, she was focusing on her own thing. She was completely blind to everything else. She couldn't afford to waste a second to stop Twilight or Raegdan or anything.
Yes! Exactly, but she doesn't. She is making things harder on herself, it is a matter of point actually and a VERY large part of the story itself. She is not a perfect character, but a very flawed individual, her and Raegdan together. The reader being forced to assume she is doing nothing comes from the fact that this is what Applejack is forced to assume as she can't tell if Luna is doing anything, and Luna simply doesn't care to explain herself at that point. She is very blind to the wellbeing of others, especially mentally or anything other than physically. Their happiness doesn't account to her at all. Her thinking is; are they alive? If so then everything is fine. She doesn't think to calm them down or ask their own help because to her mind they are useless, a fact that she slowly changes her mind about later on.
I mean in a way of "something bad happens and we don't panic". When faced with resistance, which is natural as neither of them considers to calm the rest properly, however notice exactly how they react. Neither of them has experience in this. They are both used to either getting their way or stomping the competition, as they are "survival" characters. Throw them in a non-survival world/scenario, what happens?
My reasons? I guess it comes down to three. Lack of time is one. I try to continue the story mostly and not get lost in fixing what has already been written down. Second reason is that it feels like cheating to me to retcon. The third is that in a way Raegdan and Luna are idiots which is what I try to communicate. Put them two up against a small army and they might find a way to win. Tell them to do anything other than the small, aggressive fields in which they are proficient and they flounder. It is very much the outcome of a trope that I myself hate. "A character being good at everything." Here, I take this trope down a notch. A character good in violence, is good in violence and he will use them as his main tools. They have their strengths and they have their weaknesses, both of them massive in their scope. And yeah, I agree with your hated trope, but "everyone is competent at everything" can be equally as bad.
You know, when I wrote this part I had no editor or pre-reader. I do have editors now, as well as one of them functioning as a pre-reader which has stopped me from making some bad mistakes (as what you intend to mean and what comes out is different as the reader doesn't have ALL the details like the writer does). I do wish he was far more draconian and pushed me harder. And this scene would have come out different if I had that at the time probably. At the current time, right now at least, I cannot think of a solution that fixes the scene a little better but still gives off the vibes and foretells that I wish for without radical changes (this is an event that is referenced multiple times, and if I changed it I would probably go with a FULL scene change which would force me to do way too many changes across the fic). I am in full agreement though that this is NOT one of my better moments. All in all, not exceedingly proud of a few choices in the first 10-12 chapters or so. But you know...
Hindsight.
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I suppose I can see what you are getting at but you can do both, you can say "hey Luna isnt doing nothing." while still saying "She isnt exactly helping and she isnt communicating like she should." By even just adding a single line where she just nods or does something that is paradoxical or otherwise doesnt seem to be helpful but in hindsight is a command to rae to get control of the situation and adding a single line where "She squints at Pinkie Pie, deep in thought." Or really anything to indicate thats shes doing anything would make this scene work as the last thing she does is look unperturbed and drinks tea and then she does nothing for the entire rest of the scene, forcing the reader to assume that she just kept sitting there drinking tea the entire time, doing nothing. I get that you are trying to do the whole panicky people arent looking at everything but there is a better way of getting that across such as adding some rapid fire lines like "twilight does this, fluttershy does that, rae responds, Luna does something, RD does something." Delivering it rapid fire means that although you told us that Luna was doing something it doesnt really stick as its sandwhiched between other descriptions. and the blurring of the descriptions being super close together adds to the narrative by telling the reader its chaotic through the very use of language. Much akin to how heart of darkness doesnt have traditional paragraph usage while lost in the jungle.
You were also bang on with the statement "the writer knows all the reader doesnt." As this feels like it was written by someone who never read it.
Something to think about, I would really push for you to add even a few lines here and there, dont rewrite it, dont retcon, dont think that you have to make it this huge event or thing, just say. "Luna is doing something." Just once, somewhere after shes sitting there drinking tea and watching Pinkie die would change the entire scene.
In addition I would refrain from starting a scene off by thinkign "This is what I want to happen, and I dont care how many excuses I need to come up with or how hamfisted it looks Im writing it this way." Ive read stories written by children and this is almost exclusively how children write.
Regardless, best of luck not doing that in the future.
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...Actually... yeah, some ambivalent action description or words that can be taken both ways and clear up when you have the full context WOULD work splendidly, there would be no retcon, the meaning behind the why they choose to act this way would remain... Yep, I'm an idiot. That would totally work and it freaking fits! God! I was thinking too big and wasn't seeing the easy solution.
A thousand thanks, man. I need to make a note of this and get to it before I post the next chapter.
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No prob freindo.
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So what you'r saying is: Put a line or two to have Luna, or any character, look like she's not just standing there, waiting her turn to speak or do?
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Yes, yes, I suck all the balls, Jesus Christ, show some mercy and don't compare me with that movie! I have a soul too, you know?
I have only one question, what are the rules behind runes? Or spells in general.
Cause seriously rune for enchanced strength, stamina, reflex, defence etc. Why not for waterproof, healing, underwater breathing or just outright rune of immortality.
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I have them working a little differently. There is not, for instance, a single rune than enhances your strength neither is there a single rune that strengthens metal. Think of it more like Magical Coding in a programming language that is only a step or two up from using bits to program. You want to make a magical effect? You will need a source of power. Thus you have to "program" or rune a set of instructions that draw magic from a source. Then this magic needs to go somewhere, much like storing an input into a variable. You then draw that input from that variable and feed it into a function that does what you want it to do. Of course, since you are drawing and storing power using these runes, that means you have a finite constant input and thus cannot power everything you want, which is the runes themselves which draw more power the more complex they are, the initiation of the magical effect, the perseverance of that effect, and what that effect does as well as projecting that effect to a target, the further from the runes the more power you need. So, in essence, runes can be quite powerful since they can potentially do almost anything and keep it up as long as the power flows (which on a well done object can be forever), but they are limited by their complexity and their rules. One of which, and very important one, is they have to be all perfect since a ruined rune destroys the whole array, as well as they have to be crafted without magic as it distorts them, much like trying to shape wet clay with hands covered in wet clay.
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That much was obvious or at least it can figured out, thou what is the power source for these runes? The user himself?
What I wanted to know is what are the physical limitations of said runes or spells.
As I wrote previously why bother with so many different effects, just slap an immortality array and you're good, or if you want it simpler just enchance the user healing factor to Deadpool level.
This is something that always irks me, when writers just make up their own version of magic that is just plain broken.
One may argue that making such rune would be to difficult/impossible or would require insane level of energy, but then you go and put a dozen or so effects to enhance various aspects of the ponies too a unknown level so they maybe super ponies by this point, who knows we shall see.
PS.
I once asked a similar question regarding Radegan immunity to magic, I recall you not answering and just deleting my comment, just FYI, or that could've been a different story, if so then sorry, so many hie with immune human it can get mixed up.
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Ambient magic mostly. Drawing magic from the user itself to power a constant effect would tire the user out pretty soon. It is thus limited in an extent as to how fast and how much you can draw from the volume around you (replenishment rate as more magic flows in to fill the void you created), which might not be the same everywhere (like Everfree Forest. The ambient magic there is greatly denser).
How do you go about making someone immortal? Think of the individual effects that all have to be brought together. You get stabbed in the heart. You need to have oxygen to keep going to your brain and body, you need toxins moved, blood works as a heating regulation, you need to cover all these while also having a system that will remove the knife and repair your heart and then cease all the other effects. Stabbed in the throat, what do you need? Head trauma, spinal injury, resuscitation, diseases, poisons, toxins, memory perseverance, consciousness, multiple wounds, pain tolerance, you need to account for all of it. Is making someone immortal through runes possible? Yes. Is it feasible/practical? Ehhhh....
As for deadpool level of regeneration, you then go into other slew of problems. Remember, you need to direct the runes into exactly what to do. You could very easily screw it up and turn someone into a mass of tumors. You repair a bone, you need to have it programmed to do it exactly as needed. Set it straight, keep it there, all that. Limb gone. Where do you get the instructions from. You know the answer of course, but do the ponies? Do they KNOW how to read and translate these instructions to runic language? You have a little of compatibility problem there now. And of course, you need to have the resources to make all these repair from. Where do they draw them from, make sure it doesn't kill the user by regenerating their arm, all that.
Here's the thing in my setting as I see it. Magic might be able to ignore physical laws, but it is not easy to do. It is much easier to work through them instead. I intend to talk a little about that later on, when Raegdan will... make one of these little projects that Twilight is so enamored with that really help ponies.
It is a resource. You are constricted by how smart and how much knowledge you have, not only on magic and runes but science as well, space, power, and crafting capabilities.
Not much actually. It is a very, very small boost. The fault lies in that Twilight there only mentions how reflexes are boosted by an infinitesimal edge which while small can still be helpful. They don't get spiderman level reflexes, but where you would have tried to catch a ball thrown at you and didn't quite make it, making the ball smack on your improperly positioned hand and bounce off, now you would be able to barely grab it in time. A minor change, but one that has the potential to make the difference. That is how it is with most of these effects on the armor. Small changes but increasing overall capability instead of throwing it all on a single thing.
In RPG terms I guess you could say they are +1 armors?
I have never deleted a comment so that can't have been me. Maybe you did ask and I forgot to answer or skipped the question accidentally? I wouldn't put it past me. If you could repeat the question or ask it now (whichever reason it was it is fine) I'll try to answer. Or if you want something cleared up more in case I didn't quite answer the core of your question. I love these questions. See, now I know that I have to make a small change there on the current chapter than mentions that the boosts are all of them small. This is super helpful.
EDIT: Changed the wording in the chapter so it is obvious they are not super-ponies when wearing the armors. Thanks for bringing that to my attention!
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Wouldn't a magic battery be more sensible? A magic stone or something, just keep it in a pocket, or you can make this a later invention in the story.
As for Radegan i dunno it's been to long, maybe how come people can grab his clothes, when said clothes are touching him?
So we can say that these runes work on either cellular level or even atomic.
Armor+1 wouldn't be that hard in theory anyway, just make the bonds between atoms stronger by increasing the energy, but how do you make someone stronger? Or faster? What physical changes do you have to do to make that happen? And wouldn't such runes have to be customized to each individual? as biology varies from person to person.
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It definitely would be a great idea! I can't see it working as something for the armor, since it would force you to carry and rely on extra weight, but maybe it could. Of course, all that entails on whether Raegdan or others have thought of that, they have the capability to do it, or the interest. You could say that Raegdan might be inspired by a lasgun or something and make a magical version for the ponies, but I don't see it happening. Mostly because, A) he can't use magic himself so it doesn't really cross him mind, and B) he is a fantasy fiction fan, not a science fiction one. When he thinks of ideas he gets stuck on things like magic armors and swords mostly.
They can't? Whenever someone physically grabs him or his clothes, they do so physically, not magically. When he fought against Steadfast Ray, the spiked balls would drop down when they struck him, the magic grasp on them broken by the short contact and Steadfast would have to pick them up again asap. The momentum they had was of course great enough to hurt him. The fact that the magic stopped centimeters away from him didn't help at all. This of it like him exerting a very small antimagic field (very tiny) or his effect spreading to what is very close to him, like clothes and armor.
If someone where to touch him with a tennis ball held in magic, the magic would dissipate and the ball would fall. Touch him with a pole, and as long as you keep the magic at the other end you are fine.
Alright, now this is me talking out of my ass since I do not have the necessary science background to make these claims with any certainty. Much like you would use a general solution to harden a material, so you would do so to make someone stronger/faster, and why you wouldn't overdo it because you would need the array to either be customized or be complex enough to take variety in consideration and make the choice of what changes to make. Strength/speed/reflexes, all rely on muscle and the muscle fibers. Increase the general tensile strength and contraction and relaxing/lengthening speed and you can get this effect... I think. As long as you don't go overboard I suppose you could make a one-size-fits-all array that won't end up dislocating bones or ripping tendons.
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Well you're mostly correct.
Increasing speed as you said just increase speed of contractions and relax of muscle tissue, how you go about doing it is anyone's guess, especially without tearing the muscle apart in extreme cases.
Reflexes aren't that hard, just force your body to create and relase certain chemicals, for one adrenaline, which more or less will overclock your brain, in extreme case you can get bullet time, which will kill you shortly after.
Strength is the hardest thou, there's no way around it, the only way to get stronger is via muscle growth, if you want a stronger rope simply get a thicker one, no other way, if the runes forces the caster body to create new muscle cells that would be permanent and worse constant effect would turn them eventually into hulk ponies.
Anyway that's the psychical aspect, which now that I think about it you can't use due to ponies own atribitues, earth ponies are stronger and Pegasuses can fly, even though they lack the wingspan to do so, for instance let's say that RD would try to lift Radegan, she wouldn't be able to fly at all with his magic nullification.
Shame to say it, but we have to be Discords advocates magic does what magic aka plot wants.
You know, I had seen this story in the Featured Box several times, but I never felt interested enough to read it. That is, until about a couple weeks ago, I saw it again, and curiosity got the best of me. So I started reading it... and then started kicking myself not long after. Why did I put off reading it for so long?!
This is an outstanding story! Kept me on the edge of my seat nearly the whole time! Especially in regards to Raegdan and Luna - I start off loving them, and then I hate them! I wanna support them, but at the same time, I wanna condemn them! Back and forth, back and forth! I love it!
I'm upset now though... I just finished binge reading all that you have posted and now have to wait for the next chapter.
There are many questions I want to see answered, but the main one for me is to find out the connection between Raegdan and Applejack's family. I mean look at what we've seen: Raegdan's panic attack when first meeting Applejack; in Raegdan's will, he leaves a portion of his fortune to the Apple family; Raegdan's reluctance to accept Granny's Smith's dinner invitation. I know there are others, but these are the ones I remember most.
I'm pretty sure I know what the deal is, but I'll keep it to myself until it's revealed... hopefully it will happen within the two weeks that the Lunar Guard spend in Ponyville!
Anyway, Fantastic stuff! Eagerly waiting for the next chapter!
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I like both aspects of Raegdan. Equestria is doing it's best to heal him in spite of how broken he is.
I wonder how many moments there will be in this story that will reaffirm that i'm going to hell for laughing at certain things.
I think one of the biggest flaws can come up with right now, having reread most of this, is the unannounced timeskips. Stuff happens. Then it stops. Then more stuff happens later.
Or maybe the clues were too subtle for me.
They head to Canterlot and shit hits the fans. How long were they there? 2 weeks? 4?
They head to Baltimare and shit happens. I figure a week between Luna leaving Canterlot and blowing up the Leviathan. Then, recovery. Ok, human bones take 6-8 weeks to heal, not sure but I think Raegdan had at least one broken bone. luna I can handwave away as 'magic healing".
Then they head to Manehatten an unknown time later. Spend a few days, maybe a week. Canterlot, shit blows up again.
Everfree forest, uh, months later? Like half a year before they killed SwampThing? How much training did these recruits require before they split into teams? Weeks? Months? I think they are doing 6 week tours, 2 week vacations, and this is their first break, but...
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So mutch wholesome is very unlike the rest of the story. I love it! It could continue till the end and i would love it ♡